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Run: 2026-09-01-01M1EP55RG2XBDXDKQ20T5MT4C
Run Details
Model:
Grok 4.6 (Reasoning, High)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
4m 2s
Cost:
$0.066784
Provider:
xAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
97.92%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
83.37%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
33.33%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
39.58%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
49.02%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
22.50%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
87.5244%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
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The laugh hit her between
the shoulder blades.
Rory set the bag on
the bar.
Noodles bled through paper onto
the wood. She turned.
Eva Bevan stood inside the
door of The Raven's Nest with a stranger's posture and a friend's mouth.
The coat alone cost more
than Rory's last three shifts. Wool. Dark. Cut to a body that had learnt how to take up less room.
The girl who once stole
cider from the Tesco on City Road had gone. In her place stood a woman who checked the corners of a room before she checked a face. "Ror."
Rory wiped garlic from her
thumb onto her jeans. "Eva." "You dropped your vowels." "You dropped the rest."
Silas did not look up
from the glass in his hand. He turned it once, twice, the way he did when a conversation had already started without him.
The silver signet ring on
his right hand clicked against the rim.
Ice sat in a second
tumbler at the far end of the bar, melting into something amber. No one had ordered it. Rory saw that. She let it sit.
Eva crossed the floor without
the old bounce. Heels now.
They made a neat, expensive
complaint against the boards.
She stopped an arm's length
from Rory and smiled with only the lower half of her face. "You look—" "Don't." "I was going to say employed." "Delivery. Yu-Fei's. Before you ask, the tips are insulting and the satnav is a liar." "I wasn't going to ask."
Eva's gaze snagged on the
takeaway bag, then on Rory's left wrist, then away, as if the crescent scar were a photograph she had already seen too often.
She pulled off her gloves
finger by finger.
The skin beneath them was
pale and well kept, except for a yellowing mark at the base of her thumb, the ghost of a grip.
Silas set a clean glass
down in front of Rory.
He filled it from a
bottle that did not live on the shelf with the others.
He filled the waiting tumbler
too, and slid it along the bar until it stopped at Eva's glove. "You keep a generous house, Silas." "I keep an accurate one." Rory looked at him.
He met her bright blue
stare with his hazel one and offered nothing. The limp announced itself when he moved back to the till, a small hitch in the left knee, old as rumour. The maps on the walls watched them all with their faded borders. A black-and-white photograph of a bridge hung above the whisky. Prague, if you knew. Most people didn't. Eva drank.
She held the glass by
the stem. That was new. In Cardiff she had wrapped both hands around a pint as if someone might take it. "How long?" Rory said. "In London? Long enough to stop counting in bus routes." "I meant how long have you been standing outside." Eva's mouth twitched. "Long enough to
watch
you argue with a door that opens inwards." "It sticks." "It stuck when I used to live above a chip shop, too. You get a shoulder into it and pretend that's character." Rory drank. The whisky went down like a decision. Star anise still clung to her jacket from the bag. The neon from the sign above the entrance leaked through the front glass and laid a thin green line across Eva's coat, turning the wool the colour of tarnished copper. Eva did not brush it off.
She had stopped noticing how
rooms marked her. "You cut your hair," Rory said. "You didn't." "I liked yours long." "I liked a lot of things I couldn't afford to keep." The sentence landed between them and stayed. Eva turned her glass and watched the liquid climb the sides. A man at the corner table folded his newspaper too
carefully
. Silas's eyes
flicked
there and back. The man had been folding it since Eva walked in. "I went by your mother's," Eva said. Rory's fingers tightened on the glass. "Did you." "Jennifer made tea. She still warms the pot like it's a religious act. She asked if I knew where you were. I said I didn't." "That was almost honest." "I said you were well. That was the lie." Rory smiled without giving it away. Cool, her friends called it. Out-of-the-box, they said, as if thinking were a trick she performed for company. She had learnt, after Evan, that a still face saved more blood than a clever one. "How is she?" "Tired. She keeps your room like a shrine and hates herself for it. Your da's chambers are busier. Brendan Carter, QC, still talks as if the law were a horse he personally broke in." "Don't call him that in here." "QC?" "Da." Eva inclined her head, a small concession that used to come with a laugh and now came with nothing.
