Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD4PACYP8H940Z19S9Z40JV

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The first thing Aurora noticed wasn't the familiar green neon sign or the worn wooden bar or even the way the brass fixtures had tarnished over the years. It was the man sitting in the corner booth, nursing a whiskey with the same precise movements she remembered from university nights when they'd stayed up discussing Camus and revolution until dawn. "Eva." The name slipped out before she could stop it, barely audible above the low hum of conversation and clinking glasses. The woman looked up, and Aurora's breath caught. Time had been kinder to some things and crueller to others. Eva's dark hair now threaded with premature silver, cut in that sharp bob that framed her face like a blade. Her eyes, once bright with mischief, held something harder now—calculating, watchful. She wore a tailored blazer that probably cost more than Aurora's entire month's wages, and her manicured nails tapped against the crystal tumbler with practiced impatience. "You look well." Aurora's voice sounded foreign to her own ears. She'd been walking home from her delivery shift, the evening air crisp with the promise of winter, when she'd ducked into the Raven's Nest for a quick drink before climbing the stairs to her flat above. She hadn't expected to find anyone she knew here, let alone someone from her past. "I wasn't expecting to see you here." Eva studied her for a long moment, those sharp eyes taking in the worn jacket, the delivery uniform, the small crescent scar on her left wrist that peeked out from under her sleeve. Recognition flickered across her face, quickly replaced by something that might have been concern, or perhaps just curiosity. "What are you doing here?" Aurora asked, sliding onto the bar stool beside her. The wood creaked under her weight, a familiar sound that somehow made the moment feel more intimate, more dangerous. "The usual." Eva gestured to her drink. "Though I suppose 'usual' is relative these days." Silas appeared beside them, wiping a glass with mechanical precision. His hazel eyes, shadowed by years of late nights and early mornings, settled on the two women with quiet interest. He'd watched Aurora grow from a nervous university student into the woman she was now, delivering food and avoiding her problems in equal measure. He'd also watched Eva transform from a bright-eyed law student into someone who moved through the world like a shark, always hunting, always calculating. "Evening, love." His voice carried that particular blend of warmth and wariness that came from decades of reading people for a living. "Whiskey for you too?" Eva nodded, and Silas poured two more drinks without waiting for further instruction. The silence stretched between them, filled only by the ambient noise of the bar and the weight of unspoken words. "You left," Aurora said finally, the words tumbling out before she could cage them. "Without saying goodbye." "I had to." Eva's voice was steady, but Aurora noticed the way her fingers tightened around her glass. "Things got complicated." "Complicated how?" Eva let out a short laugh that held no mirth. "You remember Marcus, right? That posh bastard who thought he was God's gift to political theory?" Aurora nodded, memories flooding back—late-night debates in cramped student flats, Marcus's condescending lectures about the futility of idealism, the way Eva had always been the one to cut through his rhetoric with brutal honesty. "He offered me a position. At his firm. In Manchester." "And you took it." "I took it because it was the only way out of this city. The only way to escape the shadow of my father's expectations, the constant comparisons to my brother who actually amounted to something." Eva's knuckles were white around her glass. "I thought if I could just get far enough away, start fresh, build something of my own—" "But you came back." "I did." A flicker of something—pride, perhaps, or shame—crossed her face. "Turns out Manchester wasn't enough. I needed to be closer to the action, to the real power players. So I moved to London." Aurora felt the blood drain from her face. "When?" "Five years ago. Just after you—" She paused, searching for the right words. "Just after you disappeared." "I didn't disappear." "No." Eva's expression softened slightly. "You ran." The admission hung in the air between them like smoke. Aurora looked down at her hands, remembering the night she'd packed a single bag and fled to London, leaving behind not just her university life but also the memories of an abusive relationship that had nearly destroyed her. She'd changed her name on social media, avoided mutual contacts, essentially erased herself from the lives of everyone she'd known. "I'm sorry," she whispered. Eva reached across the bar, her hand hovering inches from Aurora's. "Don't be sorry for surviving." They sat in silence for a moment, the weight of their respective journeys settling heavily between them. Aurora noticed the expensive watch on Eva's wrist, the subtle signs of wealth that screamed success, and wondered when her friend had become so polished, so removed from the girl who'd once shared her last cigarette and talked about changing the world. "Do you ever think about what we wanted to be?" Aurora asked softly. "Every day." Eva's gaze drifted to the window, where rain began to speckle the glass. "I wanted to be a human rights lawyer. Fight for the underdog, make a difference. Instead I'm representing corporations that exploit developing nations and calling it 'strategic