Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD5Z345MJ4BCB93T6ZXFXFJ

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Duration:
18.0s
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$0.000546
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You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air changed the moment they stepped through the gap between the standing stones, shifting from the crisp evening chill of Richmond Park to something warmer, thicker—like breathing in honeyed mist. Aurora caught Nyx's arm instinctively, her delivery bag swinging from her other hand. The Shade's form flickered at the sudden transition, their violet eyes dimming before flaring back to life. "Feels like... static," Nyx murmured, their voice carrying that same whisper-wind quality that always made Aurora's skin prickle. They reached out a hand, fingers passing through what should have been solid air. Instead, their hand met resistance—not physical, but something that made the hairs on their arms stand up. "The Veil's thin here." Isolde moved ahead without waiting for confirmation, her silver hair catching light that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once. She left no footprints on the moss-covered ground, which Aurora had already noticed was wrong. The moss itself pulsed with faint bioluminescence, tiny points of gold and blue that shifted like schools of fish beneath their feet. "This is..." Aurora stepped carefully, her boots sinking slightly into the spongy earth. The ground felt alive beneath her, breathing in time with something larger than themselves. "This doesn't look like Richmond Park anymore." "Time flows differently here," Isolde said, her pale lavender eyes reflecting the ambient glow. "What seems like minutes to you may be hours—or moments—outside." Aurora glanced back toward the standing stones, but they were already fading, becoming indistinct shadows in the shifting light. The trees had changed too, their bark silver-white and their leaves translucent, casting prismatic shadows that danced just beyond the edge of vision. "They're watching us," Nyx said quietly. Aurora followed their gaze upward. The canopy above twisted into impossible geometries, branches intersecting at angles that hurt to look at directly. Faces seemed to form in the wood grain—watching, waiting, curious. She gripped the Heartstone pendant beneath her shirt, feeling its familiar warmth spread through her chest. "It's beautiful," Isolde whispered, and there was genuine awe in her voice despite centuries of experience. "The Fae Grove exists between what was and what could be. Every step takes you further from what you know." They walked deeper, the path winding through groves where flowers bloomed in colors Aurora couldn't name. Some petals moved of their own accord, opening and closing like breathing. The air carried scents that triggered memories she'd forgotten—childhood summers, her mother's perfume, the taste of her first kiss. "Stop," Nyx said suddenly, pressing themselves against a tree whose trunk was made of crystallized starlight. "Do you hear that?" Aurora strained her ears. At first, there was only the usual sounds of their breathing and the soft crunch of moss underfoot. Then she caught it—a melody, almost imperceptible, like wind chimes made of glass and water. It seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere, wrapping around them like a gentle embrace. "It's the grove singing," Isolde said, her voice barely audible over the music. "It remembers every soul who has ever walked here." Aurora felt a tear trace down her cheek, though she wasn't sure why. The sensation was bittersweet, like remembering a dream she'd never had. She touched her face with trembling fingers. "This way," Isolde called, moving toward a clearing where the light pooled like liquid mercury. In the center stood a fountain, but instead of water, it flowed with liquid starlight. Fish made of pure light swam through the air above it, their scales leaving trails of color that lingered long after they'd passed. Aurora approached cautiously, mesmerized by the impossible beauty. The fish paused to regard her, their eyes holding depths of knowledge that made her dizzy. One dipped lower, its body casting shadows that formed words in a language she somehow understood: *Welcome home, child of both worlds.* She stumbled back, her heart hammering. "What did it say?" "Not all of us are meant to hear," Isolde replied, though her expression suggested otherwise. She knelt beside the fountain and cupped some of the starlight in her hands. It didn't wet her skin, but flowed through her fingers like smoke. "The Grove chooses who sees what." Nyx drifted closer, their shadow-form rippling as they examined the fountain's edge. "There are wards here. Old ones. Powerful ones. Someone didn't want certain people finding this place." "Or they wanted only the right people to find it." Aurora stood very still, watching the light-fish weave patterns in the air. Something about this place felt familiar, like a song she'd heard in a past life. Her fingers found the Heartstone again, and it pulsed in response—not just warmth now, but a rhythm, like a heartbeat syncing with her own. "Your pendant," Isolde said softly. "It's reacting to the Grove. To the magic here." Aurora looked down at the small crimson gem, its glow intensifying. "It's been doing that since we got close to the standing stones. I thought it was just... I don't know, nervousness?" "Artifacts from Hel don't respond to Fae magic," Nyx observed, their glowing eyes narrowed. "Unless... unless the Grove is more connected to Hel than we realized." The ground trembled beneath them, a low vibration that made the starlight fountain ripple. The light-fish scattered, their trails of color fading into the air like sighs. From somewhere beyond the trees came the sound of footsteps—too many to count, moving in perfect synchronization. "Visitors," Isolde said, though her voice carried an edge of wariness. "The Grove doesn't often receive uninvited guests." Aurora drew the Fae-forged blade from its sheath at her hip. The moonsteel felt cool even in the warm air, its edge humming with barely contained power. "How many?" "Enough to matter." Isolde rose gracefully, her expression unreadable. "But not enough to stop us, if we're clever." The footsteps grew louder, accompanied now by whispers that seemed to come from the trees themselves. Branches swayed despite the lack of wind, and the silver bark of the trees began to peel back, revealing faces carved into the wood—ancient, beautiful, and utterly alien. "They're the guardians," Isolde explained, though her voice held more uncertainty than usual. "Protectors of the Grove's secrets. They don't take kindly to outsiders." One of the faces spoke, its voice like rustling leaves: *"Why do you disturb the sleep of dreams?"