Run: 2026-09-01-01M1EKTB5GCQ9G8D068WVAAB0P

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Duration:
1m 27s
Cost:
$0.010471
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Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn crouched over the dead man and held her breath. The flashlight beam jittered across his pale face, catching a copper disc pressed into his ruined mouth and a precise circle of identical coins arranged around his torso like clockwork ticks. Her worn leather watch slid down her left wrist as she reached past the corpse, gloved fingers brushing cold brass. "Don't touch it," she said, though her sharp jaw tightened at the sight of the small brass compass resting beside his hand, its face etched with protective sigils, its casing thick with verdigris. The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden tasted of ozone and wet limestone. Dust coated the vaulted ceiling in ghostly layers, and somewhere beyond the darkened tunnel, the air carried hints of copper and old coal. Poster fragments from some long-dead circus lined the walls, their colours bleached to the hue of old bone. This was not an ordinary murder scene. It was a threshold, and Quinn knew it with the instinct of a detective who had spent eighteen years tracing patterns others missed. Eva Kowalski stood beside a crumbling pillar, her worn leather satchel full of books hanging crooked from one shoulder. Her curly red hair caught the beam in a halo of rust, and she tucked a strand behind her left ear, a nervous habit that did not conceal the sharp focus in her green eyes behind round glasses. "The arrangement is wrong," Eva said. "Clockwise, yes, but the sigils on the compass point counter-clockwise. This is a mirror ritual." Quinn straightened, brushing dust from her dark trousers. She flipped open the compass, the needle trembling not toward magnetic north but toward a dark archway at the platform's end, where the tiles seemed to blur like wet ink. "This isn't ritual," Quinn said. "It's a navigational tool. A Shade artisan crafted this. The needle points to the nearest supernatural rift or portal." Eva moved closer, her freckled complexion pale in the flashlight's glare. "The victim has no defensive wounds. No blade marks. Just a single puncture, clean as a surgical cut, and a bone token crushed in his pocket." Quinn's fingers found the token, rough and unpolished, proof of recent entry into the Veil Market. The market moved every full moon, and this station was its current hidden location beneath Camden. But entry required a bone token, and this one had been used, then discarded. "He entered," Quinn said. "Someone knew he had access. They waited." The blood spatter told the tale. It pooled to the left of the body, but the wound sat dead centre. If the man had fallen where he lay, the blood would have spread differently, a trickle rather than this precise, contained circle. Quinn crawled forward, her military precision guiding her movements, and examined the dust patterns around the archway. Footprints led away, but they were not hurried. They were deliberate, arranged, and they ended at the archway, not began there. "You're dragging the wrong theory," Eva said, but her voice lacked conviction. Quinn turned, her sharp jaw set. "I'm not wrong. The coins are reversed because the killer doesn't understand the ritual. They copied symbols from a book. Look at the spacing. Amateur hour." Eva's fingers tightened around her satchel strap. "The temperature is dropping. The rift is active. I can feel the pull in the restricted archives of my own mind." Quinn held the compass closer. The protective sigils on its face glowed faintly, a verdigris patina humming with strange energy. She recognised the symbol from a file her partner DS Morris left behind three years ago, the unexplained case that had killed him under supernatural origins she still did not fully understand. Morris had worked the occult edges of the Metropolitan Police, and Quinn had never accepted the official explanation. Now, kneeling beside this dead stranger, she saw the connection clearly. "This sigil matches Morris's evidence," Quinn said quietly. "The clique didn't just use the Veil Market as a dead drop. They used it as an exit. The victim discovered their connection to the market. They killed him inside the rift zone, then dragged him here to stage an occult accident." Eva tucked her hair behind her ear again. "How do you know he wasn't killed here?" "Because of the coins," Quinn said. "They're arranged to close a portal, not open one. The victim was the key, not the lock. And the bone token in his pocket means he had legitimate access. Someone inside the clique marked him." A cold draft swept through the tunnel, carrying the scent of copper and something older, something that smelled of standing water left too long in darkness. The compass needle jerked, spinning violently, not toward the archway but directly at them. The coins on the floor began to rattle, a frantic flip-flop of trembling metal, and the dark archway at the platform's end shimmered like a torn curtain. Quinn grabbed Eva by the arm, but Eva was already stepping forward, her round glasses reflecting the strange light. "It's opening," Eva said. "The market moves every full moon, but this rift isn't part of the market. It's a breach." Quinn's watch tick-tocked loudly against her wrist as she turned back to the body. The blood seemed too fresh, the dust too undisturbed near the corpse compared to the chaos around the archway. The evidence didn't add up because it wasn't meant to. It was a distraction, a clever lie written in copper and brass to make them blame the supernatural instead of the clique. Then the wall moved. The archway didn't open slowly; it tore, a jagged black line splitting the old brick. Shadow spilled out with a sound like breaking glass, and the coin circle scattered, spinning into darkness. Quinn pulled Eva back, her military precision becoming pure action, her hand finding her partner's old case file in her memory as she realised the truth: the clique had not merely murdered the victim. They had pushed him through, and now the door was wide enough for whatever had followed to step through. Quinn raised the compass, its sigils blazing with protective light, and stepped into the breach.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
