Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD6AGZ81ZTV7WKRVRXF3C1X

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
She had been to Richmond Park a hundred times before, cutting through it on her bike with insulated bags of Golden Empress takeaway strapped to her back, but she had never seen the stones. "You're sure this is it?" Rory asked. The three of them stood at the edge of a dense thicket of hawthorn that hadn't been there a moment ago. Nyx rippled beside her, their tall form compressed to fit between two oaks, edges bleeding into the afternoon shade. When they spoke, it was like wind moving through dry leaves right against her ear. "The air is thin here," they whispered. "Look harder." Isolde Varga was already ahead of them, her bare feet silent on the leaf litter. True to everything Rory had heard, she left no prints at all, not even a bent blade of grass. Her silver hair caught what little light came through the canopy and seemed to make its own. "To enter you must be invited. To be invited you must see," Isolde said, not looking back. Her pale lavender eyes flicked to Rory. "You see, don't you, little barrister's daughter?" Rory frowned. The thicket was a thicket. And then it wasn't. If she relaxed her focus, the way you did when you were trying to see one of those optical illusion posters, there was a shimmer. A faint distortion in the air between two ancient oaks, like heat haze over summer tarmac, except the air was cold enough to see her breath. The Veil. She'd read about it, heard Nyx talk around it in their oblique way, but she'd never actually seen it. There was a pulse against her sternum. Rory's hand went automatically to the chain at her neck. The Heartstone Pendant was warm under her t-shirt, its deep crimson beating slow and heavy, roughly the size of her thumbnail but suddenly impossible to ignore. It had pulsed before, near the arches under Waterloo, near Silas' cellar. Hel places. Portal places. "It's not Hel," she said quietly, more to herself. "Is it?" "Opposite direction," Nyx whispered. "But all doors are built from the same wood." Isolde smiled, and that was answer enough. She stepped forward into the shimmer and vanished. The absence of her was startling. One second the Half-Fae was there, ethereal and ageless in her simple undyed dress, the next there was only empty air and the faint scent of wildflowers where there should have been rot. Nyx extended a hand made of solidified shadow. Rory could see the faint violet glow of their eyes inside the hood of darkness they wore as a face. "Together?" they asked. Rory's left wrist twinged where the small crescent-shaped scar pulled. Old childhood accident. She nodded and took it. Their hand was cold in a way that went past skin. She stepped through with them. The world folded. It wasn't a tearing or a flash. It was like ducking under the surface of a pond and coming up in a different summer. Sound changed first. The distant hum of the A3, the dogs barking, the jays shouting in Richmond — all of it cut off as if someone had shut a door. In its place came a low, live quiet, full of insect noise and wind in leaves that were too green. Light came second. The park had been in late October, the trees stripping down, sky a flat English grey. Here the sky was not a sky at all, but a vault of warm amber light filtered through leaves that had no business being that color. It wasn't Dymas, not yet — she remembered the descriptions of Belphegor's endless vineyards and the smell of roasting meat that never stopped — but it wasn't Earth either. She was standing in a clearing. The ancient oak standing stones marked the boundary in a loose, imperfect circle, each one twice as tall as her and covered in lichen that glowed faintly at the edges. Inside the circle, wildflowers bloomed year-round, and the codex had not been exaggerating. Blues and whites and furious yellows crowded ankle-high, impossibly vivid, each one open despite the lack of direct sun. The air was warm against her cheeks and smelled like honey and turned earth and something sharper, like ozone before a storm. "Oh," Rory breathed. Isolde was waiting a few paces in, her feet still hovering a hair above the moss. "You feel it dragging," she said, and it wasn't a question. It was a riddle spoken plain. "One step out of time." Her phone was in her delivery jacket pocket. She pulled it out. No signal. The clock read 15:42, then flickered to 15:41, then to 03:19, then went black. Nyx released her hand and expanded, stretching up to their full approximate six-two, their silhouette less human now that there were so many shadows to draw from. Their form drank the amber light. "Time moves differently," Nyx said, their whisper-voice threaded with something like awe. "An hour inside can be—" They tilted their head, listening. "Minutes. Or days. The Grove is breathing slowly today." Rory took a careful step. The moss under her battered trainers sank and sprang back. It was impossibly soft. As she walked deeper, the wildflowers brushed her shins and did not break, bending and then righting themselves. It should have been peaceful. It wasn't. The further in they went, the more the clearing revealed that it was not empty. Half-buried in the moss and flowers were things that didn't belong. A rusted Roman gladius. A child's plastic action figure, its colors still bright. A whole, perfect pocket watch on a silver chain, ticking loudly despite being open to the elements. A pair of boots, laces still tied. People had been here. People had left things. Or hadn't left at all. "The grove keeps what it is given," Isolde said. She knelt beside the wildflowers and did not touch them. "And what is not freely given, it keeps anyway, for a time. Look." She pointed to the center of the grove, where the amber light pooled thickest. A pool of water so still it didn't look like water at all, more like polished glass set into the earth. And hanging low over it, from