Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD7X9CV0W3BT1MCZBX3HX3Z

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Duration:
14.9s
Cost:
$0.000398
Provider:
Poolside

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The crunch of gravel under Aurora's boots should have been the only sound breaking the night's silence, but instead she heard her own footsteps echoing back at her from three different directions. She stopped dead, heart hammering against her ribs. The Heartstone Pendant beneath her shirt pulsed with a warmth that had nothing to do with the October air. It wasn't supposed to react here, not in this part of Richmond Park where the boundary between worlds grew thin. "That's not possible." The words came out as a whisper, barely audible over the rustle of leaves that shouldn't have been rustling in the still night air. Aurora lifted her hand to still the trembling, but froze when she saw her fingers weren't quite where she'd put them. They hovered a fraction of an inch above her actual hand, translucent and wrong, like a reflection in disturbed water. She jerked back, and the phantom hand dissolved with a sound like static crackling through a dead radio. The standing stones marked the boundary of the Fae Grove, ancient oaks that had stood sentinel for centuries, their bark etched with symbols that made her eyes ache when she looked directly at them. Aurora had walked past them a dozen times during daylight deliveries, always feeling that tug at the edge of her awareness, that sense of being watched by something that existed just beyond the corner of her vision. But tonight was different. Tonight, she'd come seeking answers. Eva had found the first note tucked inside a book she'd borrowed from the library—pages filled with frantic handwriting describing something called the Malphora Protocol, something that connected to Aurora's birth name and a heritage she'd spent years running from. The note had been unsigned, but the Heartstone Pendant that had appeared on her doorstep the morning after she'd received it pulsed in recognition. Now, standing at the threshold of the grove, Aurora felt that recognition turn to dread. "Rory." The voice had been her name, but not her name. It had been spoken in a language that lived in the spaces between heartbeats, in the pause before thunder. She spun around, but there was nothing behind her except the dark line of trees that marked the edge of the park. Her breath misted in the air, but the temperature had dropped several degrees since she'd entered the clearing. The wildflowers that bloomed year-round in the Grove—carnations and foxgloves and night-blooming jasmine—stood frozen, their petals rigid as porcelain. Even the wind seemed afraid to touch them. Aurora's fingers closed around the Heartstone Pendant through her blouse. It burned now, hot against her skin, and she could feel its rhythm syncing with her pulse. Thump-thump. Thump-thump. Thump-thump. The sound of footsteps again, but this time they were closer. Not echoing, not phantom, but real. Solid. Coming from somewhere within the Grove itself. She forced herself to move forward, each step deliberate, measured. The gravel crunched beneath her boots, and this time, there was no echo. The silence that followed felt heavier than sound. The clearing opened up ahead like a wound in the world, moonlight filtering through the canopy of leaves in silver shafts that illuminated patches of the ground in shifting patterns. Aurora should have felt comforted by the familiar sight, but something was wrong with the light. It fell at angles that didn't make sense, casting shadows that moved independently of their owners. A figure stood at the center of the clearing. Aurora's hand instinctively moved to the knife she kept in her boot, the one she'd stolen from her ex's apartment before fleeing London entirely. But as she watched, the figure began to change. Its outline blurred and shifted, becoming something else entirely—a woman with hair like spun moonlight and eyes that held entire galaxies, then a child no older than ten with skin like bark and flowers growing from her hair, then something that might have been a man or might have been a tree or might have been both at once. "You shouldn't have come here," the figure said, and its voice was all of them at once, layered and overlapping like radio static. "I need to know the truth," Aurora called out, her voice steadier than she felt. "About my family. About what I am." The figure tilted its head, and for a moment, Aurora thought she saw herself reflected in its features. Same bright blue eyes, same straight black hair, same small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident she'd barely remembered. "Malphora," the figure said, and the word tasted like copper on Aurora's tongue. "You wear it well, little daughter of shadows." "What does that mean?" Aurora took a step forward, then another. The Heartstone burned against her chest, growing hotter with each movement. "Who gave me this pendant?" "The one who remembers when you were still human." The figure's form flickered again, and this time, Aurora saw a man with kind eyes and silver hair, his hand outstretched toward her. "The one who loves you still, despite everything." Aurora's breath caught. "My father?" "Your father was the first to fall," the figure said, and there was sorrow in its many voices. "Your mother was the last to forgive. You... you are something else entirely." The ground beneath Aurora's feet began to shift, the gravel rearranging itself into patterns that hurt to look at directly. She stumbled back, but her feet seemed rooted to the spot, her boots sinking into earth that felt less like soil and more like memory. "You have power, child," the figure continued, its voice taking on a new note—almost gentle. "Power that the old ones thought