Run: 2026-07-25-01KYCXWKAGBWZ8N41XK32JEEG5

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9m 39s
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$0.022177
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DeepInfra

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open before Rory's fingers finished the second deadbolt. Lucien Moreau filled the corridor like a charcoal portrait left out in the rain. Platinum hair slicked back against his skull, a tailored charcoal suit pressed to perfection, an ivory-handled cane tapping a slow rhythm against the worn floorboards. One amber eye caught the hallway light; the other, black as obsidian, swallowed it whole. He smiled, and the expression did not reach either gaze. "You left three deadbolts," he said. "I counted from the stairs." Rory's heart hammered against her ribs. She should have slammed the door. Instead, she leaned against the frame, her straight shoulder-length black hair falling like a curtain across one eye. Her delivery jacket still reeked of fried onions and cardamom from Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress, where she spent afternoons carrying boxes for people who never looked up from their phones. The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, pale and old, itched suddenly, as if remembering older, colder touches. "I told you," she said. "I'm not seeing anyone." "Not anyone. Me. There's a distinction." She stepped back. Not an invitation. A surrender. The flat above Silas' bar was cramped, sharp-edged, all borrowed time and unpaid bills. A single bulb cast yellow light across the sitting room. Her law books from Cardiff University gathered dust on the windowsill, spines cracked, unread since she fled Evan's fists. The air smelled of cold chamomile tea and something darker, something that slipped inside with Lucien and refused to leave. He crossed the threshold without permission. The cane clicked behind him, silent and precise, the hidden blade inside making no sound. "Your mother called me," he said. Rory stiffened. "My mother doesn't have your number." "Jennifer Carter is resourceful. She remembered a business card from Marseille. Perhaps under the kitchen drawer in your childhood home." "Leave her out of this." "She's frightened, Rory." He turned, his heterochromatic gaze pinning her to the spot. "Your father is furious. Brendan Carter believes you disappeared into East London fog rather than sit the bar exam." "I left because Evan was going to kill me. Not for law books." The words hung between them, sharp as broken glass. Lucien's jaw tightened beneath the smooth line of his cheek. He set the cane against the wall with deliberate care, the blade inside making no sound at all. "I made inquiries about Evan," he said quietly. "You fled first to Eva's flat on Brick Lane. Three deadbolts, every surface covered with books and scrolls, that ridiculous tabby cat Ptolemy hissing at strangers. Then here. Hiding above a bar like a common criminal." "I'm not hiding. I'm working." "As a delivery girl? Your mind could dismantle contracts in four languages. Yours, not mine." She laughed, brittle. "You speak four languages fluently. I speak one badly and lie in the rest." He moved closer. The charcoal suit smelled of cedar and old smoke, the kind that clung to supernatural bargains in back rooms. His height, five feet eleven, made her feel every inch of her five-foot-six frame. She tilted her chin up, bright blue eyes meeting amber and black. "You shouldn't have come." "I came because Eva's scrolls mentioned your name last Tuesday. Something about a crescent scar and a demon's debt." Rory's breath caught. "Eva doesn't know about the scar." "Eva knows many things. She writes in reverse Greek, Rory. Still legible if you know where to look." The door clicked shut behind him. Not by her hand. By his. The sound echoed through the small flat, final and unsettling. He reached out slowly, giving her time to stop him. His fingers, long and precise, brushed her left wrist, tracing the small crescent-shaped scar. His touch was cool, not human, and her skin prickled beneath it. "You told Eva it was a childhood accident," he said softly. "You never asked for the truth." "I assumed childhood accident. But childhood accidents don't carry the scent of Avaros." Her eyes widened. "What?" "I'm half-demon, Rory. You knew that from the first night in the Warren Street tube station. I smell things. Copper. Blood. Recent debts." She pulled her wrist back, but his grip held, gentle, unbreakable. "You used me," she whispered. "Did I?" "You found Evan's files. You told me where he kept the keys. You never said you'd follow after. That you'd wait." "I waited because you asked me to." "I never asked you to wait." "No. You asked me to leave." The bulb flickered. Below, Silas' bar roared with Friday noise, glasses clinking, voices shouting over bad music, but up here, the silence pressed like a physical weight. Lucien's amber eye glowed faintly in the dimness. "There's a contract," he said. "On your life, Rory. Not Evan's, though he signed the first page with eager hands. A new one. Written in your mother's handwriting, but not her will." "That's impossible." "I have the scroll. Eva's flat was the first place I looked. Ptolemy hissed at me from the kitchen counter." Rory's mind raced, quick out-of-the-box, always calculating angles and exits. But here, with his thumb circling her scar, her intelligence felt like thin armour against something she didn't understand. "Why tell me now?" "Because the door is the only place left to stop what comes next. And you left it open." Outside, something heavy hit the stairs. Not a footstep. A dragging sound. The kind that didn't belong in a building above a bar, the kind that made the floorboards groan. Lucien's black eye seemed to darken further, swallowing more light. "You should have used all three deadbolts," he said. The flat's single window rattled. The law books on the sill trembled and fell. Cold tea spilled across the table in a dark, widening pool. Rory didn't move. She looked at him, hurt and attraction and unfinished words all tangled in her bright blue gaze. "Then help me lock them," she said. But it was too late. The doorknob turned from the outside, slow and deliberate, testing the weight of the lock that wasn't there. The cane lifted in Lucien's free hand. The blade caught the yellow light.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