branches that didn't seem connected to any tree, were what looked at first like lanterns. They were fruit. Translucent, apple-sized, each one glowing with a faint inner light not unlike the Heartstone at her chest. The pendant was no longer pulsing hot. It had gone cold and quiet, as if holding its breath. "What are they?" Rory asked. Her voice sounded too loud. "Memories," Isolde said. "Possibilities. Promises the forest overheard. Choose, and choose poorly, if you like. The Fae are fond of poor choices elegantly made." Nyx drifted closer to the pool. Where their shadow fell, the moss paled. "She laughs," they whispered, staring into the water. "Aldric? No. Nyx. I am Nyx." Rory moved to them quickly, her cool-headed mask slipping. "Hey. Hey, you're with us." Nyx's violet eyes snapped to her, focused. "The water shows the space between. I can see the other door, Rory. The warm one. The hungry one." Their form flickered, incorporeal for a heartbeat. "Your stone remembers it." In Dymas, sprawling vineyards provided exotic ingredients for master chefs, often helbound souls contracted from Earth. The thought surfaced unbidden, textbook words from lore she'd skimmed in Silas' back room. For a second she could almost smell it under the honey — roasting fat, spiced wine, sugar burning. The grove was a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm, but pockets had thin bottoms. She reached for the blade at her hip to steady herself. Isolde's gift. The Fae-forged leaf-shaped dagger in its plain leather sheath. It was always cold to the touch, even through the sheath, moonsilver that never warmed. When she brushed it now, the unease in her gut receded an inch. It could cut through magical wards. It was particularly effective against demons. That second part hadn't been relevant until about ten seconds ago. Isolde had risen without Rory noticing. The seer stood at the edge of the pool, her silver hair moving without wind. "You brought the cold iron that is not iron," she said, pale eyes on the hilt. "Good. The road from here to there is shorter than you think. All indulgence begins in a garden. All gardens end in hunger, if you tend them long enough." "Is she ever not cryptic?" Rory muttered to Nyx. "She cannot lie," Nyx whispered back, a hint of dark humor in the wind-voice. "But she can mislead. Which is worse, sometimes." Despite the warning threaded through every too-perfect flower, wonder was winning. Rory crouched by the pool and looked. Her own reflection looked back — straight shoulder-length black hair tucked behind her ears, bright blue eyes narrowed in concentration — but younger, maybe, or older, the light making it hard to tell. Behind her reflection, not in the clearing but in the water, stood Richmond Park in full winter, bare branches black against snow. And behind that, a flash of something else: a long table groaning with food under an amber sky, faces flushed with wine, a prince in gold at its head, watching her. The pendant gave one sudden, sharp throb against her skin, burning now, and the image vanished. She stood up too fast, heart hammering. "We need to go," she said. The logician in her, the pre-law dropout her father Brendan still called brilliant, was cataloging: time dilation, Veil distortion, dual resonance, Fae compulsion, Shade instability near liminal water. The rest of her, the part that had fled from Cardiff to London after Evan, just knew when a room had stopped being safe. Isolde tilted her head, listening to something none of them could hear. She finally nodded. "The Veil weakens when the world turns dark," she said. "Tonight it is not yet winter. Tonight you may leave as you came, and remember the way." She turned and walked back toward the standing stones, and this time Rory could see the path between them — not a gap, but a fold, a faint shimmering distortion identical to the one they'd entered through, visible only because now she knew what looking felt like. Nyx took her hand again, more solid this time, anchoring. Their grip was still cold, but familiar now. "Did you see something beautiful?" they whispered as they walked. Rory looked over her shoulder once. The fruit-lanterns swayed though there was no wind. The wildflowers were turning, very slightly, to watch them go. "Yeah," she said, and her voice was steady again, cool-headed, Rory being Rory. "I saw a lot of things I don't understand yet. Which means I need to come back." Isolde's laugh ahead of them sounded like bells heard underwater. "Spoken like a true Carter," the seer said. "Always quick out of the box, even when the box is the world."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
1"Nyx whispered back [back]"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.641
leniency1
rawRatio0.08
effectiveRatio0.08
86.25% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1818
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
4
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slowly"
2"quickly"
3"very"
4"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1818
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"flicked"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count2
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"perfect"
count2
6
word"throb"
count1
7
word"resonance"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"pulse"
2"pulsed"
3"flickered"
4"whisper"
5"perfect"
6"throb"
7"resonance"
8"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences138
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences138
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"wonder"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences154
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1825
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
91.56% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions75
wordCount1540
uniqueNames28
maxNameDensity1.17
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond3
Park2
Golden1
Empress1
Isolde10