negotiation.'" "And me?" "You're still fighting, aren't you? Just differently." Aurora followed her gaze to the window, remembering the delivery routes she'd taken countless times, the neighborhoods she'd passed through, the people whose lives intersected briefly with hers every day. She thought about the flat above the bar, the routine of deliveries, the careful way she'd learned to navigate the world without drawing attention to herself. "I deliver food now." "And?" "And I listen. People talk when they think you're invisible. I hear their secrets, their fears, their hopes. Sometimes I wonder if I'm helping them or just collecting stories for my own survival." Eva turned back to face her, those sharp eyes searching Aurora's face for signs of deception or vulnerability. "You always were good at reading people." "That's why I'm asking you this." Aurora's voice dropped to barely a whisper. "Why didn't you try to find me?" The question landed like a punch to the gut. Eva flinched, and for a moment Aurora saw the girl she'd once known—the one who'd stayed up all night talking about justice and fairness, who'd believed in the inherent goodness of people despite everything. "I tried." The words came out barely audible. "For months, I tried. But you'd cut ties with everyone from university. Changed your number, deleted your social media, even avoided mutual friends who came to London." "That wasn't—" "That wasn't fair to any of us either." Eva's voice grew colder, more controlled. "You made your choice, Rory. I respected it." "But you came back." "I came back because I realized that running doesn't solve anything. It just delays the inevitable confrontation with who you really are." Eva's hand finally settled on top of Aurora's, their fingers brushing briefly. "And I realized I missed you." The admission surprised them both. Aurora felt her throat tighten, the dam holding back years of loneliness and regret beginning to crack. "How long are you staying in London?" she asked, not wanting the moment to end but knowing it couldn't last forever. "Long enough to finish what I started." Eva's smile was bittersweet. "Long enough to make sure we don't lose each other again." Outside, the rain had stopped, leaving the streets glistening under the streetlights. Inside the Raven's Nest, two friends sat across from each other, separated by years of silence and misunderstanding, finally ready to bridge the gap between who they'd been and who they'd become. "Tell me everything," Aurora said, reaching across the bar to squeeze Eva's hand. "I'm listening."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
49.06% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"Aurora said finally [finally]"
1"Eva's expression softened slightly [slightly]"
2"Aurora asked softly [softly]"
3"their fingers brushing briefly [briefly]"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.321
leniency0.642
rawRatio0.235
effectiveRatio0.151
85.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1336
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"slightly"
2"softly"
3"really"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
28.89% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1336
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"calculating"
count2
2
word"crystal"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"weight"
count3
5
word"mechanical"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"silence"
count3
8
word"unspoken"
count1
9
word"flicker"
count1
10
word"navigate"
count1
11
word"whisper"
count1
12
word"glistening"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"calculating"
2"crystal"
3"flickered"
4"weight"
5"mechanical"
6"warmth"
7"silence"
8"unspoken"
9"flicker"
10"navigate"
11"whisper"
12"glistening"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"the weight of unspoken words"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences57
matches(empty)
92.73% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences57
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences91
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1330
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
37.58% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount934
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity2.25
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora21
Camus1
Raven2
Nest2
Silas2
Eva19
Marcus1
London1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Silas"
2"Eva"
3"Marcus"
places
0"Raven"
1"London"
globalScore0.376
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences51
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"appeared beside them, wiping a glass with mechanical precision"
49.62% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.504
wordCount1330
matches
0"not just her university life but also the memories of an abusive relationship"
1"not wanting the moment to end but knowing it couldn't last forever"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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std20.81
cv0.814
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368
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559
67
751
833
915
1078
1126
1233
1317
1421
152
1626
1734
1810
194
2059
214
2234
239
2417
253
267
2768
284
2916
3059
3113
3243
332
347
3556
364
371
3833
3925
4020
4143
4235
432
4422
454
4640
4722
4821
4922
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs162
matches(empty)
17.27% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences91
ratio0.044
matches
0"Her eyes, once bright with mischief, held something harder now—calculating, watchful."
