Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD5MVS5A9E0GR9B4G78ZGMY

Run Details

Duration:
1m 38s
Cost:
$0.000399
Provider:
Poolside

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air changed the moment they stepped through the standing stones, carrying with it the scent of night-blooming jasmine and something else—something like ozone and old magic. Aurora felt the Hair on her arms rise as the world shifted around them, the familiar green expanse of Richmond Park dissolving into a realm that defied every law of nature she'd ever known. Isolde moved ahead, her silver hair catching light that didn't seem to come from anywhere in particular. She left no footprints in the dew-kissed grass that sparkled with motes of gold, each step taking her further into a grove where the trees themselves seemed to hum with ancient power. "How long have we been walking?" Aurora asked, her voice sounding small in the vast space. The question hung in the air, unanswered. Time here moved like honey—thick and strange. What had felt like minutes outside now stretched into something unmeasurable. Nyx drifted beside her, their shadowy form flickering between solid and ethereal. The faint violet of their eyes reflected the ambient glow that permeated everything. "The Grove does not operate on your mortal concepts of distance or duration," they murmured, their voice like wind through autumn leaves. "Time is a suggestion here." Aurora clutched the Heartstone Pendant beneath her shirt, feeling its familiar warmth pulse against her skin. It had been growing hotter since they'd entered, the deep crimson gem throbbing in rhythm with her heartbeat. She'd received it from an anonymous benefactor weeks ago, along with a note that simply read: "Trust the stone when the veil thins." The grove opened before them like a cathedral carved from living crystal. Trees with bark like polished moonstone reached toward a sky painted in shades that had no name—colors that shifted and swirled like oil on water. Bioluminescent flowers bloomed in impossible varieties, their petals ranging from translucent white to deep purple that seemed to drink the light rather than reflect it. "Isolde?" Aurora called out, falling into step beside the half-fae woman. "What exactly are we looking for?" The seer paused, turning to face them with those pale lavender eyes that held depths of knowledge spanning centuries. "The Grove reveals what is needed, not what is sought," she said, her voice carrying an otherworldly quality that made the hairs on Aurora's neck stand up. "But beware—the price of revelation is often more than one wishes to pay." Something rustled in the branches above, and Aurora looked up to see creatures that defied description flitting between the trees. They had wings like stained glass, bodies that shifted between solid and translucent, and eyes that glowed with their own inner light. The fae were watching them, their curiosity piqued by the presence of mortals in their realm. Nyx's form solidified slightly, their expression turning guarded. "We are not alone," they observed, their whisper-like voice carrying an undercurrent of wariness. A low growl rumbled from somewhere nearby, and Aurora instinctively reached for the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip. The cold metal hummed against her palm, its moondagger blade singing with barely contained power. Isolde had given it to her just hours ago, saying only: "It will know when it is needed." The sound came again—a deep, resonant purr that seemed to emanate from the very earth itself. The ground beneath their feet trembled slightly, and the bioluminescent flowers dimmed in response. Something large was moving through the grove, and it was drawing closer. "We should find shelter," Isolde said, though her tone suggested she already knew this was futile. The Grove was alive, and it would not be easily escaped. They moved faster then, following a path that seemed to appear beneath their feet as if the grove itself were guiding them. The trees grew closer together here, their branches intertwining overhead to form a natural canopy that filtered the shifting light into dappled patterns on the ground. Strange symbols carved into the trunks pulsed with soft light, and Aurora realized with a jolt that they were writing themselves as they walked—words in a language she couldn't read but somehow understood. "Wards," Nyx breathed, their form flickering as they passed through one of the symbol-marked areas. "Powerful ones. Someone didn't want intruders." Aurora felt the Fae-Forged Blade grow warmer in its sheath, its magical properties reacting to the wards. The weapon had been crafted specifically to cut through such enchantments, and she could feel its eagerness to fulfill its purpose. They emerged into a clearing that took Aurora's breath away. At its center stood a pool of water so still it appeared to be polished silver, reflecting not their images but scenes from other worlds. In its depths, she saw burning cities and frozen wastelands, lovers parting and reunions long overdue. The pool was a window to possibility itself. But it was what circled the pool that made her grip the hilt of her blade more tightly. Three figures moved in the water's reflection, their forms shifting and flowing like smoke given purpose. They were too large for normal humans, too angular, too wrong in ways that made her skin crawl. "Helspawn," Isolde whispered, her usual riddles replaced by stark recognition. "Or something worse." The growling sound returned, louder now, accompanied by the crunch of branches and the heavy tread of something massive. Aurora could feel the ground vibrating beneath her feet, and the Heartstone Pendant burned against her chest with such intensity that she feared it might crack her skin. "We need to leave," she said, but her voice lacked conviction even to her own ears. The Grove was beautiful and terrifying in equal measure, and part of her wanted to stay forever, to lose herself in its impossible wonders. Nyx had already begun to fade, their incorporeal nature allowing them to slip between the shadows