Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD6T9W3X8FVBYH9DTH1VHC7

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The lock clicked before I finished with the third deadbolt. "Eva, I swear to god, if that's you forgetting your keys again..." It wasn't Eva. Lucien Moreau leaned against the cramped landing outside her flat, his ivory-handled cane planted on the damp mat. Rain darkened the shoulders of his charcoal suit. His hair, that slicked-back platinum blond, dripped onto his collar. He looked exactly the same as the last time I'd seen him. That was the problem. "You moved," he said. I gripped the door. My left wrist throbbed, the small crescent scar pulling tight. "I didn't move. This is Eva's flat. You know that." "Flat above Silas' bar. Locked. Dark. Smelled faintly of abandonment." That mismatched gaze swept past me, one amber, one black, taking in the chaos behind me. "So I asked Ptolemy where you'd gone." The tabby cat in question wound around my ankles and chirped. "You talked to the cat." "I listened. He is quite articulate when bribed." He didn't wait for an invitation. He stepped forward and I had a choice, slam the door or let him in. Ptolemy made it for me. He darted between Lucien's polished shoes and vanished into the hall. Lucien smiled. "Still making excellent decisions, Rory." The flat swallowed us both. Every surface in Eva's place was covered, just as the codex in my head always described it, books stacked spine to ceiling, scrolls half-unrolled over the tiny kitchen counter, research notes tacked to the walls with faded tape. The air smelled of old paper and curry from the shop downstairs, cumin and grease seeping through the floorboards. Lucien took it all in with one slow turn. His cane tapped the warped wood, he did not need it to walk. "Charming. Claustrophobic, paranoid, smells like vindaloo. You must feel at home." "What do you want, Lucien?" "Direct. I missed that." He shrugged off his wet coat and draped it over a tower of occult atlases without asking. Underneath, his shirt clung where the rain had soaked through. I told my eyes to look anywhere else. "You left Paris without saying goodbye," he said. "You told me to leave Paris." "I told you to leave the club. There is a difference." "Not when your father’s people were hunting the building." A book slid off the pile where his coat lay and thumped to the floor. Ptolemy startled and bolted under Eva's ancient sofa. Neither of us moved to pick it up. Lucien’s expression did not change but his grip tightened on the cane. The ivory handle hid a blade, I knew that. I had seen him use it once on a thing with too many teeth in a Marseille alley. "So you ran," he said. "All the way to London. To delivering noodles for Madame Cheung. To hiding in your friend's library while something much worse comes looking." My stomach dropped. "What?" "Do not play stupid, Laila. It does not suit you." He used the other name, the one he had given me in Paris, and my skin prickled. "Eva called me three days ago. Said you were having dreams again. Said your hands burned." I shoved past him towards the kitchenette. The kettle gave me something to do with my hands. Filled it, too full, water sloshing over the rim onto my fingers. "She had no right." "She was frightened. For you. I told her she was right to be." "Of course you did." The kettle clicked on. Loud in the small space. Lucien had not moved but his presence filled the flat, expensive cologne and rain and something else underneath, brimstone sweet, his demon half leaking through when he felt strong emotions. "I handled it last time," I said. "You fainted last time. In my arms. After you accidentally banished a minor duke of Avaros with a delivery receipt and sheer panic. Let us not rewrite history." "I did not ask you to come save me." "No. You never ask. That is your most irritating trait." He said it low, almost amused, but the words had teeth. I spun around. "And swooping in unannounced is yours. We had a deal. You stay on your side of the Channel, I stay on mine. We pretend Paris never happened." "Ah, yes. Your deal." He took two steps, cane silent now. "I never agreed." "Lucien." "Aurora." The way he said my full name stopped me cold. Eva's kitchenette light flickered overhead, buzzed. The shadows under his cheekbones deepened. "You think this is about us?" He tilted his head. "This is about what woke up when you left. You left a mark, ma chérie. You tore a hole when you ran. My father felt it. Others felt it." "Stop calling me that." "What, ma chérie or Laila?" "Both." He smiled again, but it did not reach his black eye, only the amber one warmed. "Make me." The kettle screamed. I ignored it. He was close enough now that I could see a droplet of rain still caught in his eyelashes. Close enough to smell the faint iron tang of his blood, his human mother's legacy mixed with something hotter. "I told you," I said. My voice came out thinner than I wanted. "I can't do what you think I can do. That night in Paris was a fluke." "It was not a fluke." His free hand came up, hovered near my wrist, the one with the scar. He did not touch. He waited. "May I?" I hated that he asked. I hated that part of me wanted him to stop asking. I gave a short nod. His fingers brushed the crescent mark. The contact sparked. Actual heat burst under my skin, bright blue eyes reflecting a sudden flash of light from nowhere. Books rattled on the shelves. Ptolemy hissed from under the sofa. Lucien hissed too, through his teeth, and jerked back. A thin wisp of smoke curled from his fingertips. "Still there," he murmured. He stared at his reddened skin, fascinated. "Dormant, but there. Dieu, Rory, you have no idea what you carry." "I carry