Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD6PK6BGAGQ8HC3VPKC9A87

Run Details

Duration:
3m 30s
Cost:
$0.080990
Provider:
Moonshot AI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The station had been dead for thirty years, but it still remembered how to swallow sound. Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under the tape at the bottom of the emergency stair and felt the hush close over her shoulders like water. Camden’s dawn traffic was a rumor up above—buses, delivery scooters, a drunk arguing with a cash machine—but down here the air moved in old iron and wet soot. Her boots found the edge of the platform by habit, military heel-toe, though there was no train coming, no announcement, no living soul beyond the little knot of uniforms pretending not to look at the body. She checked the worn leather watch on her left wrist. 4:48. The call had come at 4:12. Trespassers in a sealed Tube station, uniform had said, possible overdose. Then a pause, the kind that meant the first officer through the door had seen something he would later describe badly on purpose. Possible ritual elements. Quinn hated that phrase. It made sensible men stupid. The tiled arch over the platform read CAMDEN TOWN in flaking blue and white, though the real station pulsed two hundred yards south, alive and oblivious. This one was a ghost with its throat cut: posters bleached to skin, rails rusted into black seams, the tunnel mouths at either end dark as held breath. A line of candle stubs marked the platform edge in uneven white teeth. Chalk spiraled over the soot—circles inside circles, little hooked signs that made the eye slide if she looked too long. At the center lay a man on a stall cloth printed with moons. Not enough blood. That was her first thought, before the smell, before the uniforms’ faces, before the civilized part of her began making lists. Not enough blood for a body opened like that. DS Holt stood over him with a notebook he wasn’t writing in. Thirty-two, keen as a new blade, still convinced the world yielded if you pressed it in the right places. He had Morris’s old coat hook in the locker room and none of Morris’s caution. “Quinn.” He didn’t say guv. They’d been paired eight months; he had decided respect was a negotiation. “White male, mid-thirties, no wallet, no phone. Single puncture under the sternum, upward angle. Some kind of ice pick, maybe. Uniform found a bone thing by the grate.” “A bone thing.” “Token, maybe.” Holt shrugged. “Kids use them for raves. There’s talk of an underground market down here. Moves around. Sells pills, stolen antiques, whatever rich idiots buy when coke gets boring. My money’s deal gone wrong. Organ team, even—clean incision, no mess, body cooling by the rails.” Quinn looked past him. The dead man’s face was grey and pulled tight, lips drawn back from teeth that had gone suddenly old. His coat was good—tailored wool, cashmere blend—and his shoes were wrong for the tunnels: leather soles, hand-stitched, ruined by dust. Both hands lay at his sides except the right, which had been closed around something and broken open after death. Two fingers were snapped back at ugly angles. In the palm sat a compass. Small brass, no bigger than a pocket watch, its casing green-freckled with verdigris. The face was etched so densely with signs it seemed to vibrate. The needle did not point north. It lay hard and steady toward the blank tiled wall beyond the platform, quivering as if it wanted to go farther. Quinn felt the hairs lift along her forearms and told them to stop. “Bagged?” she asked. “Photographed,” Holt said. “Didn’t want to touch it until you saw.” “Gloves?” “Everyone gloved.” “Then why is there no blood on it?” Holt blinked. “Maybe it was in his pocket.” “Broken fingers, Sarge.” She kept her voice flat. “You don’t fold a dead man’s hand around evidence unless you want it found.” A movement by the stair made her turn. A young woman stood inside the tape with a uniform hovering at her elbow, round glasses fogged from the descent. Five-four, maybe, all curly red hair and freckles, a worn leather satchel heavy enough to pull one shoulder down. She had both hands clamped on the strap and was looking at the body with the expression of someone memorizing a door before it closed. Quinn knew the type before Holt said the name. Clever, underfed, too close to things no civilian should know how to name. “Eva Kowalski,” Holt said. “Museum sent her. Restricted archives. Occult material. Says she consults.” “Since when do we consult before the pathologist?” “Since DI Lang saw the chalk and had a religious experience.” Eva’s eyes behind the glasses were green, too awake for the hour. She tucked a curl behind her left ear and immediately did it again, though nothing had come loose. Nervous habit, Quinn filed, and then filed the filing itself under interest. “Detective Quinn,” Eva said. Her voice had Oxford polish rubbed thin by London. “I asked them not to move the circle.” “It’s a crime scene, Miss Kowalski. We move what we like.” “It’s also wrong.” Holt made a quiet sound through his nose. Quinn almost liked him for it. Eva stepped closer until the tape sagged between them. “Those signs on the compass face are protective. Shade work, if the stories are true. The chalk repeats them, but reversed. Counterclockwise. Either someone copied a photograph and flipped it, or they meant to close something rather