Run: 2026-09-01-01M1ENG1SZGGPSC5AEGPMZPHFJ

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Duration:
25.2s
Cost:
$0.005790
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter stepped over the mossy root of the final oak standing stone, and the Heartstone Pendant blazed against her collarbone. The silver chain bit into her skin, the deep crimson gem throbbing with a warmth that felt less like heat and less like fear, and more like a hand gripping her ribcage. She had come to The Fae Grove because the pendant demanded it, because the faint inner glow had become an insistent pulse, drawing her from Silas' bar, through Richmond Park, until she found the ancient boundary markers that separated the ordinary earth from Isolde's clearing. Inside, time moved differently. Her watch ticked with a sluggish, wet sound that did not match the seconds passing, though she could not say whether minutes had stretched into days or merely seconds. The wildflowers bloomed year-round here, but they were wrong. Their petals were too white at the edges, too still, arranged in patterns that looked almost deliberate. The air smelled of rotting lilies and copper, and beneath that, something older. Something that had waited. She moved slowly. Her straight shoulder-length black hair clung to her neck. Her bright blue eyes scanned the dark shapes between the blooms. She wore a dark coat pulled tight against the chill, and her practical boots crushed the soft earth with a sound that seemed too loud, too final. She was cool-headed, intelligent, trained by life to think in quick out-of-the-box patterns, and she was already certain she had made a mistake. The sound came first. Not wind. A dry, rhythmic clicking, like insect legs against bark, but irregular, deliberate, wrong. It stopped. Then it started again, closer, closer, until Aurora could feel it in her jaw rather than her ears. She froze. Her small crescent-shaped scar on the left wrist, a childhood accident she had long forgotten, itched sharply, as if the pendant's pulse had synced with her own. She turned her head, scanning the edge of her vision, where the wildflowers parted like open mouths. Nothing moved. Then, at the corner of her sight, a thin vertical shape swayed. Too straight. Too patient. Aurora pulled her coat tighter. She whispered to the empty air, her voice sharp, testing. "You're not real." No answer came, but the clicking stopped, and the silence became thick and alive. She walked deeper. The ancient oak standing stones rose in a rough circle around the clearing, moss-covered and peeling, older than the park outside, their bark smelling of rain and ancient earth. At the centre, where the wildflowers grew densest, the air shimmered. Aurora's heart hammered. She was a delivery person by day, a pre-law student who had fled Cardiff and an abusive ex named Evan, and she knew when danger wore a familiar face. She stepped closer, her 5'6" frame tense, her hands trembling only slightly. The Heartstone Pendant glowed brighter, its warmth spreading through her ribs like a fever. She reached out, her fingers brushing a petal that crumbled to grey dust in her palm. Something had been here. She pulled back. The wildflowers rustled, not with wind but with intention. Aurora turned, her practical boots scrambling for a path back to the stones, but the boundary markers had already shifted. They were no longer arranged in a welcoming circle; they formed a narrow gate, facing inward, trapping her. "Not here," she said, her voice cracking. The clicking returned, but now it came from behind her. And from the front. Aurora spun. She saw it at the edge of the wildflowers, a figure that wore her own face, her own straight black hair, her own bright blue eyes that were too wide, too still. The figure wore a dark coat identical to hers. The Heartstone Pendant blazed crimson, its silver chain snapping taut, pulling Aurora forward, demanding she look. The figure smiled. The stones settled into place with a heavy, wet sound, sealing the path. "Shit," Aurora said. "No," the figure answered, and her voice was Aurora's own, cool and precise and utterly wrong. "Not yet."
