Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD74F5344S3CNF2M84VQ4WE

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Duration:
10.2s
Cost:
$0.000345
Provider:
Poolside

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Heartstone Pendant throbbed against her chest like a second heartbeat, its crimson glow pulsing in time with something else—something that didn't belong in the human world. Aurora pressed her palm against the cold bark of the ancient oak standing stone, its surface etched with symbols that hadn't been carved by any tool she recognised. Three days ago, she'd found herself standing in this same grove, following a delivery address that led to a door marked only with a crescent moon. Now, she was back. The delivery person from Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress had never shown up. The order had been for something called "Hel's Bargain"—a phrase that made her skin crawl even in the warm glow of her phone's flashlight. The pendant had begun its faint warming as she approached the park's boundary, and now it burned with an urgency that spoke of danger. "Rory?" She whirled around, her bright blue eyes scanning the darkness beyond the standing stones. The voice came from everywhere and nowhere, layered with harmonics that made her teeth ache. "Hello?" Silence stretched between them like a held breath. Aurora's hand moved instinctively to the scar on her left wrist, the crescent-shaped mark from the childhood accident where she'd fallen from the old mill's roof. Pain flared through the scar tissue, though no blade had drawn blood. The grove was wrong in ways she couldn't yet name. The wildflowers that bloomed year-round stood unnaturally still despite the breeze that whispered through the oaks. Their petals didn't dance—they hung suspended, like taxidermy specimens arranged by some meticulous hand. The air itself seemed too thick, pressing against her skin with the weight of deep water. She'd come for answers about the pendant. The unknown benefactor who'd slipped it into her bag three weeks ago hadn't left a note, only a slip of parchment that smelled faintly of iron. Now, as she traced the oak's surface, her fingers found something beneath the moss—a keyhole shaped like a serpent's eye. The pendant flared crimson. A sound made her freeze. Not footsteps, not exactly, but something closer to the scraping of fingernails against glass, multiplied by the distance of a hundred voices. It seemed to emanate from the ground itself, rising through the roots and stones and the very earth beneath her feet. Aurora backed away, her sensible boots crunching on gravel that hadn't been there moments before. The path that should have led back to Richmond Park's entrance was gone, replaced by a wall of thorny brambles that writhed like they were alive. She tried her phone—nothing but dead air where signal should have reached. "Hello? Silas? This is Rory. I'm—" The voice that answered wasn't Silas's gravelly baritone. It was layered now, harmonised with something ancient and wet and hungry. "*Silas*" The bar was empty when she'd left it half an hour ago. Her room above it felt safe, familiar. But the grove had called to her through dreams for the past fortnight—vivid nightmares of being trapped in mirrors, of watching herself from outside her body as something wore her face and smiled with too many teeth. Her breath formed a cloud in the unnatural cold that had crept into the grove despite the warmth of her coat. The pendant's glow had dimmed to a sickly ember, its warmth gone, leaving only the faintest trace of that metallic scent. She needed to get back. To her flat, to Silas's bar, to anywhere that didn't smell of wet stone and old blood. But the grove had other plans. The standing stones began to shift. Not dramatically—they simply moved, their positions adjusting like chess pieces rearranged by an unseen hand. Aurora stumbled backward, her balance betraying her as the ground beneath her feet changed texture from compacted earth to something spongy and yielding. The wildflowers swayed again, and this time she could see that their colours weren't quite right—petals in shades that existed only in nightmares, colours that hurt to look at directly. A sound rose from the darkness beyond the stones—not a voice now, but a chorus of sighs, like the wind through empty rooms, like the sound of someone trying to remember what they'd forgotten. The pendant went dark. Then she heard it—the soft scrape of something moving just beyond her peripheral vision. She forced herself to look, to blink slowly and let her eyes adjust to the darkness, but whenever she focused on anything, the thing at the edge of sight remained just out of reach. Like a shadow that refused to take shape. Her rational mind searched for explanations. Had she walked too far from the path? Was the pendant's warmth affecting her judgment? But the ground beneath her hands was no longer soil and leaf litter—it was smooth, cold stone that felt unnervingly like bone. The sighs became whispers. "*Aurora.