Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD7427BJFNYMAA5ZFB5F83Q

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Duration:
13.1s
Cost:
$0.000338
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System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora's breath fogged in the pre-dawn darkness as she adjusted the strap of her delivery bag, the silver chain of the Heartstone pendant pressing cool against her collarbone. The pendant pulsed once, faintly, like a heartbeat struggling against ice. "Still think this is the right place?" Nyx's voice drifted from the shadows clinging to the alley wall, softer than the wind but somehow carrying an edge of something older. "The Veil weakens tonight," Aurora replied, her bright blue eyes scanning the brickwork. "Isolde's riddles led me here, but I've never seen a rift this strong." She'd been chasing visions—fragmented dreams of amber light and vine-wrapped spires—since accepting the seer's cryptic warning about Prince Belphegor's growing influence. The pendant had grown warmer as dawn approached, its crimson gemstone catching the first hints of sunlight. "Do you feel it?" Nyx's form shifted, becoming less distinct at the edges, more substantial where the streetlight cast its beam. They'd been walking beside Aurora since she'd materialized from what felt like nowhere, emerging from the shadows of her own memories. The Shade had offered to guide her, though Aurora couldn't quite tell if that was choice or compulsion. The alley ended at Silas's bar, its windows dark despite the late hour. But where the brick wall should have continued, the Heartstone's warmth spiked, and the mortar began to shimmer—not with reflection, but with something deeper, like heat haze over pavement that wasn't hot. Aurora touched the pendant, its chain growing hot against her skin. "The Veil's thinning here. Or tearing." She stepped forward. The world tilted. Not falling—stepping into a different kind of gravity. One moment she stood in the familiar grime of London's alleyway, the next she found herself kneeling on grass that felt impossibly soft beneath her knees, the scent of fermented fruit and something like incense filling her nostrils. Nyx's solid form wavered at her side, their violet eyes wide with something Aurora couldn't name. "Welcome to Dymas," Nyx whispered, and their voice carried now, no longer the wind-taut whisper it had been. "Though I suspect you wouldn't have come if you knew what waits in the kitchens." Above them, the sky stretched amber and gold, unmarred by clouds or stars. The land rolling in every direction was a riot of abundance—grape-laden vines heavy with fruit that glowed with inner light, orchards bearing apples that seemed to pulse with warmth, and gardens where vegetables grew in spirals and patterns that defied natural law. In the distance, structures rose that might have been towers or kitchens or both, their walls lined with what looked like hanging meats and cheeses that dripped something sweet and viscous. Aurora's delivery bag slipped from her shoulder with a soft thud. She didn't move to retrieve it. "Isolde said there would be feasting," she murmured, more to herself than to Nyx. "But I didn't expect..." She gestured at the impossible horizon. "I didn't expect this much." "Feasting implies consumption," Nyx said, their form flickering between solid and shadow as they took a step forward. "This is gluttony given form. A realm where desire has no end and satisfaction none whatsoever." A sound reached them then—not quite wind, not quite voice, but the deep, resonant chime of bells. From the direction of those distant structures, the sound grew clearer: the clink of silver against porcelain, the low murmur of conversation in languages that tried to form but couldn't quite catch the right shapes of words, the sizzle of something cooking that sent delicious smells curling through the air. Aurora pushed herself to her feet, her legs surprisingly steady despite the vertigo of transition. The Heartstone pulsed against her chest, steady and insistent, as if trying to guide her somewhere. "Lead the way," she said to Nyx, and heard herself moving toward the nearest cluster of buildings without really deciding to do so. The path was carpeted with fallen leaves that shimmered with dew, though the air held no chill. Each step seemed to absorb sound, leaving them in a hush broken only by the soft crunch of their passage. When they reached the first structure, it revealed itself to be a kitchen of impossible scope, its doors carved from a single slab of wood that bore the marks of countless carvings—fish, fowl, grain, flesh, all rendered in styles that spoke of cultures that had never met. The doors opened of their own accord. Inside, the scale of indulgence made Aurora's breath catch. Tables stretched beyond sight, groaning under platters that seemed to multiply when not directly observed. Jars of preserves swam with tiny golden fish. Wines of impossible color flowed from bottles that hadn't been there a moment before. And in the center, beneath a chandelier of crystallized sugar that cast prismatic shadows, stood a figure at a massive stove that might have been constructed from the bones of some great beast. Prince Belphegor turned, and Aurora saw that he was neither young nor old, his features shifting like candle wax in a draft. His eyes held the sheen of something that had eaten too much and found hunger still gnawing. "You've come," he said, and his voice was the clink of too many silver spoons against too many plates. "The Veil weakened," Aurora said carefully. "Isolde sent me." "Ah, yes. The seer." Belphegor's smile revealed teeth stained dark with something that might have been wine. "She sends many things this season. What do you seek in my realm, child of Earth?" Before Aurora could answer, the Heartstone flared crimson, hot against her skin, and she realized with sudden clarity that the pendant wasn't just detecting the realm—it was marking her presence within it. "Your influence spreads," she said, keeping her voice low. "Through the Veil, through dreams, through those who would see the Fae courts changed." Belphegor's