1"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.1
85.32% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1022
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slowly"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.97% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1022
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"weight"
count2
5
word"raced"
count1
6
word"calculating"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"tracing"
2"flickered"
3"silence"
4"weight"
5"raced"
6"calculating"
7"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences67
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences97
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1022
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.32% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount592
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.01
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory6
Moreau1
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff1
University1
Evan1
Lucien6
persons
0"Rory"
1"Moreau"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"Cheung"
4"University"
5"Evan"
6"Lucien"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0.993
windowScore1
25.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences40
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if remembering older, colder touches"
1"felt like thin armour against something"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1022
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean19.28
std16.92
cv0.877
sampleLengths
011
164
211
379
49
56
671
721
86
98
1020
115
1232
1313
1437
1544
165
1715
1817
1948
204
2119
229
2318
2422
2536
2611
276
2813
294
3023
3111
325
332
3421
357
366
376
3835
3932
402
4120
4229
434
4418
4530
4610
479
4825
4920
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs101
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences97
ratio0.01
matches
0"One amber eye caught the hallway light; the other, black as obsidian, swallowed it whole."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount479
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.029227557411273485
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.008350730688935281
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences97
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences97
mean10.54
std7.15
cv0.679
sampleLengths
011
114
225
315
410
56
65
76
86
918
1030
1119
125
134
146
153
163
172
1814
1910
2019
2120
226
2315
246
252
266
2720
285
2913
3019
3113
329
3310
3418
358
3636
375
3815
393
4014
413
4219
4314
4412
454
4619
473
486
4918
50.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.35051546391752575
totalSentences97
uniqueOpeners34
59.52% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences56
matches
0"Instead, she leaned against the"
ratio0.018
77.14% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences56
matches
0"He smiled, and the expression"
1"She should have slammed the"
2"Her delivery jacket still reeked"
3"She stepped back."
4"Her law books from Cardiff"
5"He crossed the threshold without"
6"He turned, his heterochromatic gaze"
7"He set the cane against"
8"he said quietly"
9"She laughed, brittle."
10"He moved closer."
11"His height, five feet eleven,"
12"She tilted her chin up,"
13"He reached out slowly, giving"
14"His fingers, long and precise,"
15"His touch was cool, not"
16"he said softly"
17"Her eyes widened."
18"She pulled her wrist back,"
19"She looked at him, hurt"
ratio0.357
40.36% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences56
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"Lucien Moreau filled the corridor"
2"Platinum hair slicked back against"
3"He smiled, and the expression"
4"Rory's heart hammered against her"
5"She should have slammed the"
6"Her delivery jacket still reeked"
7"The small crescent-shaped scar on"
8"She stepped back."
9"The flat above"
10"A single bulb cast yellow"
11"Her law books from Cardiff"
12"The air smelled of cold"
13"He crossed the threshold without"
14"The cane clicked behind him,"
15"He turned, his heterochromatic gaze"
16"The words hung between them,"
17"Lucien's jaw tightened beneath the"
18"He set the cane against"
19"he said quietly"
ratio0.839
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
44.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, pale and old, itched suddenly, as if remembering older, colder touches."
1"The air smelled of cold chamomile tea and something darker, something that slipped inside with Lucien and refused to leave."
2"The charcoal suit smelled of cedar and old smoke, the kind that clung to supernatural bargains in back rooms."
3"The doorknob turned from the outside, slow and deliberate, testing the weight of the lock that wasn't there."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He turned, his heterochromatic gaze pinning her to the spot"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.225
leniency0.45
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.05
83.5382%