*" The name came from everywhere, spoken with voices that were simultaneously familiar and alien. Her own voice, perhaps, but distorted. Twisted. "Who's there?" she demanded, her voice cracking with fear she tried to suppress. "Show yourself!" Silence answered her. But not true silence—the absence of sound that followed true silence, like the pause between heartbeats when something fundamental had stopped working. She looked down at her feet and nearly screamed. Where her sensible black boots had stood moments before, there was now only bare earth. Her shoes had vanished, leaving her standing on the cold ground in her socks and the thin trousers she'd worn for the delivery run. The pendant hung useless at her chest, its light completely extinguished. Behind her, the oak standing stone began to crack. Not splinter or break, but fracture along ancient lines that hadn't been visible before. The bark split open like a mouth opening, revealing not wood or bark or anything that should have been inside, but a darkness so complete it seemed to drink the light around it. The pendant's last ember flickered and died. Aurora's hand flew to her mouth as the thing that had worn her face—her own face—smiled from the depths of the splitting stone. The smile was too wide, too many teeth gleaming in the starlight that had suddenly begun to fall in the wrong direction.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences8
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.90% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1047
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"completely"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
2"completely"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
9.26% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1047
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"etched"
count1
2
word"scanning"
count1
3
word"silence"
count4
4
word"dance"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"traced"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count2
9
word"warmth"
count3
10
word"flickered"
count1
11
word"depths"
count1
12
word"gleaming"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"etched"
2"scanning"
3"silence"
4"dance"
5"weight"
6"traced"
7"footsteps"
8"familiar"
9"warmth"
10"flickered"
11"depths"
12"gleaming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences66
matches
0"g with fear"
12.99% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences66
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences72
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords1033
ratio0.002
matches
0"Silas"
1"Aurora."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount1018
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.49
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Richmond1
Park1
Silas2
Silence2
Aurora5
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Cheung"
3"Empress"
4"Silas"
5"Silence"
6"Aurora"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords4.84
wordCount1033
matches
0"Not footsteps, not exactly, but something closer to the scraping of fingernails against glas"
1"not exactly, but something closer to the scraping of fingernails against glas"
2"not a voice now, but a chorus of sighs, like the wind through empty rooms, like t"
3"Not splinter or break, but fracture along ancient lines"
4"not wood or bark or anything that should have been inside, but a darkness so complete it seemed to drink the light around i"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences72
matches
0"see that their"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean31.3
std23.35
cv0.746
sampleLengths
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260
31
429
51
646
756
853
94
1048
1153
126
1320
141
1556
1642
1728
186
1968
2038
2156
2243
234
241
2521
2615
2725
289
2950
309
3154
3245
84.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences66
matches
0"been carved"
1"was gone"
2"was layered"
3"being trapped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs177
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences72
ratio0.167
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant throbbed against her chest like a second heartbeat, its crimson glow pulsing in time with something else—something that didn't belong in the human world."
1"Their petals didn't dance—they hung suspended, like taxidermy specimens arranged by some meticulous hand."
2"Now, as she traced the oak's surface, her fingers found something beneath the moss—a keyhole shaped like a serpent's eye."
3"She tried her phone—nothing but dead air where signal should have reached."
4"But the grove had called to her through dreams for the past fortnight—vivid nightmares of being trapped in mirrors, of watching herself from outside her body as something wore her face and smiled with too many teeth."
5"Not dramatically—they simply moved, their positions adjusting like chess pieces rearranged by an unseen hand."
6"The wildflowers swayed again, and this time she could see that their colours weren't quite right—petals in shades that existed only in nightmares, colours that hurt to look at directly."
