Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD7G6E04EXHN4J15WK2RZB2

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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The third deadbolt refused to budge. "Come on you bastard." Rory wrestled with the brass and it burned cold against her palm. "Eva, who the fuck needs three locks and no central heating." The door yanked inward before she finished and cold air from the hall hit her bare ankles. Lucien stood on the mat. He wore the charcoal suit, the one cut sharp enough to make ordinary men look apologetic, and rain darkened the shoulders. His platinum hair was slicked back as always, but water tracked down his temple and caught on his jaw. That ivory-handled cane rested against the doorframe. He did not touch it. "You still keep the spare under Ptolemy's bowl," he said. "Charming." Rory's hand stayed on the lock. Her pulse thudded once, hard, behind her teeth. "You need to leave." "I need to come in." "No. You need to leave." She pushed the door, but his cane slid forward an inch and blocked it. The movement was lazy. Precise. "Rory." The way he said it scraped. Low and French at the edges, like he chewed the R just for her. "Don't. Don't Rory me. You don't get to show up here after six months and use that voice." "Six months, three weeks," he said. "And you left Marseille, not I." Ptolemy appeared then, fat tabby tail high, and wound himself around Lucien's polished shoe. The traitor. Lucien glanced down. His mismatched eyes caught the hall light, one amber, one black. "May I?" "No." "He is sitting on my foot now." Rory stared at the cat. At the wet footprints Lucien left on Eva's threadbare rug. At the faint scar along his knuckle she once traced with her own crescent-scarred wrist. She stepped back. Lucien moved inside in one smooth motion and closed the door behind him. He turned the three bolts without looking, click, click, click, like he lived here. The flat smelled of curry from below and old paper and Eva's cheap lavender incense. Every flat surface drowned under books and scrolls and loose research notes in Eva's frantic handwriting. A half-eaten toast balanced on a stack of demonology. Lucien surveyed it with distaste. "Eva still believes knowledge should be piled, not shelved." "Eva's not here. She is at the archive until midnight." "Good." He shrugged off his coat. Water beaded and fell onto the floorboards. Underneath, his white shirt clung to his shoulders. "Then we can talk without annotation." "You can hang your coat on the chair. You can talk for sixty seconds. Then you can go." He hung the coat exactly where she said. He never missed an instruction, that was the problem. He remembered everything. "Yu-Fei told me you quit the restaurant," he said. "Not your business." "You loved that job." "I loved not being followed by half-demon fixers while carrying dan dan noodles." She folded her arms. Her t-shirt rode up and she tugged it down. "What do you want, Lucien?" He leaned his cane against Eva's kitchen counter and it made a soft knock against the chipped tiles. "I want you to finish what you started." "There is nothing to finish." "There is everything to finish." His voice stayed level, but his amber eye narrowed. "You opened a door in the catacombs under Saint-Denis. You left it ajar. Things crawled through." Cold shot through her stomach. "I sealed it. I sealed it with Eva." "You sealed one layer. It was a false floor. A decoy." He reached into his inner pocket and pulled out a folded square of brown paper, old and soft. He set it on top of toast and books. "My father sent this yesterday. By courier. It bled through the envelope." Rory did not touch it at first. The paper smelled of sulphur and iron. When she unfolded it, her hand shook. It was a charcoal sketch of her. Sleeping in this flat. In Eva's spare bed with Ptolemy curled on her chest. Her black hair fanned out. The crescent scar on her left wrist was rendered in perfect detail. Underneath, in elegant script: *Malphora returns.* Her breath caught. "That name," she said. "I know." "No one called me that except—" "Except me. When you were feverish and speaking a language dead for three thousand years." She crumpled the paper and threw it. It landed against his chest and fell. "Get out." "Rory." "I said get out!" Her voice cracked and she hated that it cracked. "You promised. In Marseille you promised you would not drag me back into that world. You promised you would let me be normal for once. Human." "I promised I would keep you alive." He stepped closer. Close enough that rain and his cologne, that expensive smoky cedar, hit her nose. "Normal was a lie you told yourself between deliveries. You were never human in the way you wanted." "Stop it." "You lit up the entire left bank when you lost control. You think the Golden Empress needs another waitress? You think law school will take you back after Cardiff?" His hand rose, then stopped mid-air, as if he remembered she flinched now when people reached too fast. He lowered it. "You are mine to protect. That did not end because you ran." The words landed like a slap. "I am not yours." Her eyes prickled. She blinked hard. "You made sure of that. When you chose your father's ledger over me." Silence settled between them, thick as the curry steam. Lucien's jaw tightened. For the first time since she opened the door, his perfect composure fractured. "I chose your life," he said. "His hounds would have torn you apart in that chapel. I gave him the name he wanted so he would call them off." "You gave him me. Malphora. You wrote my name in his book." "I wrote a name. Not your fate." "Bullshit. You bartered me." Ptolemy jumped onto the counter and knocked over a mug. Neither of them looked. Lucien closed the distance in two strides and his hands came up to cup her face. His palms were warm, shockingly warm, and his thumbs