Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD74TK1NAH8NN3SGKTA8BJ7

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The first thing Aurora noticed was the way the green neon sign above The Raven's Nest cast its distinctive glow across the wet pavement, painting everything in shades of emerald and shadow. She'd walked past this place a hundred times since moving to Soho, never once considering crossing its threshold. But tonight, with the rain drumming against her delivery jacket and her shift ending at the Golden Empress, something compelled her toward the warmth spilling from the doorway. She pushed inside, shaking water from her hair, and scanned the dim interior. Old maps lined the walls alongside black-and-white photographs, creating a atmosphere that felt both foreign and somehow familiar. The scent of aged wood and stale beer wrapped around her as she made her way toward the bar, her boots echoing softly against the worn floorboards. "Evening." The bartender looked up from polishing glasses, his expression neutral but observant. He was older than she expected, with hazel eyes that seemed to take in every detail, grey-streaked auburn hair neatly trimmed, and a silver signet ring that caught the light. A slight limp became apparent as he straightened, one hand briefly supporting himself against the bar. Aurora nodded, approaching the mahogany surface. "Just a whiskey, neat. Make it a good one." As he reached for a bottle, his gaze lingered on her face. Something in his expression shifted, subtle but unmistakable. Recognition flickered across his features like a candle flame catching wind. "You're not from around here." She arched a brow. "Neither are you, really. This place looks like it's been here forever." "Aye, that it has." His movements remained measured, controlled despite whatever stirrings his recognition had awakened. "Name's Silas." "Aurora. Just passing through." "Passing through?" He set down the glass he'd been cleaning, studying her more closely now. "You've got the look of someone who's either running toward something or away from it." That stopped her mid-reach for her phone. She glanced up, meeting his hazel eyes directly. There was intelligence there, sharp and probing, the kind that belonged to someone who'd spent years reading people for a living. Or killing them, depending on the day. "How can you tell?" "The way you hold yourself. Shoulders slightly tense, like you're always ready to bolt. And that jacket—delivery work?" He gestured toward her uniform. "Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress, if I'm not mistaken." She blinked. "Impressive observation. Most people wouldn't notice." "Most people aren't trained to look." He poured two fingers of amber liquid into her glass, the liquid catching the light. "But then again, most people don't carry themselves like they've got ghosts trailing behind them." Something tightened in Aurora's chest. Ghosts. That was one way to put it. She'd left Cardiff three years ago, fleeing an ex-boyfriend who'd turned possessive and violent, carrying nothing but a duffel bag and a promise to her mother that she'd be safe. London had been both salvation and purgatory, delivering her to jobs that barely paid rent and relationships that fizzled before they began. Yet here, in this dimly lit bar with its maps and memories, something felt different. "Trained to look?" she echoed, taking a sip of whiskey that burned down her throat like liquid courage. "Former intelligence work. MI6, before I retired." He slid her glass across the bar. "Though I prefer to think of it as... people-watching with benefits." She studied him then, really studied him. The careful way he moved despite his limp, the silver ring that never left his finger, the way his eyes missed nothing. This wasn't just some random encounter. Something deeper connected them, something neither had acknowledged yet. "You knew me before, didn't you?" The words slipped out before she could stop them. His expression didn't change, but she caught the slight tightening around his eyes. "Did I?" "Don't play dumb with me, Silas." She leaned forward slightly, her voice dropping to a whisper. "We went to university together. Cardiff. You were my father's friend, remember? Brendan Carter—" The color drained from his face, leaving him pale as parchment. For a long moment, he said nothing, his hand freezing halfway through another circular motion with the bar towel. "Brendan's daughter." His voice came out rough, like gravel beneath boots. "Aurora Carter." "Yes." She set her glass down with deliberate calm. "Though I prefer Rory these days. Less formal." He let out a humorless laugh, shaking his head slowly. "Rory. Christ, you were always going to be trouble." "What does that mean?" "Means I watched you grow up thinking you'd end up just like your father—smart, principled, probably bored out of your mind with small-time law practice in Cardiff. Then you disappear, and I hear through the grapevine that you've been... well, let's just say your choices haven't exactly followed the straight and narrow." Her fingers curled around her glass, knuckles whitening. "And what choices would those be?" "Delivery driver by day, flat above a bar owned by a retired spy who happens to be one of my oldest friends. Living under a fake name, avoiding credit checks, dodging paper trails." He paused, studying her profile. "You've learned well." "I learned survival." "From who?" She hesitated, weighing her words carefully. The rain continued its steady percussion against the windows, providing a convenient soundtrack to their conversation. "From experience, mostly. Some things you don't forget." Like the night Evan