Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCXBP7JAHJWQ216HB2JD866

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17m 42s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory set the Golden Empress bag on the sticky bar counter. The plastic rustled like dry leaves. Silas didn't turn at first. He polished an empty glass behind the long wooden counter, the silver signet ring on his right hand glinting under the low amber bulbs. The Raven's Nest smelled of old wood, stale tobacco, and something sharper, whiskey that had soaked into the floorboards over decades. Old maps curled at the edges along the walls, black-and-white photographs staring down without judgment. "I didn't call for delivery," he said. "Special order." She stepped back, letting her straight shoulder-length black hair fall forward slightly, hiding her bright blue eyes from the dim light. Her delivery uniform hung loose, practical and unremarkable, nothing like the tailored jackets she had worn in Cardiff lecture halls. Silas set the glass down. The slight limp in his left leg showed as he rounded the counter, moving with the careful patience of a retired intelligence operative who knew that rushing revealed weakness. His neatly trimmed grey-streaked auburn beard caught the light. At six feet one, he carried quiet authority, the kind that made strangers straighten their shoulders without knowing why. "You haven't used the stairs in months," Silas said. "Not since you decided that living above a bar meant you could pretend the bar didn't exist." Rory's fingers tightened around the delivery strap. "Rent arrives. That's all that matters." "Rent buys walls. Not silence, Rory." She looked up then. Her face, once round with the softness of a law student destined for robes, had sharpened. Not from age alone. The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, small and pale, caught the amber light as she gripped the bag tighter. "I remember a different girl," Silas said. "One who quoted her father back at university. Brendan Carter's daughter, sharp as glass, destined for courtrooms and justice." "I left that girl in Cardiff," Rory said. "You left more than that." His hazel eyes traced the tired lines around her mouth, the practical knot of black hair, the faded uniform that spoke of exhaustion rather than ambition. "Eva wrote. She said you needed a place. Not just a flat. A hideout." Rory's breath caught. She hadn't heard Eva's name spoken aloud in this bar since the night she arrived, broken and running from Evan. "Eva worries too much," Rory said. "And you worry too little. Look at you." He leaned closer. "You're delivering Chinese food in Soho when you should be studying tort law." "I study nothing now," she said. "Then what do you study?" She didn't answer. Instead, she pulled the container from the bag and placed it on the counter. The smell of ginger and garlic filled the air, cutting through the whiskey. Silas pushed it back toward her. "I don't need food. I need to know why you came through that door." Rory's hands shook slightly. She pressed them flat against the sticky wood, feeling the grain. "Because I saw your sign flickering," she lied. "The green neon's been dying for a year." Then he reached across the bar and took her wrist gently. Not forcefully. His thumb brushed near the scar. "This isn't from childhood," he said quietly. Rory pulled away, but not before his touch registered. "It's old news," she said. "Not to me." They stood in the thick silence of the bar. Around them, the old photographs seemed to lean in, witnesses to a conversation delayed too long. "You're not the same," she said, turning the accusation back. Silas straightened, his limp barely noticeable now. "No. I'm retired. I own this place. The secret room behind the bookshelf hasn't hosted a real meeting in two years. I drink alone. I watch old maps and remember Prague." "Regret suits you," Rory said, sharper than she intended. "Regret is all that suits anyone after fifty-eight." Rory reached into the delivery bag again. This time she pulled out an envelope, folded and creased. "He found me," she said. Her voice dropped. "Evan. Three days ago. This was under my flat door." Silas took the envelope. His expression shifted, not to surprise, but to something colder, more calculated. "He knows," Silas said. "He knows everything," Rory corrected. "Where I live. Where I work. Where you are." She pointed to the envelope in his hand. "There's a photograph inside. Of us. From tonight. Before I walked in." Silas opened it. His jaw tightened. The silver signet ring seemed to burn against his finger as he gripped the paper. Then a click echoed from the back of the bar. Not the front door. Not a customer. The bookshelf behind the counter, the one lined with dusty volumes and old cartography books, swung inward with a soft, mechanical whisper. Rory froze. Silas didn't. He moved with surprising speed, his left leg dragging as he rounded the bar and grabbed her arm. "Down," he said. But Rory pulled away, her quick thinking overriding fear. "If he's outside," she said, "who's behind us?" The figure stepping through the bookshelf wasn't Evan. He wore a dark coat that smelled of rain and cigarettes. But he held Rory's other delivery bag, the one she had hidden in the flat above. "You forgot something upstairs," the stranger said, echoing Silas' earlier words. "But right on time." He dropped the bag. It spilled open, not food, but papers. Documents. Photographs. Proof. Rory looked from the scattered papers to Silas, then to the stranger. "You knew," she said to Silas. Silas' hazel eyes held hers. No denial. "I knew," he said. "Every delivery you made to this bar carried more than food. Every time you walked past my door, you passed messages. You were never just living above me. You were part of the nest." Then the front door crashed open. Footsteps thundered across the wooden floor. A voice called out, sharp and familiar. "Rory," he shouted. "Laila. I'm home." Rory's bright blue eyes widened. The crescent scar on her wrist burned with sudden heat. Silas reached for her again, not to restrain, but to pull her toward the open secret room. "Run," he said. But the stranger had already stepped in front of the bookshelf, blocking the escape. "Time's up," he said. "Both of you." Rory stood between them, the sticky bar counter at her back, the spilled papers at her feet, and the sound of Evan's voice filling the dim room where old maps watched everything unfold.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.545
