Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD6YQ4ERBD2KNWCNQ5HMW5V

Run Details

Model:: MoonshotAI: Kimi K3 (Reasoning, Low)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 1m 2s
Cost:: $0.024532
Provider:: Moonshot AI

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
81.60%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
54.00%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
75.19%	Name drop frequency	(details)
100.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
92.48%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
86.05%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
45.94%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
32.97%	Technical jargon density	(details)
93.75%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
28.79%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
83.0256%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

The portal breathed before it opened.

Aurora felt it first through the Heartstone against her sternum — a slow, furnace-warm pulse that quickened as Nyx peeled the shadows apart like wet cloth. The tear hung in the basement air of Silas' bar, edges writhing, and through it spilled a light the wrong colour entirely. Amber. Thick as honey, heavy as breath.

"After you," Aurora muttered, gripping the Fae blade at her hip.

Isolde went first, because of course she did. The seer stepped through without hesitation, silver hair lifting in a wind that existed only on the other side. She left no footprints on the basement's concrete. Aurora doubted she'd leave any in Hel, either.

Nyx dissolved and re-formed on the far side, violet eyes flaring. "The air is sweet," they whispered. "Be wary of anything here that is sweet."

Aurora ducked through. The tear sealed behind her with a sound like a closing mouth.

She stood on a hillside of black grass.

The sky stretched amber from horizon to horizon — no sun, no stars, just that warm, sourceless glow, as though the whole realm sat inside a lantern. Vines heavy with fruit she'd never seen coiled up trellises of pale stone, grapes the size of plums, translucent, each one holding a spark of light at its core. Below the hill, an orchard sprawled toward a distant city of copper domes and smoke, and everywhere — everywhere — the smell. Baking bread. Roasting meat. Spices she couldn't name. Her stomach clenched so hard it hurt.

"Don't breathe too deep," Nyx said, solidifying beside her. Their shadow-flesh drank the amber light rather than reflecting it. "Dymas enters through the lungs."

"Belphegor's realm." Isolde tilted her face upward, lavender eyes half-lidded. "Gluttony wears a gentle mask. The hungriest traps have the softest teeth."

"My heartstone's going mad." Aurora pressed her palm against the pendant. It throbbed steadily now, no longer panicked — almost content, like a cat settling in a warm lap. She didn't care for that at all.

They descended the hill. The black grass whispered against her boots, and when she crouched to touch it, the blades curled toward her fingers. Not away. Toward. She yanked her hand back.

"It wants to be eaten," Nyx said, reading her expression. "Everything here wants to be consumed or to consume. There is no third state."

"Lovely place. Really considering the move."

The path led into the orchard. Trees of dark wood stood in perfect rows, branches sagging under fruit that gleamed like polished garnets. Aurora heard water somewhere — and then realised it wasn't water. A stream ran alongside the path, sluggish and gold, and when she knelt at its bank the smell hit her: honey, wine, something richer beneath.

"Don't," Isolde said, without turning around.

"I wasn't going to drink it."

"The river does not require drinking. Only wanting."

Aurora stood and wiped her hand on her jeans. Her fingers tingled where they'd hovered above the surface. The wanting sat in her chest already, patient and warm.

Deeper in the orchard, they found the tables.

Long slabs of white stone, dozens of them, set beneath the trees and laden with food — whole roasted birds with crisped golden skin, pyramids of sugared pastry, wheels of cheese veined blue, bowls of those translucent grapes. Steam rose. Nothing rotted. Nothing cooled. And no one sat eating.

"Where is everyone?" Aurora's voice came out lower than she intended. The orchard swallowed sound strangely — no birdsong, no insects. Only a faint, distant music, horns and drums, drifting up from the copper city.

"The feasts of Dymas are always set," Isolde said. "The diners come and go. The table remains. That is the nature of the sin it serves — the meal never ends, and is never finished."

Aurora's mouth watered. She hated it. She'd skipped lunch, and her body knew it, and this place knew her body. She thumbed the crescent scar on her wrist, the old grounding habit, and kept walking.

Nyx had gone quiet. Too quiet. She found them standing before one of the trees, shadow-hand pressed to the dark bark, and for once their whisper-voice carried something raw.

