Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD5RTD802DKTQVB8B9370DH

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The oak stones didn't look ancient until Rory stepped between them. From the path in Richmond Park they had been ordinary enough — lichen-spotted, half-sunk, the sort of thing dog walkers let their dogs piss on without a second thought. Isolde went first, her silver hair catching none of the grey afternoon light, her bare feet lifting over wet grass without bending a single blade. She left no footprints when she walked. Rory had read that about her in Eva's notes and hadn't believed it until now. "Come," Isolde said, and her voice made the air itch. "What was lost will be found where time forgets to go." "You mean in there?" Rory asked. Isolde's pale lavender eyes creased. "I mean precisely in there, Rory Carter who is called Aurora when she is being scolded. But the words are not the place." Nyx made a sound behind Rory like wind through a keyhole. They had been solid when they'd left the flat above Silas' — tall enough that Rory had to tilt her head, the edges of their coat made of something that wasn't cloth — but between the two standing stones they thinned. Rory put her hand on the stone to steady herself. It was warm. That was wrong; it was late November and frost still silvered the bracken. The stone thrummed under her palm. The Heartstone pendant Eva claimed had shown up taped to Rory's bike helmet last spring pulsed once against her sternum. A quick, hot thump that had nothing to do with her heart. It was deep crimson, no bigger than her thumbnail on its silver chain, and it had never done that before except down by the Thames underpass where the Veil went thin enough that she could see the shimmer, the distortion like heat haze. "Rory," Nyx whispered, and their voice came from everywhere and nowhere, a whisper carried on the wind that brushed the crescent scar on her left wrist. "It opens." She stepped through. The cold hit her first, then didn't. The air on the other side was not winter air. It was late summer just after rain, thick with green and rot and honey. The sound of the A3 cut off as if someone had closed a door. No planes. No dogs. Just the sudden, overwhelming drone of insects Rory could not see and the drip of water from leaves too large to belong to any oak in London. She stood in a clearing that was bigger on the inside than the circle of stones should have allowed. Ancient oaks that were not oaks ringed it, their bark silver-white and twisting up into a canopy that filtered light the color of warm amber. Not the amber of sunset — the specific, syrupy amber she had only ever seen in cookbooks describing Dymas, the Gluttony realm under Prince Belphegor, where the sky itself looked edible. Rory had never been to Hel, but Isolde had described it while drunk on nettle wine and Rory had remembered. This wasn't Hel. The air was too clean. Too alive. Wildflowers bloomed everywhere, year-round impossibility: foxgloves and meadowsweet and flowers with no names, their heads open despite the fact that outside this pocket it was nearly December. Their scent was so dense it coated her tongue. "Oh," Rory breathed. Nyx unfolded beside her. Between the stones they had been a wisp; here they drew together, their humanoid silhouette of living shadow knitting solid, near six-two and oddly formal in the way they held themselves. Their faintly glowing violet eyes adjusted. "A pocket," they said, quieter than usual. "Folded." "A grove, little shadow," Isolde corrected. She was already ten feet ahead, though Rory hadn't seen her move. "My grove. And ours, now. Do you feel how it pulls?" Rory did. The ground under her trainers gave slightly, moss thick as a mattress. Time felt wrong, like when you stare at a clock too long and the second hand stutters. An hour inside can be minutes or days outside — that was how Isolde's grove worked, and Rory had thought that was just a neat trick of Fae magic, not a physical pressure behind the ears. She swallowed and her ears popped. She took a step forward and her boot sank a half-inch. No resistance. She looked back. She had left prints. Nyx had left none, because Nyx never really touched ground unless they wanted to. Isolde left nothing, as always. "Stick close," Rory said, falling automatically into the cool-headed voice she used when Eva was panicking or when Yu-Fei's dinner rush went sideways. "We don't know what's stable here." "Wise," Isolde said, but she didn't sound like she meant safety. She sounded pleased. "The rite that made this place was done before your father's fathers were dreamed of. Before Aldric's circle." Nyx flinched at the old name. Rory noticed. The deeper they went, the less the clearing behaved like a clearing. The oaks leaned in. Light pooled. The wildflowers got taller, up to her knees, then her waist, and they chimed when she brushed them — actual chimes, bell tones, not rustle. She reached out without thinking and the petal of something purple-black closed around her fingertip, warm and curious, then let go. "Don't," Nyx whispered at her elbow, and the word moved her hair. "They remember touch." Rory put her hands in her pockets. Her right hand closed around the hilt of the thing Isolde had given her three nights ago after Rory had brought her instant noodles and a spare phone charger. The Fae-Forged Blade. Even through her coat pocket it was always cold to the touch, a slender leaf-shaped dagger of moonsilver that never warmed. In the amber-tinted light filtering down, she could see its faint luminescence starting to wake through the fabric. "It's cutting?" she asked Isolde. "The air?" Isolde laughed, and the sound made more of those impossible flowers turn their heads. "No. Not yet. The Veil here is thin. You can see it if you try, you who wear the false heart." Instinctively Rory pulled the Heartstone out from under her shirt. It was pulsing now steadily, warm against her skin, faint inner glow catching in the crimson. Pulses with warmth when near a Hel portal — that was what the lore forums said, but there was no Hel portal here. Or maybe there was. Rory had learned not to trust maps drawn by people who'd never crossed. She squinted. Past Isolde's shoulder, past the curtain of flowering vines, the air did a weird thing. A faint shimmering distortion, like