died with the last of the bloodline. But power comes with a price, and the price is always paid in blood." The Heartstone Pendant cracked. Aurora gasped, her hand flying to her chest. Through the fabric of her shirt, she could see the deep crimson gemstone spider-webbed with fractures, glowing brighter despite the damage. The warmth that had been comforting now felt like a brand, searing her skin from the inside out. "No," she whispered. "No, that's not—" "You are not the first Aurora Carter to stand in this place," the figure said, and now she could see them clearly—a procession of women stretching back through time, each one wearing the same pendant, each one carrying the same scar, each one facing the same choice. "And you will not be the last." The wind picked up, carrying with it the scent of rain and ozone and something else—something that reminded Aurora of hospitals and antiseptic and the sharp metallic tang of fear. The wildflowers began to wilt, their petals turning black as the light from the Heartstone intensified. "Choice?" Aurora's voice cracked. "What choice?" "To remember," the figure said. "Or to forget. To embrace what you are, or to run from it forever. But know this, little Malphora—every time you choose to forget, a piece of your soul dies. And eventually, there will be nothing left to save." The Heartstone pulsed once more, and Aurora felt something shift inside her chest, like a key turning in a lock she'd never known existed. Images flooded her mind—faces of people she'd never met but somehow recognised, places she'd never been but somehow remembered, a history that stretched back further than human memory and deeper than mortal understanding. She fell to her knees, the world tilting around her as the truth crashed down like a wave. She wasn't just Aurora Carter, delivery girl and reluctant law student. She was something older, something wilder, something that belonged to the spaces between worlds and the moments between heartbeats. And she was not alone in the Grove. Behind her, another set of footsteps joined the first, and then another, and another, until the clearing echoed with the sound of many people walking, all of them moving toward her, all of them waiting for her to make her choice. The Heartstone blazed crimson in the darkness, and Aurora closed her eyes against the pain and the revelation and the terrible, beautiful weight of remembering who she really was.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The figure's form flickered again [again]"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.458
leniency0.917
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.083
96.34% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1366
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
1.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1366
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"footsteps"
count3
2
word"echoing"
count2
3
word"pulsed"
count3
4
word"warmth"
count2
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"sentinel"
count1
7
word"etched"
count1
8
word"sense of"
count1
9
word"porcelain"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"measured"
count1
13
word"echo"
count1
14
word"familiar"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count1
16
word"comforting"
count1
17
word"searing"
count1
18
word"echoed"
count1
19
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"footsteps"
2"echoing"
3"pulsed"
4"warmth"
5"whisper"
6"sentinel"
7"etched"
8"sense of"
9"porcelain"
10"could feel"
11"pulse"
12"measured"
13"echo"
14"familiar"
15"flickered"
16"comforting"
17"searing"
18"echoed"
19"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences71
matches
0"seemed afraid"
82.49% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences71
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences84
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen60
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1357
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount1180
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.78
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora21
Heartstone8
Pendant4
October1
Richmond1
Park1
Fae1
Grove4
Malphora1
Protocol1
London1
Carter1
Thump-thump3
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Heartstone"
2"Pendant"
3"Carter"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"London"
globalScore0.61
windowScore0.333
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences60
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"quite where she'd put them"
1"seemed afraid to touch them"
2"tasted like copper on Aurora's tongue"
3"seemed rooted to the spot, her boots sinking into earth that felt less like soil and more like memory"
4"felt like a brand, searing her skin fro"
52.62% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.474
wordCount1357
matches
0"Not echoing, not phantom, but real"
1"not phantom, but real"
87.30% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences84
matches
0"feeling that tug"
1"felt that recognition"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean33.92
std21.41
cv0.631
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365
418
571
69
764
815
91
1051
1145
1230
1325
1431
1562
169
1792
1823
1922
2041
2121
2227
2340
245
2531
2645
2742
284
2947
306
3154
3246
336
3444
3557
3648
378
3841
3929
90.44% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences71
matches
0"being watched"
1"been unsigned"
2"been spoken"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs189
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences84
ratio0.083
matches
0"Eva had found the first note tucked inside a book she'd borrowed from the library—pages filled with frantic handwriting describing something called the Malphora Protocol, something that connected to Aurora's birth name and a heritage she'd spent years running from."