than open it.” “Something,” Quinn said. “A door.” Eva’s gaze flicked to the tiled wall. “A rift. There are names I won’t say in front of men who write reports.” “Good,” Holt said. “Reports hate names.” Quinn crouched. Up close, the dead man smelled of cold earth and clove, not decomposition. Under his nails: green. She lifted his sleeve with the tip of her pen. The cuff had a dark dust ground into the weave—not the pale soot of the platform, but blacker, oily, like residue from old brakes. His watch had stopped at 1:17. Cheap leather strap, expensive face. It had kept ticking long enough to die at a lie. “When was the full moon?” she asked. Eva answered first. “Two nights ago.” Holt checked his phone because he had to. “Yeah. Thursday.” “The market,” Quinn said, “if there is a market, moves every full moon. That’s the whisper, isn’t it? Never in the same place twice. Bone token at the door, enchanted tat under the tables, banned bottles, secrets in matchboxes.” She watched Eva. “You’ve heard it.” “I’ve read worse sources.” “So if this was the market, it should be gone. Packed up. Moon’s past. Yet someone lit candles here after midnight and drew their little grammar on the floor.” Eva’s freckles stood out as color left her cheeks. “Maybe it delayed.” “Maybe it never happened.” Quinn stood. Her knees gave one small complaint she ignored. “No stalls. No foot traffic. Look at the dust.” Holt looked. So did Eva. The platform was a palimpsest of decades, but near the body the dust had been disturbed in a single clean path from the east tunnel mouth. Not dragged—dragged would smear. Set down. The dead man’s ruined soles wore the same black oil Quinn had found in his cuff, though the platform grit under him was pale and dry. “He came through the maintenance spur,” Quinn said. “Not the stair. Not the grate with your bone token. East tunnel. There’s a service gate up to the old lift shaft. Check it.” Holt started to move, then stopped. “If he came through there, why is the token by the grate?” “Because you were meant to find it.” Eva hugged her satchel tighter. Books knocked softly inside. “The token matters. Bone is the key. Not any bone—carved, prepared. You don’t leave one unless you’re invited or stupid.” “Or unless you want us to think someone was invited,” Quinn said. A generator light popped and steadied, throwing the chalk into hard relief. The dead man’s shadow lay too long for the angle; Quinn caught herself measuring it and forced her eyes away. Morris had hated shadows at scenes. Morris had once stood in a council flat in Peckham saying, “Harlow, the room’s wrong,” while frost feathered the inside of a summer window. Three years gone, and the official file still used the word unexplained as if it were a place you could bury a man. She put on a second pair of gloves and lifted the compass by its edge. Cold bit through latex. The needle jerked. Holt leaned in. “Magnetized?” “Toward what?” Quinn turned slowly. North was behind her, toward the stair and the waking city; the needle did not care. It strained east, down, into the tiled wall where a hairline crack made a vein through the blue letters. The protective etchings seemed to catch light that wasn’t there. For half a second the crack looked less like damage than a seam. Eva whispered, “Don’t.” Quinn looked at her. “Don’t what?” “Nothing.” The curl went behind the left ear again. “Sorry. Researcher’s reflex. Objects with provenance deserve care.” “Provenance,” Quinn repeated. “You know this piece.” “I know of it. Brass, verdigris, sigil-etched face. A compass attuned to—” Eva stopped, chose the least insane word. “—anomalies. Supposedly made by a Shade artisan. Supposedly points to the nearest breach.” “Supposedly,” Holt said, delighted. Quinn set the compass back exactly where it had been. “Then our victim brought a dowsing rod to a knife fight and still lost.” She walked the circle without crossing it. The chalk was too perfect in places, each hooked sign the same size, drawn with a steady hand and no fear. No fear was the tell. People who believed in symbols treated them like loaded guns; these had been laid down like wallpaper. At the northern arc she found one sequence mirrored against itself—clean, elegant, and backward, as Eva had said. Photograph-flipped. A frame job by someone literate in pictures, not practice. On the stall cloth, near the dead man’s shoulder, a single red hair gleamed. Too red. Too long. Quinn did not look at Eva. She took tweezers from her kit and lifted it. No root. Cut, not shed. Placed. “Well,” Holt said, following her eyes anyway, “that’s convenient.” Eva went still. “You cannot be serious.” “I’m never serious before coffee,” Quinn said, but her voice had gone quiet. The clique rose in her mind as it always did: bright young things with old books and cleaner alibis than bankers; Aurora’s name moving through statements like a fish under ice; Eva Kowalski, best friend, museum keys, Oxford Latin, satchel full of restricted smells. Eighteen years in the job had taught Quinn that coincidence was often just arrogance wearing perfume. She held the hair in its little evidence bag up to the light. “This is meant to point at you. Or through you to someone you’d protect.” “I didn’t—” “I know.” The words came out before she could weigh them. Holt stared. Quinn heard herself continue, harder because she hated being early to mercy. “No root. No transfer pattern. Your