Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD5QHHV5TXK5CJ7W2R71689

Run Details

Duration:
15.4s
Cost:
$0.000496
Provider:
Poolside

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air changed the moment they stepped through the gap between the standing stones, shifting from the crisp evening chill of Richmond Park to something warmer, sweeter — like breathing in honeyed wine. Aurora caught Nyx's arm instinctively, her pulse quickening as the Heartstone Pendant at her throat began to thrum with a gentle heat against her skin. Isolde moved ahead without sound, her silver hair catching light that seemed to emanate from the very air itself. She left no footprints on the moss-covered ground, and Aurora marveled at how the wildflowers parted respectfully around her bare feet. The grove stretched before them in impossible dimensions, ancient oak trees whose trunks were wide as houses forming a cathedral of living wood overhead. Between their roots, luminescent fungi pulsed with soft blues and greens, casting shifting patterns across the forest floor. "The Veil grows thin here," Isolde said, her voice carrying that familiar musical lilt that made words sound like they were being sung rather than spoken. "Time is a river that flows differently in these waters." Aurora glanced at her watch — no, she didn't wear one. She checked the time on her phone instead, squinting at the screen. The display showed 8:47 PM, but something felt off. The light filtering through the canopy above had the golden quality of late afternoon, not evening shadows. She looked at Nyx, who simply tilted their head, that faintly glowing violet gaze unreadable. "How long have we been walking?" Aurora asked, her voice sounding strange in the hushed air. "Long enough for the boundaries to recognize us," Isolde replied, stepping closer to one of the great oaks. Her palm pressed flat against the bark, and Aurora swear the wood seemed to ripple beneath her touch, like water disturbed by a stone. Nyx drifted slightly ahead, their shadowy form becoming more substantial as they moved deeper into the grove. Where their footsteps should have disturbed the fallen leaves, nothing happened — they simply walked through the forest floor as if it were mist. Aurora had grown accustomed to this, but it still unsettled her. The Shade existed in that liminal space between what was real and what wasn't, and sometimes she wondered if she was the only one who noticed how reality bent around them. The Heartstone pulsed again, warmer this time, and Aurora felt a pull — not physical, but directional. Something was drawing them further into the grove, toward a section where the trees grew even larger, their branches intertwining to form natural archways overhead. Bioluminescent vines draped from the higher limbs like hanging gardens, their leaves shimmering with dew that caught and reflected light in impossible colors. "There," Isolde whispered, pointing toward a clearing that hadn't been there moments before. Or perhaps it had always been there, hidden behind a curtain of weeping willow branches that now seemed to part of their own accord. In the center of the clearing stood a pool of water so still it looked like polished silver. But this was no ordinary pond — the surface reflected not the grove around them, but scenes from other places: towering spires of amber stone under a sky the color of burnt honey, vast vineyards stretching to the horizon, and figures moving through golden fields that Aurora knew, somehow, were souls bound to service. "Dymas," she breathed, recognizing the realm from Isolde's cryptic warnings. "We're looking at a portal to Gluttony." The Heartstone blazed against her chest, hot enough now to leave a mark if she wasn't careful. She could feel the pull of the other side, the promise of excess and indulgence that had claimed so many mortal souls. Around the pool's edge, more of those strange flowers bloomed — white blossoms that opened and closed in rhythm with some unseen heartbeat, releasing petals that drifted upward instead of falling. Nyx knelt beside the pool, their incorporeal hand reaching toward the surface. For a moment, their reflection showed not the shadowy figure Aurora knew, but a man in 17th-century clothing, his face twisted in agony as he realized what the failed ritual had cost him. "They remember," Isolde said softly. "Even after centuries, the wound remains." Aurora stepped back, but not from fear. The pool's surface rippled, and suddenly she was looking into her own face — but older, harder, with eyes that held shadows she didn't recognize. Behind her reflection stood a figure in a long coat, watching her with concern. "Evan," she whispered, though she couldn't explain how she knew. "Every reflection shows a truth," Isolde said. "Some are warnings, others are promises. The pool does not judge which is which." The air grew thicker, heavy with the scent of spices Aurora couldn't name and the distant sound of laughter that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once. She could almost hear the clinking of fine china, the murmur of conversation, the low hum of contentment that preceded the great feasts of Dymas. Souls contracted for culinary service, Isolde had explained once, their talents preserved even in damnation. "How do we close it?" Aurora asked, though part of her wondered if closing it was the right choice. The Heartstone pulsed steadily now, almost like a heartbeat, and she found herself thinking about the possibilities — knowledge, power, the chance to understand what had happened to her mother's family, who had disappeared when Aurora was just a child. "We don't," Isolde said simply. "Portals of this nature are not meant to be closed. They are meant to be guarded." Nyx rose, their form stabilizing as they returned fully to the material world. "The Wardens monitor the rift points," they said, their voice carrying that whisper-soft quality that made it sound like wind through autumn leaves. "But this one... this one feels different. Older somehow." Aurora moved closer to the pool's edge, peering into its depths. The silver surface showed her reflection again, but this time it was clear, unclouded. She looked young, hopeful, before the weight of the world had settled onto her shoulders. Before Evan, before London, before all of this — the deliveries, the flat above Silas' bar, the strange artifacts