Run: 2026-09-01-01M1ENGZRJR87SW4Q0EYNR37YG

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Duration:
2m 14s
Cost:
$0.009353
Provider:
DeepInfra

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt scraped against the frame. Rory pulled the door wide, and Lucien Moreau filled the doorway like a prophecy she had not asked for. He wore a tailored charcoal suit that swallowed the narrow light of Brick Lane, and the ivory-handled cane in his grip concealed the thin blade she knew too well. His eyes were heterochromatic, amber and black, tracking her bright blue ones with the patience of a collector who had finally found his missing piece. "Rory." His voice was low, polished, four languages layered into one perfect sound. She did not answer immediately. She only stood there, straight black hair still damp from the steam that drifted up from the curry house below, her fingers curling into the hem of her jacket. "You shouldn't be here." She tried to sound cool-headed, intelligent, quick with a defensive lie. He did not stop. He moved inside anyway, cane tapping the floor once, a sound like a judge's gavel. "I told you to stay away." She stepped back, but her shoulder clipped the edge of the door. "Shouldn't I?" He glanced around the cramped flat, every surface crowded with books, scrolls, and research notes in Eva's cramped one-bedroom. The tabby cat Ptolemy hissed from atop a stack of journals near the window, amber eyes fixed on Lucien's slicked-back platinum hair. This was Eva's flat, above the golden lights of the restaurant downstairs, a place of deadbolts and hidden papers. The air smelled of turmeric, old paper, and something darker that followed Lucien like a shadow. "You came to collect a debt?" Rory asked. She crossed her arms. "Or did you just miss my company?" "I left you with too much silence," he said. "Now I'm here to mend it." "You don't get to waltz into my life after—" "After what?" He stepped closer, blocking the kitchenette. "After you ran to London? After you buried me like a secret?" She tried to put space between them, but he followed, his tailored suit brushing her knee. The smell of him was sandalwood and copper, a dangerous, expensive scent. "Why are you really here?" She kept her voice even, but her left wrist trembled, the small crescent-shaped scar from her childhood accident hidden beneath her sleeve. "Because you left something unfinished." His gloved hand lifted, gently, to her wrist. She pulled back, but he held fast, his thumb brushing the scar with a tenderness that felt like violence. "I remember this," he said. "You told me you fell off a bike. You lied, Rory. This is older. Deeper." She jerked her hand away, but he caught her chin instead, his fingers cool against her jaw. She wanted to draw a knife, wanted to summon the quick out-of-the-box thinking that made her a survivor, but her breath caught. "You don't touch me." She spoke firmly, but her bright eyes betrayed her, darkening with an ache she had tried to bury. "I don't ask permission, Rory." His amber eye flared. "Not for this." He kissed her. Not gently. His mouth was a claim, a punishment, a homecoming, dark and demanding, a thing that made her forget her own name for one terrible second. She should have fought. She should have pushed him into the bookshelf and called the police, or fled to Silas's bar downstairs, or hidden behind Eva's three deadbolts. Instead, her fingers curled into his lapel, pulling him closer. Then he stopped. "Malphora." The word tasted like wine and danger on his lips. "You forgot who you were when you ran to London. You forgot me." "I am not her." She pushed at his chest, breathless. "I'm Rory. I'm a delivery person. I have a flat. I have a life that doesn't include you." "You have nothing that belongs to you." He tilted his head. "Not anymore." She tried to step away, but he moved with her, pinning her against the bookshelves, and the room seemed to shrink, filled with the smell of old paper, turmeric, and the faint, metallic scent of his hidden blade. "You hurt me." She spoke the words like a weapon, because they were true. He had left her in the dark with no explanation, no goodbye, just silence where his voice should have been. "I know," he said. "I am sorry for what I did, not for what I want." "What do you want?" She should have sounded angry, but her voice cracked. "You." He pressed his forehead to hers, his platinum hair brushing her cheek. "Only you. Even when I shouldn't." The cat hissed again, and Ptolemy slithered off the shelf, tail puffed, a tabby protest to the demon breathing in the room. Lucien ignored the animal. His hand slid to her left wrist again, tracing the crescent scar with a reverence that made her shiver. "This is why you ran?" "I ran because a man tried to own me, and I refused." She spoke clearly, her intelligence sharp as glass. "You are not that man, but you sound like him." "I am not him." His voice was soft, dangerous, beautiful. "I am the thing that makes you feel things you promised yourself to forget." He kissed her again, deeper, a dark romance of teeth and tongues, possession and surrender, and she let him, because the hurt he had caused was nothing compared to the hunger now flooding her chest. Then he pulled back, and his grip on her sharpened. "I came for her," he said. "Malphora. The woman who left half her soul in this flat. And now I will lock you in with me until you remember." He moved to the door. The first deadbolt snapped shut with a sharp, final click. The second followed. The third locked with a heavy, resonant thud. Rory looked at him, breathless, trapped in Eva's cramped flat with books, scrolls, and the boy she had loved and feared. "You have nowhere else to go," Lucien said. His heterochromatic eyes held her, amber and black, half-demon and half-devil, all desire. "No more deliveries. No more hiding. You are here, because I have come for you." Before she could answer, a thunderous knock banged against the wood, three rapid, urgent raps followed by a muffled, desperate shout from the stairwell. The door shuddered under the impact. Lucien did not move. His thumb brushed her crescent scar, and he whispered, "They found you, Rory. And now you must choose, escape with them, or stay with me." Rory looked at the locked deadbolts, at the man who had hurt her and saved her in equal measure, at the door shaking with outside violence, and she knew the moment had passed when she could run. "I'm staying," she said. "With you." She reached not for the knife she kept in her delivery bag, but for his lapel, pulling him close, and the flat became a cage of dark romance, three deadbolts, and a choice that would burn them both.