* Aurora stepped forward, her hand never leaving the hilt of the blade. "We're not here to steal anything. We're looking for answers." *"All who enter the Grove seek something,"* the face replied. *"Some find what they seek. Others become part of what they sought."* Nyx shifted uncomfortably, their form becoming partially incorporeal. "That's typically how these situations escalate into violence." Isolde placed a hand on Aurora's shoulder. "The Grove tests those who enter. It shows them what they need to see, not what they want to see." The footsteps stopped just beyond the tree line. Figures emerged from the shadows—tall, willowy beings whose skin shimmered like oil on water. Their eyes were black mirrors that reflected nothing, and they moved with the fluid grace of creatures who had never needed to walk on solid ground. "We mean no harm," Aurora said, keeping her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her stomach. "We're trying to understand what's happening with the portals. With the Veil." One of the beings stepped forward, and Aurora felt the temperature drop several degrees. Its voice was like ice cracking: *"The Veil is wounded. It bleeds between worlds. Those who would mend it must first understand what breaks it."* The Heartstone burned against Aurora's chest, its crimson glow matching the rhythm of her pulse. She understood now—this place wasn't just a sanctuary or a hiding spot. It was a nexus, a crossroads where the boundaries between realms grew thin and permeable. And they were standing right at the center of it all.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"Aurora stepped carefully [carefully]"
1"Nyx said quietly [quietly]"
2"Nyx said suddenly [suddenly]"
3"Isolde said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.425
leniency0.85
rawRatio0.235
effectiveRatio0.2
73.36% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1314
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"cautiously"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
5
adverb"softly"
count1
6
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"slightly"
2"suddenly"
3"cautiously"
4"very"
5"softly"
6"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
20.09% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1314
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"whisper"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"familiar"
count2
5
word"warmth"
count2
6
word"crystallized"
count1
7
word"depths"
count1
8
word"trembled"
count1
9
word"footsteps"
count3
10
word"perfect"
count1
11
word"unreadable"
count1
12
word"shimmered"
count1
13
word"stomach"
count1
14
word"pulse"
count1
15
word"sanctuary"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"flickered"
2"whisper"
3"pulsed"
4"familiar"
5"warmth"
6"crystallized"
7"depths"
8"trembled"
9"footsteps"
10"perfect"
11"unreadable"
12"shimmered"
13"stomach"
14"pulse"
15"sanctuary"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences75
matches(empty)
47.62% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences75
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences97
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords52
totalWords1303
ratio0.04
matches
0"Welcome home, child of both worlds."
1"\"Why do you disturb the sleep of dreams?\""
2"\"All who enter the Grove seek something,\""
3"\"Some find what they seek. Others become part of what they sought.\""
4"\"The Veil is wounded. It bleeds between worlds. Those who would mend it must first understand what breaks it.\""
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
59.64% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions46
wordCount996
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.81
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Nyx7
Shade1
Aurora18
Heartstone3
Fae-forged1
One3
Isolde11
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Shade"
2"Aurora"
3"Heartstone"
4"One"
5"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
globalScore0.596
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences70
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"light that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once"
46.51% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.535
wordCount1303
matches
0"not physical, but something"
1"not just warmth now, but a rhythm, like a heartbeat syncing with her own"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
93.20% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean31.78
std15.13
cv0.476
sampleLengths
061
153
259
334
424
542
66
748
836
947
1020
1152
1222
1331
1453
1540
166
1710
1847
1928
2010
2151
2214
2332
2426
2544
2618
2729
2818
2944
3024
3118
3222
3322
3416
3527
3648
3729
3839
3942
4011
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences75
matches
0"was made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs179
matches
0"were already fading"
1"were standing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences97
ratio0.103
matches
0"The air changed the moment they stepped through the gap between the standing stones, shifting from the crisp evening chill of Richmond Park to something warmer, thicker—like breathing in honeyed mist."
