Run: 2026-09-01-01M1EN8R77YNFJKB7XJX20SSXV

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Duration:
1m 38s
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$0.011450
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DeepInfra

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt slid back with a sharp, mechanical bite, and Aurora Carter pulled the door open to find Lucien Moreau standing in the narrow hallway of Eva's flat on Brick Lane. He wore a tailored charcoal suit that seemed to drink the dim light, his slicked-back platinum hair catching the faint glow from the paper lantern inside. His eyes, one amber and one black, locked onto her bright blue ones with an intensity that made her straighten her shoulders. "You shouldn't be here." Luc stepped inside, closing the door behind him with a slow, deliberate motion that left too little space between them. "I knew you would say that." His voice carried the polished weight of four languages, smooth and dangerous. "But you also knew I would find you." Aurora pulled her straight shoulder-length black hair over her left wrist, hiding the crescent-shaped scar, and shifted her stance in the cramped doorway. The scent of turmeric and old paper drifted from the flat behind her, mingling with the rain-cold smell of his suit. "Three deadbolts, Rory. You forgot the middle one." "I forgot nothing. I knew exactly who I was waiting for." Luc's ivory-handled cane tapped once against the floorboards. The thin blade concealed within it never moved, but its presence hung between them like a silent promise. "I came because you disappeared again," Luc said. "No explanation. No word to Eva, not even a message at the Golden Empress." Aurora's jaw tightened. She moved past him into the cramped one-bedroom above the curry house, her heart hammering against her ribs. Every surface was covered with Eva's books, scrolls, and handwritten notes, and the tabby cat Ptolemy sat atop a stack of research papers, watching them with unblinking yellow eyes. "You think I owe you a schedule?" Aurora turned. "I left an abusive ex, Luc. I left everything that tied me to a life I couldn't survive. You were part of that life." "I was not the danger, Rory. I was the exit you refused to take." She caught his movement out of the corner of her eye, the way he followed her into the room, close, too close, his half-demon presence making the air feel thin. The flat smelled of ink and curry, of old secrets and new ones. "Last time we spoke, you told me to stay away," Aurora said. "You made it clear my past was too heavy for your silk ties and your clean hands." Luc stopped near the bookshelf, his gaze tracing her features with clinical precision. "Your past is exactly why I'm here." Aurora lifted her chin. At twenty-five, she had learned to think quickly, to survive, to outsmart those who thought they could corner her. She was not the girl who had fled Cardiff for London at Eva's behest. "Why?" "Because your alias is circulating in the underworld, Rory. Malphora. They know you are in London, and they know where Eva's flat is." Aurora felt the blood drain from her bright blue eyes. She glanced at Ptolemy, who hissed softly, his tail lashing. "Eva doesn't know I'm using her research," Aurora said. "She doesn't know about the contracts my father left behind, about the barrister's daughter who is now a ghost in the records." "Your father was an Irish barrister and a Welsh teacher's daughter," Luc corrected, his voice soft and relentless. "You are not a ghost. You are a target." He reached for her, not roughly, but with the certainty of a man who had crossed realms and dealt with demons. His fingers closed around her left wrist, tracing the crescent scar with a tenderness that felt like a threat. "You hide this from everyone," Luc murmured. "But I remember the accident. You were seven." Aurora jerked her hand back, but her breath caught, not from pain, but from the sudden, violent pull of attraction that had always existed between them, the thing they had never spoken aloud, the hurt that had kept them apart. "I am not a prize for you to claim, Lucien." "No." He stepped closer, his tailored suit brushing against her, and she smelled smoke and something darker, older, the scent of a half-demon born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from Avaros. "You are a woman who left me without a word, and now I find her hiding in books and curry smells, pretending she can outrun her own name." Aurora's heart slammed. She should have pushed him out, should have turned to the three deadbolts and locked him out, but her body betrayed her, leaning into the heat that radiated from him, into the amber and black darkness of his eyes. "You want me to stay?" she asked, her voice low, dangerous. "I want you to listen." His thumb brushed her wrist again, this time lingering on the scar, asking questions she had never answered. "Your ex was not the only one who knew where to find you. I have been searching for you since you left." "Why?" "Because I am not the only one who wants you alive, Rory." He pulled her closer, and the world shrank to the space between them, to the books and scrolls, to the cat's hissing and the distant noise of Brick Lane. "I came to take you away, because if you stay here, you will die, and I have already lost too much to watch you disappear again." Aurora felt her breath hitch. She was cool-headed, intelligent, quick with out-of-the-box thinking, but Luc had always been the one exception, the one she could not outthink or outmaneuver. "You don't get to decide my life for me," she said, but her voice had lost its sharp edge. "I don't want to decide. I want to stand beside you, and if you refuse me again, I will stay at that door until you change your mind." Then his mouth found hers, not gentle, not an apology, but a possession, dark and relentless, a collision of hurt and need that threatened to burn everything in the cramped flat to ash. Aurora's hands came up to his shoulders, not to push him away, but to hold him, to anchor herself in the reality of this dangerous, complicated reunion. But as Luc deepened the kiss, his other hand moved behind her, finding the deadbolts, unlocking them one by one with precise, practiced movements. The third click echoed in the silence. Outside, on the narrow street, something shifted. Heavy footsteps, not casual, not random, but deliberate, matched to the rhythm of three deadbolts being turned from the outside. "Aurora Carter," a voice called from the hallway, cold and certain. Then the door swung open behind Luc, and Aurora's bright blue eyes widened as the shadow stepped into Eva's flat, and the room filled with the scent of copper and old demons. Luc pulled her back, his cane blade suddenly singing out, and the sweet smell of curry and old paper turned bitter.