cast by the grove's strange flora. "The Veil weakens during winter solstice," they called back, their voice echoing strangely as if coming from everywhere at once. "This place exists in the spaces between, where boundaries are thin." Aurora understood then. The standing stones, the pocket realm, the way time flowed differently—all of it was connected to the Veil that separated Earth from Hel and the Fae Courts. And whatever was hunting them had sensed the thinning of that barrier, drawn to the presence of mortals who dared to cross into realms that belonged to gods and monsters. The pool erupted in a cascade of silver light, and suddenly they could see clearly. The figures in the reflection were no longer abstract shapes but distinct beings with features that made Aurora's stomach roil. Horns curved from their heads, their eyes burned with inner fire, and their smiles revealed rows of pointed teeth. "Demons," Isolde breathed, but there was no fear in her voice, only grim acceptance. The first one stepped through the pool's surface as if walking through air, its form solidifying as it emerged. It was taller than any human, its skin the color of burnt copper, and it moved with a grace that belied its massive frame. In one hand, it held a blade that dripped with dark ichor. Aurora drew the Fae-Forged Blade, its cold metal singing in response to the threat. The weapon hummed with power, its moonlight glow intensifying as it recognized its prey. "Run," she said to Isolde, but the seer only smiled—a sad, knowing smile. "The Grove chooses who may leave," Isolde replied, her voice carrying that same otherworldly quality. "And it seems our path is not yet finished." The second demon emerged from the pool, followed by the third. They circled the group like predators assessing their prey, their laughter echoing in the strange air. But Aurora noticed something as she studied them more closely—their forms weren't entirely solid. They flickered at the edges, as if struggling to maintain their presence in this realm. The Heartstone Pendant blazed against her chest, its warmth spreading through her body like liquid fire. Whatever these creatures were, whatever connection they had to Hel and the Dymasian realm, the stone recognized them as a threat. Nyx reappeared beside her, their shadowy form crackling with barely contained energy. "The Veil grows thinner," they murmured, more to themselves than to the others. "Soon, the boundaries will collapse entirely." Aurora didn't wait to hear more. She stepped forward, the Fae-Forged Blade held ready, and faced the demons with a steady hand and a determined heart. Whatever the Grove had planned for them, whatever revelations awaited in its silver pools and whispering trees, she would face them head-on. The first demon charged.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.58% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1435
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"tightly"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"tightly"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
19.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1435
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"warmth"
count2
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"crystal"
count1
4
word"depths"
count2
5
word"otherworldly"
count2
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
8
word"pulsed"
count1
9
word"could feel"
count2
10
word"stark"
count1
11
word"intensity"
count1
12
word"echoing"
count2
13
word"stomach"
count1
14
word"flickered"
count1
15
word"determined"
count1
16
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"warmth"
2"pulse"
3"crystal"
4"depths"
5"otherworldly"
6"whisper"
7"trembled"
8"pulsed"
9"could feel"
10"stark"
11"intensity"
12"echoing"
13"stomach"
14"flickered"
15"determined"
16"charged"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences79
matches(empty)
34.36% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences79
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seem to"
1"seemed to"
2"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences87
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1426
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
88.03% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions59
wordCount1291
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.24
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Hair1
Richmond1
Park1
Aurora16
Heartstone3
Pendant3
Fae-Forged4
Blade4
Grove3
Veil1
Earth1
Hel2
Fae5
Courts1
Isolde7
Dymasian1
Nyx5
persons
0"Hair"
1"Aurora"
2"Pendant"
3"Blade"
4"Isolde"
5"Nyx"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Grove"
3"Veil"
4"Hel"
globalScore0.88
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"something like ozone and old magic"
1"felt like minutes outside now stretched"
2"purr that seemed to emanate from the very earth itself"
3"path that seemed to appear beneath their feet as if the grove itself were guiding them"
4"as if coming from everywhere at once"
5"as if walking through air, its form solidifying as it emerged"
6"as if struggling to maintain their presence in this realm"
59.75% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.403
wordCount1426
matches
0"not their images but scenes from other worlds"
1"no longer abstract shapes but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
79.53% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean41.94
std17.97
cv0.428
sampleLengths
061
149
241
352
457
562
617
759
858
922
1051
1142
1227
1381
1421
1538
1659
1752
1813
1947
2040
2153
2260
2354
2414
2555
2628
2713
2824
2956
3037
3131
3248
334
96.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences79
matches
0"been crafted"
1"was connected"
59.94% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs238
matches
0"were watching"
1"was drawing"
2"were guiding"
3"were writing"
4"was hunting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences87
ratio0.092
matches
0"The air changed the moment they stepped through the standing stones, carrying with it the scent of night-blooming jasmine and something else—something like ozone and old magic."