created_at"2026-09-01T14:20:45.258Z" 9/1/2026, 2:20:45 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
70.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount670
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"sharply"
2"slightly"
3"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
10.45% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount670
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"warmth"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"chill"
count1
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"could feel"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"shimmered"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"pulse"
2"scanned"
3"chill"
4"rhythmic"
5"could feel"
6"scanning"
7"silence"
8"shimmered"
9"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences45
matches(empty)
47.62% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences45
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences46
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen59
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords670
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
78.91% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount633
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.42
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Heartstone3
Pendant3
Fae1
Grove1
Aurora9
Cardiff1
Evan1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Pendant"
2"Aurora"
3"Evan"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.789
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences27
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
50.75% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.493
wordCount670
matches
0"not with wind but with intention"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences46
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs20
mean33.5
std32.28
cv0.964
sampleLengths
098
176
273
34
481
52
616
718
814
987
1030
114
1250
137
1414
1559
163
1713
183
1918
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences45
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs108
matches(empty)
80.75% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences46
ratio0.022
matches
0"She pulled back. The wildflowers rustled, not with wind but with intention. Aurora turned, her practical boots scrambling for a path back to the stones, but the boundary markers had already shifted. They were no longer arranged in a welcoming circle; they formed a narrow gate, facing inward, trapping her."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount281
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"own straight black hair,"
adverbCount11
adverbRatio0.03914590747330961
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.010676156583629894
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences46
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences46
mean14.57
std13.4
cv0.92
sampleLengths
021
132
245
34
429
59
617
713
84
93
109
1111
1227
1323
144
152
1613
172
1818
192
2027
2117
222
2312
242
252
265
2710
283
2914
303
3129
3211
333
3429
3512
3630
374
3850
397
4014
4159
423
4313
443
4518
50.72% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3695652173913043
totalSentences46
uniqueOpeners17
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences38
matches
0"Then it started again, closer,"
1"Then, at the corner of"
ratio0.053
51.58% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences38
matches
0"She had come to The"
1"Her watch ticked with a"
2"Their petals were too white"
3"She moved slowly."
4"Her straight shoulder-length black hair"
5"Her bright blue eyes scanned"
6"She wore a dark coat"
7"She was cool-headed, intelligent, trained"
8"Her small crescent-shaped scar on"
9"She turned her head, scanning"
10"She whispered to the empty"
11"She walked deeper."
12"She was a delivery person"
13"She stepped closer, her"
14"She pulled back. The wildflowers"
15"she said, her voice cracking"
ratio0.421
25.79% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount33
totalSentences38
matches
0"Aurora Carter stepped over the"
1"The silver chain bit into"
2"She had come to The"
3"Her watch ticked with a"
4"The wildflowers bloomed year-round here,"
5"Their petals were too white"
6"The air smelled of rotting"
7"Something that had waited."
8"She moved slowly."
9"Her straight shoulder-length black hair"
10"Her bright blue eyes scanned"
11"She wore a dark coat"
12"She was cool-headed, intelligent, trained"
13"The sound came first."
14"A dry, rhythmic clicking, like"
15"Her small crescent-shaped scar on"
16"She turned her head, scanning"
17"Aurora pulled her coat tighter."
18"She whispered to the empty"
19"She walked deeper."
ratio0.868
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences38
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The silver chain bit into her skin, the deep crimson gem throbbing with a warmth that felt less like heat and less like fear, and more like a hand gripping her …"
1"Her watch ticked with a sluggish, wet sound that did not match the seconds passing, though she could not say whether minutes had stretched into days or merely s…"
2"She wore a dark coat pulled tight against the chill, and her practical boots crushed the soft earth with a sound that seemed too loud, too final."
3"Her small crescent-shaped scar on the left wrist, a childhood accident she had long forgotten, itched sharply, as if the pendant's pulse had synced with her own…"
4"The ancient oak standing stones rose in a rough circle around the clearing, moss-covered and peeling, older than the park outside, their bark smelling of rain a…"
5"The Heartstone Pendant glowed brighter, its warmth spreading through her ribs like a fever. She reached out, her fingers brushing a petal that crumbled to grey …"
6"Aurora spun. She saw it at the edge of the wildflowers, a figure that wore her own face, her own straight black hair, her own bright blue eyes that were too wid…"
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, her voice cracking"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She had (have)"
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.8
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
73.6904%