had grabbed her wrist hard enough to leave bruises, the taste of copper in her mouth when she bit down hard on his hand to escape. The way her father's face had crumpled when she'd finally confessed what was happening, his own hands shaking with rage and helplessness. The decision to leave everything behind, including university, including law school, including any chance of returning home without shame. Silas watched her reaction, his expression softening just slightly. "Evan." "Don't." She straightened, meeting his gaze squarely. "Don't pretend like you cared about me then. You were too busy playing spy games to notice when your 'friend's daughter' was falling apart." "I noticed plenty." His jaw clenched, betraying emotion he tried to suppress. "But sometimes noticing isn't enough. Sometimes the cost of intervention outweighs the benefit." "Convenient." "It's honest." He reached across the bar, placing his hand flat on the surface between them. "Look, Rory—I mean, Aurora—I didn't know how to reach you. Not properly. And when I did hear what was happening, I made the mistake of thinking you'd handle it yourself. Pride, maybe. Stubbornness. Things your father instilled in you." She stared at his hand where it rested so casually on the wood, remembering all those evenings spent at their family dinner table, him laughing with her parents, offering advice about everything from career paths to boyfriends. How could he sit here now, pretending this reunion was anything other than a collision of past and present? "And now?" she asked quietly. Now he looked older, weathered in ways that went beyond simple aging. Lines etched themselves around his eyes, his mouth, his brow—all the marks of someone who'd seen too much and lived to regret it. But beneath the surface, she sensed something else: guilt, perhaps, or responsibility finally catching up with him. "Now I see you've built yourself a life worth protecting." He picked up his own glass, nodding toward hers. "Which means either you're braver than I gave you credit for, or foolhardy beyond repair." She smiled then, sharp and bitter. "Probably both." "Fair enough." He drained his drink, then gestured toward the back room accessible through the bookshelf behind him. "Care to continue this conversation somewhere a bit more private? I suspect we've got a lot to catch up on." Aurora considered this, weighing the risks against the potential rewards. Trust wasn't easy to give anymore, especially to people who'd failed her in the past. But something in his tone suggested genuine remorse, genuine desire to make amends. "Alright," she said finally. "But on one condition." "Name it." "If this turns into another one of your intelligence briefings, I'm walking out." He chuckled, low and warm. "No promises." She followed him into the shadows, leaving behind the rain-soaked streets and whatever future awaited her there. Whatever secrets they uncovered together would have to wait until morning. For now, there was only this moment—this chance to bridge the gap between who they'd been and who they'd become. And maybe, just maybe, to heal some old wounds along the way.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she asked quietly [quietly]"
1"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.352
leniency0.704
rawRatio0.105
effectiveRatio0.074
71.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1408
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count2
2
adverb"slightly"
count3
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"really"
2"slightly"
3"slowly"
4"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.84% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1408
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"echoing"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"echoed"
count1
7
word"encounter"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count1
9
word"jaw clenched"
count1
10
word"etched"
count1
11
word"potential"
count1
12
word"desire"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"scanned"
2"familiar"
3"echoing"
4"flickered"
5"measured"
6"echoed"
7"encounter"
8"whisper"
9"jaw clenched"
10"etched"
11"potential"
12"desire"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences72
matches
0"g with rage"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences72
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences107
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1402
ratio0
matches(empty)
89.29% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"For a long moment, he said nothing, his hand freezing halfway through another circular motion with the bar towel."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions11
wordCount952
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.42
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora4
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff1
Evan1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Raven"
2"Evan"
places
0"Soho"
1"Golden"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1402
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean26.96
std20.73
cv0.769
sampleLengths
078
158
259
315
431
55
616
718
84
930
1043
114
1231
138
1436
1580
1618
1725
1844
1915
2015
2130
2230
2313
2417
2519
264
2752
2814
2941
303
312
3230
3371
3410
3531
3625
371
3855
3956
405
4152
4234
438
4438
4538
468
472
4813
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences72
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs171
matches
0"was happening"
89.45% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences107
ratio0.019
matches
0"Lines etched themselves around his eyes, his mouth, his brow—all the marks of someone who'd seen too much and lived to regret it."