"I knew this wood. When I was—" They stopped. The violet eyes dimmed. "Aldric ate from such a tree. In another life. The fruit was the last thing he tasted as a man."

"You don't have to talk about it."

"There is little else to do in Hel but remember."

Isolde drifted ahead, then halted between two standing stones that flanked the path — no, not stones, Aurora saw as she caught up. Cleavers. Enormous iron cleavers, taller than a person, driven blade-down into the earth, their edges rusted a colour that might not have been rust.

"A boundary," the seer murmured. "We cross into the kitchens' reach. From here, we are guests. Guests in Dymas are ingredients not yet prepared."

"Then we don't cross."

"We must." Isolde's pale eyes found hers, and there was no riddle in them for once, only weight. "What you seek lies beyond, little Carter. But hear this truly, for I cannot speak false: eat nothing. Drink nothing. Accept no gift, taste no crumb, though your belly scream and your mouth flood. The realm asks only one small bite. One bite is the whole of its asking."

"And if I do?"

"Then you stay." Isolde smiled faintly. "And the table gains another chair, and the meal goes on forever, and you will be so, so happy."

Aurora looked past the cleavers. The path continued down into a valley of terraced vineyards, and at its heart rose a structure of copper and bone-white stone, chimneys breathing scented smoke, windows glowing with amber light. Beautiful. Wrong. Beautiful the way a flame is beautiful to a moth.

She loosened the moonsilver blade in its sheath. Cold bit her palm — a clean cold, a cold from somewhere else entirely, and it cleared her head like winter air.

"Right," she said. "Keep your hands to yourselves, don't touch the buffet, don't lick the scenery." She glanced at Nyx. "You good?"

The Shade pulled their hand from the tree, slowly, the way one withdraws from a grave. "Lead on, Aurora Carter."

She stepped between the cleavers. The air changed — thicker, sweeter, almost chewy. Somewhere deep in the valley below, a bell began to toll, unhurried, and the distant horns of the city answered it, and Aurora walked down into the hungry heart of Dymas with the pendant burning gently against her chest and the cold blade steady in her hand.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Isolde smiled faintly [faintly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.485

leniency

0.97

rawRatio

0.063

effectiveRatio

0.061

81.60%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1087

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"really"
count	1

adverb	"truly"
count	1

adverb	"slowly"
count	1

adverb	"gently"
count	1

highlights

0	"really"
1	"truly"
2	"slowly"
3	"gently"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

54.00%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1087

totalAiIsms

found

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"quickened"
count	1

word	"stomach"
count	1

word	"throbbed"
count	1

word	"perfect"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"the last thing"
count	1

word	"weight"
count	1

word	"structure"
count	1

word	"grave"
count	1

highlights

0	"pulse"
1	"quickened"
2	"stomach"
3	"throbbed"
4	"perfect"
5	"whisper"
6	"the last thing"
7	"weight"
8	"structure"
9	"grave"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	80
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"began to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	98
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	49
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1099
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	11
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

75.19%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

802

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.5

worstName

"Aurora"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Isolde"

discoveredNames

Heartstone	1
Nyx	6
Amber	1
Fae	1
Isolde	7
Hel	1
Aurora	12
Shade	1
Dymas	1

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Amber"
2	"Isolde"
3	"Aurora"
4	"Shade"

places

0	"Heartstone"
1	"Hel"

globalScore

0.752

windowScore

100.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences	47
glossingSentenceCount	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches	0
per1kWords	0
wordCount	1099
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	98
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

28.18

std

20.16

0.716

sampleLengths

0	6
1	55
2	11
3	43
4	25
5	15
6	8
7	93
8	24
9	22
10	36
11	32
12	24
13	6
14	59
15	6
16	6
17	8
18	28
19	8
20	49
21	35
22	35
23	35
24	29
25	33
26	7
27	10
28	47
29	24
30	4
31	67
32	4
33	25
34	48
35	30
36	22
37	20
38	60

