Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD5TJQKFGJNDBNKJC6PTRK4

Run Details

Duration:
2m 59s
Cost:
$0.074921
Provider:
Moonshot AI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon sign above the Raven’s Nest bled through the rain, staining the pavement the color of bruised glass. Detective Harlow Quinn stood beneath it for three seconds, long enough to check the street behind her in the reflection of the door. Soho glittered and seethed around her. Taxis hissed through standing water. Umbrellas collided outside the pubs. A bus exhaled white steam at the curb, its windows packed with damp, anonymous faces. Quinn turned up the collar of her coat and went inside. The bar’s warmth closed around her, carrying wet wool, spilled beer, and old wood. Dim lamps burned against walls crowded with maps and black-and-white photographs. London from another century stared down at her: men in bowler hats beside horse-drawn carts, women with hard eyes standing in doorways that no longer existed. Tomás Herrera sat at the far end of the bar. She recognized him before he turned. Five-ten, olive-skinned, short dark curls flattened by the rain. The scar along his left forearm disappeared into a pushed-up sleeve. A Saint Christopher medallion rested against the open collar of his shirt. He had his back to the room, but Quinn saw the exact moment he made her. His shoulders tightened. His right hand stopped halfway to his glass. Eighteen years of watching guilty people had taught her to trust small betrayals. “Tomás Herrera,” she called. The room seemed to contract around the name. Tomás looked over his shoulder. Warm brown eyes, according to his file. At present, they were merely quick. “Detective Quinn.” “Metropolitan Police. I’d like a word.” His gaze dropped to her warrant card, then to the left side of her coat. Searching for a weapon she wasn’t carrying. “About what?” “The three men treated for gunshot wounds in a storage unit off Commercial Road. None of them went to hospital.” “I don’t know what you mean.” “You were an NHS paramedic for six years.” “I was.” “And you lost your license for administering unauthorized treatment.” His jaw flexed. “That’s not a crime.” “It is when you start treating people who’ve been shot.” A glass slid across the bar somewhere behind her. Quinn kept her eyes on Tomás. She saw him glance toward a bookshelf behind the bar, half-hidden by shadow. The movement was tiny, but she had come prepared. Two officers were waiting at the front. Another pair should have been covering the alley. Should have been. Her radio gave a thin burst of static. Tomás moved. He vaulted the bar, shoved the bookshelf inward, and vanished through the dark opening behind it. Quinn swore and went after him. Someone grabbed at her coat. She twisted free, caught the edge of the bookshelf with both hands, and forced it wider. Beyond lay a narrow room crowded with crates and filing cabinets. A door stood open at the rear. “Police!” she shouted. “Stop!” Tomás didn’t. Quinn plunged through the hidden room and into an alley slick with rain. Tomás was already twenty yards ahead, sprinting between overflowing bins. Her shoes struck water. Cold shot up through the soles. She thumbed her radio. “Quinn. Suspect running from the Raven’s Nest, rear exit toward Brewer Street. Male, twenty-nine, dark curls, gray coat. I’m in pursuit.” Static answered. Then a voice, fractured by interference. “Say again, Detective—” Tomás reached the end of the alley and turned left. Quinn followed, bursting onto Brewer Street into headlights and horns. A taxi swerved around Tomás. The driver screamed obscenities through a cracked window. Tomás crossed without looking back, dodged a cyclist, and kept running. Rain needled Quinn’s face. She chased him past shuttered shops and restaurant windows full of startled diners. Her coat dragged at her shoulders, heavy with water. At forty-one, she was still fit, but pursuit was a young officer’s game. Pain began to build behind her right knee. Tomás glanced back once. There was no panic in his face. That troubled her more than fear would have. He ran with purpose. They crossed into a narrower street where the crowd thinned. Tomás cut between two parked vans. Quinn followed and nearly lost him in the darkness beyond. A motorbike engine coughed alive ahead. She rounded the vans in time to see Tomás swing onto a black bike parked beside the curb. “Herrera!” He kicked away from the pavement. Quinn ran for her unmarked car at the end of the street, yanked the door open, and dropped into the driver’s seat. The engine turned over on the second attempt. She slammed it into gear and pulled out hard enough to make a delivery van brake behind her. The motorbike’s red tail light vanished around the next corner. She drove after it. Rain smeared the windscreen faster than the wipers could clear it. London became streaks of brake lights and distorted neon. Quinn took the corner too fast, felt the tires slip, and corrected by instinct. The bike reappeared half a block ahead, weaving between cars. “Control,” she said into the radio. “Detective Quinn in mobile pursuit north from Soho. Suspect on black motorbike, registration obscured.” A dispatcher came through, clearer this time. “Detective Quinn, units are being