and stranger allies. "The Heartstone chose you for a reason," Isolde said, placing a hand on Aurora's shoulder. The touch was surprisingly warm, human in a way that contrasted sharply with the ethereal beauty of the Fae woman. "Not because you are strong, but because you understand what it means to be trapped between worlds." Around them, the grove seemed to breathe. The trees creaked softly, their branches swaying despite the absence of wind. The flowers opened wider, releasing more of their intoxicating fragrance. Somewhere in the distance, Aurora thought she heard music — violins and cellos playing a melody that tugged at memories she couldn't quite grasp. "We should go back," she said, but even as the words left her mouth, she knew she wasn't ready to leave. Not yet. The pool held answers, and the Heartstone pulsed with anticipation. "Not yet," Isolde agreed. "The grove has more to show us." And as if summoned by those words, the pool's surface began to churn. Images flashed across its silver face — a figure in a red coat moving through crowds with predatory grace, a library filled with books whose titles shifted and changed as Aurora watched, a sword forged from starlight and shadow. Each vision was clearer than the last, more real than mere reflection. Aurora reached out, her fingers trembling as they hovered above the water's surface. The Heartstone burned hot against her chest, and for a moment, she could see everything — past, present, and future stretching out before her like the threads of a tapestry waiting to be woven. Then the visions faded, and the pool returned to its mirror-like stillness. But something had changed. Aurora could feel it in the air, in the way the grove seemed to hold its breath, in the way Nyx's shadow-self watched her with new intensity. Whatever waited for them in Dymas, whatever dangers lurked in the realm of excess and indulgence, Aurora knew one thing for certain — she was no longer just a delivery girl from Cardiff. She was something more, something that bridged the spaces between worlds, and the Heartstone had chosen her for reasons that were only beginning to reveal themselves.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
57.14% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Isolde said softly [softly]"
1"Isolde said simply [simply]"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.636
leniency1
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.143
78.26% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1380
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count2
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
4
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slightly"
2"softly"
3"suddenly"
4"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
23.91% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1380
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"marveled"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count4
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"lilt"
count1
6
word"unreadable"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"unsettled"
count1
9
word"could feel"
count2
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"depths"
count1
12
word"weight"
count1
13
word"anticipation"
count1
14
word"churn"
count1
15
word"tapestry"
count1
16
word"intensity"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"pulse"
2"marveled"
3"pulsed"
4"familiar"
5"lilt"
6"unreadable"
7"footsteps"
8"unsettled"
9"could feel"
10"whisper"
11"depths"
12"weight"
13"anticipation"
14"churn"
15"tapestry"
16"intensity"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences70
matches
0"d with anticipation"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount9
narrationSentences70
filterMatches
0"watch "
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
2"happened to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences78
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1393
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
69.61% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1244
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.61
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Nyx6
Heartstone7
Pendant1
Aurora20
Isolde11
Shade1
Dymas2
Evan1
London1
Fae1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Heartstone"
2"Aurora"
3"Isolde"
4"Shade"
5"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Dymas"
3"London"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore0.696
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"light that seemed to emanate from the very air itself"
1"looked like polished silver"
2"laughter that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once"
3"quite grasp"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords2.154
wordCount1393
matches
0"not physical, but directional"
1"not the grove around them, but scenes from other places: towering spires of amber stone und"
2"not the shadowy figure Aurora knew, but a man in 17th-century clothing, his face twisted in agony as"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
87.13% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean46.43
std21.12
cv0.455
sampleLengths
058
182
236
364
416
542
683
765
837
972
1017
1170
1245
1311
1446
1510
1621
1769
1859
1921
2045
2162
2252
2353
2433
2511
2664
2747
2843
2959
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"being sung"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs219
matches
0"was drawing"
1"was looking"
2"were only beginning"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences78
ratio0.167
matches
0"The air changed the moment they stepped through the gap between the standing stones, shifting from the crisp evening chill of Richmond Park to something warmer, sweeter — like breathing in honeyed wine."
1"Aurora glanced at her watch — no, she didn't wear one."
2"Where their footsteps should have disturbed the fallen leaves, nothing happened — they simply walked through the forest floor as if it were mist."
3"The Heartstone pulsed again, warmer this time, and Aurora felt a pull — not physical, but directional."
4"But this was no ordinary pond — the surface reflected not the grove around them, but scenes from other places: towering spires of amber stone under a sky the color of burnt honey, vast vineyards stretching to the horizon, and figures moving through golden fields that Aurora knew, somehow, were souls bound to service."
