Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCXVFMN5PM3BNH51Z70FWQZ

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Duration:
10m 1s
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$0.022635
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DeepInfra

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain snapped back against the wood with a sound like a jaw breaking. Rory Carter’s fingers stayed on the brass slider, her left wrist turning so the small crescent-shaped scar caught the yellow light from the curry-house sign below. Three deadbolts should have meant safety. On Brick Lane, they meant only delay. "Lucien," she said. He stood in the stairwell’s turmeric-stained gloom, a charcoal suit too immaculate for East London, an ivory-handled cane tapping a slow, deliberate rhythm against the worn carpet. His hair, slicked-back platinum, caught the bulb like frost on marble. One amber eye, one black. He smiled with only half his mouth. "You still check the chain before the name?" "I check everything." She pulled the door wider, not quite an invitation. Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby, watched from atop a teetering stack of scrolls, tail flicking like a metronome set to suspicion. The flat behind Rory smelled of old paper, turmeric, and the particular regret of books that had never been read fully. Lucien stepped inside. The cramped room swallowed him anyway; every surface was buried beneath Eva’s research, books open like dead birds, notes pinned in languages Rory could parse but never pronounce aloud. He set the cane against the doorframe. The thin blade concealed within made a faint, metallic sigh. "Eva’s in Leeds," Rory said. She locked the first deadbolt with a click that echoed. "I know." "Then you know she’s not here to explain why you’re wearing that." He turned, surveying the chaos with the patience of a man who brokered in secrets. "You live in a library that smells like defeat." "I live in a fortress with three deadbolts. You interrupted my delivery shift." "Golden Empress can wait." He adjusted a cufflink, silver and sharp. "Yu-Fei Cheung runs a tight kitchen. He won’t miss one courier." Rory folded her arms across her chest. Her straight black hair, shoulder-length, fell like a curtain between them. "You didn’t come for my employment status." "No." "Last time I saw you, Marseille was a rumour and your father was a problem you refused to name. Then you vanished. No letter. No warning. Just an empty flat above Silas’ bar and the realisation I was delivering pad thai to things that shouldn’t exist." "Half-demons," he corrected, smooth as silk. "The distinction matters in Avaros." "Not to me." She walked past him, her trainers silent on the creaking floorboards. The flat was one room, barely, with books stacked in defensive walls. She stopped by the unlit kettle, using the motion to hide the tremor in her hand. The crescent scar on her wrist itched, as it always did when he was near. "You should leave," she said. "If I leave, you won’t like what follows." "That sounds like a threat." "A fact." He moved closer, not touching anything, yet the air seemed to bend around him. His heterochromatic gaze held hers without blinking. "Evan found a name." Rory’s cool-headed mask slipped, just a fraction. "My ex?" "The same. He has contacts in Marseille now. Contacts who know what your father was really investigating before he died." "My father was a barrister." "Brendan Carter was many things. Some of them dangerous. Some of them useful to people like me." She turned. The bright blue of her eyes was sharp, cutting through the flat’s gloom. "You came all the way to Brick Lane to tell me my dead father was dangerous?" "I came because you forgot the third rule." "There are rules now?" "Don’t open the door for strangers." He lifted the cane, resting both hands on the ivory handle. "Don’t let them see you flinch." His voice dropped, fluent and precise in four languages’ worth of authority. "Don’t trust the ones who leave." The silence stretched, thick with unsaid things. The curry smell from the street below, the rustle of scrolls, the distant honk of a London bus, all faded into a low hum. Rory stepped closer. She was small beside him, five feet six inches of controlled fury, but she did not retreat. "You left." "I had to." "That’s not an answer. That’s a curtain." "I am not your enemy, Aurora." He used her full name like a key turning in a lock. "But I am not your saviour, either. I never was." She reached out, not for the cane, but for his lapel. Her fingers brushed the charcoal fabric, feeling the unnatural warmth beneath, the heat of half-demon blood. "Then what are you?" The question hung there, raw, unprotected. Lucien’s black eye seemed to deepen, absorbing the yellow light. "I’m the reason you haven’t been found yet." "And now?" "Now I’m the reason they will be." A sound interrupted them, not from the stairs, but from within the flat itself. Ptolemy hissed, arching his back against the scrolls. The books trembled on their stacks. Rory turned, her quick mind already calculating exits, the three deadbolts, the window thick with curry smoke from the street. But Lucien was faster. He moved with a grace that defied the cane, stepping in front of her, the blade singing free from the ivory sheath with a sound like a whispered curse. His amber eye blazed. "Stay behind me," he said. "Don’t open that door." The third deadbolt, the one she had snapped shut herself, began to turn.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.238