She had always been the
one who talked at funerals, at bus stops, at two in the morning on the steps of the Students' Union while Rory
calculated
the walk home in streetlights. This Eva rationed words the way other people rationed painkillers. "You left without a number," Eva said. "You had my number." "I had a number that rang out. Then a message that said the mailbox was full. Then nothing that sounded like you." "I was busy becoming someone who didn't flinch at keys in a lock." "And how's that going?" Rory let the question hang.
She could have said: I
live in a flat upstairs that smells of other people's beer.
I carry dumplings across Soho
for a woman who calls me 'girl' with something like
affection
.
I have a landlord who
used to unmake men for a living and now polishes glasses as if they might confess. She said none of it. "I don't flinch." "Liar." Eva reached out. Rory did not pull away. Two fingers rested on the crescent scar, light as a question. Eva had been there the day it happened, a broken bottle in a park in Roath, Rory twelve and furious at a boy whose name neither of them kept. Eva had held the wrist under a cold tap in her mother's kitchen and talked about anything else until the blood decided to be polite. "You still pick at it when you think," Eva said. "You still narrate people as if they can't hear you." "Occupational habit." "What occupation would that be, then?" Eva took her hand back.
She looked at Silas, not
at Rory. Silas wiped a section of bar that was already dry. The ring made its small sound again. "I find things," Eva said. "You used to lose things. Keys. Boyfriends. Entire afternoons." "I got better." "At which?" "Both." The man with the newspaper stood, left coins that were too exact, and went out into the street. The door complained. Cold air pushed in and took the garlic with it for a second, then the room closed again around whisky and old paper and the faint oil-and-dust smell of the maps. Silas watched the door until it settled. "You're not here for nostalgia," Rory said. "No." "Good. I haven't got any that doesn't bite." Eva turned the empty tumbler in a slow circle. "Do you remember the night you rang me from the bathroom?" Rory remembered the tiles. The sound of Evan's voice through a door that did not lock. The way her own breath had gone thin.
She did not give Eva
the memory. She gave her a fact. "You told me to pack a bag and get on a coach." "I told you to come to London. I said I had a floor." "You had a floor. You also had a bloke called Martin who didn't like surprises, and a job that ended at midnight, and a way of looking at me as if I'd brought the weather in with me." "That's not how I remember it." "That's how it felt." Eva's jaw worked once. "I was twenty-two. I thought I could save you and keep my own life in the same pair of hands. I was an idiot." "We both were." "You more than me. You went back." There it was. The thing they had not written down in any of the messages that never
got sent
. Rory had gone back to Cardiff for a week that became three, because Jennifer had fallen down the stairs and Brendan had been in court and someone had to hold a glass to a mouth that did not want water. Evan had found her on the second day. The coach to London the second time had been quieter. Eva had not met it. "My mother was in hospital." "I know. I sent flowers. They went to the wrong ward." "You didn't come." "You didn't ask." Rory laughed, a short sound that belonged in a smaller room. "That's the trick, is it? I have to ask." "You never asked anyone for anything, Ror. You arranged the world so you wouldn't have to. Pre-law. Cardiff. Evan. Even this."
