Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD500HQ11FV4KC0TS12EPSY

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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"You kept my spare key." Eva stood in the doorway of The Raven's Nest like she hadn't decided if she was coming in or leaving. Rain darkened the shoulders of her coat, but she held herself like London couldn't touch her anymore. Expensive cut. Clean lines. Hair pulled back so tight it sharpened her face. Rory nearly dropped the crate of limes. Three years. Three years since Eva had posted that picture from Manchester with the rooftop and the caption about finally breathing, three years since the last unanswered message that Rory still hadn't deleted. "Jesus Christ," Rory said. Eva's mouth twitched, not quite a smile. "That's one way to greet me." The bar was empty, caught in that dead hour between the after-work crowd and the late ones. Silas had gone to the wholesaler and left Rory with the keys and the till and a note that said *Don't burn it down*. The green neon sign buzzed against the wet glass. It threw Eva's face into sick, lovely colour. Rory set the crate down hard on the bar. Juice stung the crescent scar on her left wrist. "You look," Rory started, then stopped. Eva did look different. Not just the coat. The softness had gone out of her. Cardiff had kept them both a little round at the edges, late chips, cheap cider on the steps outside the law library. That girl was gone. This woman looked quarried. "Employed," Eva said. She slid onto a stool. Her movements were precise, economical. "You look exactly the same. Which is offensive, actually." Rory laughed before she could help it. It came out rough. "I'm running the shop now, evidently. Silas will be thrilled you're sitting there without paying." "I can pay." Eva laid her bag down. The leather made no sound. "Do you still drink that terrible rosé?" "Only on my birthday and when my dad calls." "So daily, then." They looked at each other. The old rhythm tried to catch. It snagged. Eva's eyes dropped to Rory's hands. Rory was still holding the box cutter. "You're working here? I thought you had the restaurant gig." "I do. Cheung's. This is rent. Favour. Same thing." Rory retracted the blade with a click. "What are you doing in Soho? I thought Manchester was your grand reinvention." Eva didn't answer straight away. She studied the wall behind the bar, the old maps, the black and white photographs of men who thought they owned streets like this. Her gaze lingered on the bookshelf that hid the back room. "Meeting," she said. "Client dinner that finished early. I walked. Wanted to see if this place was still standing." "Still standing. Barely." "And you live upstairs still? Above this... charming fire hazard?" "Top floor luxury. Mould included." Another attempt at a smile, and this time Eva almost managed it. Her hands were clasped tight around her bag strap. Her nails were perfect, short, unpainted. "You never came to visit," Rory said. The words came out before she filtered them. They landed loud in the empty bar. Eva flinched. Just a hairline crack. "I invited you. Multiple times." "You invited me after you moved. After you left me that voicemail about needing space. After you stopped replying for six weeks." "I needed—" Eva started. "You needed to get clean of Cardiff and I was part of the stain. I get it." "I didn't say that." "You didn't have to." The neon hissed. A bus groaned past outside, spraying water. Eva unwound her fingers from the strap, one by one. She had a thin silver band on her right index finger that Rory had never seen before. "I saw Evan," Eva said. The name hit Rory's chest like a cold thumb. Her shoulders went up to her ears automatically, a body remembering faster than a mind. "Where." "Cardiff Bay. Last month. I went back for my mum's thing. He was with someone. Young. She looked—" Eva stopped. Her professional composure slipped for the first time. "She looked like you did back then. That haircut you had. Shoulder length, straight across." Rory braced her hands on the bar to keep them from shaking. The wood was sticky with old polish. "Great. He has a type. What's your point?" "My point is he asked about you. Said you left without paying the gas bill. Made it sound like a joke." Rory let out a short, ugly laugh. "That's rich." "He looked the same," Eva said quietly. "That was the worst part. He looked exactly the same. And I thought, God, Rory left and I left and nothing actually changed down there." Rory pushed away from the bar. She needed distance. She walked to the far end and started stacking clean glasses that Silas had already stacked. Her reflection warped in them. "You want to know the funny thing?" Rory said to the glasses. "When you left, I thought you were abandoning me. Then I thought you were the smart one. You got out two years before I did. You told me to leave him the first time he threw a plate. You were right." "I wasn't right. I left you there." Her voice cracked on the last word. Completely, openly cracked. Rory turned. Eva's perfect posture had collapsed. Her elbows were on the bar and her head was in her hands, and her shoulders were making small, controlled jerks, like she had learned to cry quietly in offices. "Eva—" "I was supposed to take you with me," she said into her hands. "That was the plan. Remember? London together. You and me. Both our names on a lease. Then you rang and said you and Evan were trying again and I just... I left. I left you to it because I was sick of hearing about him." Rory crossed the space in three steps. She didn't touch her at first. She just stood there, smelling Eva's expensive coat and the faint, familiar shampoo underneath it. "I know." "I saw the picture Mum sent of your arm. After the A and E trip. You told her you fell." The air in the bar went thin. "I did fall," Rory said. "Down the stairs he pushed me down." Silence fell with weight. Rory felt the old, quick part of her brain wake up, the part that solved things fast because slow meant getting hit. Eva looked up. Her eyes were red. "I went to see a solicitor in Manchester last year," she said. "Just a consultation. I wanted to know if there was anything... I kept thinking, what if she needs me to be a witness, what if—" "Eva." "He told everyone in Cardiff you cheated on him. That's the story now. That you went mad in London." Rory felt a laugh bubble that tasted like copper. "Let