1"Instead, their hand met resistance—not physical, but something that made the hairs on their arms stand up."
2"Faces seemed to form in the wood grain—watching, waiting, curious."
3"The air carried scents that triggered memories she'd forgotten—childhood summers, her mother's perfume, the taste of her first kiss."
4"Then she caught it—a melody, almost imperceptible, like wind chimes made of glass and water."
5"Her fingers found the Heartstone again, and it pulsed in response—not just warmth now, but a rhythm, like a heartbeat syncing with her own."
6"From somewhere beyond the trees came the sound of footsteps—too many to count, moving in perfect synchronization."
7"Branches swayed despite the lack of wind, and the silver bark of the trees began to peel back, revealing faces carved into the wood—ancient, beautiful, and utterly alien."
8"Figures emerged from the shadows—tall, willowy beings whose skin shimmered like oil on water."
9"She understood now—this place wasn't just a sanctuary or a hiding spot."
91.77% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1012
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.04940711462450593
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.014822134387351778
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences97
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences97
mean13.43
std5.56
cv0.414
sampleLengths
031
113
217
318
414
517
64
722
815
922
1013
1114
127
1314
1410
1519
1623
176
185
1917
2010
2116
2216
2320
2416
2512
2619
2716
284
294
3018
3115
3215
3313
349
3513
3611
377
3815
3915
4023
418
4216
4316
446
456
464
4715
4814
4912
70.45% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.4536082474226804
totalSentences97
uniqueOpeners44
88.89% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences75
matches
0"Instead, their hand met resistance—not"
1"Then she caught it—a melody,"
ratio0.027
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences75
matches
0"They reached out a hand,"
1"She left no footprints on"
2"She gripped the Heartstone pendant"
3"They walked deeper, the path"
4"It seemed to come from"
5"She touched her face with"
6"She stumbled back, her heart"
7"She knelt beside the fountain"
8"It didn't wet her skin,"
9"Her fingers found the Heartstone"
10"Their eyes were black mirrors"
11"Its voice was like ice"
12"She understood now—this place wasn't"
13"It was a nexus, a"
ratio0.187
20.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences75
matches
0"The air changed the moment"
1"Aurora caught Nyx's arm instinctively,"
2"The Shade's form flickered at"
3"Nyx murmured, their voice carrying"
4"They reached out a hand,"
5"Isolde moved ahead without waiting"
6"She left no footprints on"
7"The moss itself pulsed with"
8"Aurora stepped carefully, her boots"
9"The ground felt alive beneath"
10"Isolde said, her pale lavender"
11"Aurora glanced back toward the"
12"The trees had changed too,"
13"Nyx said quietly"
14"Aurora followed their gaze upward."
15"The canopy above twisted into"
16"Faces seemed to form in"
17"She gripped the Heartstone pendant"
18"Isolde whispered, and there was"
19"They walked deeper, the path"
ratio0.88
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences75
matches(empty)
ratio0
8.93% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Isolde moved ahead without waiting for confirmation, her silver hair catching light that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once."
1"The trees had changed too, their bark silver-white and their leaves translucent, casting prismatic shadows that danced just beyond the edge of vision."
2"The canopy above twisted into impossible geometries, branches intersecting at angles that hurt to look at directly."
3"The air carried scents that triggered memories she'd forgotten—childhood summers, her mother's perfume, the taste of her first kiss."
4"Fish made of pure light swam through the air above it, their scales leaving trails of color that lingered long after they'd passed."
5"The fish paused to regard her, their eyes holding depths of knowledge that made her dizzy."
6"One dipped lower, its body casting shadows that formed words in a language she somehow understood:"
7"The ground trembled beneath them, a low vibration that made the starlight fountain ripple."
8"Their eyes were black mirrors that reflected nothing, and they moved with the fluid grace of creatures who had never needed to walk on solid ground."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Aurora stepped carefully, her boots sinking slightly into the spongy earth"
1"Isolde said, her voice barely audible over the music"
2"Isolde replied, though her expression suggested otherwise"
3"Nyx observed, their glowing eyes narrowed"
4"Isolde said, though her voice carried an edge of wariness"
5"Isolde explained, though her voice held more uncertainty than usual"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx observed (observe)"
3"Isolde explained (explain)"
4"the faces spoke (speak)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.25
68.1819%