Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD60WBKXS43C2ZWS1020GZN

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25.6s
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$0.015187
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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The stones found them before they did. Rory had walked Richmond Park enough times to know this part of the woods wasn't supposed to exist. The path behind the oaks was supposed to peter out into bracken and mud and dog walkers' trash. Instead the oaks kept going, older than any oaks had any right to be in London, their trunks as wide as cars, their bark silvered with lichen that caught no light at all. "This is it," Nyx said, and their voice hit her ear wrong, like wind through a keyhole. Rory stopped with one hand on the roughest trunk. The bark was cold enough to bite. "You sure?" Nyx had gone solid enough to cast a shadow, which was always a bad sign. They stood at six-two and some change, a human shape cut out of the evening, their edges smoking faintly despite the still air. Where eyes should have been there were only two faint violet coals. When they looked at the circle of stones ahead, those coals narrowed. "The air is thin here," they whispered. "Like a scab." Beyond the last two oaks stood a ring of standing stones, half-swallowed by moss and root. They weren't the polite, National Trust kind of ancient. They leaned, listing inward like teeth. Between them the air shimmered. The Veil. Rory had only ever seen it in flashes before, when Nyx slipped, or when something with too many joints tried to push through behind the bins behind the Golden Empress. It was a heat-haze over cold ground, a wrongness her bright blue eyes wanted to slide off of. Now it hung solid between the stones, a curtain of faint, oily light. The pendant at her throat woke up. She'd tucked the Heartstone under her jumper out of habit. It was roughly the size of her thumbnail, deep crimson on a silver chain, always a little too warm. Now it pulsed, once, twice, heat blooming against her skin. "Portals," she muttered. "You didn't say it was a Hel portal." "It's not," Nyx said. "But it's near one. Or it remembers one. The places where the world is thin forget which side they thin toward." Rory pulled the stone out and let it sit over her coat. The crimson caught the shimmer and threw it back, a little fainter, a little redder. Her left wrist twisted as she did, and the small crescent scar there pulled white in the cold. Next to her, Nyx extended a hand that wasn't quite a hand. The shadow stretched, thinned, and then— "Don't," Rory said quickly. Nyx recoiled. "It will not hurt me." "Yeah, but if you go incorporeal and scout ahead we lose you for an hour and I have to explain to Silas why I'm late because my roommate dissolved. Stay solid for five minutes." A sound that might have been a laugh scraped out of them. "Five minutes." She nodded and stepped forward before she could think herself out of it. Her boot hit the line between the two largest stones. The world went quiet. Not silent. Quiet in the way a library is quiet after the doors close, as if the park itself had been muted. The traffic hum from the A3, the distant planes into Heathrow, the dog barks — all gone. In their place came other things: the sigh of wind through leaves that had no business still being green in December, the low drone of bees too big to be bees, the creak of those massive oaks leaning closer than they had a second ago. Rory's second foot landed and the light changed. They were in. The Grove wasn't large. It couldn't have been more than thirty meters across, and yet her eyes kept trying to make it bigger. The sky above wasn't London's flat winter gray, but not the warm amber Rory had glimpsed in dreams of Dymas either. It was pearlescent, bruised at the edges, as if sunset had gotten stuck. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in a riot that made no sense — snowdrops and cornflowers and things she had no names for, with petals like glass, all blooming at once. They opened as she brushed past, turning their faces to her, not the light. The air tasted sweet and metallic, like cut grass and old pennies. It was too warm. Sweat prickled under her hair — straight, black, shoulder-length, now sticking to her neck — and she shoved her hands into her coat pockets and found the other thing there. The blade Isolde had given her last spring, after the incident with the river-wraith. Moonsilver, leaf-shaped, slender enough to hide up a sleeve. Always cold, even through denim. Rory didn't draw it, but she wrapped her fingers around the hilt. The cold grounded her. "Time," Nyx whispered behind her, and this time their voice was stretched thin. "Rory, feel it." She did. Her phone, dead already in her pocket, had read 15:42 when they'd left the car park. That had been ten minutes ago. Now the shadows the standing stones threw were long the wrong way, as if the sun had moved hours while they took two steps. An hour inside could be minutes or days outside. Isolde's warning, delivered months ago in that maddening riddle-speak. The unease that had been sitting low in her belly since they'd crossed the stones sharpened. This place was listening. "It's bigger than a pocket," she said, more to herself. "It's a whole second—" "Breathe," Nyx said. Their solid form wavered at the edge, like ink in water. They were struggling to stay anchored. "You think too loud here." They moved deeper, because there was nowhere else to go. The flowers gave underfoot and sprang back, leaving no trace. She looked back and saw her boot prints already gone. Then she looked at Nyx and saw they left none at all, and remembered: Isolde leaves no footprints when she walks. As if summoned by the thought, the woman was simply there. Rory hadn't seen her arrive. One blink the clearing beyond the flowers was empty but for a single hawthorn tree twisted in the center, its bark whorled with faces; the next, a figure stood beneath it. Five-five at most, barefoot despite the cold that wasn't cold, in a dress that looked spun from cobwebs and old light. Hair silver reaching her waist, skin like river stone, ethereal and ageless in a way that made Rory's twenty-five years feel like a tantrum. Eyes pale lavender, catching that stuck sunset and throwing it back. Isolde Varga. "Little Carter who carries winter and summer at her throat," Isolde said, and