Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD4VDYP910JW5KRTEMWKWQM

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13.6s
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$0.000538
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The amber glow from the kitchen’s fryers spilled onto the bar top, catching the edge of a half-empty pint glass. Aurora wiped it down with a cloth that had seen better days, her mind already calculating the night’s takings against the rent Silas would probably want in three days’ time. The bell above the door chimed, and her breath hitched. Eva stood in the doorway, framed by the green neon of the Nest, but it was the way she moved—like a cat testing the edge of a roof—the way she’d always moved when they were kids, running through the streets of Cardiff with scraped knees and dreams too big for their small town. Only now Eva’s hair was streaked with silver at the temples, her shoulders hunched slightly, as if carrying something heavier than the weight of twenty-five years. “Rory,” she said, the name tumbling out like a stone skipping across water. “What the actual—” “I could ask you the same.” Aurora set the glass down with deliberate calm. “You’re not in Manchester, are you?” “Cardiff.” Eva stepped inside, her heels clicking against the worn wooden floor. “I thought I’d pop in. See if the ghost of my former self still worked here.” Aurora’s fingers tightened around the cloth. “You always said you’d come back someday. Never thought it’d be like this.” “Like this?” Eva ran a hand through her hair, which was now cropped short, practical. “Like a stranger?” “Like someone who’s spent too long looking in mirrors.” The silence stretched, punctuated only by the hiss of the deep fryer and the distant thump of bass from somewhere upstairs. Silas emerged from the back, his limp more pronounced in the dim light, silver ring glinting as he adjusted his waistcoat. “Evening, love,” he said, nodding at Eva. “What can I get you?” “Water, actually.” Eva’s voice was softer now, edged with something Aurora couldn’t place. “And maybe a story or two about this place while you’re at it.” Silas grunted, but there was a flicker in his eye—recognition, maybe, or the ghost of the man he used to be before the Nest became a refuge for lost souls and quieter regrets. “Back soon, then.” He shuffled past them, leaving the two women alone in the amber-lit shadows. “You look… different,” Aurora said finally. “I look,” Eva corrected, “and you do too. But not as much as I expected.” She shifted her weight. “You kept your hair long. I thought you’d cut it short like a proper detective or something.” Aurora laughed, but it came out brittle. “Still pretending I’m someone else?” “Still pretending you’re someone else?” Eva echoed. “God, Rory. We used to be smarter than that.” They both knew what they weren’t talking about. The accident. The hospital bed. The way things had unraveled after that, like a sweater pulled too hard at the seams. “I heard about your father,” Eva said quietly. Aurora’s throat went dry. “Jennifer’s been—” “She’s dead.” The words were flat, final. “Two years ago. Cancer. You never called.” “I tried,” Aurora said, too quickly. “I was working nights, trying to save up for the flat, trying not to think about—” “Evan.” Eva finished. Her voice cracked slightly. “He wasn’t the only one who didn’t call.” Aurora pulled her hands into her sleeves, feeling the crescent scar on her wrist, a pale line against her skin. “I’m sorry. I should’ve—” “Should’ve what?” Eva’s laugh was sharp, bitter. “Should’ve flown back? Should’ve stayed? Should’ve been the daughter she deserved instead of the one who ran off to London with her suitcase full of lies?” The words landed like a slap. Aurora’s jaw clenched. “You don’t know what it was like, Eva. You weren’t there.” “I wasn’t *there*?” Eva’s voice rose. “You think I don’t know what it’s like to watch someone you love disappear into the dark, only to find them later, changed, and pretending they never knew you existed?” They stared at each other across the bar, the weight of years pressing down. Aurora remembered the nights they’d stay up on the rooftop, talking about leaving Cardiff, about escaping the grey and the expectations. Eva had always wanted to be an artist. Aurora had wanted to be a lawyer. Both had lied to their parents about their futures. “You left me,” Aurora whispered. “I left you,” Eva repeated. “When you chose him over us. When you stopped answering my calls after the accident.” “It wasn’t—” “Wasn’t what? *An accident*? He hit her, Rory. You saw the marks on her arm. You *saw* them. And you still stayed.” The truth of it hit Aurora like a blow. She’d been seventeen, scared, confused, and she’d stayed because she was afraid of being alone, afraid of the world outside their street. She’d stayed until she couldn’t stay anymore. “I’m sorry,” she said again, the words tasting like ash. Eva turned away, wiping her eyes with the back of her hand. “You don’t owe me an apology. You don’t owe anyone an apology. You did what you had to do to survive.” “And what did you do to survive?” Eva’s laugh was hollow. “I painted. I drank. I took his money when I could get it. I learned to be invisible. You?” “I deliver Chinese food in a city that doesn’t care if I live or die.” “And yet you’re still here, pretending to be someone else.” Aurora looked at her reflection in the bar’s mirrored back wall—same bright blue eyes, same scar, same face that had aged too fast in the shadows. But Eva looked different. Tired. Hardened. Like someone had carved her name into her bones. “I miss Cardiff,” Aurora said. “I miss Eva.” The words hung between them, unfinished. Outside, the rain began to patter against the windows, soft and relentless. The neon sign buzzed faintly, casting everything in a sickly green glow. “You ever wonder,” Eva said slowly, “what would’ve happened if we’d both stayed?” Aurora didn’t answer right away. She thought about the rooftop, the sky full of stars, the way Eva had once said that someday they’d paint the town together, just the two of them, with all the colours they’d ever imagined. “Probably still here,” she said at last. “Still pretending we were going somewhere.” Eva nodded, and for a moment, Aurora saw the girl she’d once been—the girl who believed in forever, in promises, in the unbreakable thread between them. But then Eva turned and walked toward the exit, her silhouette swallowed by the dark. “Wait.” Aurora stood, her chair scraping against the floor. “You can’t just—” But Eva was already outside, her figure disappearing into the rain. Aurora stood there for a long moment, listening to the storm, wondering if some ghosts were meant to stay buried.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