glasses have left cleaner scenes. But whoever put it there knows your hair, your habits, maybe your archive. They want me to take the easy road to your doorstep and kick it in.” Eva’s mouth parted. Behind the fear, calculation sparked—wounded, quick, loyal. “Then you see it.” “I see a stage.” Quinn turned back to the body. “I see lividity on the left side and a corpse arranged on his right. I see a chest wound with no arterial spray because his heart had already stopped when it was made. I see a man cooled somewhere colder than this platform, carried through black oil, dropped at the edge of a market that should have moved with the moon. I see fingers broken after rigor so a compass could perform in his hand. And I see a token by the wrong entrance like a ticket stub for a show that closed Thursday.” Holt’s notebook finally opened. “So not a deal gone wrong.” “Oh, it was a deal,” Quinn said. “Just not here. He bought or stole something he couldn’t carry, and the seller took the price out of him somewhere with drains. Then they dressed this station like a fairy tale and invited the police to be stupid.” Eva’s gaze kept returning to the tiled wall. “If the compass was placed, why does the needle still—” “Don’t,” Quinn said, softer than before. The word hung. Somewhere in the east tunnel metal ticked, though no train had used those rails since before Eva was born. The compass needle trembled and settled, trembled and settled, always toward the crack in CAMDEN TOWN. Quinn’s old watch warmed on her wrist as if the leather remembered a pulse. She thought of Morris at the end, blood on his teeth and no wound anyone could find, saying her name like he was asking permission to believe her. She had not believed him. That was the wound. “Seal both tunnels,” she said. “I want the service gate, the lift shaft, every camera in a half-mile grid from midnight to four, and a list of who knew the market’s last location. Get the museum’s restricted inventory—quietly—and any bone with accession marks missing. Miss Kowalski stays until I say otherwise.” Eva lifted her chin. “Am I a suspect?” “You’re a map someone tried to fold into a weapon,” Quinn said. “Try not to sharpen yourself.” Holt went, shouting for uniforms with the energy of a man glad to be given a world he could kick. The generator light buzzed. In its hum Quinn heard, or imagined, the smallest draft from the tiled seam, cold and spiced with clove. She looked once more at the compass. Brass, verdigris, patient needle. Not north. Never north. “What are you pointing at?” she murmured. The dead man did not answer. From beyond the wall, very faintly, something did.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags31
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Morris had once [once]"
1"Quinn turned slowly [slowly]"
2"Quinn turned back [back]"
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.397
leniency0.795
rawRatio0.097
effectiveRatio0.077
91.42% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2332
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"softly"
2"slowly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.70% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2332
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"etched"
count2
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"perfect"
count1
5
word"trembled"
count2
6
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"etched"
2"flicked"
3"whisper"
4"perfect"
5"trembled"
6"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences157
matches(empty)
88.26% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences157
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences204
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen94
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2319
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions80
wordCount1523
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.9
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn29
Tube1
Holt17
Morris5
Eva19
Oxford2
London1
Peckham1
North1
Aurora1
Kowalski1
Latin1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Holt"
3"Morris"
4"Eva"
5"Aurora"
6"Kowalski"
places
0"Oxford"
1"London"
2"Peckham"
globalScore0.548
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences94
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.431
wordCount2319
matches
0"not the pale soot of the platform, but blacker, oily, like residue from old brakes"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences204
matches
0"hated that phrase"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs87
mean26.66
std25.23
cv0.947
sampleLengths
016
188
254
39
487
513
633
746
845
93
1047
1163
1214
1352
1413
153
1611
171
182
198
208
2122
2272
2322
2414
258
2611
2742
2821
2911
303
3114
3249
333
3424
356
3675
377
386
3910
4045
414
4229
4312
4423
4563
4632
4718
487
4929
91.85% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences157
matches
0"been paired"
1"been closed"
2"were snapped"
3"was etched"
4"been disturbed"
5"been laid"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs270
matches
0"wasn’t writing"
1"was looking"
2"was asking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount6
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences204
ratio0.059
matches
0"Camden’s dawn traffic was a rumor up above—buses, delivery scooters, a drunk arguing with a cash machine—but down here the air moved in old iron and wet soot."
