Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD76XVF1QZ6ZFZ15K5F0TE2

Run Details

Model:: Laguna XS 2.1
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 9.3s
Cost:: $0.000275
Provider:: Poolside

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
88.89%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
82.27%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
29.08%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
0.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
33.59%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
93.16%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
70.97%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
100.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
77.93%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
0.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
69.44%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
0.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
64.8444%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

The heavy oak door gave way with a groan that seemed to echo from somewhere far beneath the earth. Aurora stepped aside, her boots scraping against stone that wasn't quite stone—more like compressed shadow given form. Nyx followed, their presence seeming to bend the darkness around them, while Isolde brought up the rear, her silver hair catching light that shouldn't exist in such depths.

"You're certain this is the right place?" Aurora asked, her bright blue eyes scanning the entrance corridor. The walls pulsed with a faint amber glow, like veins of liquid gold running through dark rock.

Isolde's pale lavender eyes gleamed as she traced a pattern in the air with an invisible finger. "The Veil grows thin here. The stones sing of winter's turning."

Nyx's violet gaze flickered along the walls. "They were never stones. Not truly." Their voice carried the weight of centuries. "Not in the old tongue's telling."

The corridor widened into a vast chamber where the ceiling disappeared into darkness studded with points of light that moved when Aurora wasn't looking directly at them. Vines heavy with fruit of impossible colors draped from unseen heights, their leaves whispering in a language that made Aurora's teeth ache.

"What are they?" Aurora muttered, reaching for the Heartstone pendant that hung warm against her chest. The crimson gem pulsed in response, its faint inner glow intensifying as if acknowledging something deep within the chamber.

"Food," Isolde said simply. "But not as mortals know it."

A low sound began to emanate from the shadows—rhythmic, almost musical. Aurora found herself unconsciously stepping in time with it. The vines swayed, and from within their depths came the scent of something rich and spoiled and wonderful all at once. Wine? Meat? Aurora couldn't tell, and the uncertainty made her throat tight.

Nyx moved forward, their form shifting between solid and translucent as they passed through a curtain of vines that didn't resist but seemed to welcome their passage. Where they emerged, the floor changed texture—from stone to something softer, yielding like packed earth mixed with moss.

"The gardens," Isolde whispered. "Dymas remembers you."

Aurora's hand instinctively went to the Fae blade at her hip. The moonsilver dagger felt unnaturally cold despite the warmth radiating from the pendant. "Dymas is supposed to be a realm, not a place we can walk into."

"Realms are just old words," Nyx said, their form solidifying near a cluster of fruit that glowed like captured sunset. "Boundaries are thinner than your skin, mortal."

One of the fruits detached itself from its branch and floated toward Aurora. It pulsed with the same amber light as the walls, and when Aurora reached toward it, her reflection appeared in its surface—not her own face, but a version of herself wearing a crown of thorns and wine.

She jerked her hand back.

"Do not fear the reflection that shows what is, child." Isolde's voice carried an edge that made Aurora glance toward the seer. "The realm chooses its visitors. What it sees, it remembers."

The ground tilted slightly, and Aurora caught herself against the wall. The amber light seemed to breathe now, expanding and contracting in time with some unseen heartbeat. Sounds layered upon sounds—the whisper of vines, the drip of something that might have been water, the distant clink of cutlery against plate, and beneath it all, a rhythm like a great heart beating in time with the world itself.

Nyx had moved to the center of the chamber. "There is a chef here," they announced, their voice carrying an odd resonance, as if speaking from a great distance and right next to her all at once. "He waits for those who know the taste of longing."

Aurora followed their gaze to where two figures were engaged in what appeared to be preparing a feast—except their movements were too precise, too fluid, as if they were painting rather than cooking. The ingredients they worked with defied description: meat that shifted colors as it was sliced, vegetables that sang softly as they were chopped, grains that seemed to absorb the light around them rather than reflect it.

"They're not human," Isolde observed, approaching with careful steps. "Not entirely. Not anymore."

One of the figures turned. It wore a chef's coat over what might have been human flesh, but the skin showed the telltale signs of binding—straps of something that looked like sin holding armor in place. Its face was mostly hidden behind a mask, but when it smiled, Aurora could see eyes that held the same amber light as the walls.

"You've come for the competition," the masked figure said, and their voice made Aurora's teeth ache again. "The winter solstice weakens the Veil, and hunger grows stronger."

Aurora's hand tightened on her blade. "We're not here to compete."

"Are not we?" The chef's smile widened. "Yet you stand in the Hall of Tasting, where judgments are served with the dishes. The realm knows your names, child. Do you know what it remembers?"

