Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD7BV7Y9R7C8VKX5R9QRPVD

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Duration:
1m 39s
Cost:
$0.039101
Provider:
Moonshot AI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped from Rory's hand and shattered in the sink. "Steady," Silas said from the other end of the bar, not looking up from his ledger. "Draft from the door." She fished out the shards, wrapped them in a bar towel. Her shift at the Golden Empress had ended two hours ago, but the smell of sesame oil still clung to her sleeves, and Silas had waved her onto a stool with the wordless nod that meant the whisky was coming whether she wanted it or not. The Raven's Nest sat near empty at this hour. Two regulars hunched over pints beneath a yellowed map of the Balkans, and the green neon from the window painted their knuckles the colour of canal water. The door opened again. Rory registered heels first. Then perfume, expensive, the kind that arrived three seconds before its owner. Then a voice she hadn't heard in four years, laughing at something on a phone. "No, babe, I've found it, it's some little place off Greek Street. I'll grab one drink and cab back." The laugh died mid-breath. Rory turned on the stool. Eva Brennan stood in the doorway with her phone still pressed to her ear, and for a moment neither of them moved. The Eva in Rory's head wore scuffed Docs and a bomber jacket with a Clash patch coming loose at the shoulder. This Eva wore a cream coat that probably cost more than Rory's rent, hair blown out in glossy waves, a small diamond catching the neon on her left hand. "Rory?" "Christ." Eva lowered the phone. "I'll call you back." She ended the call without waiting for an answer. "Rory Carter. No. No, you do not get to be sitting there." Silas set the whisky in front of Rory and retreated towards the till with the unhurried pace of a man who'd spent thirty years knowing when to become furniture. Eva crossed the bar in six strides and grabbed Rory by both shoulders, studying her face like she expected it to peel. Up close, the polish held. Even her nails matched her coat. "Four years," Eva said. "Four years, and you're working for Silas Blackwood?" "I deliver for a restaurant. Silas is my landlord." Rory's heart hammered somewhere behind her ribs. "What are you doing in Soho?" "Conference. Legaltech, don't ask." Eva slid onto the next stool and ordered a Sauvignon Blanc without glancing at the menu, then caught herself. "Sorry. Do you even do wine by the glass here?" "We manage," Silas said, and produced a glass that he polished once before pouring, a small ceremony he performed for no one else. Eva watched him with the quick assessment of someone who catalogued exits. Old habit. Rory recognised it because she'd learned it from the same teacher. "So." Eva turned back. "You're alive, then." "I'm alive." "Because your mum told me you were alive. That's how I knew. Jennifer Carter, at the Co-op in Llandaff, telling me my best friend since we were six is alive, like she's confirming a reservation." The whisky burned going down. Rory set the glass on the bar and turned it a quarter circle. "I rang you. After I got settled. You were in Portugal." "For ten days, four years ago." "Then I rang again and it went to voicemail, and then it felt like the window had closed." She rotated the glass another quarter. "Every month it got heavier. You know how it is." "I don't, actually. I've never done a vanishing act." Eva's wine arrived and she drank half of it in one go, the polish cracking just enough to show the Cardiff girl underneath. "You left in the middle of the night, Rory. I gave you the coach fare and drove you to the station, and then nothing. I spent a year wondering if Evan had found you. If he'd," she stopped, swallowed. "I kept his number in my phone just so I'd know if he was calling. Do you understand what that did to me?" Silas had drifted to the far end of the bar with a crate of tonic water, moving slower than the job required. "You understand why I couldn't," Rory said. "I understand why you left. I don't understand why I got left too." The neon buzzed. One of the regulars laughed at something, a wet, phlegmy sound, and the bar settled back into its dim hum. Eva turned her wine glass by the stem. The diamond flashed green. "You're wearing a ring," Rory said. Eva's hand stilled. "You're sharp. You always were." "Who is he?" "A solicitor. Property, mostly. He's in the conference too, that's why we're up." A smile flickered and didn't hold. "His name's Marcus. He's nothing like, you know. He puts the bins out. He cries at adverts. When he argues he goes quiet and makes tea, and at first I thought that meant he was dangerous, because that's what I learned from watching you two, and now I know it just means he's kind." Rory looked at the ring properly then. Modest stone. Chosen by someone who wanted to marry her, not display her. "You'd hate the wedding," Eva said. "It's in a barn. There are going to be jars with fairy lights." "You're right, I'd hate it." And despite everything, Rory laughed, one short bark that surprised them both, and Eva laughed too, and for three seconds they were seventeen again, sharing stolen cider on the barrage, and then it passed. "You could come," Eva said. "Eva." "I know. I know." She traced a ring of condensation on the bar top. "I wanted to say it anyway. I wanted to say it so that in ten years, when I'm fat and furious and he's snoring on the sofa, I can remember I asked." "You won't be fat and furious." "I'll be furious." Eva finished her wine. "The fat's negotiable." Silas returned and refilled Eva's glass unasked. She thanked him and he gave her the small nod he reserved for people he decided he approved of, then limped back to his ledger. Eva lowered her voice. "Can I tell you something without you bolting for the stairs?" Rory's hand found her left wrist, thumb pressing the little crescent scar. An old reflex. "That depends." "Evan's not in Cardiff any more." The bar didn't change. The neon kept buzzing, the regulars kept drinking, Silas kept scratching figures into his ledger. But the temperature of Rory's blood dropped a degree, and from the way Silas's pen paused, half a second, she knew he'd heard. "He moved to Bristol