smile didn't reach his eyes. "Influence is a curious thing. It feeds, and it grows, and it eventually consumes whatever nurtured it. Tell me, Aurora Carter—what do you taste in your visions?" The question wasn't about prophecy or magic. It was about appetite, about what someone took when they reached across the boundaries between worlds. Nyx shifted beside her, their shadow stretching impossibly long across the feast table. "Perhaps we should go," they murmured. But Aurora found herself staring at a dish before her—something that had been a chicken, or resembled one, or was trying to be one—and wondering what it would taste like to remember home, to taste familiar things through the lens of excess. Her hand drifted to the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip, its moonsilver cool even in the ambient heat of the realm. "How many souls have you claimed for this feast?" she asked Belphegor. "As many as necessary to keep the doors open." He gestured to the kitchens beyond. "The Veil grows thin, after all. Winter solstice approaches, and the boundaries between realms grow... permeable." Aurora's fingers tightened on her sword hilt. Something in her chest—the human part of her, the part that still remembered Cardiff and rain and the taste of proper tea—stirred against the pull of this place of endless desire. "What happens when the boundaries seal again?" she asked. Belphegor's laugh was like the breaking of something delicate. "Then we feast in the space between, where the hungry wait and the satiated dream. Such is the nature of gluttony, isn't it? Always more, always wanting, always reaching for what cannot be held." The pendant at Aurora's throat flared once more, and she knew that somewhere beyond this realm, in the spaces between heartbeats, Isolde was watching and calculating. Nyx stood beside her, no longer quite shadow or quite solid, and the decision crystallized like ice in spring water. They left through the kitchen door just as it slammed shut behind them, the taste of something sweet and wrong on their tongues, and the knowledge that they had only glimpsed the full extent of what they'd stumbled into.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Aurora said carefully [carefully]"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.63
leniency1
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.059
92.53% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1338
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
21.52% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1338
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"fragmented"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count2
4
word"familiar"
count2
5
word"wavered"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"desire"
count2
9
word"porcelain"
count1
10
word"shimmered"
count1
11
word"chill"
count1
12
word"structure"
count1
13
word"crystallized"
count2
14
word"constructed"
count1
15
word"calculating"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"scanning"
2"fragmented"
3"warmth"
4"familiar"
5"wavered"
6"whisper"
7"pulse"
8"desire"
9"porcelain"
10"shimmered"
11"chill"
12"structure"
13"crystallized"
14"constructed"
15"calculating"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences63
matches
0"e with warmth"
29.48% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences63
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
2"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences73
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1324
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"When they reached the first structure, it revealed itself to be a kitchen of impossible scope, its doors carved from a s…"
80.81% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount1084
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.38
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone4
Aurora15
Prince2
Belphegor6
Shade1
Silas1
London1
Nyx9
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Cardiff1
Isolde1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Aurora"
2"Prince"
3"Belphegor"
4"Shade"
5"Silas"
6"Nyx"
places
0"London"
1"Fae-Forged"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.808
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount9
matches
0"felt like nowhere, emerging from the sh"
1"quite tell if that was choice or compulsion"
2"something like incense filling her nostrils"
3"apples that seemed to pulse with warmth, and gardens where vegetables grew in spirals and patterns that defied natural law"
4"looked like hanging meats and cheeses tha"
5"not quite wind, not quite voice, but the deep, resonant chime of bells"
6"not quite voice, but the deep, resonant chime of bells"
7"quite catch the right shapes of words, the sizzle of something cooking that sent delicious smells curling through the air"
8"as if trying to guide her somewhere"
9"platters that seemed to multiply when not directly observed"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords3.021
wordCount1324
matches
0"not with reflection, but with something deeper, like heat haze over pavement"
1"not quite wind, not quite voice, but the deep, resonant chime of bells"
2"not quite voice, but the deep, resonant chime of bells"
3"neither young nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences73
matches
0"saw that he"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs38
mean34.84
std21.43
cv0.615
sampleLengths
039
130
264
360
445
517
63
73
846
916
1033
1186
1217
1329
1434
1567
1631
1723
1884
197
2079
2139
2219
239
2433
2532
2623
2733
2823
2919
3063
3112
3231
3338
349
3543
3646
3739
94.12% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences63
matches
0"was carpeted"
1"been constructed"
45.86% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs173
matches
0"was marking"
1"wasn't just detecting"
2"was trying"
3"was watching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences73
ratio0.123
matches
0"\"Isolde's riddles led me here, but I've never seen a rift this strong.\" She'd been chasing visions—fragmented dreams of amber light and vine-wrapped spires—since accepting the seer's cryptic warning about Prince Belphegor's growing influence."