created_at"2026-09-01T14:21:15.932Z" 9/1/2026, 2:21:15 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount6
adverbTags
0"She stepped back [back]"
1"He glanced around [around]"
2"gloved hand lifted gently [gently]"
3"She spoke firmly [firmly]"
4"The word tasted like [like]"
5"She spoke clearly [clearly]"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
87.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1157
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count2
highlights
0"really"
1"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
65.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1157
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"perfect"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"trembled"
count1
3
word"tenderness"
count1
4
word"firmly"
count1
5
word"tracing"
count1
6
word"desire"
count1
highlights
0"perfect"
1"silence"
2"trembled"
3"tenderness"
4"firmly"
5"tracing"
6"desire"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences67
matches(empty)
36.25% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences67
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences84
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1157
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount869
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.69
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien6
Moreau1
Brick1
Lane1
Eva4
Ptolemy2
Silas1
Rory4
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Ptolemy"
4"Silas"
5"Rory"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
43.62% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like violence"
1"tasted like wine and danger on his lips"
27.14% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.729
wordCount1157
matches
0"not that man, but you sound like him"
1"not for the knife she kept in her delivery bag, but for his lapel, pulling him close"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean24.1
std13.03
cv0.541
sampleLengths
026
154
213
334
415
519
618
743
835
919
1015
119
1220
1328
1427
1532
1620
1739
1822
1912
2068
213
2224
2328
2413
2538
2634
2716
2813
2919
3022
3128
3230
3324
3435
3510
3629
375
3810
393
408
4121
4236
4330
4429
4537
466
4738
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs161
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences84
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount876
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.03767123287671233
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.007990867579908675
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences84
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences84
mean13.77
std8.87
cv0.644
sampleLengths
07
119
229
325
413
55
629
715
84
915
1018
1121
1222
1319
1416
158
164
177
189
196
209
218
2212
2316
2412
2527
2613
2719
285
2915
3017
3122
3222
339
343
353
362
3725
384
3924
4010
413
4211
4313
4410
4518
4611
472
4838
4914
38.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.2857142857142857
totalSentences84
uniqueOpeners24
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences59
matches
0"Instead, her fingers curled into"
1"Then he stopped."
2"Then he pulled back, and"
ratio0.051
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences59
matches
0"He wore a tailored charcoal"
1"His eyes were heterochromatic, amber"
2"His voice was low, polished,"
3"She did not answer immediately."
4"She only stood there, straight"
5"She tried to sound cool-headed,"
6"He did not stop."
7"He moved inside anyway, cane"
8"She stepped back, but her"
9"He glanced around the cramped"
10"She crossed her arms."
11"He stepped closer, blocking the"
12"She tried to put space"
13"She kept her voice even,"
14"His gloved hand lifted, gently,"
15"She pulled back, but he"
16"She jerked her hand away,"
17"She wanted to draw a"
18"She spoke firmly, but her"
19"His amber eye flared"
ratio0.661
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount55
totalSentences59
matches
0"The third deadbolt scraped against"
1"Rory pulled the door wide,"
2"He wore a tailored charcoal"
3"His eyes were heterochromatic, amber"
4"His voice was low, polished,"
5"She did not answer immediately."
6"She only stood there, straight"
7"She tried to sound cool-headed,"
8"He did not stop."
9"He moved inside anyway, cane"
10"She stepped back, but her"
11"He glanced around the cramped"
12"The tabby cat Ptolemy hissed"
13"This was Eva's flat, above"
14"The air smelled of turmeric,"
15"She crossed her arms."
16"He stepped closer, blocking the"
17"She tried to put space"
18"The smell of him was"
19"She kept her voice even,"
ratio0.932
84.75% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences59
matches
0"Before she could answer, a"
ratio0.017
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"He wore a tailored charcoal suit that swallowed the narrow light of Brick Lane, and the ivory-handled cane in his grip concealed the thin blade she knew too wel…"
1"His eyes were heterochromatic, amber and black, tracking her bright blue ones with the patience of a collector who had finally found his missing piece."
2"She only stood there, straight black hair still damp from the steam that drifted up from the curry house below, her fingers curling into the hem of her jacket."
3"His mouth was a claim, a punishment, a homecoming, dark and demanding, a thing that made her forget her own name for one terrible second."
4"His hand slid to her left wrist again, tracing the crescent scar with a reverence that made her shiver."
5"Rory looked at the locked deadbolts, at the man who had hurt her and saved her in equal measure, at the door shaking with outside violence, and she knew the mom…"
6"She reached not for the knife she kept in her delivery bag, but for his lapel, pulling him close, and the flat became a cage of dark romance, three deadbolts, a…"
20.83% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"She stepped back, but her shoulder clipped the edge of the door"
1"She pushed, breathless"
2"She should, but her voice cracked"
3"He pressed, his platinum hair brushing her cheek"
4"She spoke clearly, her intelligence sharp as glass"
54.76% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"She spoke firmly (speak)"
1"She spoke (speak)"
2"He pressed (press)"
3"She spoke clearly (speak)"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.262
leniency0.524
rawRatio0.364
effectiveRatio0.19
71.7301%