created_at"2026-09-01T14:16:46.066Z" 9/1/2026, 2:16:46 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.394
leniency0.788
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.08% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1161
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"softly"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
56.93% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1161
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"mechanical"
count1
1
word"intensity"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"tracing"
count2
5
word"tenderness"
count1
6
word"echoed"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"mechanical"
1"intensity"
2"weight"
3"silk"
4"tracing"
5"tenderness"
6"echoed"
7"silence"
8"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences47
matches(empty)
82.07% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences47
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences67
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1161
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount790
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.65
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora13
Carter1
Lucien1
Moreau1
Eva4
Brick2
Lane2
Ptolemy2
Luc10
Cardiff1
London1
Marseille1
Avaros1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Lucien"
3"Moreau"
4"Eva"
5"Luc"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
4"Marseille"
5"Avaros"
globalScore0.677
windowScore0.667
18.42% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences38
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"suit that seemed to drink the dim light, his slicked-back platinum hair catching the faint glow from the paper lantern inside"
1"felt like a threat"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches7
per1kWords6.029
wordCount1161
matches
0"not roughly, but with the certainty of a man who had crossed realms"
1"not from pain, but from the sudden, violent pull of attraction"
2"not gentle, not an apology, but a possession, dark"
3"not an apology, but a possession, dark"
4"not to push him away, but to hold him, to anchor herself in the reality of this danger"
5"not casual, not random, but deliberate, matched to the rhythm of three deadbolts being t"
6"not random, but deliberate, matched to the rhythm of three deadbolts being t"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean28.32
std16.01
cv0.565
sampleLengths
031
148
24
320
426
544
68
711
826
922
1050
1133
1214
1343
1429
1520
1637
171
1823
1920
2031
2127
2240
2315
2440
2510
2664
2742
2811
2945
301
3167
3229
3319
3428
3560
3631
3727
3811
3932
4021
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences47
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs124
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences67
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount800
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.02875
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences67
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences67
mean17.33
std9.9
cv0.571
sampleLengths
031
126
222
34
420
518
68
723
821
98
1011
118
1218
138
1414
153
1618
1729
189
1924
2014
2130
2213
2312
2417
2513
267
274
2819
2914
301
3123
3210
3310
349
3522
3618
379
3821
3919
407
418
4240
4310
4436
4528
463
4739
4811
4923
50.75% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.31343283582089554
totalSentences67
uniqueOpeners21
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences42
matches
0"Then his mouth found hers,"
1"Then the door swung open"
ratio0.048
67.62% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences42
matches
0"He wore a tailored charcoal"
1"His eyes, one amber and"
2"His voice carried the polished"
3"She moved past him into"
4"She caught his movement out"
5"She was not the girl"
6"She glanced at Ptolemy, who"
7"He reached for her, not"
8"His fingers closed around her"
9"He stepped closer, his tailored"
10"She should have pushed him"
11"she asked, her voice low,"
12"His thumb brushed her wrist"
13"He pulled her closer, and"
14"She was cool-headed, intelligent, quick"
15"she said, but her voice"
ratio0.381
31.43% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount36
totalSentences42
matches
0"The deadbolt slid back with"
1"He wore a tailored charcoal"
2"His eyes, one amber and"
3"Luc stepped inside, closing the"
4"His voice carried the polished"
5"Aurora pulled her straight shoulder-length"
6"The scent of turmeric and"
7"Luc's ivory-handled cane tapped once"
8"The thin blade concealed within"
9"Aurora's jaw tightened."
10"She moved past him into"
11"Every surface was covered with"
12"She caught his movement out"
13"The flat smelled of ink"
14"Luc stopped near the bookshelf,"
15"Aurora lifted her chin."
16"She was not the girl"
17"Aurora felt the blood drain"
18"She glanced at Ptolemy, who"
19"Luc corrected, his voice soft"
ratio0.857
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences42
matches(empty)
ratio0
37.04% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He wore a tailored charcoal suit that seemed to drink the dim light, his slicked-back platinum hair catching the faint glow from the paper lantern inside."
1"His eyes, one amber and one black, locked onto her bright blue ones with an intensity that made her straighten her shoulders."
2"She was not the girl who had fled Cardiff for London at Eva's behest."
3"His fingers closed around her left wrist, tracing the crescent scar with a tenderness that felt like a threat."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Luc corrected, his voice soft and relentless"
1"she asked, her voice low, dangerous"
2"He pulled, and the world shrank to the space between them, to the books and scrolls, to the cat's hissing and the distant noise of Brick Lane"
3"she said, but her voice had lost its sharp edge"
89.39% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Luc corrected (correct)"
1"Luc murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.242
leniency0.485
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.121
76.2464%