him." "No." Eva grabbed Rory's wrist. Her grip was fierce. "That's why I'm here. That client dinner wasn't a client dinner. I'm clerking now. Tristram and Lee, on Holborn. They sent me to talk to someone who holds documents for people like Evan. People who owe people. He uses this bar, Rory. Silas knows him." The hidden bookshelf at the back seemed to pulse. Rory went very still. "What documents?" "Photos. He takes photos. He—" Eva swallowed. "On his phone. Of the girls. He told a friend he had pictures of you. That he was going to send them to your restaurant boss if you didn't answer his messages. I told my supervisor and my supervisor said I should warn you in person, off the record." The door at the back of the bar clicked. Neither of them had heard the front open over the rain. Silas stood in the green neon wash, water dripping from his auburn hair onto the shoulders of his jacket, his left leg stiff from the cold. He was not alone. Behind him stood a young man in a navy anorak, shoulder-length black hair plastered to his head, holding a phone loose in one hand like it was already recording. He looked right at Rory and smiled. "Hey, babe."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Rory started then [then]"
1"Eva said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.304
leniency0.607
rawRatio0.118
effectiveRatio0.071
92.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1350
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"completely"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
77.78% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1350
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"perfect"
count2
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"perfect"
1"familiar"
2"silence"
3"weight"
4"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences95
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences134
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords4
totalWords1350
ratio0.003
matches
0"Don't burn it down"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount763
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity3.28
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
London1
Eva21
Manchester1
Rory25
Silas3
Silence1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Eva"
2"Rory"
3"Silas"
4"Silence"
places
0"London"
1"Manchester"
globalScore0
windowScore0
51.96% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences51
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"not quite a smile"
1"tasted like copper"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1350
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences134
matches
0"posted that picture message that Rory"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs75
mean18
std15.71
cv0.873
sampleLengths
05
150
27
333
44
513
658
718
851
922
1011
1115
1220
139
143
1513
1613
1710
1829
1940
2019
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2210
235
2427
2522
266
275
2822
294
3017
314
324
3310
3427
355
3624
371
3843
3919
408
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427
432
4432
4530
4653
477
4810
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97.88% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences95
matches
0"was gone"
1"were clasped"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs133
matches
0"was coming"
1"was still holding"
2"were making"
3"was already recording"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences134
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount765
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.03529411764705882
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.011764705882352941
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences134
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences134
mean10.07
std9.11
cv0.904
sampleLengths
05
120
217
32
42
59
67
72
831
94
107
116
1217
1324
149
158
169
179
186
194
204
217
2222
234
244
253
265
275
289
297
304
3115
328
335
347
359
363
375
386
392
406
417
4210
4316
4413
455
4624
4711
483
4916
56.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3656716417910448
totalSentences134
uniqueOpeners49
84.39% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences79
matches
0"Just a hairline crack."
1"Completely, openly cracked."
ratio0.025
93.42% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences79
matches
0"It threw Eva's face into"
1"She slid onto a stool."
2"Her movements were precise, economical."
3"It came out rough."
4"They looked at each other."
5"She studied the wall behind"
6"Her gaze lingered on the"
7"Her hands were clasped tight"
8"Her nails were perfect, short,"
9"They landed loud in the"
10"She had a thin silver"
11"Her shoulders went up to"
12"Her professional composure slipped for"
13"She needed distance."
14"She walked to the far"
15"Her reflection warped in them."
16"Her voice cracked on the"
17"Her elbows were on the"
18"she said into her hands"
19"She didn't touch her at"
ratio0.316
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences79
matches
0"Eva stood in the doorway"
1"Rain darkened the shoulders of"
2"Hair pulled back so tight"
3"Rory nearly dropped the crate"
4"Eva's mouth twitched, not quite"
5"The bar was empty, caught"
6"Silas had gone to the"
7"The green neon sign buzzed"
8"It threw Eva's face into"
9"Rory set the crate down"
10"Juice stung the crescent scar"
11"Rory started, then stopped"
12"Eva did look different."
13"The softness had gone out"
14"Cardiff had kept them both"
15"That girl was gone."
16"This woman looked quarried."
17"She slid onto a stool."
18"Her movements were precise, economical."
19"Rory laughed before she could"
ratio0.937
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences20
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"She studied the wall behind the bar, the old maps, the black and white photographs of men who thought they owned streets like this."
1"Her gaze lingered on the bookshelf that hid the back room."
2"Rory felt the old, quick part of her brain wake up, the part that solved things fast because slow meant getting hit."
3"Behind him stood a young man in a navy anorak, shoulder-length black hair plastered to his head, holding a phone loose in one hand like it was already recording…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Rory retracted (retract)"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.196
leniency0.393
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.036
78.4827%