88.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Quinn said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.111
95.13% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1027
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.53% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1027
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"etched"
count1
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"magnetic"
count1
3
word"shimmered"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"tracing"
2"magnetic"
3"shimmered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences52
matches(empty)
5.49% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences52
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences62
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1027
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
47.83% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount783
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.04
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
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Camden2
Quinn16
Kowalski1
Eva10
Veil1
Market1
Morris2
Metropolitan1
Police1
persons
0"Camden"
1"Quinn"
2"Kowalski"
3"Eva"
4"Market"
5"Morris"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0.478
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences44
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
5.26% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.947
wordCount1027
matches
0"not toward magnetic north but toward a dark archway at the platform's end"
1"not toward the archway but directly at them"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs20
mean51.35
std27.08
cv0.527
sampleLengths
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278
362
437
557
680
712
832
928
1081
1150
1216
1341
1467
1540
1665
174
1885
1915
98.52% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences52
matches
0"been used"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs131
matches
0"was already stepping"
96.77% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences62
ratio0.016
matches
0"The archway didn't open slowly; it tore, a jagged black line splitting the old brick."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount786
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.035623409669211195
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.015267175572519083
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences62
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences62
mean16.56
std9.25
cv0.558
sampleLengths
010
131
220
333
412
523
618
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823
919
1038
116
1215
138
1430
155
1619
1711
1826
1916
2016
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224
237
246
2514
2622
2717
288
2913
3012
316
3226
337
3421
355
3615
3732
3818
3911
408
4142
428
438
446
4535
4626
4714
4827
4919
66.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.41935483870967744
totalSentences62
uniqueOpeners26
70.92% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences47
matches
0"Then the wall moved."
ratio0.021
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount10
totalSentences47
matches
0"Her worn leather watch slid"
1"she said, though her sharp"
2"It was a threshold, and"
3"Her curly red hair caught"
4"She flipped open the compass,"
5"It pooled to the left"
6"They were deliberate, arranged, and"
7"She recognised the symbol from"
8"It was a distraction, a"
9"They had pushed him through,"
ratio0.213
2.55% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount43
totalSentences47
matches
0"Quinn crouched over the dead"
1"The flashlight beam jittered across"
2"Her worn leather watch slid"
3"she said, though her sharp"
4"The abandoned Tube station beneath"
5"Dust coated the vaulted ceiling"
6"Poster fragments from some long-dead"
7"This was not an ordinary"
8"It was a threshold, and"
9"Eva Kowalski stood beside a"
10"Her curly red hair caught"
11"Quinn straightened, brushing dust from"
12"She flipped open the compass,"
13"Eva moved closer, her freckled"
14"Quinn's fingers found the token,"
15"The market moved every full"
16"The blood spatter told the"
17"It pooled to the left"
18"Quinn crawled forward, her military"
19"Footprints led away, but they"
ratio0.915
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences47
matches
0"If the man had fallen"
1"Now, kneeling beside this dead"
ratio0.043
81.63% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Her curly red hair caught the beam in a halo of rust, and she tucked a strand behind her left ear, a nervous habit that did not conceal the sharp focus in her g…"
1"She recognised the symbol from a file her partner DS Morris left behind three years ago, the unexplained case that had killed him under supernatural origins she…"
2"A cold draft swept through the tunnel, carrying the scent of copper and something older, something that smelled of standing water left too long in darkness."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Eva said, but her voice lacked conviction"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.4231%