redirected. Maintain observation. Do not engage without support.” Tomás cut across two lanes and mounted the pavement to pass a bus. Quinn gripped the wheel. “He’s not giving me much choice.” “Say again?” “Nothing.” She followed. The chase left Soho’s cramped streets behind and opened onto broader roads. Bloomsbury passed in gray slabs and black railings. The rain intensified, rattling the roof. Quinn kept three cars between herself and the bike, close enough not to lose him, far enough to avoid forcing him into a collision. Her phone lit up in the center console. DCI Mercer. She ignored it. Tomás turned again, and the signs began to point north. Camden. Of course. Quinn felt the old, cold pressure behind her ribs. Camden had been on the board in the incident room after DS Morris died. A name written beside CCTV blind spots, missing persons, and statements that made no sense. Morris had been chasing a suspect there three years ago. He’d called for assistance at 2:17 in the morning, his voice steady until it wasn’t. By the time Quinn reached him, he was lying in an alley with his eyes open and his blood too dark in the rain. No wounds they could explain. No suspect. No answers. The case file called it cardiac arrest. Morris had been thirty-two. Ahead, the motorbike skidded around a corner. Quinn lost sight of it behind a delivery truck. She accelerated, cleared the truck, and saw Tomás abandon the bike beside a shuttered parade of shops. He ran toward an old Underground entrance squeezed between a boarded pharmacy and a shuttered café. The station name had been painted over years ago. A chain hung across the stairwell. Tomás slipped beneath it. Quinn braked in the bus lane, hazards flashing, and got out. The cold hit her immediately. Rain drummed on the abandoned station’s broken canopy. There was no light beyond the entrance, only stairs descending into darkness. Her radio crackled. “Quinn, your location?” “Camden. Disused station off Hawley Road.” “Units are eight minutes out.” She looked down the stairs. Tomás was already gone. Eight minutes was long enough for him to disappear. Quinn ducked under the chain. The air changed at once. Street noise dulled behind her, replaced by water dripping somewhere below. She drew her flashlight and followed the stairs down. Old posters clung to tiled walls in blackened curls. Her light caught advertisements for plays that had closed decades ago. At the bottom, a steel door stood where the ticket barriers should have been. A woman waited beside it, small and gaunt, wrapped in a coat made from overlapping gray feathers. Her eyes reflected Quinn’s light like coins at the bottom of a well. Tomás stood at the door. He held something pale between two fingers. Bone, polished smooth and carved into the shape of a crescent. The feathered woman touched it with one long nail. The door opened. Beyond it came sound. Not the rumble of trains. Voices. Hundreds of them, murmuring beneath the earth. Music threaded through the noise, thin and strange. Warm light flickered from the tunnel beyond. Tomás stepped through. “Wait,” Quinn called. The door began to close. She crossed the tiles quickly. “Metropolitan Police. I’m pursuing that man.” The feathered woman looked at her warrant card without interest. “No token, no Market.” “He just went in.” “He had a token.” “I have police authority.” The woman smiled. Her teeth were brown and pointed at the edges. “Not here.” Behind the narrowing gap, Quinn saw movement—stalls, lanterns, people passing beneath brick arches. Something impossible fluttered in a cage, its wings leaving trails of blue fire. The Veil Market. She had heard the name only once, whispered by an informant who had recanted everything the next day. A hidden market for things the law had no language for. Enchanted goods. Banned substances. Information bought and sold like meat. The door was nearly shut. Her radio hissed. “Quinn, confirm you are holding position.” Tomás would vanish in there. Worse, the Market moved every full moon, if the rumor was true. By morning, there would be nothing beneath Camden but wet concrete and dead rails. Quinn reached into her coat. Her fingers closed around a narrow evidence sleeve she had no right to still be carrying. Inside lay a crescent of pale bone found beneath Morris’s body three years ago. Forensics had called it animal. No species match. No relevance. She had carried it because it was the only thing at the scene that had not made sense. She held it up. The feathered woman’s gaze sharpened. Quinn said, “Will this do?” The woman took the sleeve but did not touch the bone. She sniffed once, then recoiled as if struck. “Where did you get that?” “A crime scene.” “What death made it?” Quinn thought of Morris’s open eyes, his rain-dark blood. “My partner’s.” The woman studied her for a long moment. Somewhere below, a bell rang three times. “This token remembers the hand that took it,” she said. “If you carry it through, that hand may know you’ve come.” Quinn glanced at the tunnel. The light pulsed like something breathing. Eighteen years of procedure told her to wait. Secure the entrance. Preserve evidence. Let backup arrive. Do not enter an unknown underground location alone to pursue an unarmed suspect. Morris had followed procedure too, until