a part-time job and rent I can't afford. That's it." "You carry a key. My father wants it. The others will want to break it out of you." The buzzer for the building door shrieked then, sudden and violent. Both of us flinched. I frowned. "Eva said she would be at the archives until midnight." The buzzer went again, longer, insistent. Someone leaned on it hard. Lucien’s head snapped towards the window that looked down onto Brick Lane. His nostrils flared. The pleasant mask slid off his face completely, leaving something colder, older, half-demon and fully aware. He moved to the window in two strides and peered through a gap in the blinds. Downstairs, neon from the curry house bled onto wet pavement. "Merde." "What?" "How long has Eva's flat had three deadbolts?" he asked quietly. "Always. Why?" "Because whoever is downstairs just opened all three with one hand." He turned, cane already unscrewing with a soft hiss, revealing an inch of thin, bright blade. His eyes, both of them, had gone black. "And they did not use keys." Another buzz, and then a fist hammered on the building's outer door. The wood shook. Lucien grabbed my wrist, his grip searing and solid, and pushed me back from the door. "Rory, whatever you do, do not invite them up."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he asked quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.241
leniency0.481
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.037
95.94% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1232
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
83.77% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1232
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"stomach"
2"flickered"
3"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences87
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1232
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
93.32% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount794
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.13
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Eva4
Moreau1
Lucien9
Marseille1
Paris1
Brick1
Lane1
Ptolemy3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"Lucien"
3"Ptolemy"
places
0"Marseille"
1"Paris"
2"Brick"
3"Lane"
globalScore0.933
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences56
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1232
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences128
matches
0"hated that he"
1"hated that part"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs76
mean16.21
std13.49
cv0.832
sampleLengths
010
112
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336
416
54
614
710
833
911
105
118
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132
145
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1622
1711
185
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218
226
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249
2531
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344
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367
3728
389
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4014
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431
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474
485
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100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs148
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences128
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount798
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"colder, older, half-demon"
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.03383458646616541
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.006265664160401002
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean9.63
std7.02
cv0.729
sampleLengths
010
112
23
318
48
510
612
74
84
94
1010
1110
1226
137
1411
155
168
176
1815
195
2011
212
225
235
2438
2519
269
2713
2811
295
304
3117
3210
338
348
356
3611
379
3815
398
408
4112
429
4318
445
4523
463
471
4827
4916
60.42% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.390625
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners50
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.51% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences78
matches
0"It wasn't Eva."
1"His hair, that slicked-back platinum"
2"He looked exactly the same"
3"I gripped the door."
4"My left wrist throbbed, the"
5"He didn't wait for an"
6"He stepped forward and I"
7"He darted between Lucien's polished"
8"His cane tapped the warped"
9"He shrugged off his wet"
10"I told my eyes to"
11"I had seen him use"
12"My stomach dropped."
13"He used the other name,"
14"I shoved past him towards"
15"He said it low, almost"
16"I spun around."
17"He took two steps, cane"
18"He tilted his head"
19"He smiled again, but it"
ratio0.449
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences78
matches
0"The lock clicked before I"
1"It wasn't Eva."
2"Lucien Moreau leaned against the"
3"Rain darkened the shoulders of"
4"His hair, that slicked-back platinum"
5"He looked exactly the same"
6"That was the problem."
7"I gripped the door."
8"My left wrist throbbed, the"
9"That mismatched gaze swept past"
10"The tabby cat in question"
11"He didn't wait for an"
12"He stepped forward and I"
13"Ptolemy made it for me."
14"He darted between Lucien's polished"
15"The flat swallowed us both."
16"Every surface in Eva's place"
17"The air smelled of old"
18"Lucien took it all in"
19"His cane tapped the warped"
ratio0.936
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"His hair, that slicked-back platinum blond, dripped onto his collar."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.13
leniency0.259
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.037
85.5987%