her voice had the cadence of a story being told backward. Her gaze flicked to Rory's pendant, pulsing faintly, then to the dagger-cold weight in Rory's pocket, then to Nyx. "And the shadow who borrowed a name. You step early. The seam is still stitched." Nyx inclined their head, a ripple going through them. "Seer." Rory swallowed. Isolde never answered straight. Fae compulsion, couldn't lie but could mislead seven ways to Sunday. That was fine. Rory was good at puzzles. "Is it supposed to be like this?" She gestured at the shimmer they'd come through, still visible behind them, still wrong. "The Veil's you know — extra shiny. It's not solstice for another week." "When the year turns, the skin grows thin," Isolde said, smiling, and it was kind and terrible. "You ask if the door is louder because many hands knock. I cannot say no." So yes. Rory's mind fitted it together, cool and fast the way it always did when she stopped panicking. The winter solstice weakens the Veil. Someone — or something — was using that. The Heartstone only pulsed near a Hel portal. If it was pulsing here, in a Fae-touched place— "Two doors sharing one frame," she said out loud. Isolde's lavender eyes brightened. "Clever little knife. The hungry place presses close. Dymas breathes amber through the keyhole." Dymas. Gluttony. Prince Belphegor's realm of endless feasts and vineyards that stretched for hell-miles. Belphegor didn't usually bother with Fae pockets unless he was shopping. "Why here?" Rory asked. "Because what is hidden is sweetest to steal," Isolde said, as if that explained everything. She stepped — no, drifted — closer, and the wildflowers bent away from her ankles. "Will you look, Aurora Carter? Will you see what grows when two soils mix?" She held out a hand. Not to Rory. To the hawthorn. Rory followed the gesture and finally saw what the tree was holding. The hawthorn's trunk split halfway up, bark peeling back like lips, and inside the hollow wasn't wood. It was light, warm amber light, the exact color described in stories about Dymasian sunsets. It smelled of roast meat and ripe peaches and rot, sweet and cloying. Through that light Rory could see, as through a dirty window, a long table laden with fruit that burst as it fell, and far beyond that, distant orchards where shapes moved, harvesting. A Hel portal, growing like a canker inside a Fae tree, inside Richmond Park, inside Earth. The pendant against her chest burned. Nyx hissed, a sound like wind snapping a sail. "It's rooting." "And it will fruit," Isolde said softly, and for the first time the riddle left her voice. "Unless cut." Rory's hand was already out of her pocket. The Fae-forged blade slid free, moonsilver cold enough to make her scar ache. In the pearlescent light of the grove it was faintly luminescent, humming against the amber glow of the rift. It could cut through magical wards. Particularly effective against demons. Isolde's gift, given for a reason Rory only now understood. The wonder of the place hadn't gone — the impossible flowers, the time that stuttered, the beautiful, awful oldness of it — but the unease had sharpened into something else, something clean and useful. Fear, with a job to do. "Rory," Nyx whispered, and they were solid again, fully, towering at her shoulder, violet eyes fixed on the breathing light in the tree. "If you cut it here, in the between-place, I do not know what will happen to time." She looked at Isolde, who watched her with no footprints and too many years. "If I don't cut it," Rory said, "I know what happens to London." Isolde smiled again, but this time it was almost human. "Then cut, little Carter," she said. "Cut cleverly." Rory took a breath of sweet, metallic air and stepped toward the tree, blade raised, the Heartstone blazing against her skin like a second heart.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
94.74% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Rory said quickly [quickly]"
1"Isolde said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.474
leniency0.947
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.105
94.31% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1756
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
82.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1756
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"shimmered"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"wavered"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"shimmered"
1"pulsed"
2"wavered"
3"flicked"
4"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences132
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences132
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences152
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1767
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions84
wordCount1504
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity1.53
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
London2
Rory23
National1
Trust1
Veil2
Nyx13
Golden1
Empress1
Heartstone3
Heathrow1
December1
Grove1
Dymas2
Isolde13
Varga1
Sunday1
Hel2
Fae-touched1
Belphegor2
Fae5
Dymasian1
Earth1
Fae-forged1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Heartstone"
3"Isolde"
4"Belphegor"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Heathrow"
4"December"
5"Sunday"
6"Hel"
7"Fae-touched"
8"Fae"
9"Earth"
globalScore0.735
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences96
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite a hand"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1767
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences152
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean27.18
std22.32
cv0.821
sampleLengths
07
169
217
318
462
510
636
72
848
913
107
1139
1211
1325
1445
1518
164
177
1834
1914
2023
214
2284
238
243
25101
2646
2744
2816
2966
3020
3114
3225
3351
3411
3536
3656
372
3858
3910
4025
4134
4232
4350
449
4518
4625
474
4844
4911
91.97% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences132
matches
0"was supposed"
1"been muted"
2"was stretched"
3"been ten"
4"being told"
46.74% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs261
matches
0"was listening"
1"were struggling"
2"was using"
3"was pulsing"
4"was shopping"
5"was holding"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences152
ratio0.059
matches
0"The shadow stretched, thinned, and then—"
1"The traffic hum from the A3, the distant planes into Heathrow, the dog barks — all gone."