Isolde stepped forward, her bare feet making no sound on the yielding floor. "The pendant," she said carefully. "The Heartstone. It remembers too."

The chef's mask shifted, revealing a flash of something that wasn't face at all—just a smooth expanse of shadow with two points of light where eyes might be. "Ah. The collector."

Aurora felt the pendant grow hot against her chest, its warmth seeping through her tunic. The amber light from the walls intensified, and for a moment she could see through to other places—other rooms filled with more of those impossible fruits, more figures moving in rhythms that made her dizzy.

"What do you want?" she asked, but her voice sounded strange to her own ears.

"Hunger," the chef replied. "Always hunger. But perhaps," they added, glancing at Nyx, "there are different kinds of hunger. Different kinds of satiation."

Nyx's form flickered, becoming less solid, more shadow. "I have tasted the void between heartbeats," they said, and Aurora wondered if they were talking about the space between dining and digestion, or something much older.

Isolde moved closer to Aurora, her lavender eyes studying the pendant's glow. "The Veil remembers," she murmured, more to herself than anyone. "And it hungers for its own truths to be spoken."

Above them, the ceiling seemed to shift, revealing glimpses of starlight that wasn't quite starlight—more like the eyes of something vast and dreaming. The vines swayed in time with a music Aurora couldn't hear but felt in her bones, and she realized with sudden certainty that she would not be leaving this place until it decided she had had her fill of whatever it offered.

"Well," Aurora said, lowering her blade with deliberate slowness. "This is educational."

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

88.89%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Isolde said simply [simply]"
1	"she said carefully [carefully]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.529

leniency

rawRatio

0.111

effectiveRatio

0.111

82.27%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1128

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"truly"
count	1

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

adverb	"softly"
count	1

adverb	"carefully"
count	1

highlights

0	"truly"
1	"slightly"
2	"softly"
3	"carefully"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

29.08%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1128

totalAiIsms

found

word	"echo"
count	1

word	"depths"
count	2

word	"scanning"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	3

word	"traced"
count	1

word	"flickered"
count	2

word	"carried the weight"
count	1

word	"rhythmic"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	2

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"resonance"
count	1

highlights

0	"echo"
1	"depths"
2	"scanning"
3	"pulsed"
4	"traced"
5	"flickered"
6	"carried the weight"
7	"rhythmic"
8	"warmth"
9	"whisper"
10	"resonance"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	58
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"
1	"began to"
2	"appeared to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	74
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	42
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1118
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	17
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

33.59%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

902

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

2.33

worstName

"Aurora"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Aurora"

discoveredNames

Isolde	8
Aurora	21
Heartstone	1
Fae	1
One	2
Nyx	7

persons

0	"Isolde"
1	"Aurora"
2	"Nyx"

places

"Fae"

globalScore

0.336

windowScore

0.667

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"groan that seemed to echo from somewhere far beneath the earth"
1	"quite stone—more like compressed shadow given form"
2	"as if acknowledging something deep within the chamber"
3	"as if speaking from a great distance and right next to her all at once"
4	"grains that seemed to absorb the light around them rather than reflect it"
5	"looked like sin holding armor in place"
6	"quite starlight—more like the eyes of something vast and dreaming"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

0.894

wordCount

1118

matches

0	"not her own face, but a version of herself wearing a crown of thorns"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	74
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

34.94

std

18.29

0.523

sampleLengths

0	64
1	34
2	28
3	26
4	49
5	35
6	10
7	53
8	45
9	7
10	38
11	27
12	50
13	5
14	32
15	67
16	47
17	69
18	13
19	61
20	27
21	11
22	34
23	23
24	31
25	50
26	15
27	23
28	35
29	32
30	65
31	12

93.16%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"were engaged"
1	"was sliced"
2	"were chopped"

70.97%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

155

matches

0	"wasn't looking"
1	"were painting"
2	"were talking"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.135

matches

0	"Aurora stepped aside, her boots scraping against stone that wasn't quite stone—more like compressed shadow given form."
1	"A low sound began to emanate from the shadows—rhythmic, almost musical."
2	"Where they emerged, the floor changed texture—from stone to something softer, yielding like packed earth mixed with moss."
3	"It pulsed with the same amber light as the walls, and when Aurora reached toward it, her reflection appeared in its surface—not her own face, but a version of herself wearing a crown of thorns and wine."
4	"Sounds layered upon sounds—the whisper of vines, the drip of something that might have been water, the distant clink of cutlery against plate, and beneath it all, a rhythm like a great heart beating in time with the world itself."
5	"Aurora followed their gaze to where two figures were engaged in what appeared to be preparing a feast—except their movements were too precise, too fluid, as if they were painting rather than cooking."
6	"It wore a chef's coat over what might have been human flesh, but the skin showed the telltale signs of binding—straps of something that looked like sin holding armor in place."
7	"The chef's mask shifted, revealing a flash of something that wasn't face at all—just a smooth expanse of shadow with two points of light where eyes might be."
8	"The amber light from the walls intensified, and for a moment she could see through to other places—other rooms filled with more of those impossible fruits, more figures moving in rhythms that made her dizzy."
9	"Above them, the ceiling seemed to shift, revealing glimpses of starlight that wasn't quite starlight—more like the eyes of something vast and dreaming."

