Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD61R8166H8JK458P136W8M

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Duration:
27.7s
Cost:
$0.000456
Provider:
Poolside

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open with a groan that cut through the silence like a blade. Lucien Moreau filled the doorway, his platinum hair catching whatever feeble light filtered through the curtains, his tailored charcoal suit immaculate despite the rain streaking the windows. Aurora looked up from the stack of books she’d been pretending to read, her bright blue eyes narrowing. “You didn’t answer the door,” she said, voice low. “Didn’t answer *your* door.” He stepped inside, ivory cane tapping a staccato rhythm against the wooden floorboards. The smell of sandalwood and something darker—something wicked—clung to him. “Three knocks. Still no answer. Ptolemy looked after you, didn’t he?” The tabby cat emerged from behind a bookshelf, tail twitching, offering a cautious meow. Aurora pushed her glasses up her nose, the gesture automatic. “You could’ve called.” “I did. Twice. You didn’t return them.” He closed the distance between them, stopping just shy of arm’s reach. His heterochromatic gaze—amber and black like twin flames—held hers. “There are matters that can’t wait.” “Matters?” She arched a brow, the candlelight flickering across the crescent scar on her left wrist. “Since when do you involve me in your little… whatever this is?” “Since you’re better at it than most.” He tilted his head, studying her. “Since you once saved my life in Prague. Since you still owe me for that favour with the Prague syndicate.” Aurora’s fingers tightened around the book she’d been holding—a leather-bound tome on Celtic runes. “That was three years ago. And I didn’t save your life. You nearly died because you couldn’t resist picking a fight with a vampire in a cemetery.” “Clever how I drew him in, wasn’t it?” His smile was sharp, edged with something like regret. “You talked him down while I made my escape. Very clever.” She set the book down. “You always were insufferable.” “And you always were reckless.” He took another step closer. The air between them crackled, not with static electricity but with something more volatile. “But reckless in the way that makes you useful.” The kettle began to whistle from the kitchenette. Lucien’s gloved hand drifted to his cane, fingers curling around the hidden blade. Aurora’s shoulders relaxed, just slightly. She knew that gesture—it meant he was nervous. Or angry. Or both. “Tea?” she asked, too casually. “Black. No sugar.” “I thought you said I took too much sugar.” “I said you took too much sugar in your coffee.” She laughed, nervous and bright. “You always did remember everything.” “Do I?” He glanced past her toward the window, where rain blurred the street into a watercolour mess. “Do you remember what I said the night before you left London?” Aurora’s laugh died. “No.” “You said you’d never forget the way I tasted.” Her breath hitched. The memory clawed its way up from somewhere deep, painful and sweet. They’d been together once, years ago—before the demon politics, before the blood debts, before she’d run from everything and everyone. Before she’d decided that loving him was too dangerous. “You were drunk,” she whispered. “Were you?” He raised an eyebrow, that crooked smile returning. “Or were you just honest for once?” The kettle screamed its final note. Aurora moved to the counter, her back to him, and began pouring two cups. The ritual steadied her. They’d done this dance a hundred times—tea, the way she took it, the way he never seemed to remember until he wanted her to. “It’s about the girl,” he said when she handed him his cup. The steam curled between them, carrying the scent of bergamot and something else—ozone, like after lightning strikes. “The one from Manchester. Eliza Voss. She’s gone missing.” Aurora’s spoon clinked against the saucer. “Why do you think I can help?” “Because you’re good at finding people who don’t want to be found.” He took a sip, watching her reaction. “Because you once tracked a smuggler through three counties using nothing but his favourite brand of chocolate. Because you’re the only one who can read the symbols she was last seen scribbling.” She stared into her cup, dark liquid swirling like storm clouds. “And if I say no?” “Then I’ll drag your sister’s name through the mud myself.” His voice dropped to a whisper. “Again.” The scar on her wrist pulsed, a phantom ache from a childhood accident she’d never fully recovered from. Pain. Loss. Guilt. All wrapped up in the same tight knot in her chest. “It’s not just about Eliza,” she said finally. “It’s about the circle. The one they’re trying to rebuild.” Lucien’s fingers tightened on his cane. “Avaros is stirring. And they’ve found a willing human conduit.” She set her cup down with deliberate care. “Where?” “Southwark. An old textile mill. They say the girl was seen there three nights ago.” Aurora pulled her cardigan tighter around her shoulders. “I’ll go.” “Don’t.” He stood, moving to the window. Rain streaked the glass like tears. “You’ll get yourself killed.” “I’ve had practice.” “With a gun, not demons.” He turned, and for a moment she saw something raw in his expression—fear, maybe, or the ghost of the boy who’d first fallen in love with fire. “They’re not just summoning. They’re unraveling. The veil between realms is thinning, Aurora. And if they succeed…” “We all burn.” He nodded, slow and solemn. “Especially you.” Her breath caught. “What do you mean?” He reached into his jacket pocket, pulling out a small silver locket. When she was a child, she’d found it in her mother’s drawer, polished to a shine, but it had never been hers. Now it hung heavy in his palm. “Your mother gave this to me the night she died,” he said. “Before the demons came. Before they took her from you.” The world tilted. She remembered the funeral, the grey suit, the condolence flowers that wilted before the service ended. She remembered her father’s grief, her brother’s silence. She remembered nothing about a locket. “It’s a key,” he continued. “To the Sanctuary. A place where humans like us—” his voice cracked—“can hide. But it’s not enough anymore. They need the bloodline. Your blood. To open the door permanently.” Aurora’s hand moved to her pocket, to the small knife she always carried. “They’ve been lying to me this whole time.” “They lied to everyone.” He closed his fingers around the locket. “Including me.” Outside, thunder rolled, and the lights in Eva’s flat flickered. Ptolemy began to purr, a low rumble that matched the storm. “Why now?” she asked. “Because they know you’re coming back.” He turned back to her, those impossible eyes searching hers. “And they know you’re the only one who can stop them.” She should have pulled away. She should have told him to leave. Should have reminded herself that some doors, once opened, could never be closed again. Instead, she reached out and took the locket. It was warm against her skin, humming with something alive and hungry. “Then let’s go burn them all down.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said finally [finally]"