5"Around the pool's edge, more of those strange flowers bloomed — white blossoms that opened and closed in rhythm with some unseen heartbeat, releasing petals that drifted upward instead of falling."
6"The pool's surface rippled, and suddenly she was looking into her own face — but older, harder, with eyes that held shadows she didn't recognize."
7"The Heartstone pulsed steadily now, almost like a heartbeat, and she found herself thinking about the possibilities — knowledge, power, the chance to understand what had happened to her mother's family, who had disappeared when Aurora was just a child."
8"Before Evan, before London, before all of this — the deliveries, the flat above Silas' bar, the strange artifacts and stranger allies."
9"Somewhere in the distance, Aurora thought she heard music — violins and cellos playing a melody that tugged at memories she couldn't quite grasp."
10"Images flashed across its silver face — a figure in a red coat moving through crowds with predatory grace, a library filled with books whose titles shifted and changed as Aurora watched, a sword forged from starlight and shadow."
11"The Heartstone burned hot against her chest, and for a moment, she could see everything — past, present, and future stretching out before her like the threads of a tapestry waiting to be woven."
12"Whatever waited for them in Dymas, whatever dangers lurked in the realm of excess and indulgence, Aurora knew one thing for certain — she was no longer just a delivery girl from Cardiff."
94.93% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount939
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.04579339723109691
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.013844515441959531
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences78
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences78
mean17.86
std9.5
cv0.532
sampleLengths
033
125
219
321
424
518
626
710
811
912
109
1117
1215
1316
1418
1524
1617
1724
1811
1931
2017
2125
2223
2313
2424
2518
2654
2710
287
2917
3022
3131
3212
3333
345
356
367
3725
3814
3910
407
4114
4229
4325
4415
4519
4640
475
4816
4913
73.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.47435897435897434
totalSentences78
uniqueOpeners37
99.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences67
matches
0"Somewhere in the distance, Aurora"
1"Then the visions faded, and"
ratio0.03
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences67
matches
0"She left no footprints on"
1"She checked the time on"
2"She looked at Nyx, who"
3"Her palm pressed flat against"
4"she breathed, recognizing the realm"
5"She could feel the pull"
6"she whispered, though she couldn't"
7"She could almost hear the"
8"they said, their voice carrying"
9"She looked young, hopeful, before"
10"she said, but even as"
11"She was something more, something"
ratio0.179
64.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences67
matches
0"The air changed the moment"
1"Aurora caught Nyx's arm instinctively,"
2"Isolde moved ahead without sound,"
3"She left no footprints on"
4"The grove stretched before them"
5"Isolde said, her voice carrying"
6"Aurora glanced at her watch"
7"She checked the time on"
8"The display showed 8:47 PM,"
9"The light filtering through the"
10"She looked at Nyx, who"
11"Aurora asked, her voice sounding"
12"Isolde replied, stepping closer to"
13"Her palm pressed flat against"
14"Nyx drifted slightly ahead, their"
15"Aurora had grown accustomed to"
16"The Shade existed in that"
17"The Heartstone pulsed again, warmer"
18"Something was drawing them further"
19"Bioluminescent vines draped from the"
ratio0.791
74.63% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences67
matches
0"Before Evan, before London, before"
ratio0.015
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Something was drawing them further into the grove, toward a section where the trees grew even larger, their branches intertwining to form natural archways overh…"
1"Bioluminescent vines draped from the higher limbs like hanging gardens, their leaves shimmering with dew that caught and reflected light in impossible colors."
2"Around the pool's edge, more of those strange flowers bloomed — white blossoms that opened and closed in rhythm with some unseen heartbeat, releasing petals tha…"
3"The pool's surface rippled, and suddenly she was looking into her own face — but older, harder, with eyes that held shadows she didn't recognize."
4"The air grew thicker, heavy with the scent of spices Aurora couldn't name and the distant sound of laughter that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at o…"
5"She could almost hear the clinking of fine china, the murmur of conversation, the low hum of contentment that preceded the great feasts of Dymas."
6"The Heartstone pulsed steadily now, almost like a heartbeat, and she found herself thinking about the possibilities — knowledge, power, the chance to understand…"
7"The touch was surprisingly warm, human in a way that contrasted sharply with the ethereal beauty of the Fae woman."
8"Somewhere in the distance, Aurora thought she heard music — violins and cellos playing a melody that tugged at memories she couldn't quite grasp."
9"She was something more, something that bridged the spaces between worlds, and the Heartstone had chosen her for reasons that were only beginning to reveal thems…"
89.29% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Aurora asked, her voice sounding strange in the hushed air"
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
1"she breathed (breathe)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"Isolde agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.636
leniency1
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.286
70.6652%