looking through old glass. An hour inside can be minutes outside. A tear, a thin place. Not a full rift — the Wardens would be here with salt and iron if it was — but enough. "Is that to Dymas?" she asked, because the amber light was stronger there, and for a half second she smelled roasting meat and sugar and something dizzyingly rich. Isolde tilted her head. "All hungry places touch all other hungry places. That is not a lie." Right. Fae compulsion. She cannot lie but she can mislead. Great. Nyx had gone still. The shadows in the grove were strange; they did not all fall the same way. Some stretched toward Rory, some away, some pooled around Nyx's boots like ink eager to be reunited. They were a being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms. A man named Aldric once, in 1643, before a failed summoning. Rory didn't know how being home — if you could call the between a home — felt, but their shoulders were high. "There's something here," Nyx said, their whisper thinned. "Under." Rory looked down. The moss under her feet wasn't just moss. Where her boot had pressed, the green had parted and shown a surface beneath, smooth and pale and veined like marble, or like bone. As they had walked, the wildflowers had hidden it. Now that she looked, she could see it everywhere — a floor, deliberate, tessellated, ancient and too even to be natural, running under root and soil. She crouched, brushed flowers aside. Cold bit her fingers despite the summer air. Stone, yes, but carved. Lines cut into it, spiraling in, concentric, words in a language that made her eyes water to try to read. "Hedge-witches," Isolde said softly, and for once she did not riddle. "Before the Courts. Before your Wardens. They made a door and then were afraid of what would answer. So they made a garden on top of the door to keep it sleeping." Unease prickled up Rory's spine, sharp as static. The wonder had been easy — the scent, the light, the chiming flowers, the sheer un-English excess of life in a London park. This was the other side of that coin. She thought of her flat above Silas' — the sound of the bar shutting, the bikes chained up, Eva laughing in the kitchen — and felt, with a lurch, that it was already a day away, or ten years away, or five minutes. "Is it Hel?" Rory asked, hand tight on the cold dagger through her pocket. She was cool-headed, intelligent, known for out-of-the-box thinking, but her heart was hammering now. Isolde crouched beside her, ageless face level with hers, silver hair pooling on the hidden floor without touching it. Her lavender eyes were earnest. "It is a mouth," she said. "All doors are mouths. You need not feed it. But you, Aurora Carter, born in Cardiff to a barrister and a teacher who wanted a lawyer, you who ran — you were always going to find a door." The Heartstone pulsed hard enough to hurt, crimson light leaking between Rory's fingers over her shirt. The shimmer ahead thickened. The warm amber sky of somewhere that was not Earth seemed, for a blink, to show the suggestion of vast orchards beyond, vineyards stretching to a horizon that curved wrong. Behind her, Nyx's hand — when they wanted it to be a hand — settled, light as a draft, on her shoulder. Solid and cold. "We should go back," they whispered, only to her. "The grove likes you. That is not always good." Rory swallowed, stood. She looked down at the spiral under her feet, at Isolde's bare feet hovering above it, at Nyx's shadow stretching impossibly long toward the shimmer and their violet eyes fixed on it. "Yeah," she said, voice steady. "Yeah, okay. We map it. We go. We bring Eva's iron." She didn't let go of the dagger.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Isolde said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.606
leniency1
rawRatio0.05
effectiveRatio0.05
88.55% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1746
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
1"slightly"
2"really"
3"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.95% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1746
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"whisper"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count1
3
word"marble"
count1
4
word"lurch"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"whisper"
2"warmth"
3"marble"
4"lurch"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"without second thought"
count1
highlights
0"without a second thought"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences124
matches
0"s with warmth"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences124
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences139
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1764
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
60.65% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions87
wordCount1455
uniqueNames26
maxNameDensity1.79
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory26
Richmond1
Park1
Eva3
Isolde16
November1
Heartstone3
Thames1
Veil1
London2
Dymas1
Gluttony1
Prince1
Belphegor1
Hel4
December1
Nyx12
Fae3
Yu-Fei1
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Instinctively1
Wardens1
Aldric1
Unease1
Earth1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Isolde"
3"Veil"
4"Prince"
5"Belphegor"
6"Nyx"
7"Yu-Fei"
8"Instinctively"
9"Wardens"
10"Unease"
11"Earth"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Thames"
3"London"
4"Hel"
globalScore0.607
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences81
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1764
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences139
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean36.75
std25.56
cv0.695
sampleLengths
011
176
221
36
428
552
632
775
828
93
1076
1195
1210
1336
143
1541
168
1729
1873
1939
2029
2132
228
2364
2415
2578
265
2737
2866
2958
3028
3117
3211
3386
349
3570
3637
3743
3882
3928
4024
4144
4250
4325
4418
4535
4616
477
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences124
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs243
matches
0"was panicking"
1"was pulsing"
2"was hammering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences139
ratio0.094
matches
0"From the path in Richmond Park they had been ordinary enough — lichen-spotted, half-sunk, the sort of thing dog walkers let their dogs piss on without a second thought."