She tipped her chin at
the bar, the maps, Silas's back. "You live above a man who collects secrets and you call it rent." Silas's shoulders did not change. He poured himself nothing. He had the gift of being furniture until he chose otherwise. "Careful," Rory said. "Of him or of you?" "Yes." Eva smiled with the whole face this time, and for a heartbeat the old girl sat in the expensive coat, the one who could talk a bouncer down and a lecturer into an extension. Then it went. What remained was thinner and more expensive and tired in a way sleep would not touch. "I did come," Eva said. "Later. Your flatmate in Archway said you'd moved. No forwarding. I stood on that pavement with a bottle of cheap fizz like a cliché and I thought, right, that's the end of that. Aurora Carter does not get found unless she wants to be." "You found me tonight." "I had help." Rory's eyes went to Silas. He had moved to the end of the bar, where the photographs clustered thickest. His fingers rested on the underside of the counter. She had seen him do that when deliveries arrived that were not food. "Si." "Aurora." He only used the full name when the room had changed shape. "How long have you known she was coming?" "Long enough to
chill
a glass." Eva watched them both, the way you
watch
a fuse. "Don't blame him. I asked him not to warn you. I wanted your face when you saw me. I wanted to know if there was anything left that still belonged to us." "And?" "There's a scar. There's a way you stand with your
weight
on the right foot, ready to go. There's the fact you still buy other people's supper before you buy your own. That's not nothing. It's also not enough." Rory set her glass down. The wood under it was dark and scarred with decades of other conversations. She
could feel
the old version of herself in the room, the one who would have reached for Eva and made a joke about the coat and pretended the years were a story they would laugh through. That girl had died somewhere between a bathroom door in Cardiff and a coach station that smelled of diesel. What stood here now did sums in her head and trusted the answers more than people. "What do you want?" Eva opened her bag. Not a lunge. A slow, civilised unzip that made the zip's teeth sound like a small animal. She took out a folded photograph and laid it on the bar between the two glasses. Rory did not touch it. She looked. Jennifer Carter in her kitchen in Cardiff, caught in the window's reflection as if the person taking the picture had stood in the garden. Yesterday's cardigan. The good teapot. Behind her, on the fridge, a postcard Rory had never sent. "This arrived at my work," Eva said. "No note. Then another. Your street. This door. The green sign. Someone wants you to know they can reach the people you left standing." Rory's mouth had gone dry. She did not look at Silas. She did not need to. His
silence
had
weight
. He had already seen the photograph. Of course he had. "Who do you work for now, Eva?" "People who pay me to find things before other people do." "That's not an answer." "It's the only one that won't get you hurt in the next ten minutes." Silas came around the bar. The limp made a rhythm of it. He stopped beside Rory, close enough that she smelled tobacco he did not smoke anymore and the metallic hint of the ring. He picked up the photograph by its edge. "Amateur," he said. "The angle's wrong for surveillance. This is a message, not a
watch
." "I know what it is." Eva's voice had shed the last of its performance. "I also know what happens if she stays above this bar like a woman with an ordinary life. They'll come here. They'll come through her mother. They'll come through you, Silas, and you of all people understand what that costs." Rory heard her own name in that sentence like a piece
being moved
on a board. "You didn't come to warn me." "I came to collect you." "I'm not a parcel." "No. You're a loose end with a crescent scar and a habit of being clever a minute too late. I used to love that about you. I haven't got the luxury now." Eva stood. The coat settled around her as if it had been waiting. She looked at the wall of maps, then at the bookshelf to the left of the till, the one whose spines did
not quite match the others
. She knew it. She had been here before tonight. The ice in her glass had known it. Silas had known it. Rory had walked in from a delivery shift with noodles and a laugh at her back and found the years already seated and drinking. "You said she'd be ready," Eva said. Silas's jaw tightened. He said nothing. Rory's hand stilled on the bar. Eva was already at the bookshelf. She set her palm against the wood the way other people hail a cab. "We've got six minutes before they come through that door."
created_at
"2026-09-01T14:32:17.434Z"
9/1/2026, 2:32:17 PM
model
"x-ai/grok-4.6-20260810"
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641
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(null)
generation_time
242125
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4445
tokens_completion
4994
native_tokens_prompt
4391
native_tokens_completion
9699
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(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
6622
native_tokens_cached
128
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num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
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num_fetches
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"https://ncbench.com/"
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false
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"stop"
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"completed"
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"default"
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147
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"x-ai/grok-4.6-20260810"
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
16
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"She had always [always]"
dialogueSentences
97
tagDensity
0.165
leniency
0.33
rawRatio
0.063
effectiveRatio
0.021
97.92%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2406
totalAiIsmAdverbs
1
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
highlights
0
"carefully"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
83.37%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2406
totalAiIsms
8
found
0
word
"flicked"
count
1
1
word
"calculated"
count
1
2
word
"affection"
count
1
3
word
"chill"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
2
5
word
"could feel"
count
1
6
word
"silence"
count
1
highlights
0
"flicked"
1
"calculated"
2
"affection"
3
"chill"
4
"weight"
5
"could feel"
6
"silence"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
157
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
157
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
240
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
44
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2406
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
33
unquotedAttributions
1
matches
0
"Out-of-the-box, they said, as if thinking were a trick she performed for company."
