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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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"You still do that thing with your wrist when you lie." Rory froze with her hand on the tap. The glass under it overflowed. She knew that voice before she placed it, which was the worse part. Cardiff, flat vowels gone soft at the edges from trying too hard to sound like London. "Eva." Eva Rhys stood at the bar of the Raven's Nest like she owned the lease. Not the Eva who slept on Rory's bedroom floor at fifteen, stealing her father's battered law textbooks to build a fort. This woman wore a lovely dark navy wool coat that probably cost more than three months of Rory's rent. Her hair was cut sharp at her jaw. Her nails were clean, short, expensive. Silas didn't look up from polishing a glass at the far end. His hazel eyes flicked to Rory, then to Eva, then back down. He catalogued. "I thought you'd be taller," Eva said. Rory pulled her hand back. The small crescent scar on her left wrist caught the low light. Water dripped from the overfilled pint onto her trainers. "You cut your hair," Rory said. "You ran away." The words landed louder than Eva meant. A bloke two stools down shifted. Silas set his glass down with a soft click. The green neon from the sign outside bled through the window and painted Eva's coat in sickly light. Rory wiped her hands on the bar rag. Her fingers stayed steady. Cool-headed. That was the trick. You let other people fill silence until they choked on it. "I left," Rory said. "You told me to." Eva smiled. It didn't reach her eyes. "I told you to come to London. I didn't tell you to vanish." Eva slid onto a stool. She moved like someone who expected seats to be kept warm for her. She unbuttoned her coat and Rory saw the suit underneath, charcoal, precise. The old Eva lived in thrifted band t-shirts and had a chipped front tooth from falling off a climbing frame. This one had perfect teeth. Silas drifted closer. His left leg dragged a fraction, that slight limp from Prague he never spoke about, and his right hand, the one with the silver signet ring, rested on the bar between them. "What'll you have?" he asked. Eva looked at him, surprised to be addressed by staff. "White wine. Whatever's dry." "House white's vinegar," Silas said. "You want water. Or you want to tell your friend why you're here." Eva's mouth tightened. Rory shot Silas a look. He gave her a minute tilt of his chin. *Your table. Your problem. I'm here.* "You own this place now?" Eva asked Rory. "I live upstairs. I work for Golden Empress. I help Silas sometimes." "Yu-Fei's place. God." Eva laughed. The sound was polished. "You studied three years of Pre-Law and you deliver noodles." "Four. And I finished. You left after second year." Silas poured Eva's wine anyway and placed it down without a word. He moved away, but not far. He started restacking old coasters under a faded black and white photograph of Soho in the seventies. Close enough to hear. Eva took a sip and winced. "He was right then," she said. "Who?" "Brendan. Your dad. Said you'd never use that brain for anything useful." Rory felt the old sting and then nothing. That was the good thing about time, it numbed the precise spots. "My dad also said Evan was a nice boy," Rory said. That killed the smile completely. Eva wrapped both hands around the glass. Her knuckles were white. "I saw him last month." "Evan." "He came to the firm. Asking questions." Rory's stomach dropped, but her face held. "Which firm?" "Hartley and Stone. I'm a junior associate now. Property disputes, mostly." Eva said it like she rehearsed it in mirrors. "He knew I knew you. He asked for an address." The bar felt suddenly too dim, too close. The old maps on the walls seemed to crowd in. Rory smelled old beer and lemon cleaner and Eva's perfume, something sharp and citrus that didn't belong in the Nest. "You didn't." "Of course not." Eva looked offended. "I told him you were in Manchester." Rory let out a breath she hadn't realised she held. "Thank you." "Don't." Eva stared at the row of bottles behind the bar. "Do you remember what you said to me? Last night in Cardiff? In the kitchen after he hit you?" Rory's left hand found her right wrist. Thumb over scar tissue. "You told me I was weak," Eva said. "You said I let people walk all over me because I liked being needed." "I didn't mean that." "You did. You were always good at saying the true, ugly thing nicely." Eva finally looked at her again. Her bright, hard eyes were wet now. "You told me to stop playing rescue dog. Then you called me at two in the morning three weeks later and asked me to find you a flat in London. And I did. And then you wouldn't answer my calls." Rory swallowed. The delivery thermal bag by the door smelled faintly of chilli oil and garlic. Yu-Fei would dock her pay if she was late. "I was ashamed," Rory said. "Of what? Him? Me?" "Of me. The way I left." Eva knocked back the rest of the wine in one swallow. Her composure cracked, just for a second, and there was fifteen-year-old Eva again, furious and hurt and trying not to cry in Rory's mother's kitchen while Jennifer Carter made too sweet tea in the background. "You left me there," Eva said, quieter now. "With him still in town. With everyone asking. You think Cardiff is big? You think people didn't think I'd helped you cheat on him?" "I know." "He told everyone you were unstable. That you'd stolen money. That your mum had to send you away." Eva's voice thinned. "Brendan believed him. For a while." Rory's hand clenched. The scar pulled. "I should have called." "You should have done a lot of things, Rory." Silas coughed, once, low. A warning. The front door chimed. Cold air pushed in from Dean Street, carrying traffic noise and rain that hadn't been mentioned until now. A man stepped inside, shook out his umbrella. He wore a dark wax jacket Rory recognised because Yu-Fei made her wear the same one for deliveries. He didn't look at the bar. He looked at his phone, then at Eva, then at Rory. Eva sat up straight. Too straight. "That's not," Rory started. "It's not him," Eva said quickly. "It's—" The man lifted his phone. He showed the screen to Eva with his thumb still over the text. Rory caught two words before Eva blocked it with her hand. *She's here.* Eva's face went bloodless. She shoved her stool back. It scraped. "Eva, what did you do?" "I told them you wouldn't run if I talked to you first." Eva grabbed Rory's wrist, fingers cold around the scar. "Listen to me. Evan hired someone. He owes money in Cardiff and he told them you took it when you left. Men's money, Rory, not stupid student loan stuff. I came to warn you. I swear I came to warn you." The man by the door wasn't coming closer. He held the door open. A second shape filled the doorway behind him. Taller. Black coat dripping. Shoulders broad under it. He stepped into the green light of the sign and Silas went completely still behind the bar, his hand disappearing under the wood where he kept the panic button that didn't call the police. Rory didn't need to see the face to know the walk. Evan smiled at her like no time had passed at all. "Hello, Laila."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva said quickly [quickly]"
