Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD7FK83CEQ1702QMST4RGMV

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Duration:
1m 14s
Cost:
$0.028946
Provider:
Moonshot AI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pint glass slipped from Rory's hand and shattered across the floorboards, and for a moment nobody in the Raven's Nest moved. "Sorry. Sorry, I've got it." She crouched with the dustpan, glass crunching under her trainers, when a voice cut through the low murmur of the bar. "Jesus. Laila?" Nobody had called her that in four years. She rose slowly, dustpan in hand, and faced a woman in an expensive grey coat, hair blow-dried into soft waves, a leather handbag hooked over one elbow like armour. "Carys." "Oh my God." Carys Hughes pressed a hand to her chest. "I thought, no, it can't be, she's in Cardiff, she's doing her LPC or whatever, but it is you. It's actually you." "Should I get another broom?" "No, don't be daft. Get me a glass of whatever's good and come and sit down. I'm buying." Silas glanced up from the till, one eyebrow raised a fraction. Rory gave him a small nod, untied her apron, and carried two glasses of the house red to the corner table beneath an old black-and-white photograph of the harbour at Piraeus. Carys had already claimed the seat with its back to the wall. Some habits from childhood survived everything. "So." Carys wrapped both hands around her glass. "You're a barmaid now." "Delivery driver, actually. Golden Empress on Wardour Street. This is just the flat upstairs and Silas lets me help out." "Delivery driver." Carys said it the way her mother used to say *living in sin*, tasting each syllable for rot. "You got a first in Pre-Law, Laila. You were going to be a barrister like your dad." "It's Rory now." "What?" "Rory. Nobody calls me Laila any more." Something flickered across Carys' face, quick as a moth. She took a long drink instead of answering. Rory watched her clock the room, the maps on the walls, the bookshelf that didn't quite sit flush with the plaster, the old man with the limp polishing glasses behind the bar. "Right. Rory." A laugh, brittle at the edges. "God, remember when you made the whole of Year Nine call you Aurora because you'd read some Greek mythology book? Mrs Pritchard refused. Said it was pretentious." "She wasn't wrong." "You punched Rhiannon Davies for saying it sounded like a fairy princess." "She had it coming." "She did, yeah." For the first time, Carys smiled like the girl Rory remembered, gap-toothed and wicked, sat on the wall outside the comprehensive sharing a stolen cigarette. Then the smile folded away. "Your mum's worried sick, you know. I see her in the Tesco on Penarth Road. She asks about you every time. I never know what to tell her." "Tell her I'm alive." "Laila." "Rory." "Fine. *Rory.*" Carys leaned forward. "She thinks Evan knows where you are. He tells everyone you two are still in touch. That you send him postcards." The glass stopped halfway to Rory's mouth. She set it down with care, lining the base up with the ring of condensation it had already left on the wood. "Do I look like someone who sends Evan postcards?" "You look like someone who vanished in the middle of the night with a rucksack and didn't tell her best friend of fifteen years she was going." The words came out low and fast, four years of them, queued up and waiting. "I found out from your *mother*, Rory. She rang me crying, asking if you were at mine. I had to pretend I knew something. I had to lie to Jennifer Carter, who taught me to plait hair and make Welsh cakes, to cover for you." Rory turned the crescent scar on her left wrist between her fingers, an old habit, the small pale moon of it worn smooth by years of touching. "If I'd told you, you'd have talked me out of it." "Course I would have. Or I'd have helped you. That's the bit you never gave me the chance at." Carys' voice cracked on the last word and she looked away, jaw working, at the photograph of Piraeus. "Instead I spent six months wondering if you were in a ditch somewhere. And Evan knocking on my door at all hours asking what you'd said, what I knew, and me telling him nothing because I genuinely knew nothing, and him not believing me." Rory went still. "He came to yours? Often?" "For a while." Carys frowned at her. "Why?" "What did you tell him?" "Nothing. There was nothing to tell." A pause. The frown deepened, and Carys set her glass down too, mirroring her. "Why are you looking at me like that?" "No reason." "Rory." "You just told me he tells everyone we're in touch." The bar noise receded, the way sound did when her pulse took over. "If he's saying that, it's because he's building a story. Either he knows where I am and he's softening people up for when he turns up. Or he doesn't, and he wants everyone to think he's the wounded one when I finally get found." "Found. God, listen to you." But Carys had gone pale beneath the blow-dry and the good coat. "You sound like a solicitor cross-examining your own life." "I sound like someone who learned what he does with information. How long are you in London?" "Just tonight. Work thing. Conference at the ExCeL, I came into Soho for dinner alone because my colleagues are boring and, well." She gestured at the room, at the green neon bleeding faint through the window. "Here we are." "Who knows you came to Soho?" "I, no one. I posted a photo of my starter on Instagram, I suppose. Rory, what is this?" Rory was already looking past her, at the bookshelf, at the angle of the door, at Silas, who had stopped polishing glasses and was watching them over the rim of one with the stillness of a man reading weather. "Delete the photo." "It's a bowl of pasta." "Delete it. Now. Did you tag the restaurant? Check in anywhere? Tell anyone at the conference where you were eating?" Carys fumbled her phone out of the leather handbag, thumbs moving over the screen, and Rory watched her oldest friend in the world, grown now, lacquered and careful and four years a stranger, and felt the shape of every choice she'd made shift under her like scree. "Done. Deleted. Happy?" Carys looked up. "You know, I sat down thinking we'd have a drink and I'd finally get to be angry at you in person. I rehearsed it on the train. And instead