1"Time here moved like honey—thick and strange."
2"Trees with bark like polished moonstone reached toward a sky painted in shades that had no name—colors that shifted and swirled like oil on water."
3"The sound came again—a deep, resonant purr that seemed to emanate from the very earth itself."
4"Strange symbols carved into the trunks pulsed with soft light, and Aurora realized with a jolt that they were writing themselves as they walked—words in a language she couldn't read but somehow understood."
5"The standing stones, the pocket realm, the way time flowed differently—all of it was connected to the Veil that separated Earth from Hel and the Fae Courts."
6"\"Run,\" she said to Isolde, but the seer only smiled—a sad, knowing smile."
7"But Aurora noticed something as she studied them more closely—their forms weren't entirely solid."
99.55% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1308
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount53
adverbRatio0.040519877675840976
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.01529051987767584
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences87
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences87
mean16.39
std6.88
cv0.42
sampleLengths
027
134
217
332
416
57
67
711
812
913
1022
115
1216
1318
1423
1512
1625
1725
1811
196
2019
2127
2213
2320
2422
2516
268
2714
2818
2915
3018
3116
3214
3312
3416
3511
3622
3726
3833
3915
406
4117
4221
4310
4425
4516
468
4718
4816
4918
54.79% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.3563218390804598
totalSentences87
uniqueOpeners31
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences79
matches
0"She left no footprints in"
1"they murmured, their voice like"
2"It had been growing hotter"
3"She'd received it from an"
4"she said, her voice carrying"
5"They had wings like stained"
6"they observed, their whisper-like voice"
7"They moved faster then, following"
8"They emerged into a clearing"
9"They were too large for"
10"she said, but her voice"
11"they called back, their voice"
12"It was taller than any"
13"she said to Isolde, but"
14"They circled the group like"
15"They flickered at the edges,"
16"they murmured, more to themselves"
17"She stepped forward, the Fae-Forged"
ratio0.228
23.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences79
matches
0"The air changed the moment"
1"Aurora felt the Hair on"
2"Isolde moved ahead, her silver"
3"She left no footprints in"
4"Aurora asked, her voice sounding"
5"The question hung in the"
6"Nyx drifted beside her, their"
7"The faint violet of their"
8"they murmured, their voice like"
9"Aurora clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
10"It had been growing hotter"
11"She'd received it from an"
12"The grove opened before them"
13"Trees with bark like polished"
14"Bioluminescent flowers bloomed in impossible"
15"Aurora called out, falling into"
16"The seer paused, turning to"
17"she said, her voice carrying"
18"Something rustled in the branches"
19"They had wings like stained"
ratio0.873
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Aurora felt the Hair on her arms rise as the world shifted around them, the familiar green expanse of Richmond Park dissolving into a realm that defied every la…"
1"Isolde moved ahead, her silver hair catching light that didn't seem to come from anywhere in particular."
2"She left no footprints in the dew-kissed grass that sparkled with motes of gold, each step taking her further into a grove where the trees themselves seemed to …"
3"The faint violet of their eyes reflected the ambient glow that permeated everything."
4"Something rustled in the branches above, and Aurora looked up to see creatures that defied description flitting between the trees."
5"They had wings like stained glass, bodies that shifted between solid and translucent, and eyes that glowed with their own inner light."
6"They moved faster then, following a path that seemed to appear beneath their feet as if the grove itself were guiding them."
7"The trees grew closer together here, their branches intertwining overhead to form a natural canopy that filtered the shifting light into dappled patterns on the…"
8"Three figures moved in the water's reflection, their forms shifting and flowing like smoke given purpose."
9"They were too large for normal humans, too angular, too wrong in ways that made her skin crawl."
10"The standing stones, the pocket realm, the way time flowed differently—all of it was connected to the Veil that separated Earth from Hel and the Fae Courts."
11"The first one stepped through the pool's surface as if walking through air, its form solidifying as it emerged."
12"They circled the group like predators assessing their prey, their laughter echoing in the strange air."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Aurora asked, her voice sounding small in the vast space"
1"they observed, their whisper-like voice carrying an undercurrent of wariness"
2"Isolde said, though her tone suggested she already knew this was futile"
3"she said, but her voice lacked conviction even to her own ears"
4"Isolde replied, her voice carrying that same otherworldly quality"
5"they murmured, more to themselves than to the others"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"they murmured (murmur)"
1"Aurora called out (call out)"
2"they observed (observe)"
3"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
4"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
5"they called back (call back)"
6"Isolde breathed (breathe)"
7"they murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.583
leniency1
rawRatio0.571
effectiveRatio0.571
63.2685%