100.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	912
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	32
adverbRatio	0.03508771929824561
lyAdverbCount	9
lyAdverbRatio	0.009868421052631578

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	74
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

15.11

std

10.01

0.663

sampleLengths

0	19
1	17
2	28
3	17
4	17
5	17
6	11
7	7
8	13
9	6
10	27
11	22
12	16
13	19
14	4
15	6
16	11
17	9
18	21
19	1
20	1
21	10
22	27
23	18
24	4
25	3
26	11
27	13
28	14
29	20
30	7
31	13
32	37
33	5
34	22
35	10
36	11
37	16
38	40
39	9
40	28
41	10
42	33
43	36
44	9
45	4
46	5
47	31
48	25
49	17

77.93%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	4
diversityRatio	0.5
totalSentences	74
uniqueOpeners	37

0.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount	0
totalSentences	55
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Their voice carried the weight"
1	"It pulsed with the same"
2	"She jerked her hand back."
3	"they announced, their voice carrying"
4	"It wore a chef's coat"
5	"Its face was mostly hidden"
6	"she said carefully"
7	"she asked, but her voice"
8	"they added, glancing at Nyx"
9	"they said, and Aurora wondered"
10	"she murmured, more to herself"

ratio

0.2

0.00%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The heavy oak door gave"
1	"Aurora stepped aside, her boots"
2	"Nyx followed, their presence seeming"
3	"Aurora asked, her bright blue"
4	"The walls pulsed with a"
5	"Isolde's pale lavender eyes gleamed"
6	"Nyx's violet gaze flickered along"
7	"Their voice carried the weight"
8	"The corridor widened into a"
9	"Vines heavy with fruit of"
10	"Aurora muttered, reaching for the"
11	"The crimson gem pulsed in"
12	"Isolde said simply"
13	"A low sound began to"
14	"Aurora found herself unconsciously stepping"
15	"The vines swayed, and from"
16	"Aurora couldn't tell, and the"
17	"Nyx moved forward, their form"
18	"Aurora's hand instinctively went to"
19	"The moonsilver dagger felt unnaturally"

ratio

0.927

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	55
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The heavy oak door gave way with a groan that seemed to echo from somewhere far beneath the earth."
1	"Nyx followed, their presence seeming to bend the darkness around them, while Isolde brought up the rear, her silver hair catching light that shouldn't exist in …"
2	"Vines heavy with fruit of impossible colors draped from unseen heights, their leaves whispering in a language that made Aurora's teeth ache."
3	"The crimson gem pulsed in response, its faint inner glow intensifying as if acknowledging something deep within the chamber."
4	"Nyx moved forward, their form shifting between solid and translucent as they passed through a curtain of vines that didn't resist but seemed to welcome their pa…"
5	"Sounds layered upon sounds—the whisper of vines, the drip of something that might have been water, the distant clink of cutlery against plate, and beneath it al…"
6	"Aurora followed their gaze to where two figures were engaged in what appeared to be preparing a feast—except their movements were too precise, too fluid, as if …"
7	"It wore a chef's coat over what might have been human flesh, but the skin showed the telltale signs of binding—straps of something that looked like sin holding …"
8	"The chef's mask shifted, revealing a flash of something that wasn't face at all—just a smooth expanse of shadow with two points of light where eyes might be."
9	"The amber light from the walls intensified, and for a moment she could see through to other places—other rooms filled with more of those impossible fruits, more…"
10	"Above them, the ceiling seemed to shift, revealing glimpses of starlight that wasn't quite starlight—more like the eyes of something vast and dreaming."

69.44%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"she asked, but her voice sounded strange to her own ears"
1	"she murmured, more to herself than anyone"

0.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
1	"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
2	"they announced (announce)"
3	"Isolde observed (observe)"
4	"they added (add)"
5	"she murmured (murmur)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.441

leniency

0.882

rawRatio

0.4

effectiveRatio

0.353

64.8444%