33.33%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
98
wordCount
1542
uniqueNames
17
maxNameDensity
2.2
worstName
"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity
4
worstWindowName
"Eva"
discoveredNames
Bevan
1
Raven
1
Nest
1
Rory
31
Tesco
1
City
1
Road
1
Eva
34
Cardiff
4
Evan
3
Soho
1
Roath
1
Silas
13
Jennifer
2
Brendan
1
London
1
Carter
1
persons
0
"Bevan"
1
"Raven"
2
"Rory"
3
"Eva"
4
"Evan"
5
"Silas"
6
"Jennifer"
7
"Brendan"
8
"Carter"
places
0
"Tesco"
1
"City"
2
"Road"
3
"Cardiff"
4
"Soho"
5
"Roath"
6
"London"
globalScore
0.398
windowScore
0.333
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
98
glossingSentenceCount
1
matches
0
"not quite match the others"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
2406
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
240
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
133
mean
18.09
std
21.17
cv
1.17
sampleLengths
0
8
1
16
2
75
3
1
4
9
5
1
6
4
7
4
8
62
9
7
10
36
11
2
12
1
13
6
14
15
15
5
16
61
17
44
18
6
19
5
20
67
21
28
22
4
23
10
24
9
25
3
26
12
27
2
28
22
29
63
30
6
31
2
32
4
33
11
34
45
35
7
36
6
37
2
38
25
39
4
40
9
41
40
42
3
43
34
44
6
45
1
46
1
47
62
48
7
49
4
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
157
matches
0
"got sent"
1
"being moved"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
249
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
240
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1133
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
34
adverbRatio
0.03000882612533098
lyAdverbCount
3
lyAdverbRatio
0.00264783759929391
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
240
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
240
mean
10.03
std
8.76
cv
0.874
sampleLengths
0
8
1
7
2
7
3
2
4
18
5
10
6
1
7
1
8
13
9
14
10
18
11
1
12
9
13
1
14
4
15
4
16
11
17
17
18
12
19
17
20
5
21
3
22
4
23
8
24
2
25
9
26
17
27
2
28
1
29
6
30
15
31
5
32
28
33
8
34
25
35
10
36
16
37
18
38
6
39
5
40
4
41
13
42
21
43
12
44
10
45
4
46
3
47
2
48
7
49
3
39.58%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
25
diversityRatio
0.26666666666666666
totalSentences
240
uniqueOpeners
64
49.02%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
2
totalSentences
136
matches
0
"Then it went."
1
"Of course he had."
ratio
0.015
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
39
totalSentences
136
matches
0
"He turned it once, twice,"
1
"She let it sit."
2
"They made a neat, expensive"
3
"She stopped an arm's length"
4
"She pulled off her gloves"
5
"He filled it from a"
6
"He filled the waiting tumbler"
7
"He met her bright blue"
8
"She held the glass by"
9
"She had stopped noticing how"
10
"She had learnt, after Evan,"
11
"She had always been the"
12
"She could have said: I"
13
"I carry dumplings across Soho"
14
"I have a landlord who"
15
"She said none of it."
16
"She looked at Silas, not"
17
"She did not give Eva"
18
"She gave her a fact."
19
"She tipped her chin at"
ratio
0.287
22.50%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
119
totalSentences
136
matches
0
"The laugh hit her between"
1
"Rory set the bag on"
2
"Noodles bled through paper onto"
3
"Eva Bevan stood inside the"
4
"The coat alone cost more"
5
"The girl who once stole"
6
"Rory wiped garlic from her"
7
"Silas did not look up"
8
"He turned it once, twice,"
9
"The silver signet ring on"
10
"Ice sat in a second"
11
"Rory saw that."
12
"She let it sit."
13
"Eva crossed the floor without"
14
"They made a neat, expensive"
15
"She stopped an arm's length"
16
"Eva's gaze snagged on the"
17
"She pulled off her gloves"
18
"The skin beneath them was"
19
"Silas set a clean glass"
ratio
0.875
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
136
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
63
technicalSentenceCount
2
matches
0
"Out-of-the-box, they said, as if thinking were a trick she performed for company."
1
"A slow, civilised unzip that made the zip's teeth sound like a small animal."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
16
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
12
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
97
tagDensity
0.124
leniency
0.247
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
87.5244%