1"But where the brick wall should have continued, the Heartstone's warmth spiked, and the mortar began to shimmer—not with reflection, but with something deeper, like heat haze over pavement that wasn't hot."
2"Not falling—stepping into a different kind of gravity."
3"The land rolling in every direction was a riot of abundance—grape-laden vines heavy with fruit that glowed with inner light, orchards bearing apples that seemed to pulse with warmth, and gardens where vegetables grew in spirals and patterns that defied natural law."
4"A sound reached them then—not quite wind, not quite voice, but the deep, resonant chime of bells."
5"When they reached the first structure, it revealed itself to be a kitchen of impossible scope, its doors carved from a single slab of wood that bore the marks of countless carvings—fish, fowl, grain, flesh, all rendered in styles that spoke of cultures that had never met."
6"Before Aurora could answer, the Heartstone flared crimson, hot against her skin, and she realized with sudden clarity that the pendant wasn't just detecting the realm—it was marking her presence within it."
7"But Aurora found herself staring at a dish before her—something that had been a chicken, or resembled one, or was trying to be one—and wondering what it would taste like to remember home, to taste familiar things through the lens of excess."
8"Something in her chest—the human part of her, the part that still remembered Cardiff and rain and the taste of proper tea—stirred against the pull of this place of endless desire."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1100
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"pressing cool against her"
1"growing hot against her"
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.04
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.00909090909090909
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences73
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences73
mean18.14
std10.92
cv0.602
sampleLengths
028
111
230
313
434
517
621
721
818
913
1032
1111
126
133
143
158
1638
1716
1818
1915
2013
2142
2231
2311
246
2514
2610
275
2818
2916
3017
3150
3215
3316
3423
3517
3620
3747
387
399
4015
418
4214
4333
4422
4517
4619
476
483
4917
98.63% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.6164383561643836
totalSentences73
uniqueOpeners45
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences61
matches
0"She'd been chasing visions—fragmented dreams"
1"They'd been walking beside Aurora"
2"She stepped forward."
3"She didn't move to retrieve"
4"she murmured, more to herself"
5"She gestured at the impossible"
6"she said to Nyx, and"
7"His eyes held the sheen"
8"he said, and his voice"
9"she said, keeping her voice"
10"It was about appetite, about"
11"Her hand drifted to the"
12"she asked Belphegor"
13"He gestured to the kitchens"
14"They left through the kitchen"
ratio0.246
50.16% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount50
totalSentences61
matches
0"Aurora's breath fogged in the"
1"The pendant pulsed once, faintly,"
2"Nyx's voice drifted from the"
3"Aurora replied, her bright blue"
4"She'd been chasing visions—fragmented dreams"
5"The pendant had grown warmer"
6"Nyx's form shifted, becoming less"
7"They'd been walking beside Aurora"
8"The Shade had offered to"
9"The alley ended at Silas's"
10"Aurora touched the pendant, its"
11"She stepped forward."
12"The world tilted."
13"Nyx's solid form wavered at"
14"Nyx whispered, and their voice"
15"The land rolling in every"
16"Aurora's delivery bag slipped from"
17"She didn't move to retrieve"
18"she murmured, more to herself"
19"She gestured at the impossible"
ratio0.82
81.97% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences61
matches
0"Before Aurora could answer, the"
ratio0.016
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"But where the brick wall should have continued, the Heartstone's warmth spiked, and the mortar began to shimmer—not with reflection, but with something deeper, …"
1"One moment she stood in the familiar grime of London's alleyway, the next she found herself kneeling on grass that felt impossibly soft beneath her knees, the s…"
2"The land rolling in every direction was a riot of abundance—grape-laden vines heavy with fruit that glowed with inner light, orchards bearing apples that seemed…"
3"In the distance, structures rose that might have been towers or kitchens or both, their walls lined with what looked like hanging meats and cheeses that dripped…"
4"From the direction of those distant structures, the sound grew clearer: the clink of silver against porcelain, the low murmur of conversation in languages that …"
5"The Heartstone pulsed against her chest, steady and insistent, as if trying to guide her somewhere."
6"When they reached the first structure, it revealed itself to be a kitchen of impossible scope, its doors carved from a single slab of wood that bore the marks o…"
7"Tables stretched beyond sight, groaning under platters that seemed to multiply when not directly observed."
8"And in the center, beneath a chandelier of crystallized sugar that cast prismatic shadows, stood a figure at a massive stove that might have been constructed fr…"
9"But Aurora found herself staring at a dish before her—something that had been a chicken, or resembled one, or was trying to be one—and wondering what it would t…"
66.18% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she murmured, more to herself than to Nyx"
1"he said, and his voice was the clink of too many silver spoons against too many plates"
1.85% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"Belphegor's smile revealed (reveal)"
3"they murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.296
68.3704%