procedure failed him. She put away her warrant card. “I’m going in.” The feathered woman opened the door. Heat rolled out, smelling of spices, smoke, stagnant water, and something sweetly rotten. Quinn stepped through. The door slammed behind her, cutting off the radio mid-word. The Market stretched along the old station platforms and into both rail tunnels. Stalls crowded the space beneath brick arches, lit by candles in jars, gas lamps, and globes of cold green fire. Goods lay arranged on velvet, tin trays, and bare stone: knives with rippling blades, bottles filled with moving shadows, teeth strung on silver wire, books bound in pale leather that twitched when people passed. A child with no eyes sold matchboxes from a blanket. A man in a plague doctor’s mask argued over a jar of human fingernails. Something hunched inside a cage nearby, too large to be a dog, too quiet to be safe. No one looked at Quinn for more than a second. That frightened her. In London, people always looked at police. She moved along the platform, scanning faces. Rainwater dripped from her coat onto the tiles. Her flashlight remained off. The light would mark her, and she already felt marked enough. Then she saw Tomás. He stood at a stall beneath the far arch, speaking urgently to a hooded vendor. His medallion caught the light as he leaned forward. Quinn approached through the crowd, keeping a pillar between them. The vendor placed a black vial in Tomás’s hand. “Two hours,” the vendor said. “After that, no medicine on either side will help her.” Tomás closed his fingers around the vial. “I know.” Quinn stepped out. “Police. Don’t move.” Tomás spun. For an instant, relief crossed his face. Then alarm followed. “Quinn, you shouldn’t be here.” “That seems to be the consensus.” She showed her empty hands but stayed ready to strike. “Put the vial on the ground.” “No.” “You’re under arrest.” “For what? Running from you?” “Obstruction. Suspicion of conspiracy. We can start there.” The crowd had gone still around them. The eyeless child turned his face toward Quinn. The caged creature began to breathe. Tomás lowered his voice. “A girl is dying. This will keep her alive long enough to reach the people who can help her.” “Which girl?” “I can’t tell you here.” “Convenient.” “You think I wanted this?” Anger cracked through his control. “You followed me into a place that eats people like you.” “People like me?” “Police.” Before Quinn could answer, the crescent of bone in the feathered woman’s sleeve grew warm against her ribs. She had not taken it back. The sensation spread through her coat like a hand pressing between her shoulder blades. The Market lights dimmed. At the far end of the platform, several figures turned in unison. Tomás saw her expression. “What is it?” The feathered woman’s words returned. This token remembers the hand that took it. A bell rang again, once, deep beneath the station. The eyeless child whispered, “He knows.” Quinn looked toward the far tunnel. Something was coming through the dark, tall enough that its head brushed the brick arch. The crowd parted before it without appearing to move. Tomás swore softly in Spanish. Quinn’s training gave her a clean, simple line: arrest the suspect, hold the evidence, withdraw. The thing in the tunnel made the line useless. Tomás lifted the black vial. “You can arrest me after I deliver this. Or you can stand here and explain to whatever that is why you brought its token into the Market.” Quinn’s worn leather watch ticked against her wrist. Backup was above ground, unreachable. Her radio was dead. The exit was behind her, but so was the feathered woman and the closed steel door. The thing stepped into the light. It wore Morris’s face. Not perfectly. The features hung wrong, as if the thing had studied a photograph and misunderstood the nature of skin. But the eyes were right. The pale gray eyes Quinn had last seen reflecting rain in an alley three years ago. Her chest locked. Morris’s mouth opened. “Harlow,” it said. Tomás moved then, not toward the exit but toward Quinn. He seized her wrist with the scarred hand and pressed the black vial into her palm. “Don’t let go of this,” he said. “And whatever it tells you, don’t answer.” The Morris-thing smiled. Quinn closed her fingers around the vial. Behind her lay the door, procedure, the safety of waiting for men who would never believe what she had seen. Ahead stood the man she had chased through half of London, holding secrets she had spent three years trying to name. Beneath the station, in the breathing dark, something wearing her dead partner’s face knew her name. Quinn made her choice. She stepped off the platform and followed Tomás into the tunnel.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.182
leniency0.364
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.19% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2561
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"sweetly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"sweetly"
2"softly"
3"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
86.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2561
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
1
word"fractured"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"fluttered"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count1