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	80
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	137
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.102

matches

0	"Aurora felt it first through the Heartstone against her sternum — a slow, furnace-warm pulse that quickened as Nyx peeled the shadows apart like wet cloth."
1	"The sky stretched amber from horizon to horizon — no sun, no stars, just that warm, sourceless glow, as though the whole realm sat inside a lantern."
2	"Below the hill, an orchard sprawled toward a distant city of copper domes and smoke, and everywhere — everywhere — the smell."
3	"It throbbed steadily now, no longer panicked — almost content, like a cat settling in a warm lap."
4	"Aurora heard water somewhere — and then realised it wasn't water."
5	"Long slabs of white stone, dozens of them, set beneath the trees and laden with food — whole roasted birds with crisped golden skin, pyramids of sugared pastry, wheels of cheese veined blue, bowls of those translucent grapes."
6	"The orchard swallowed sound strangely — no birdsong, no insects."
7	"Isolde drifted ahead, then halted between two standing stones that flanked the path — no, not stones, Aurora saw as she caught up."
8	"Cold bit her palm — a clean cold, a cold from somewhere else entirely, and it cleared her head like winter air."
9	"The air changed — thicker, sweeter, almost chewy."

92.48%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

340

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"slow, furnace-warm pulse"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.041176470588235294

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.020588235294117647

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	98
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

11.21

std

9.48

0.845

sampleLengths

0	6
1	26
2	22
3	1
4	6
5	11
6	8
7	19
8	8
9	8
10	11
11	6
12	8
13	3
14	12
15	8
16	27
17	29
18	22
19	2
20	2
21	4
22	7
23	9
24	10
25	5
26	10
27	12
28	11
29	18
30	7
31	4
32	20
33	2
34	1
35	5
36	10
37	14
38	6
39	6
40	17
41	11
42	25
43	6
44	6
45	8
46	9
47	9
48	10
49	8

86.05%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	4
diversityRatio	0.5408163265306123
totalSentences	98
uniqueOpeners	53

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Only a faint, distant music,"
1	"Somewhere deep in the valley"

ratio

0.031

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She left no footprints on"
1	"She stood on a hillside"
2	"Her stomach clenched so hard"
3	"Their shadow-flesh drank the amber"
4	"It throbbed steadily now, no"
5	"She didn't care for that"
6	"They descended the hill."
7	"She yanked her hand back."
8	"Her fingers tingled where they'd"
9	"She hated it."
10	"She'd skipped lunch, and her"
11	"She thumbed the crescent scar"
12	"She found them standing before"
13	"She loosened the moonsilver blade"
14	"She glanced at Nyx"
15	"She stepped between the cleavers."

ratio

0.25

45.94%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The portal breathed before it"
1	"Aurora felt it first through"
2	"The tear hung in the"
3	"Aurora muttered, gripping the Fae"
4	"Isolde went first, because of"
5	"The seer stepped through without"
6	"She left no footprints on"
7	"Aurora doubted she'd leave any"
8	"Nyx dissolved and re-formed on"
9	"Aurora ducked through."
10	"The tear sealed behind her"
11	"She stood on a hillside"
12	"The sky stretched amber from"
13	"Vines heavy with fruit she'd"
14	"Her stomach clenched so hard"
15	"Nyx said, solidifying beside her"
16	"Their shadow-flesh drank the amber"
17	"Isolde tilted her face upward,"
18	"Aurora pressed her palm against"
19	"It throbbed steadily now, no"

ratio

0.828

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	64
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

32.97%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Aurora felt it first through the Heartstone against her sternum — a slow, furnace-warm pulse that quickened as Nyx peeled the shadows apart like wet cloth."
1	"The sky stretched amber from horizon to horizon — no sun, no stars, just that warm, sourceless glow, as though the whole realm sat inside a lantern."
2	"Trees of dark wood stood in perfect rows, branches sagging under fruit that gleamed like polished garnets."
3	"Enormous iron cleavers, taller than a person, driven blade-down into the earth, their edges rusted a colour that might not have been rust."

93.75%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Isolde said, without turning around"

28.79%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
1	"they whispered (whisper)"
2	"Aurora pressed (press)"
3	"the seer murmured (murmur)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.273

leniency

0.545

rawRatio

0.444

effectiveRatio

0.242

83.0256%