1"The wildflowers that bloomed year-round in the Grove—carnations and foxgloves and night-blooming jasmine—stood frozen, their petals rigid as porcelain."
2"Its outline blurred and shifted, becoming something else entirely—a woman with hair like spun moonlight and eyes that held entire galaxies, then a child no older than ten with skin like bark and flowers growing from her hair, then something that might have been a man or might have been a tree or might have been both at once."
3"\"You have power, child,\" the figure continued, its voice taking on a new note—almost gentle."
4"\"You are not the first Aurora Carter to stand in this place,\" the figure said, and now she could see them clearly—a procession of women stretching back through time, each one wearing the same pendant, each one carrying the same scar, each one facing the same choice."
5"The wind picked up, carrying with it the scent of rain and ozone and something else—something that reminded Aurora of hospitals and antiseptic and the sharp metallic tang of fear."
6"Images flooded her mind—faces of people she'd never met but somehow recognised, places she'd never been but somehow remembered, a history that stretched back further than human memory and deeper than mortal understanding."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1195
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"same straight black hair,"
1"same small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.03682008368200837
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.009205020920502092
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences84
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences84
mean16.15
std11.72
cv0.725
sampleLengths
032
18
219
320
43
524
621
720
818
934
1037
114
125
1340
1424
1515
161
1710
1819
1922
2018
2119
228
2310
2417
251
261
271
2811
296
301
317
3210
3313
348
3530
3616
3716
389
3924
409
4159
4223
4315
447
4518
4623
4713
488
4911
61.51% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.44047619047619047
totalSentences84
uniqueOpeners37
50.51% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences66
matches
0"Even the wind seemed afraid"
ratio0.015
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences66
matches
0"She stopped dead, heart hammering"
1"It wasn't supposed to react"
2"They hovered a fraction of"
3"She jerked back, and the"
4"It had been spoken in"
5"She spun around, but there"
6"Her breath misted in the"
7"It burned now, hot against"
8"She forced herself to move"
9"It fell at angles that"
10"Its outline blurred and shifted,"
11"She stumbled back, but her"
12"She fell to her knees,"
13"She wasn't just Aurora Carter,"
14"She was something older, something"
ratio0.227
35.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences66
matches
0"The crunch of gravel under"
1"She stopped dead, heart hammering"
2"The Heartstone Pendant beneath her"
3"It wasn't supposed to react"
4"The words came out as"
5"Aurora lifted her hand to"
6"They hovered a fraction of"
7"She jerked back, and the"
8"The standing stones marked the"
9"Aurora had walked past them"
10"Tonight, she'd come seeking answers."
11"Eva had found the first"
12"The note had been unsigned,"
13"The voice had been her"
14"It had been spoken in"
15"She spun around, but there"
16"Her breath misted in the"
17"The wildflowers that bloomed year-round"
18"Aurora's fingers closed around the"
19"It burned now, hot against"
ratio0.848
75.76% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences66
matches
0"Now, standing at the threshold"
ratio0.015
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant beneath her shirt pulsed with a warmth that had nothing to do with the October air."
1"The words came out as a whisper, barely audible over the rustle of leaves that shouldn't have been rustling in the still night air."
2"Aurora had walked past them a dozen times during daylight deliveries, always feeling that tug at the edge of her awareness, that sense of being watched by somet…"
3"Eva had found the first note tucked inside a book she'd borrowed from the library—pages filled with frantic handwriting describing something called the Malphora…"
4"The wildflowers that bloomed year-round in the Grove—carnations and foxgloves and night-blooming jasmine—stood frozen, their petals rigid as porcelain."
5"Its outline blurred and shifted, becoming something else entirely—a woman with hair like spun moonlight and eyes that held entire galaxies, then a child no olde…"
6"The warmth that had been comforting now felt like a brand, searing her skin from the inside out."
7"The wind picked up, carrying with it the scent of rain and ozone and something else—something that reminded Aurora of hospitals and antiseptic and the sharp met…"
8"Images flooded her mind—faces of people she'd never met but somehow recognised, places she'd never been but somehow remembered, a history that stretched back fu…"
9"She was something older, something wilder, something that belonged to the spaces between worlds and the moments between heartbeats."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"the figure said, and its voice was all of them at once, layered and overlapping like radio static"
1"Aurora called out, her voice steadier than she felt"
2"the figure said, and the word tasted like copper on Aurora's tongue"
3"the figure continued, its voice taking on a new note—almost gentle"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Aurora called out (call out)"
1"the figure continued (continue)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.375
effectiveRatio0.25
69.3407%