5
word"velvet"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"fractured"
2"flickered"
3"fluttered"
4"pulsed"
5"velvet"
6"scanning"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences260
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences260
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences314
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2560
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions107
wordCount2198
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.73
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Harlow1
Quinn38
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Tomás30
Brewer1
Street2
Soho2
Mercer1
Morris9
Underground1
Veil1
Market4
Camden3
London4
Spanish1
Morris-thing1
Rain3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Harlow"
3"Quinn"
4"Herrera"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Tomás"
8"Morris"
9"Market"
10"Camden"
11"Morris-thing"
12"Rain"
places
0"Brewer"
1"Street"
2"Soho"
3"London"
4"Spanish"
globalScore0.636
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences168
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.391
wordCount2560
matches
0"not toward the exit but toward Quinn"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences314
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs177
mean14.46
std14.29
cv0.988
sampleLengths
043
131
211
351
410
538
627
713
84
98
1018
112
126
1322
142
1520
166
178
182
199
207
2110
2252
233
248
252
2616
276
2839
294
302
3133
3225
332
349
3510
3634
3747
384
3915
404
4132
4218
431
446
4548
4610
474
4844
4920
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences260
matches
0"been painted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs415
matches
0"wasn’t carrying"
1"were waiting"
2"was lying"
3"was coming"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences314
ratio0.003
matches
0"Behind the narrowing gap, Quinn saw movement—stalls, lanterns, people passing beneath brick arches."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2211
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"beside horse-drawn carts,"
adverbCount66
adverbRatio0.029850746268656716
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.005427408412483039
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences314
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences314
mean8.15
std5.33
cv0.654
sampleLengths
020
123
26
35
45
515
611
714
811
926
1010
116
129
1311
1412
1516
163
178
1813
194
208
215
227
236
242
256
2615
277
282
2920
306
318
322
339
343
354
3610
379
386
3913
409
417
428
433
448
452
4616
476
485
4916
47.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.31210191082802546
totalSentences314
uniqueOpeners98
56.26% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences237
matches
0"Then a voice, fractured by"
1"Somewhere below, a bell rang"
2"Then she saw Tomás."
3"Then alarm followed."
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount52
totalSentences237
matches
0"She recognized him before he"
1"He had his back to"
2"His shoulders tightened."
3"His right hand stopped halfway"
4"His gaze dropped to her"
5"His jaw flexed."
6"She saw him glance toward"
7"Her radio gave a thin"
8"He vaulted the bar, shoved"
9"She twisted free, caught the"
10"Her shoes struck water."
11"She thumbed her radio."
12"She chased him past shuttered"
13"Her coat dragged at her"
14"He ran with purpose."
15"They crossed into a narrower"
16"She rounded the vans in"
17"He kicked away from the"
18"She slammed it into gear"
19"She drove after it."
ratio0.219
57.05% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount191
totalSentences237
matches
0"The green neon sign above"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn stood beneath"
2"Soho glittered and seethed around"
3"Taxis hissed through standing water."
4"Umbrellas collided outside the pubs."
5"A bus exhaled white steam"
6"Quinn turned up the collar"
7"The bar’s warmth closed around"
8"London from another century stared"
9"Tomás Herrera sat at the"
10"She recognized him before he"
11"The scar along his left"
12"A Saint Christopher medallion rested"
13"He had his back to"
14"His shoulders tightened."
15"His right hand stopped halfway"
16"The room seemed to contract"
17"Tomás looked over his shoulder."
18"His gaze dropped to her"
19"His jaw flexed."
ratio0.806
42.19% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences237
matches
0"By the time Quinn reached"
1"Before Quinn could answer, the"
ratio0.008
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences92
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"A name written beside CCTV blind spots, missing persons, and statements that made no sense."
1"Her light caught advertisements for plays that had closed decades ago."
2"She had heard the name only once, whispered by an informant who had recanted everything the next day."
3"Goods lay arranged on velvet, tin trays, and bare stone: knives with rippling blades, bottles filled with moving shadows, teeth strung on silver wire, books bou…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"The eyeless child whispered (whisper)"
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leniency0.303
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.061
90.8527%