1"For now, there was only this moment—this chance to bridge the gap between who they'd been and who they'd become."
96.92% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount959
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.04171011470281543
lyAdverbCount21
lyAdverbRatio0.021897810218978103
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences107
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences107
mean13.1
std9.31
cv0.711
sampleLengths
032
118
228
313
418
527
613
730
816
96
109
1112
128
1311
145
154
1612
1716
182
194
2015
2115
227
238
2421
257
264
2723
288
292
306
3121
3215
335
341
357
3630
3722
3815
3918
4014
4111
427
4322
446
459
4615
4713
482
4916
96.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5887850467289719
totalSentences107
uniqueOpeners63
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
ratio0
37.14% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences70
matches
0"She'd walked past this place"
1"She pushed inside, shaking water"
2"He was older than she"
3"She arched a brow."
4"His movements remained measured, controlled"
5"He set down the glass"
6"She glanced up, meeting his"
7"He gestured toward her uniform"
8"He poured two fingers of"
9"She'd left Cardiff three years"
10"she echoed, taking a sip"
11"He slid her glass across"
12"She studied him then, really"
13"His expression didn't change, but"
14"She leaned forward slightly, her"
15"His voice came out rough,"
16"She set her glass down"
17"He let out a humorless"
18"Her fingers curled around her"
19"He paused, studying her profile"
ratio0.457
60.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences70
matches
0"The first thing Aurora noticed"
1"She'd walked past this place"
2"She pushed inside, shaking water"
3"The scent of aged wood"
4"The bartender looked up from"
5"He was older than she"
6"A slight limp became apparent"
7"Aurora nodded, approaching the mahogany"
8"Something in his expression shifted,"
9"Recognition flickered across his features"
10"She arched a brow."
11"His movements remained measured, controlled"
12"He set down the glass"
13"That stopped her mid-reach for"
14"She glanced up, meeting his"
15"He gestured toward her uniform"
16"He poured two fingers of"
17"Something tightened in Aurora's chest."
18"That was one way to"
19"She'd left Cardiff three years"
ratio0.8
71.43% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"Now he looked older, weathered"
ratio0.014
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Old maps lined the walls alongside black-and-white photographs, creating a atmosphere that felt both foreign and somehow familiar."
1"He was older than she expected, with hazel eyes that seemed to take in every detail, grey-streaked auburn hair neatly trimmed, and a silver signet ring that cau…"
2"There was intelligence there, sharp and probing, the kind that belonged to someone who'd spent years reading people for a living."
3"She'd left Cardiff three years ago, fleeing an ex-boyfriend who'd turned possessive and violent, carrying nothing but a duffel bag and a promise to her mother t…"
4"London had been both salvation and purgatory, delivering her to jobs that barely paid rent and relationships that fizzled before they began."
5"She stared at his hand where it rested so casually on the wood, remembering all those evenings spent at their family dinner table, him laughing with her parents…"
6"Now he looked older, weathered in ways that went beyond simple aging."
7"Lines etched themselves around his eyes, his mouth, his brow—all the marks of someone who'd seen too much and lived to regret it."
46.05% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"The bartender looked up, his expression neutral but observant"
1"He poured, the liquid catching the light"
2"She leaned, her voice dropping to a whisper"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.037
leniency0.074
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.7324%