7"A sound rose from the darkness beyond the stones—not a voice now, but a chorus of sighs, like the wind through empty rooms, like the sound of someone trying to remember what they'd forgotten."
8"Then she heard it—the soft scrape of something moving just beyond her peripheral vision."
9"But the ground beneath her hands was no longer soil and leaf litter—it was smooth, cold stone that felt unnervingly like bone."
10"But not true silence—the absence of sound that followed true silence, like the pause between heartbeats when something fundamental had stopped working."
11"Aurora's hand flew to her mouth as the thing that had worn her face—her own face—smiled from the depths of the splitting stone."
91.77% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1034
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"thick, pressing against her"
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.0425531914893617
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.019342359767891684
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences72
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences72
mean14.35
std9.3
cv0.648
sampleLengths
027
128
226
34
412
524
624
71
814
915
101
118
1226
1312
1410
1516
1614
1716
187
1926
2020
214
225
2322
2421
2515
2626
2712
286
298
3012
311
3212
337
3437
3521
3621
375
3817
396
406
4115
4223
4330
4434
454
4614
4734
488
496
54.63% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.3611111111111111
totalSentences72
uniqueOpeners26
51.28% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences65
matches
0"Then she heard it—the soft"
ratio0.015
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences65
matches
0"She whirled around, her bright"
1"Their petals didn't dance—they hung"
2"She'd come for answers about"
3"It seemed to emanate from"
4"She tried her phone—nothing but"
5"It was layered now, harmonised"
6"Her room above it felt"
7"Her breath formed a cloud"
8"She needed to get back."
9"She forced herself to look,"
10"Her rational mind searched for"
11"Her own voice, perhaps, but"
12"she demanded, her voice cracking"
13"She looked down at her"
14"Her shoes had vanished, leaving"
ratio0.231
90.77% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount48
totalSentences65
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant throbbed against"
1"Aurora pressed her palm against"
2"The delivery person from Yu-Fei"
3"The order had been for"
4"The pendant had begun its"
5"She whirled around, her bright"
6"The voice came from everywhere"
7"Silence stretched between them like"
8"Aurora's hand moved instinctively to"
9"Pain flared through the scar"
10"The grove was wrong in"
11"The wildflowers that bloomed year-round"
12"Their petals didn't dance—they hung"
13"The air itself seemed too"
14"She'd come for answers about"
15"The unknown benefactor who'd slipped"
16"The pendant flared crimson."
17"A sound made her freeze."
18"It seemed to emanate from"
19"Aurora backed away, her sensible"
ratio0.738
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences65
matches
0"Now, she was back."
1"Now, as she traced the"
2"To her flat, to Silas's"
ratio0.046
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant throbbed against her chest like a second heartbeat, its crimson glow pulsing in time with something else—something that didn't belong in …"
1"Aurora pressed her palm against the cold bark of the ancient oak standing stone, its surface etched with symbols that hadn't been carved by any tool she recogni…"
2"Three days ago, she'd found herself standing in this same grove, following a delivery address that led to a door marked only with a crescent moon."
3"The wildflowers that bloomed year-round stood unnaturally still despite the breeze that whispered through the oaks."
4"The unknown benefactor who'd slipped it into her bag three weeks ago hadn't left a note, only a slip of parchment that smelled faintly of iron."
5"But the ground beneath her hands was no longer soil and leaf litter—it was smooth, cold stone that felt unnervingly like bone."
6"But not true silence—the absence of sound that followed true silence, like the pause between heartbeats when something fundamental had stopped working."
7"The bark split open like a mouth opening, revealing not wood or bark or anything that should have been inside, but a darkness so complete it seemed to drink the…"
8"Aurora's hand flew to her mouth as the thing that had worn her face—her own face—smiled from the depths of the splitting stone."
9"The smile was too wide, too many teeth gleaming in the starlight that had suddenly begun to fall in the wrong direction."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she demanded, her voice cracking with fear she tried to suppress"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences8
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.25
73.3531%