1"Aurora nodded, memories flooding back—late-night debates in cramped student flats, Marcus's condescending lectures about the futility of idealism, the way Eva had always been the one to cut through his rhetoric with brutal honesty."
2"\"I did.\" A flicker of something—pride, perhaps, or shame—crossed her face."
3"Eva flinched, and for a moment Aurora saw the girl she'd once known—the one who'd stayed up all night talking about justice and fairness, who'd believed in the inherent goodness of people despite everything."
95.02% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount941
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.04569606801275239
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.018065887353878853
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences91
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences91
mean14.62
std10.63
cv0.727
sampleLengths
028
132
21
320
48
511
620
711
826
93
108
1136
1215
137
1433
1518
1614
1719
187
198
2010
2120
2224
2324
2422
254
2613
2720
2814
293
3018
313
322
3310
3416
3534
3610
374
3842
3917
404
4111
4223
438
441
4513
464
473
485
492
62.64% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.42857142857142855
totalSentences91
uniqueOpeners39
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences56
matches
0"It was the man sitting"
1"Her eyes, once bright with"
2"She wore a tailored blazer"
3"She'd been walking home from"
4"She hadn't expected to find"
5"His hazel eyes, shadowed by"
6"He'd watched Aurora grow from"
7"He'd also watched Eva transform"
8"His voice carried that particular"
9"She paused, searching for the"
10"She'd changed her name on"
11"They sat in silence for"
12"She thought about the flat"
13"she asked, not wanting the"
ratio0.25
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences56
matches
0"The first thing Aurora noticed"
1"It was the man sitting"
2"The name slipped out before"
3"The woman looked up, and"
4"Time had been kinder to"
5"Eva's dark hair now threaded"
6"Her eyes, once bright with"
7"She wore a tailored blazer"
8"Aurora's voice sounded foreign to"
9"She'd been walking home from"
10"She hadn't expected to find"
11"Eva studied her for a"
12"Recognition flickered across her face,"
13"Aurora asked, sliding onto the"
14"The wood creaked under her"
15"Eva gestured to her drink"
16"Silas appeared beside them, wiping"
17"His hazel eyes, shadowed by"
18"He'd watched Aurora grow from"
19"He'd also watched Eva transform"
ratio0.964
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Eva's dark hair now threaded with premature silver, cut in that sharp bob that framed her face like a blade."
1"Eva studied her for a long moment, those sharp eyes taking in the worn jacket, the delivery uniform, the small crescent scar on her left wrist that peeked out f…"
2"Recognition flickered across her face, quickly replaced by something that might have been concern, or perhaps just curiosity."
3"He'd also watched Eva transform from a bright-eyed law student into someone who moved through the world like a shark, always hunting, always calculating."
4"Aurora looked down at her hands, remembering the night she'd packed a single bag and fled to London, leaving behind not just her university life but also the me…"
5"Aurora noticed the expensive watch on Eva's wrist, the subtle signs of wealth that screamed success, and wondered when her friend had become so polished, so rem…"
6"Eva flinched, and for a moment Aurora saw the girl she'd once known—the one who'd stayed up all night talking about justice and fairness, who'd believed in the …"
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Aurora said finally, the words tumbling out before she could cage them"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.113
leniency0.226
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.038
72.0031%