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.345
leniency0.691
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.036
84.57% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1296
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"completely"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"suddenly"
2"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1296
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"flicked"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"perfect"
count1
3
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"silence"
2"perfect"
3"stomach"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
1
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
1"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences112
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences112
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences147
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords8
totalWords1296
ratio0.006
matches
0"Your table. Your problem. I'm here."
1"She's here."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions30
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions81
wordCount872
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity3.78
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
London1
Rhys1
Raven1
Nest2
Eva33
Rory27
Prague1
Silas8
Soho1
Jennifer1
Carter1
Dean1
Street1
Yu-Fei2
persons
0"Rhys"
1"Raven"
2"Eva"
3"Rory"
4"Silas"
5"Jennifer"
6"Carter"
7"Yu-Fei"
places
0"London"
1"Nest"
2"Prague"
3"Soho"
4"Dean"
5"Street"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1296
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences147
matches
0"knew that voice"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean16.62
std16.66
cv1.003
sampleLengths
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113
229
31
469
526
67
726
86
93
1040
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128
137
1413
1555
1635
175
1810
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2018
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238
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2519
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296
301
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3311
345
3511
365
371
387
397
402
4130
4238
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4413
4510
462
4730
4811
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100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences112
matches
0"been mentioned"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs165
matches
0"wasn't coming"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences147
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount877
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.03420752565564424
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.010262257696693273
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences147
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences147
mean8.82
std7.35
cv0.834
sampleLengths
011
18
25
313
416
51
615
721
819
98
106
1112
1212
132
147
155
1612
179
186
193
207
216
229
2318
248
254
261
274
2811
294
304
312
325
3313
345
3513
3612
3720
385
393
4032
415
4210
434
445
4513
463
475
489
492
41.84% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.29931972789115646
totalSentences147
uniqueOpeners44
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences89
matches
0"She knew that voice before"
1"Her hair was cut sharp"
2"Her nails were clean, short,"
3"His hazel eyes flicked to"
4"Her fingers stayed steady."
5"You let other people fill"
6"It didn't reach her eyes."
7"She moved like someone who"
8"She unbuttoned her coat and"
9"His left leg dragged a"
10"He gave her a minute"
11"He moved away, but not"
12"He started restacking old coasters"
13"Her knuckles were white."
14"Her bright, hard eyes were"
15"Her composure cracked, just for"
16"He wore a dark wax"
17"He didn't look at the"
18"He looked at his phone,"
19"He showed the screen to"
ratio0.258
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount85
totalSentences89
matches
0"Rory froze with her hand"
1"The glass under it overflowed."
2"She knew that voice before"
3"Cardiff, flat vowels gone soft"
4"Eva Rhys stood at the"
5"This woman wore a lovely"
6"Her hair was cut sharp"
7"Her nails were clean, short,"
8"Silas didn't look up from"
9"His hazel eyes flicked to"
10"Rory pulled her hand back."
11"The small crescent scar on"
12"Water dripped from the overfilled"
13"The words landed louder than"
14"A bloke two stools down"
15"Silas set his glass down"
16"The green neon from the"
17"Rory wiped her hands on"
18"Her fingers stayed steady."
19"That was the trick."
ratio0.955
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
ratio0
77.92% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Not the Eva who slept on Rory's bedroom floor at fifteen, stealing her father's battered law textbooks to build a fort."
1"Rory smelled old beer and lemon cleaner and Eva's perfume, something sharp and citrus that didn't belong in the Nest."
2"He stepped into the green light of the sign and Silas went completely still behind the bar, his hand disappearing under the wood where he kept the panic button …"
98.68% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Eva grabbed, fingers cold around the scar"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Eva laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.255
leniency0.509
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.036
81.8082%