49.06% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"Aurora said finally [finally]"
1"Eva said quietly [quietly]"
2"she said again [again]"
3"Eva said slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.396
leniency0.792
rawRatio0.19
effectiveRatio0.151
82.33% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1132
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"quickly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.25% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1132
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"calculating"
count1
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"glinting"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"jaw clenched"
count1
highlights
0"calculating"
1"weight"
2"silence"
3"glinting"
4"flicker"
5"echoed"
6"jaw clenched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences66
matches
0"was afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences66
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences96
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords4
totalWords1128
ratio0.004
matches
0"there"
1"An accident"
2"saw"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount722
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity3.05
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Silas3
Nest2
Cardiff2
Eva22
Aurora20
persons
0"Silas"
1"Nest"
2"Eva"
3"Aurora"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0
windowScore0
90.48% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences42
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if carrying something heavier than the weight of twenty-five years"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1128
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean22.56
std15.84
cv0.702
sampleLengths
060
179
216
320
428
519
618
79
842
912
1026
1133
1216
136
1436
1512
1616
1729
188
196
2014
2122
2215
2324
2433
259
2611
2736
2859
295
3020
312
3222
3338
3410
3533
367
3723
3815
3910
4041
415
423
4330
4413
4540
4613
4741
4812
4931
89.31% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences66
matches
0"was streaked"
1"been seventeen"
2"were meant"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs134
matches
0"weren’t talking"
23.81% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences96
ratio0.042
matches
0"Eva stood in the doorway, framed by the green neon of the Nest, but it was the way she moved—like a cat testing the edge of a roof—the way she’d always moved when they were kids, running through the streets of Cardiff with scraped knees and dreams too big for their small town."
1"Silas grunted, but there was a flicker in his eye—recognition, maybe, or the ghost of the man he used to be before the Nest became a refuge for lost souls and quieter regrets."
2"Aurora looked at her reflection in the bar’s mirrored back wall—same bright blue eyes, same scar, same face that had aged too fast in the shadows."
3"Eva nodded, and for a moment, Aurora saw the girl she’d once been—the girl who believed in forever, in promises, in the unbreakable thread between them."
89.87% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount349
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.05157593123209169
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.008595988538681949
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences96
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences96
mean11.75
std8.79
cv0.748
sampleLengths
020
130
210
353
426
513
63
714
86
912
1016
116
1213
1315
143
159
1621
1721
187
195
2013
2113
2233
2316
246
2519
2617
277
285
297
309
318
322
333
3416
358
364
372
387
397
406
4116
423
434
448
4520
464
477
4826
496
50.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.3645833333333333
totalSentences96
uniqueOpeners35
57.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences58
matches
0"Only now Eva’s hair was"
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount11
totalSentences58
matches
0"she said, the name tumbling"
1"he said, nodding at Eva"
2"He shuffled past them, leaving"
3"They both knew what they"
4"Her voice cracked slightly."
5"They stared at each other"
6"She’d been seventeen, scared, confused,"
7"She’d stayed until she couldn’t"
8"she said again, the words"
9"She thought about the rooftop,"
10"she said at last"
ratio0.19
11.72% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences58
matches
0"The amber glow from the"
1"Aurora wiped it down with"
2"The bell above the door"
3"Eva stood in the doorway,"
4"she said, the name tumbling"
5"Aurora set the glass down"
6"Eva stepped inside, her heels"
7"Aurora’s fingers tightened around the"
8"Eva ran a hand through"
9"The silence stretched, punctuated only"
10"Silas emerged from the back,"
11"he said, nodding at Eva"
12"Eva’s voice was softer now,"
13"Silas grunted, but there was"
14"He shuffled past them, leaving"
15"Aurora said finally"
16"Eva corrected, She shifted her"
17"Aurora laughed, but it came"
18"They both knew what they"
19"The hospital bed."
ratio0.897
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
74.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Only now Eva’s hair was streaked with silver at the temples, her shoulders hunched slightly, as if carrying something heavier than the weight of twenty-five yea…"
1"Aurora looked at her reflection in the bar’s mirrored back wall—same bright blue eyes, same scar, same face that had aged too fast in the shadows."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she said, the name tumbling out like a stone skipping across water"
1"Eva stepped, her heels clicking against the worn wooden floor"
2"Aurora stood, her chair scraping against the floor"
93.40% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Eva corrected (correct)"
1"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
2"Eva repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.226
leniency0.453
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.113
77.5482%