you're, what, you're living above a bar under a different name, scrubbing your best friend's Instagram like she's a security risk." "You were never my best friend for the parts that mattered, Carys. You were my best friend for the parts I could show you." The words landed harder than she'd meant them. Carys sat back as if pushed. "Well." She blinked fast, twice, and reached for her wine and drained it. "That's the most honest thing you've said to me since we were seventeen." Silas appeared at the table without seeming to have crossed the room, a fresh glass in each hand, his limp absorbed into something deliberate. He set them down and laid a small black phone beside Rory's elbow. "Compliments of the house," he said, mild as milk, and his hazel eyes held hers for exactly one second longer than a barman's should. Then he limped back towards the till. Rory picked up the phone. The screen showed a single frame from the Nest's door camera, timestamped eleven minutes ago. A man on the opposite pavement, collar up, face tilted towards the green neon sign as though reading it. She knew the set of those shoulders before she knew anything else. She'd know it in the dark, in a crowd, in her sleep. "What's that?" Carys leaned across the table, and her wine glass tipped, and red spread across the wood like something opening. Rory didn't answer. She was already counting exits.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"time Carys smiled like [like]"
1"She blinked fast [fast]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0.133
effectiveRatio0.067
96.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1343
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
85.11% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1343
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"eyebrow"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"eyebrow"
2"flickered"
3"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences47
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences47
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences91
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords5
totalWords1343
ratio0.004
matches
0"living in sin"
1"Rory."
2"mother"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.76% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount655
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.98
worstName"Carys"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Carys"
discoveredNames
Rory12
Raven1
Nest2
Hughes1
Silas3
Piraeus1
Carys13
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nest"
2"Hughes"
3"Silas"
4"Carys"
places
0"Raven"
1"Piraeus"
globalScore0.508
windowScore0.667
14.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences37
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite sit flush with the plaster, the old man with the limp polishing glasses behind the bar"
1"as though reading it"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1343
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean22.38
std20.54
cv0.918
sampleLengths
022
15
221
32
437
51
633
75
818
960
1012
1120
1237
133
141
157
1649
1735
183
1912
204
2161
224
231
241
2526
2629
279
2887
2927
3011
3181
323
335
348
355
3628
372
381
3967
4026
4117
4239
436
4418
4539
463
475
4820
4947
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences47
matches(empty)
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs92
matches
0"was already looking"
1"was watching"
2"was already counting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences91
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount648
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.018518518518518517
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.006172839506172839
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences91
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences91
mean14.76
std12.35
cv0.837
sampleLengths
022
15
221
32
48
529
61
711
822
95
1018
1111
1231
1312
146
158
164
1720
1820
1917
203
211
227
239
248
2532
268
2727
283
2912
304
3128
325
3328
344
351
361
375
3821
397
4022
419
4242
4345
4427
4511
4637
4744
483
495
76.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4835164835164835
totalSentences91
uniqueOpeners44
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences46
matches
0"Then the smile folded away."
1"Then he limped back towards"
ratio0.043
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount11
totalSentences46
matches
0"She crouched with the dustpan,"
1"She rose slowly, dustpan in"
2"She took a long drink"
3"She set it down with"
4"She gestured at the room,"
5"She blinked fast, twice, and"
6"He set them down and"
7"he said, mild as milk,"
8"She knew the set of"
9"She'd know it in the"
10"She was already counting exits."
ratio0.239
3.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences46
matches
0"The pint glass slipped from"
1"She crouched with the dustpan,"
2"Nobody had called her that"
3"She rose slowly, dustpan in"
4"Carys Hughes pressed a hand"
5"Silas glanced up from the"
6"Rory gave him a small"
7"Carys had already claimed the"
8"Some habits from childhood survived"
9"Carys wrapped both hands around"
10"Carys said it the way"
11"Something flickered across"
12"She took a long drink"
13"Rory watched her clock the"
14"A laugh, brittle at the"
15"Carys leaned forward"
16"The glass stopped halfway to"
17"She set it down with"
18"The words came out low"
19"Rory turned the crescent scar"
ratio0.913
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences46
matches(empty)
ratio0
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences18
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Rory watched her clock the room, the maps on the walls, the bookshelf that didn't quite sit flush with the plaster, the old man with the limp polishing glasses …"
1"Rory was already looking past her, at the bookshelf, at the angle of the door, at Silas, who had stopped polishing glasses and was watching them over the rim of…"
91.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"The bar noise receded, the way sound did when her pulse took over"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Carys Hughes pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.05
leniency0.1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.033
82.7280%