Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD66XE2YKESVA0EGY92Y9RE

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Duration:
11.2s
Cost:
$0.000368
Provider:
Poolside

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bouncer’s hand hovered near his sceptical nostrils. “Twenty years, miss. You sure?” Aurora didn’t look up from the ledger. Her pen hovered above the final entry, the ink still wet. The bar’s green neon sign buzzed like a dying fly above her head, casting a sickly glow across her face. She’d been here since dusk, restocking bottles, wiping down the scarred oak bar until her fingers cramped. The scar on her left wrist—a pale crescent from childhood—ached when she flexed her hand, a reminder of the fire that had taken her parents and left her with nothing but a lawyer’s briefcase and a city full of strangers. “Thirty,” she said, not turning. “Thirty years since we last spoke.” The woman in the leather jacket stepped closer, her polished boots clicking against the sticky floorboards. The collar of her coat was too high, the gold buttons too ostentatious for a casual drink. Aurora’s pen tapped the ledger once—*tap*—then stilled. “You’re thinner,” the woman said. Aurora finally looked up. The face staring back at her from across the bar was familiar, yet wrong. The eyes were the same—hazel, flecked with gold—but the jaw was sharper, the posture straighter. The woman’s hair, once a messy chestnut bob, was now a sleek cascade of auburn, threaded with silver. A signet ring glinted on her right hand. “Eva,” Aurora breathed. “Laila,” she corrected, voice low. “You always hated Rory.” The words landed like a slap. Aurora’s hand drifted to the scar, unconsciously. “You changed your name.” “You did.” Eva’s lips curved into something almost a smile. “Still hiding behind a delivery job, I see.” Aurora’s jaw tightened. She closed the ledger with a snap. “You’re not supposed to be here.” “I’m here to warn you.” Eva slid onto the barstool beside her, the wood creaking. “The Carters. They’re looking for you.” Aurora’s fingers twitched toward the concealed knife at her belt. “What about Brendan?” “Brendan’s dead.” A pause. “Buried in Prague. His name’s been scrubbed from the records.” The words hit like a blow. Aurora’s knees nearly buckled. She gripped the bar, her knuckles whitening. “Why?” “Because he knew.” Eva’s voice dropped to a whisper. “He knew what you saw that night. What you *did*.” Aurora’s vision blurred. She remembered—flashes of fire, sirens, the judge’s gavel crashing down. Her father’s blood on her hands, the way she’d vomited in the alley behind the courthouse. She’d been seventeen, amnesiac and shaking, with a lawyer’s briefcase full of money and a scar that wouldn’t heal. “You were supposed to vanish,” Aurora said. “I vanished and became someone useful.” Eva’s gloved hand slid into her coat pocket. “Someone who can make people disappear.” The jukebox crackled to life—a scratchy rendition of *London Bridge*—and the door chimed. A customer shuffled in, slurring toward the bathroom. Eva sighed, pulling her coat tighter. “You should go,” Aurora said. “I came to give you a choice.” Eva leaned in, her perfume sharp with bergamot and something metallic. “Walk away now, or help me bury a ghost.” Aurora’s hand found the knife again. “What ghost?” “The one you left behind.” Outside, rain began to patter against the windows. Inside, the bar’s green light flickered, casting the two women into shadow. “You’re lying,” Aurora said. Eva laughed, low and bitter. “Try me.” She pressed something into Aurora’s palm—a photograph, yellowed with age. Two people, arms around each other, grinning in front of the Old Library. One wore a wedding ring. “That’s not possible,” Aurora whispered. “She’s in the next room.” Eva’s smile was a knife slash. “The one you swore never to speak of again.” The door swung shut. The jukebox died. Aurora stared at the photograph, her breath fogging the air between them. “Tell me what happened to Jennifer.” Eva’s hand drifted to her pocket. The signet ring caught the light. “It’s time you remembered,” she said. And then the knife was at Aurora’s throat, so close she could count the veins in Eva’s wrist. “Or,” Eva murmured, “I’ll make sure you never deliver another order.” The first drop of rain hit the window. Aurora’s hand trembled. “Why now?” “Because the Carters are coming tonight.” Eva’s teeth grazed Aurora’s earlobe. “And this time, they’re not leaving empty-handed.” The knife slid deeper. “Help me,” Eva breathed. “Or die with her.” Aurora’s fingers curled around the photograph, her other hand sliding under Eva’s coat, fingers finding the gun hidden there. The gun clicked. Eva’s smile didn’t falter. “Choice,” she said. The bar’s lights flickered again. Somewhere, a clock struck nine.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.463
leniency0.927
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount763
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.68% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount763