brushed her cheekbones rough. "Listen to me, Aurora Carter." He said her full name like a prayer and a threat. "If I had to write your name in every book in Avaros to keep your heart beating, I would. I would set fire to every realm between. You left because you thought I sold you cheap. I sold everything I had." She should have pushed him. She had practised pushing him for months. In queues at the Tesco. On night buses home. In Eva's tiny shower where the water never ran hot enough. Instead her hands found his shirt. Fisted it. "Why now?" she whispered. "Why show up now and tell me I'm being hunted with my own sketch." "Because he is here. In London. He crossed last night when the second seal cracked." Her fingers went cold against his chest. "Who?" "My father." A heavy thud hit Eva's front door from the outside. Not a knock. Something weightier, like a shoulder. The three deadbolts rattled. Ptolemy hissed and bolted under the bed. Lucien's head snapped toward the sound. His hand dropped from her face to his cane, and the ivory handle twisted with a soft, lethal click. A thin blade slid free, catching the dim light. The thud came again, harder, and dust rained from the frame. A low voice from the hall, speaking in a language that made Rory's scar burn white hot, said Malphora through the wood. Lucien pushed her behind him.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.293
leniency0.586
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1263
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1263
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"perfect"
count2
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"fractured"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"traced"
2"stomach"
3"perfect"
4"silence"
5"fractured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences95
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences136
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords2
totalWords1263
ratio0.002
matches
0"Malphora returns."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount772
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.3
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Rory5
French1
Ptolemy4
Lucien10
Eva7
Water1
Cold1
Close1
Tesco1
Malphora2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Lucien"
3"Eva"
4"Water"
5"Cold"
6"Malphora"
places
0"Tesco"
globalScore0.852
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"appeared then, fat tabby tail high, and wound himself around Lucien's polished shoe"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1263
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences136
matches
0"hated that it"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs78
mean16.19
std14.21
cv0.878
sampleLengths
06
127
217
35
452
511
614
74
85
924
101
1120
1218
1312
1416
1514
162
171
187
1930
203
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2240
235
249
2510
2627
2718
2820
299
303
314
3231
3318
348
355
3630
375
388
3950
4021
4144
423
434
442
456
4615
4714
482
491
97.88% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences95
matches
0"was slicked"
1"was rendered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs136
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences136
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount776
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"own crescent-scarred wrist."
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.02577319587628866
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002577319587628866
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences136
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences136
mean9.29
std7.06
cv0.76
sampleLengths
06
116
211
317
45
521
619
77
85
910
101
116
128
134
145
1519
164
171
181
196
2014
2118
226
236
2414
252
263
2711
282
291
307
315
3210
3315
343
3513
3614
3715
3816
399
405
419
4210
436
447
458
466
4718
488
499
63.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4117647058823529
totalSentences136
uniqueOpeners56
38.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences86
matches
0"Instead her hands found his"
ratio0.012
57.21% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences86
matches
0"He wore the charcoal suit,"
1"His platinum hair was slicked"
2"He did not touch it."
3"Her pulse thudded once, hard,"
4"She pushed the door, but"
5"His mismatched eyes caught the"
6"She stepped back."
7"He turned the three bolts"
8"He shrugged off his coat"
9"He hung the coat exactly"
10"He never missed an instruction,"
11"He remembered everything."
12"She folded her arms"
13"Her t-shirt rode up and"
14"He leaned his cane against"
15"His voice stayed level, but"
16"He reached into his inner"
17"He set it on top"
18"It was a charcoal sketch"
19"Her black hair fanned out."
ratio0.407
58.84% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences86
matches
0"The third deadbolt refused to"
1"Rory wrestled with the brass"
2"The door yanked inward before"
3"Lucien stood on the mat."
4"He wore the charcoal suit,"
5"His platinum hair was slicked"
6"That ivory-handled cane rested against"
7"He did not touch it."
8"Rory's hand stayed on the"
9"Her pulse thudded once, hard,"
10"She pushed the door, but"
11"The movement was lazy."
12"The way he said it"
13"Ptolemy appeared then, fat tabby"
14"Lucien glanced down."
15"His mismatched eyes caught the"
16"Rory stared at the cat."
17"She stepped back."
18"Lucien moved inside in one"
19"He turned the three bolts"
ratio0.802
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"A low voice from the hall, speaking in a language that made Rory's scar burn white hot, said Malphora through the wood."
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She pushed, but his cane slid forward an inch and blocked it"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.121
leniency0.241
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.034
88.7124%