Varga1
Rory18
Veil2
Nyx11
Heartstone2
Pendant1
Waterloo1
Hel1
Half-Fae1
October1
English1
Dymas2
Belphegor1
Earth3
Roman1
Fae4
Fae-forged1
Despite1
Brendan1
Shade1
Cardiff1
London1
Evan1
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Rory"
2"Nyx"
3"Pendant"
4"Belphegor"
5"Roman"
6"Despite"
7"Brendan"
8"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Hel"
3"Dymas"
4"Earth"
5"Cardiff"
6"London"
globalScore0.916
windowScore1
21.13% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences97
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"smelled like honey and turned earth and so"
1"something like awe"
2"as if holding its breath"
3"felt like"
4"sounded like bells heard underwater"
35.62% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.644
wordCount1825
matches
0"not a sky at all, but a vault of warm amber light filtered through leaves"
1"not in the clearing but in the water, stood Richmond Park in full winter, bare branc"
2"not a gap, but a fold, a faint shimmering distortion identical to the one t"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences154
matches
0"being that color"
1"revealed that it"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean30.42
std22.88
cv0.752
sampleLengths
034
17
255
39
451
531
683
77
852
911
1013
1115
1239
1328
143
1529
165
173
1874
1974
206
2184
223
2338
2428
2533
2631
2737
287
2963
3013
3132
3256
333
3435
3510
3624
3727
3814
3937
4064
4173
4221
4345
449
4522
4618
4786
4816
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
25.22% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs267
matches
0"were trying"
1"was like ducking"
2"was standing"
3"was waiting"
4"was winning"
5"was cataloging"
6"were turning"
50.09% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences154
ratio0.032
matches
0"The distant hum of the A3, the dogs barking, the jays shouting in Richmond — all of it cut off as if someone had shut a door."
1"It wasn't Dymas, not yet — she remembered the descriptions of Belphegor's endless vineyards and the smell of roasting meat that never stopped — but it wasn't Earth either."
2"For a second she could almost smell it under the honey — roasting fat, spiced wine, sugar burning."
3"Her own reflection looked back — straight shoulder-length black hair tucked behind her ears, bright blue eyes narrowed in concentration — but younger, maybe, or older, the light making it hard to tell."
4"She turned and walked back toward the standing stones, and this time Rory could see the path between them — not a gap, but a fold, a faint shimmering distortion identical to the one they'd entered through, visible only because now she knew what looking felt like."
96.48% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount477
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.0440251572327044
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.016771488469601678
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences154
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences154
mean11.85
std8.26
cv0.697
sampleLengths
034
17
221
319
415
57
62
715
819
917
1017
117
127
132
145
154
1625
1726
182
1919
207
2110
2226
2312
242
252
269
272
284
299
307
318
326
3333
348
3520
363
3710
383
395
4011
415
423
437
4417
453
4627
4720
483
4916
60.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.3961038961038961
totalSentences154
uniqueOpeners61
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences121
matches(empty)
ratio0
84.46% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount41
totalSentences121
matches
0"She had been to Richmond"
1"Her silver hair caught what"
2"Her pale lavender eyes flicked"
3"She'd read about it, heard"
4"It had pulsed before, near"
5"she said quietly, more to"
6"She stepped forward into the"
7"She nodded and took it."
8"Their hand was cold in"
9"She stepped through with them."
10"It wasn't a tearing or"
11"It was like ducking under"
12"It wasn't Dymas, not yet"
13"She was standing in a"
14"she said, and it wasn't"
15"It was a riddle spoken"
16"Her phone was in her"
17"She pulled it out."
18"Their form drank the amber"
19"They tilted their head, listening"
ratio0.339
38.51% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount102
totalSentences121
matches
0"She had been to Richmond"
1"The three of them stood"
2"Nyx rippled beside her, their"
3"Isolde Varga was already ahead"
4"Her silver hair caught what"
5"Isolde said, not looking back"
6"Her pale lavender eyes flicked"
7"The thicket was a thicket."
8"A faint distortion in the"
9"She'd read about it, heard"
10"Rory's hand went automatically to"
11"The Heartstone Pendant was warm"
12"It had pulsed before, near"
13"she said quietly, more to"
14"Isolde smiled, and that was"
15"She stepped forward into the"
16"The absence of her was"
17"One second the Half-Fae was"
18"Nyx extended a hand made"
19"Rory could see the faint"
ratio0.843
41.32% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences121
matches
0"If she relaxed her focus,"
ratio0.008
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The ancient oak standing stones marked the boundary in a loose, imperfect circle, each one twice as tall as her and covered in lichen that glowed faintly at the…"
1"And behind that, a flash of something else: a long table groaning with food under an amber sky, faces flushed with wine, a prince in gold at its head, watching …"
45.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Isolde said, not looking back"
1"she said quietly, more to herself"
2"Nyx whispered back, a hint of dark humor in the wind-voice"
3"she said, and her voice was steady again, cool-headed, Rory being Rory"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags21
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"Rory breathed (breathe)"
3"they whispered (whisper)"
4"Rory muttered (mutter)"
5"Nyx whispered back (whisper)"
6"they whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.538
leniency1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.333
74.8521%