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"reminder"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"whisper"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count2
4
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"reminder"
1"familiar"
2"whisper"
3"flickered"
4"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences70
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences90
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords4
totalWords756
ratio0.005
matches
0"tap"
1"did"
2"London Bridge"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount571
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity3.5
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora20
Eva15
Two1
Old1
Library1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
places
0"Old"
1"Library"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences42
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount756
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences90
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean14.54
std16.05
cv1.104
sampleLengths
013
195
211
340
45
54
655
73
89
913
104
1118
1216
1321
1413
1514
1617
171
1819
1948
207
2120
2227
235
2427
258
265
2720
284
2935
305
3120
327
3312
346
356
366
376
3818
3911
408
413
422
4318
444
458
4619
473
484
493
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"been seventeen"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs104
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences90
ratio0.067
matches
0"The scar on her left wrist—a pale crescent from childhood—ached when she flexed her hand, a reminder of the fire that had taken her parents and left her with nothing but a lawyer’s briefcase and a city full of strangers."
1"Aurora’s pen tapped the ledger once—*tap*—then stilled."
2"The eyes were the same—hazel, flecked with gold—but the jaw was sharper, the posture straighter."
3"She remembered—flashes of fire, sirens, the judge’s gavel crashing down."
4"The jukebox crackled to life—a scratchy rendition of *London Bridge*—and the door chimed."
5"“Try me.” She pressed something into Aurora’s palm—a photograph, yellowed with age."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount578
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.031141868512110725
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.00865051903114187
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences90
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences90
mean8.4
std5.74
cv0.683
sampleLengths
08
15
27
311
420
517
640
75
86
916
1017
117
125
134
1414
1515
1618
178
183
195
204
216
227
234
2410
258
263
277
286
2915
306
3110
323
334
3410
356
364
377
381
399
4010
413
4210
4316
4419
457
4614
476
4813
498
53.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.36666666666666664
totalSentences90
uniqueOpeners33
55.56% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences60
matches
0"Somewhere, a clock struck nine."
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount10
totalSentences60
matches
0"Her pen hovered above the"
1"She’d been here since dusk,"
2"she said, not turning"
3"she corrected, voice low"
4"She closed the ledger with"
5"She gripped the bar, her"
6"She remembered—flashes of fire, sirens,"
7"Her father’s blood on her"
8"She’d been seventeen, amnesiac and"
9"She pressed something into Aurora’s"
ratio0.167
10.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences60
matches
0"The bouncer’s hand hovered near"
1"Aurora didn’t look up from"
2"Her pen hovered above the"
3"The bar’s green neon sign"
4"She’d been here since dusk,"
5"The scar on her left"
6"she said, not turning"
7"The woman in the leather"
8"The collar of her coat"
9"Aurora’s pen tapped the ledger"
10"the woman said"
11"Aurora finally looked up."
12"The face staring back at"
13"The eyes were the same—hazel,"
14"The woman’s hair, once a"
15"A signet ring glinted on"
16"she corrected, voice low"
17"The words landed like a"
18"Aurora’s hand drifted to the"
19"Eva’s lips curved into something"
ratio0.9
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences60
matches(empty)
ratio0
67.67% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences19
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The scar on her left wrist—a pale crescent from childhood—ached when she flexed her hand, a reminder of the fire that had taken her parents and left her with no…"
1"She’d been seventeen, amnesiac and shaking, with a lawyer’s briefcase full of money and a scar that wouldn’t heal."
19.74% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she said, not turning"
1"she corrected, voice low"
2"Eva slid, the wood creaking"
3"Eva leaned in, her perfume sharp with bergamot and something metallic"
3.66% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Aurora breathed (breathe)"
1"she corrected (correct)"
2"She pressed (press)"
3"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
4"Eva murmured (murmur)"
5"Eva breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.317
leniency0.634
rawRatio0.462
effectiveRatio0.293
75.6878%