1"That was wrong; it was late November and frost still silvered the bracken."
2"Not the amber of sunset — the specific, syrupy amber she had only ever seen in cookbooks describing Dymas, the Gluttony realm under Prince Belphegor, where the sky itself looked edible."
3"Between the stones they had been a wisp; here they drew together, their humanoid silhouette of living shadow knitting solid, near six-two and oddly formal in the way they held themselves."
4"An hour inside can be minutes or days outside — that was how Isolde's grove worked, and Rory had thought that was just a neat trick of Fae magic, not a physical pressure behind the ears."
5"The wildflowers got taller, up to her knees, then her waist, and they chimed when she brushed them — actual chimes, bell tones, not rustle."
6"Pulses with warmth when near a Hel portal — that was what the lore forums said, but there was no Hel portal here."
7"Not a full rift — the Wardens would be here with salt and iron if it was — but enough."
8"The shadows in the grove were strange; they did not all fall the same way."
9"Rory didn't know how being home — if you could call the between a home — felt, but their shoulders were high."
10"Now that she looked, she could see it everywhere — a floor, deliberate, tessellated, ancient and too even to be natural, running under root and soil."
11"The wonder had been easy — the scent, the light, the chiming flowers, the sheer un-English excess of life in a London park."
12"Behind her, Nyx's hand — when they wanted it to be a hand — settled, light as a draft, on her shoulder."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount276
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount8
adverbRatio0.028985507246376812
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences139
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences139
mean12.69
std9.87
cv0.778
sampleLengths
011
129
225
37
415
510
611
76
85
923
1011
1141
1210
133
1413
156
1620
1712
1843
1926
202
213
227
2310
2414
2514
262
272
2827
2919
3025
3131
3220
333
345
352
3627
379
383
394
4031
416
427
431
446
4512
4611
472
4812
4917
65.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4316546762589928
totalSentences139
uniqueOpeners60
61.16% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences109
matches
0"Just the sudden, overwhelming drone"
1"Instinctively Rory pulled the Heartstone"
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences109
matches
0"She left no footprints when"
1"They had been solid when"
2"It was warm."
3"It was deep crimson, no"
4"She stepped through."
5"It was late summer just"
6"She stood in a clearing"
7"Their scent was so dense"
8"Their faintly glowing violet eyes"
9"they said, quieter than usual"
10"She was already ten feet"
11"She swallowed and her ears"
12"She took a step forward"
13"She looked back."
14"She had left prints."
15"She sounded pleased."
16"She reached out without thinking"
17"Her right hand closed around"
18"she asked Isolde"
19"It was pulsing now steadily,"
ratio0.284
37.98% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences109
matches
0"The oak stones didn't look"
1"Isolde went first, her silver"
2"She left no footprints when"
3"Rory had read that about"
4"Isolde said, and her voice"
5"Isolde's pale lavender eyes creased."
6"Nyx made a sound behind"
7"They had been solid when"
8"Rory put her hand on"
9"It was warm."
10"That was wrong; it was"
11"The stone thrummed under her"
12"The Heartstone pendant Eva claimed"
13"A quick, hot thump that"
14"It was deep crimson, no"
15"Nyx whispered, and their voice"
16"She stepped through."
17"The cold hit her first,"
18"The air on the other"
19"It was late summer just"
ratio0.844
91.74% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences109
matches
0"Even through her coat pocket"
1"Now that she looked, she"
ratio0.018
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Ancient oaks that were not oaks ringed it, their bark silver-white and twisting up into a canopy that filtered light the color of warm amber."
1"Lines cut into it, spiraling in, concentric, words in a language that made her eyes water to try to read."
2"The warm amber sky of somewhere that was not Earth seemed, for a blink, to show the suggestion of vast orchards beyond, vineyards stretching to a horizon that c…"
50.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Nyx whispered, and the word moved her hair"
1"Nyx said, their whisper thinned"
2"she said, voice steady"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory breathed (breathe)"
2"Isolde corrected (correct)"
3"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
4"Isolde laughed (laugh)"
5"they whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.545
leniency1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.333
84.5169%