leniency0.476
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.35% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount885
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount885
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"gloom"
count2
1
word"marble"
count1
2
word"echoed"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"calculating"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"marble"
2"echoed"
3"silk"
4"silence"
5"warmth"
6"trembled"
7"calculating"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences53
matches(empty)
61.99% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences53
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords885
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
81.51% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount584
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.37
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Brick1
Lane1
East1
London2
Eva2
Rory8
Lucien3
persons
0"Carter"
1"Eva"
2"Rory"
3"Lucien"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"East"
3"London"
globalScore0.815
windowScore1
90.48% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences42
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite an invitation"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords2.26
wordCount885
matches
0"not for the cane, but for his lapel"
1"not from the stairs, but from within the flat itself"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean18.44
std14.95
cv0.811
sampleLengths
014
139
23
350
48
53
649
749
815
92
1012
1124
1213
1322
1425
151
1646
1711
183
1954
205
218
225
2327
249
2520
265
2717
2831
298
304
3141
3231
3322
343
357
3628
3731
386
3918
402
417
4228
4320
444
4533
469
4713
98.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences53
matches
0"was buried"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs96
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences85
ratio0.012
matches
0"The cramped room swallowed him anyway; every surface was buried beneath Eva’s research, books open like dead birds, notes pinned in languages Rory could parse but never pronounce aloud."
89.70% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount423
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.04491725768321513
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.009456264775413711
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean10.41
std7.64
cv0.734
sampleLengths
014
126
26
37
43
527
611
75
87
98
103
119
1219
1321
143
1529
167
1710
185
1910
202
2112
2215
239
2413
2511
2611
277
2811
297
301
3146
326
335
343
3511
3612
3716
3815
395
408
415
4216
437
444
457
462
4720
485
4917
61.18% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.38823529411764707
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners33
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences48
matches(empty)
ratio0
36.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences48
matches
0"He stood in the stairwell’s"
1"His hair, slicked-back platinum, caught"
2"He smiled with only half"
3"She pulled the door wider,"
4"He set the cane against"
5"She locked the first deadbolt"
6"He turned, surveying the chaos"
7"He adjusted a cufflink, silver"
8"Her straight black hair, shoulder-length,"
9"he corrected, smooth as silk"
10"She walked past him, her"
11"She stopped by the unlit"
12"He moved closer, not touching"
13"His heterochromatic gaze held hers"
14"He lifted the cane, resting"
15"His voice dropped, fluent and"
16"She was small beside him,"
17"He used her full name"
18"She reached out, not for"
19"Her fingers brushed the charcoal"
ratio0.458
1.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount44
totalSentences48
matches
0"The chain snapped back against"
1"Rory Carter’s fingers stayed on"
2"He stood in the stairwell’s"
3"His hair, slicked-back platinum, caught"
4"He smiled with only half"
5"She pulled the door wider,"
6"Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby, watched from"
7"The flat behind Rory smelled"
8"Lucien stepped inside."
9"The cramped room swallowed him"
10"He set the cane against"
11"The thin blade concealed within"
12"She locked the first deadbolt"
13"He turned, surveying the chaos"
14"He adjusted a cufflink, silver"
15"Rory folded her arms across"
16"Her straight black hair, shoulder-length,"
17"he corrected, smooth as silk"
18"She walked past him, her"
19"The flat was one room,"
ratio0.917
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences48
matches(empty)
ratio0
85.71% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The flat behind Rory smelled of old paper, turmeric, and the particular regret of books that had never been read fully."
1"He moved with a grace that defied the cane, stepping in front of her, the blade singing free from the ivory sheath with a sound like a whispered curse."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.119
leniency0.238
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.048
78.3682%