leniency1
rawRatio0.042
effectiveRatio0.042
86.01% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1072
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
44.03% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1072
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"glinting"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"calculated"
count1
4
word"echoed"
count1
5
word"mechanical"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"echoing"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
9
word"thundered"
count1
10
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"glinting"
1"silence"
2"traced"
3"calculated"
4"echoed"
5"mechanical"
6"whisper"
7"echoing"
8"footsteps"
9"thundered"
10"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences91
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1072
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions27
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
43.62% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount752
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.13
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Raven1
Nest1
Cardiff1
Rory16
Eva1
Evan3
Silas13
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Evan"
5"Silas"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0.436
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords2.799
wordCount1072
matches
0"not to surprise, but to something colder, more calculated"
1"not food, but papers"
2"not to restrain, but to pull her toward the open secret room"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean16.75
std13.66
cv0.815
sampleLengths
017
165
27
32
441
562
626
713
86
944
1026
118
1245
1323
146
1524
166
175
1830
1920
2015
218
228
2319
247
259
265
273
2825
2910
3038
319
328
3317
3418
3516
364
3714
3820
3921
4010
417
4222
4322
443
459
468
4735
4815
4914
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs139
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences112
ratio0
matches(empty)
97.60% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount655
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.042748091603053436
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.010687022900763359
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean9.57
std7.18
cv0.75
sampleLengths
011
16
25
324
421
515
67
72
821
920
105
1129
129
1319
149
1517
167
176
186
194
2016
214
2220
237
2419
258
2631
2714
283
2920
306
3111
3213
336
345
353
3614
3713
386
3914
404
4111
428
438
4411
452
466
477
489
495
58.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.375
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners42
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences67
matches
0"Instead, she pulled the container"
1"Then he reached across the"
2"Then a click echoed from"
3"Then the front door crashed"
ratio0.06
76.72% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences67
matches
0"He polished an empty glass"
1"She stepped back, letting her"
2"Her delivery uniform hung loose,"
3"His neatly trimmed grey-streaked auburn"
4"She looked up then."
5"Her face, once round with"
6"His hazel eyes traced the"
7"She hadn't heard Eva's name"
8"He leaned closer"
9"She didn't answer."
10"She pressed them flat against"
11"His thumb brushed near the"
12"he said quietly"
13"They stood in the thick"
14"she said, turning the accusation"
15"Her voice dropped."
16"His expression shifted, not to"
17"She pointed to the envelope"
18"His jaw tightened."
19"He moved with surprising speed,"
ratio0.358
57.01% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences67
matches
0"Rory set the Golden Empress"
1"The plastic rustled like dry"
2"Silas didn't turn at first."
3"He polished an empty glass"
4"The Raven's Nest smelled of"
5"She stepped back, letting her"
6"Her delivery uniform hung loose,"
7"Silas set the glass down."
8"The slight limp in his"
9"His neatly trimmed grey-streaked auburn"
10"Rory's fingers tightened around the"
11"She looked up then."
12"Her face, once round with"
13"The crescent-shaped scar on her"
14"His hazel eyes traced the"
15"Rory's breath caught."
16"She hadn't heard Eva's name"
17"He leaned closer"
18"She didn't answer."
19"The smell of ginger and"
ratio0.806
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.24% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The Raven's Nest smelled of old wood, stale tobacco, and something sharper, whiskey that had soaked into the floorboards over decades."
1"At six feet one, he carried quiet authority, the kind that made strangers straighten their shoulders without knowing why."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
81.82% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags22
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she lied (lie)"
1"Rory corrected (correct)"
2"he shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.136
effectiveRatio0.136
84.6989%