two years ago," Eva went on. "Then Reading. He's a lettings manager now, some chain. He does marathons. His whole Facebook is medals and foam rollers." Her voice stayed light, and her hand had gone white around the glass stem. "And last spring I ran into his sister at a christening, and she said, aren't they funny, these coincidences, she said Evan's firm is opening a London office. Central. He's been shortlisted to run it." Rory stood up. The stool scraped loud against the floorboards and both regulars looked round. "Sit down," Eva said. "You've known this since spring." "Sit down, Rory." "And you've sat on it. Through a whole glass of wine about bins and fairy lights." "I sat on it because I spent four years learning that telling you hard things means losing you, and I'd only just got you back for twenty minutes." Eva didn't raise her voice. That was worse. "His sister showed me the announcement. His office. It's on Poland Street." Rory's breath stopped. Poland Street ran parallel to Greek Street. Three hundred metres, give or take. She'd walked it twice this week with delivery bags. Silas closed the ledger. The sound landed like a door locking. "There's more," Eva said. "The christening was in May. In June, a woman rang the restaurant in Cardiff where I work and asked if Eva Brennan still worked there, said she was an old friend of mine from London, wanted my number to surprise me. I'd have thought nothing of it. Except the girl who took the call said the woman had a Welsh accent and called me Evs. Nobody calls me Evs. Nobody except you, and one other person who used to stand at our table and say it like he owned it." The green neon flickered once, and the whole bar seemed to hold its breath with it. Rory looked at the door. The glass panel showed nothing but Greek Street at closing time, a black cab gliding past, a man with an umbrella shaking it out on the opposite kerb. Ordinary. Then the man folded the umbrella, and stood there, and did not move on. "Silas," Rory said. He was already reaching beneath the bar.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Rory's heart hammered somewhere [somewhere]"
1"Eva turned back [back]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.456
leniency0.912
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.07
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1473
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
86.42% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1473
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count2
2
word"traced"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"flickered"
2"traced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences80
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen90
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1473
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions67
wordCount825
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity2.67
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Rory20
Golden1
Empress1
Silas9
Raven1
Nest1
Balkans1
Brennan1
Eva22
Docs1
Clash1
Sauvignon1
Blanc1
Cardiff1
Street3
Greek2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Empress"
2"Silas"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
5"Brennan"
6"Eva"
places
0"Golden"
1"Street"
2"Greek"
globalScore0.167
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1473
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs62
mean23.76
std23.78
cv1.001
sampleLengths
011
116
297
34
431
519
64
75
872
91
1030
1129
1233
1312
1422
1533
1623
1725
187
192
2035
2129
226
2334
2494
2522
267
2713
2823
2912
306
318
323
3373
3420
3519
3639
375
381
3946
406
4110
4232
4315
4417
456
4642
4779
4815
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs154
matches
0"was coming"
1"was already reaching"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences111
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount826
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.031476997578692496
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002421307506053269
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean13.27
std13.03
cv0.982
sampleLengths
011
116
215
346
49
527
64
74
812
915
1019
114
125
1322
1421
1529
161
175
1813
1912
2029
2122
225
236
244
258
2616
276
2823
2910
3023
3112
322
3311
344
353
362
3735
385
3913
4011
416
4224
4310
4432
4539
4623
4722
487
4913
63.66% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4144144144144144
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners46
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences69
matches
0"Then perfume, expensive, the kind"
1"Then a voice she hadn't"
2"Even her nails matched her"
3"Then the man folded the"
ratio0.058
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount10
totalSentences69
matches
0"She fished out the shards,"
1"Her shift at the Golden"
2"She ended the call without"
3"She rotated the glass another"
4"she stopped, swallowed"
5"She traced a ring of"
6"She thanked him and he"
7"Her voice stayed light, and"
8"She'd walked it twice this"
9"He was already reaching beneath"
ratio0.145
39.71% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences69
matches
0"The glass slipped from Rory's"
1"Silas said from the other"
2"She fished out the shards,"
3"Her shift at the Golden"
4"The Raven's Nest sat near"
5"The door opened again."
6"Rory registered heels first."
7"The laugh died mid-breath."
8"Rory turned on the stool."
9"Eva Brennan stood in the"
10"The Eva in Rory's head"
11"This Eva wore a cream"
12"Eva lowered the phone"
13"She ended the call without"
14"Silas set the whisky in"
15"Eva crossed the bar in"
16"Rory's heart hammered somewhere behind"
17"Eva slid onto the next"
18"Silas said, and produced a"
19"Eva watched him with the"
ratio0.841
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Silas set the whisky in front of Rory and retreated towards the till with the unhurried pace of a man who'd spent thirty years knowing when to become furniture."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Silas said, not looking up from his ledger"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Eva slid (slide)"
1"everything Rory laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.211
leniency0.421
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.07
89.5488%