Run: 2026-07-25-01KYD81CXJ8V9FYT2D21CTDMEG

Run Details

Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.032951
Provider:
Moonshot AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora opened the door with a kitchen knife still in her hand. Lucien Moreau stood in the corridor like a rumour that had learned to wear a suit. Charcoal wool, not a thread out of place, platinum hair slicked back from that impossible face. One eye amber, one eye black. Both of them fixed on the knife. "You keep answering doors armed these days," he said. "I approve." "What are you doing here?" "At present? Bleeding on your doorstep." She looked down. His left hand was pressed against his ribs, and even in the corridor's sickly light she could see the red slick between his fingers, too bright, too steady. From below came the thump of Silas' bass line, the Friday crowd in full voice, oblivious. "Four months," she said. "Four months, and this is how you knock." "The alternative was dying in an alley off Bethnal Green. I chose the option with better company." He swayed. Not theatrically, Lucien never did anything theatrically unless he meant to, and that frightened her more than the blood. She stepped aside. "Get in." He crossed her threshold the way he crossed every threshold, like he owned the air in the room, but he left red fingerprints on her doorframe doing it. She shut the door, threw the lock, and dropped the knife on the counter next to a tower of Golden Empress delivery bags. "Sit. There. Don't you dare bleed on the rug, it was my mother's." "Jennifer Carter has excellent taste. I would hate to offend her." He lowered himself onto the one good chair with the stiff grace of a man pretending his body wasn't failing him. The ivory-handled cane clattered against the floorboards. "Though if she raised you to answer doors with a filleting knife, perhaps her taste runs to more interesting things than rugs." "Evan taught me that, actually. Consider him the gift that keeps on giving." Something moved through the black eye. Not pity. Lucien knew better than to offer her pity. It looked more like a man filing a name away for later, and she hated the small warm flare of satisfaction it gave her. She crouched in front of him. "Hand away. Let me see." "Rory." "You came to my flat. My rules. Hand away." He lifted his hand. The shirt beneath was ruined, silk soaked dark, and the wound beneath it was a clean, deliberate line across his ribs. A knife, then. Someone who knew what they were doing. She grabbed the tea towel from the oven handle and pressed it against his side, and his breath went out through his teeth in a slow, controlled hiss. "Who did this?" "A business associate." "Lucien." "An associate who has since ceased to be an associate, and very nearly ceased to be anything at all." The amber eye watched her hands. The black one watched her face. "You are applying pressure incorrectly, by the way. Higher. Yes. There." "Four months," she said again. "Not a word. Not a note. Eva asked your people and got told the Frenchman was 'indisposed on the Continent'. And now you turn up on my doorstep leaking, and I'm meant to just, what, stitch you up and pretend you didn't disappear the night after..." She stopped. There it was. The thing with teeth, sitting in the middle of the room between them. "The night after you kissed me," he finished, in that careful, unhurried voice. "You may say it, Aurora. It happened. I was there. I remember it in some detail." "Don't." "Don't what? Don't remember? Impossible. I have a demon father, chérie, my memory is a curse with excellent filing." "Don't do that." She yanked the first aid kit from under the sink, the plastic lid cracking against the counter. "Don't come in here all silk and courtesy and French endearments like we're in one of your negotiations. You left. You kissed me and then you left, and the next time I see you, you're on my chair ruining the upholstery." "That is not a fair accounting." "Fair?" She laughed, a short ugly sound, and threaded the curved needle with hands that only shook a little. "You want fair? I'll give you fair. This is going to hurt. That's fair." It did. She watched him take it, jaw locked, sweat gathering at his hairline, and hated herself for the twist of satisfaction, and hated herself more for the way her fingers kept gentling against his skin against all her intentions. His breath warmed her cheek. He smelled of cedar and gunpowder and, underneath it all, that faint scorched sweetness she'd never been able to name, the thing that wasn't human in him. Four months, and her body remembered him faster than her anger could catch up. "I left," he said at last, quietly, "because the people I work against had started paying attention to the people I see." "Is that a confession or a threat assessment?" "It is an explanation. The first one I have ever offered anyone. Do sit with that a moment." She pulled the last stitch tight and tied it off harder than she needed to. "So you vanished to protect me. The great Lucien Moreau, fixer of the supernatural underworld, white knight of East London." "Do not be absurd. I vanished to protect me. You were simply the most obvious route to my throat." He shifted, tested the bandage, and a flicker of something like respect crossed his face. "You stitched like your father argued cases, I imagine. Precisely, and with malice." "Brendan would be proud." "Brendan would be appalled and then proud, in that order, from what you've told me." She sat back on her heels and looked at him. Really looked. The suit was bespoke and wrecked. There was a bruise coming up along his jaw that he'd said nothing about. And his cane lay where it had fallen, within reach of his right hand, because even half-dead on a stranger's chair, no, not a stranger's, even half-dead on her chair, Lucien Moreau kept his blade close and his truths closer. "You could have sent word. One line. 