1"He turned back [back]"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.361
leniency0.721
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.066
91.47% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1172
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
61.60% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1172
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"eyebrow"
count1
2
word"dance"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count1
5
word"unraveling"
count1
6
word"sanctuary"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"eyebrow"
2"dance"
3"whisper"
4"pulsed"
5"unraveling"
6"sanctuary"
7"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences78
matches
0"was nervous"
1"n in love"
87.91% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences78
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences116
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1162
ratio0.001
matches
0"your"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
87.76% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions16
wordCount723
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.24
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
Aurora9
Celtic1
Lucien3
Rain1
Eva1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Aurora"
2"Celtic"
3"Lucien"
4"Rain"
5"Eva"
places(empty)
globalScore0.878
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like regret"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.861
wordCount1162
matches
0"not with static electricity but with something more volatile"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences116
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean21.92
std14.57
cv0.665
sampleLengths
060
19
238
327
434
528
633
741
828
99
1033
1138
125
133
149
1510
1610
1730
184
199
2044
215
2217
2348
2438
2513
2651
2716
2817
2932
3018
3116
329
3315
3410
3517
363
3749
383
397
407
4141
4222
4333
4434
4521
4613
4721
484
4927
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs137
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences116
ratio0.078
matches
0"The smell of sandalwood and something darker—something wicked—clung to him."
1"His heterochromatic gaze—amber and black like twin flames—held hers."
2"Aurora’s fingers tightened around the book she’d been holding—a leather-bound tome on Celtic runes."
3"She knew that gesture—it meant he was nervous."
4"They’d been together once, years ago—before the demon politics, before the blood debts, before she’d run from everything and everyone."
5"They’d done this dance a hundred times—tea, the way she took it, the way he never seemed to remember until he wanted her to."
6"The steam curled between them, carrying the scent of bergamot and something else—ozone, like after lightning strikes."
7"“With a gun, not demons.” He turned, and for a moment she saw something raw in his expression—fear, maybe, or the ghost of the boy who’d first fallen in love with fire."
8"“To the Sanctuary. A place where humans like us—” his voice cracked—“can hide. But it’s not enough anymore. They need the bloodline. Your blood. To open the door permanently.”"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount661
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.02723146747352496
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.007564296520423601
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences116
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences116
mean10.02
std6.66
cv0.665
sampleLengths
015
127
218
39
417
510
611
714
810
93
1019
119
126
1316
1412
1513
1620
1714
1827
1917
2011
215
224
2310
2414
259
268
2713
285
298
302
312
325
333
349
3510
365
375
3818
3912
403
411
429
433
4412
4520
469
475
4810
497
65.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.45689655172413796
totalSentences116
uniqueOpeners53
96.62% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences69
matches
0"All wrapped up in the"
1"Instead, she reached out and"
ratio0.029
5.51% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences69
matches
0"she said, voice low"
1"He stepped inside, ivory cane"
2"He closed the distance between"
3"His heterochromatic gaze—amber and black"
4"She arched a brow, the"
5"He tilted his head, studying"
6"His smile was sharp, edged"
7"She set the book down."
8"He took another step closer"
9"She knew that gesture—it meant"
10"she asked, too casually"
11"She laughed, nervous and bright."
12"He glanced past her toward"
13"Her breath hitched."
14"They’d been together once, years"
15"He raised an eyebrow, that"
16"They’d done this dance a"
17"he said when she handed"
18"He took a sip, watching"
19"She stared into her cup,"
ratio0.536
10.72% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences69
matches
0"The door swung open with"
1"Lucien Moreau filled the doorway,"
2"Aurora looked up from the"
3"she said, voice low"
4"He stepped inside, ivory cane"
5"The smell of sandalwood and"
6"The tabby cat emerged from"
7"Aurora pushed her glasses up"
8"He closed the distance between"
9"His heterochromatic gaze—amber and black"
10"She arched a brow, the"
11"He tilted his head, studying"
12"Aurora’s fingers tightened around the"
13"His smile was sharp, edged"
14"She set the book down."
15"He took another step closer"
16"The air between them crackled,"
17"The kettle began to whistle"
18"Lucien’s gloved hand drifted to"
19"Aurora’s shoulders relaxed, just slightly."
ratio0.899
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences69
matches
0"Before she’d decided that loving"
1"Now it hung heavy in"
ratio0.029
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she said, voice low"
1"He turned back, those impossible eyes searching hers"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"he continued (continue)"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.131
leniency0.262
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.066
86.2314%