2"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in a riot that made no sense — snowdrops and cornflowers and things she had no names for, with petals like glass, all blooming at once."
3"Sweat prickled under her hair — straight, black, shoulder-length, now sticking to her neck — and she shoved her hands into her coat pockets and found the other thing there."
4"One blink the clearing beyond the flowers was empty but for a single hawthorn tree twisted in the center, its bark whorled with faces; the next, a figure stood beneath it."
5"Someone — or something — was using that."
6"If it was pulsing here, in a Fae-touched place—"
7"She stepped — no, drifted — closer, and the wildflowers bent away from her ankles."
8"The wonder of the place hadn't gone — the impossible flowers, the time that stuttered, the beautiful, awful oldness of it — but the unease had sharpened into something else, something clean and useful."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount230
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount5
adverbRatio0.021739130434782608
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.004347826086956522
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences152
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences152
mean11.63
std8.17
cv0.703
sampleLengths
07
118
218
333
417
59
67
72
815
923
1012
1112
127
133
1416
159
166
175
182
1930
2018
2113
227
2310
2419
2510
263
278
284
2921
3012
3115
3218
3312
346
354
362
375
3834
3912
402
4113
4210
434
442
4520
4617
4745
488
493
68.20% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.42105263157894735
totalSentences152
uniqueOpeners64
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences116
matches
0"Instead the oaks kept going,"
1"Always cold, even through denim."
2"Then she looked at Nyx"
3"Particularly effective against demons."
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences116
matches
0"They stood at six-two and"
1"They weren't the polite, National"
2"They leaned, listing inward like"
3"It was a heat-haze over"
4"She'd tucked the Heartstone under"
5"It was roughly the size"
6"Her left wrist twisted as"
7"She nodded and stepped forward"
8"Her boot hit the line"
9"They were in."
10"It couldn't have been more"
11"It was pearlescent, bruised at"
12"They opened as she brushed"
13"It was too warm."
14"Her phone, dead already in"
15"she said, more to herself"
16"Their solid form wavered at"
17"They were struggling to stay"
18"They moved deeper, because there"
19"She looked back and saw"
ratio0.25
63.45% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences116
matches
0"The stones found them before"
1"Rory had walked Richmond Park"
2"The path behind the oaks"
3"Nyx said, and their voice"
4"Rory stopped with one hand"
5"The bark was cold enough"
6"Nyx had gone solid enough"
7"They stood at six-two and"
8"They weren't the polite, National"
9"They leaned, listing inward like"
10"Rory had only ever seen"
11"It was a heat-haze over"
12"The pendant at her throat"
13"She'd tucked the Heartstone under"
14"It was roughly the size"
15"Rory pulled the stone out"
16"The crimson caught the shimmer"
17"Her left wrist twisted as"
18"The shadow stretched, thinned, and"
19"Rory said quickly"
ratio0.793
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount6
totalSentences116
matches
0"Now it hung solid between"
1"Now it pulsed, once, twice,"
2"Now the shadows the standing"
3"As if summoned by the"
4"If it was pulsing here,"
5"To the hawthorn."
ratio0.052
78.89% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences67
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Instead the oaks kept going, older than any oaks had any right to be in London, their trunks as wide as cars, their bark silvered with lichen that caught no lig…"
1"Five-five at most, barefoot despite the cold that wasn't cold, in a dress that looked spun from cobwebs and old light."
2"Hair silver reaching her waist, skin like river stone, ethereal and ageless in a way that made Rory's twenty-five years feel like a tantrum."
3"Prince Belphegor's realm of endless feasts and vineyards that stretched for hell-miles."
4"Through that light Rory could see, as through a dirty window, a long table laden with fruit that burst as it fell, and far beyond that, distant orchards where s…"
5"The wonder of the place hadn't gone — the impossible flowers, the time that stuttered, the beautiful, awful oldness of it — but the unease had sharpened into so…"
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she said, more to herself"
1"Isolde said, as if that explained everything"
44.74% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
2"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
3"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.447
leniency0.895
rawRatio0.235
effectiveRatio0.211
85.6243%