1"Chalk spiraled over the soot—circles inside circles, little hooked signs that made the eye slide if she looked too long."
2"They’d been paired eight months; he had decided respect was a negotiation."
3"His coat was good—tailored wool, cashmere blend—and his shoes were wrong for the tunnels: leather soles, hand-stitched, ruined by dust."
4"The cuff had a dark dust ground into the weave—not the pale soot of the platform, but blacker, oily, like residue from old brakes."
5"Not dragged—dragged would smear."
6"The dead man’s shadow lay too long for the angle; Quinn caught herself measuring it and forced her eyes away."
7"North was behind her, toward the stair and the waking city; the needle did not care."
8"People who believed in symbols treated them like loaded guns; these had been laid down like wallpaper."
9"At the northern arc she found one sequence mirrored against itself—clean, elegant, and backward, as Eva had said."
10"The clique rose in her mind as it always did: bright young things with old books and cleaner alibis than bankers; Aurora’s name moving through statements like a fish under ice; Eva Kowalski, best friend, museum keys, Oxford Latin, satchel full of restricted smells."
11"Behind the fear, calculation sparked—wounded, quick, loyal."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount929
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.02691065662002153
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.004305705059203444
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences204
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences204
mean11.37
std10.89
cv0.958
sampleLengths
016
124
228
336
410
51
66
711
823
93
104
115
1226
1328
1413
1520
1613
173
1821
199
2012
2119
2215
235
2412
2528
263
274
2843
294
3019
3120
3220
338
346
3513
3612
376
3821
3913
403
413
428
431
442
458
462
476
488
4914
70.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.45320197044334976
totalSentences203
uniqueOpeners92
52.49% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences127
matches
0"Then a pause, the kind"
1"Somewhere in the east tunnel"
ratio0.016
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences127
matches
0"Her boots found the edge"
1"She checked the worn leather"
2"It made sensible men stupid."
3"He had Morris’s old coat"
4"He didn’t say guv"
5"They’d been paired eight months;"
6"His coat was good—tailored wool,"
7"It lay hard and steady"
8"She kept her voice flat"
9"She had both hands clamped"
10"She tucked a curl behind"
11"Her voice had Oxford polish"
12"She lifted his sleeve with"
13"His watch had stopped at"
14"It had kept ticking long"
15"Her knees gave one small"
16"She put on a second"
17"It strained east, down, into"
18"She walked the circle without"
19"She took tweezers from her"
ratio0.189
78.11% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount97
totalSentences127
matches
0"The station had been dead"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under"
2"Camden’s dawn traffic was a"
3"Her boots found the edge"
4"She checked the worn leather"
5"The call had come at"
6"Trespassers in a sealed Tube"
7"Quinn hated that phrase."
8"It made sensible men stupid."
9"The tiled arch over the"
10"This one was a ghost"
11"A line of candle stubs"
12"Chalk spiraled over the soot—circles"
13"That was her first thought,"
14"DS Holt stood over him"
15"He had Morris’s old coat"
16"He didn’t say guv"
17"They’d been paired eight months;"
18"Quinn looked past him."
19"The dead man’s face was"
ratio0.764
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences127
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.24% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences60
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Chalk spiraled over the soot—circles inside circles, little hooked signs that made the eye slide if she looked too long."
1"The dead man’s face was grey and pulled tight, lips drawn back from teeth that had gone suddenly old."
2"It lay hard and steady toward the blank tiled wall beyond the platform, quivering as if it wanted to go farther."
3"Quinn’s old watch warmed on her wrist as if the leather remembered a pulse."
92.74% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags31
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Holt said, delighted"
1"Quinn said, but her voice had gone quiet"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags20
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
1"Quinn repeated (repeat)"
2"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.256
leniency0.513
rawRatio0.15
effectiveRatio0.077
86.3647%