'Not dead, don't wait up.'" "You would have come looking." "Yes." "Precisely why I sent nothing." His voice had gone soft, and soft from Lucien was more dangerous than any blade. "You run towards the dangerous thing, Aurora Carter. It is your worst quality. It is also the reason I could not stop thinking about you in Marseille, in Prague, in a cellar in Antwerp I would very much like to forget. You are the door I cannot walk past." The bass from Silas' bar thumped up through the floorboards. Somewhere in the walls, a pipe ticked. Rory became aware that she was still kneeling between his feet, her hand still resting against the bandage she'd wrapped around his ribs, his skin fever-hot under her palm, and that neither of them had moved to change any of that. "You're staying on the sofa tonight," she said. "Not the bed. Don't get ideas." "I have had ideas about you since Camden. The sofa will not stop them." "Lucien." "Yes, Aurora." "Shut up." She stood, and he caught her wrist on the way up. Gently. His thumb landed, by accident or not at all, on the small crescent scar, and his mismatched eyes went somewhere she couldn't follow for a half-second, like he'd just read a page of a book written about her. "There is one more thing," he said. "Of course there is." "The man who put this knife in me." His thumb pressed once, a punctuation mark, before he let her go. "He was not working alone. And he knew where you lived, Rory. He asked after the delivery girl by name." The window over her sink exploded inward.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said again [again]"
1"His thumb pressed once [once]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.259
leniency0.519
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.074
76.98% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1303
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"precisely"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"precisely"
2"really"
3"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.49% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1303
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"silk"
count2
1
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences60
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences60
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1303
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions9
wordCount717
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity0.7
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Moreau2
Lucien5
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Lucien"
places
0"Golden"
globalScore1
windowScore1
89.02% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences41
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like respect crossed his face"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1303
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean23.27
std22.31
cv0.959
sampleLengths
012
145
211
35
46
547
612
717
824
92
1051
1113
1261
1313
1440
1511
161
179
1863
193
203
211
2242
2351
2418
2529
261
2719
2861
296
3033
3186
3222
338
3418
3515
3620
3747
384
3915
4072
4112
425
431
4469
4558
4614
4714
481
492
99.42% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences60
matches
0"was ruined"
27.59% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs116
matches
0"wasn't failing"
1"were doing"
2"was still kneeling"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences100
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount543
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.03314917127071823
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.014732965009208104
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean13.03
std11.23
cv0.862
sampleLengths
012
116
216
36
47
59
62
75
86
93
1028
1116
124
138
1417
152
1619
173
182
1928
2023
2113
2232
237
2422
2513
266
272
288
2924
306
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3521
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68.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.45
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners45
66.67% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences50
matches
0"Somewhere in the walls, a"
ratio0.02
20.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences50
matches
0"She looked down."
1"His left hand was pressed"
2"She stepped aside."
3"He crossed her threshold the"
4"She shut the door, threw"
5"He lowered himself onto the"
6"It looked more like a"
7"She crouched in front of"
8"He lifted his hand."
9"She grabbed the tea towel"
10"she said again"
11"he finished, in that careful,"
12"She yanked the first aid"
13"She laughed, a short ugly"
14"She watched him take it,"
15"His breath warmed her cheek."
16"He smelled of cedar and"
17"he said at last, quietly"
18"She pulled the last stitch"
19"He shifted, tested the bandage,"
ratio0.5
40.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences50
matches
0"Aurora opened the door with"
1"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
2"Charcoal wool, not a thread"
3"Both of them fixed on"
4"She looked down."
5"His left hand was pressed"
6"She stepped aside."
7"He crossed her threshold the"
8"She shut the door, threw"
9"He lowered himself onto the"
10"The ivory-handled cane clattered against"
11"Something moved through the black"
12"Lucien knew better than to"
13"It looked more like a"
14"She crouched in front of"
15"He lifted his hand."
16"The shirt beneath was ruined,"
17"A knife, then."
18"Someone who knew what they"
19"She grabbed the tea towel"
ratio0.84
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"He smelled of cedar and gunpowder and, underneath it all, that faint scorched sweetness she'd never been able to name, the thing that wasn't human in him."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She yanked, the plastic lid cracking against the counter"
1"he said, quietly,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"She laughed (laugh)"
1"His thumb pressed once (press)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.148
leniency0.296
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.074
84.3243%