Run: 2026-09-01-01M1EPGSKA8CJ43K02MER3PSSF

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Duration:
1m 50s
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$0.007344
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Together

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The platform smelled of rust and old electricity, the kind of damp, mineral scent that clung to abandoned Tube stations like a second skin. Harlow Quinn stepped onto the cracked tile with her weight shifted slightly left, her worn leather watch catching the flickering emergency light on her left wrist. It was dead, always dead—she hadn’t wound it in three years, not since DS Morris, not since the case that had swallowed her whole and spat back only questions. She was forty-one now, her hair closely cropped and salt-and-pepper, her jawline sharp enough to cut glass. She moved with military precision, shoulders squared, eyes—brown, unblinking—scanning the scene before her. The crime scene was not a crime scene in any ordinary sense. It was beneath Camden, in a disused station that had been closed since the seventies, a hollow cathedral of rusted rails and blackened posters. Police tape crisscrossed the stairwell like a spider’s web, but Quinn had already seen the photographs, and she knew that the evidence did not add up. She found the body near the tunnel mouth, where the platform ended and the dark swallowed the tracks whole. The victim was male, late thirties, dressed in an expensive suit that was now ruined—dark, soaked, the wool blackened not by mud but by something thinner, something that had pooled in irregular lines across the tiles rather than soaking into them. Quinn crouched, her knees aching, her fingers hovering over the collarbone. The throat was slit with surgical exactness, a single clean incision that spoke of a blade held by a steady hand—military precision, she thought, and the word made her throat tighten with memory. But the blood was wrong. Too little. The wound was deep enough to have sprayed, to have drowned the surrounding dust, yet the concrete was only lightly dampened, the droplets neat and small, as if someone had pressed a cloth to them, or as if the blood had been drained elsewhere. Quinn’s eyes tracked the rail lines. No scuff marks led to the body, no drag marks. The victim’s polished shoes were immaculate. His hands—folded over his chest in a gesture that looked almost peaceful—were unbloodied, which was impossible if he had clawed at a blade, if he had tried to hold the wound shut in those final seconds. Yet there was no struggle. No overturned station lantern, no disturbed dust, no sign of a fight. “You’re thinking too hard,” a voice said. Quinn straightened, not suddenly, but with the controlled economy of a soldier. Eva Kowalski stood near the tunnel arch, her round glasses slightly fogged in the damp air, her curly red hair pulled back but already escaping in tendrils around her ears. She was twenty-six, freckled, her green eyes sharp despite the nervous habit of tucking her hair behind her left ear, a motion she repeated now as she clutched her worn leather satchel full of books against her chest. She looked like a student who had wandered into a nightmare, but Quinn knew better. Eva worked the restricted archives at the British Museum, held a master’s from Oxford, and she understood things about the hidden world that the Metropolitan Police refused to acknowledge. “I’m thinking accurately,” Quinn said. Her voice was flat, precise. Eva stepped closer, and Quinn noticed the satchel’s worn strap had bitten into Eva’s shoulder, that her freckles seemed more pronounced in the pale light, that her green eyes were scanning not the body but the walls—specifically, a hairline crack in the old ceramic tiles behind the body, where the darkness seemed to shimmer with a faint, wrong color. “This station,” Eva said, her voice low, “is the Veil Market’s current location. It moves every full moon, and the last one was eight days ago. The market is hidden beneath Camden, entry requires a bone token, and tonight—tonight it is here.” Quinn turned her head, the movement slow, her brown eyes tracking Eva’s. “How do you know?” “Because I can feel it,” Eva said, and she adjusted her glasses with a trembling hand, the nervous habit of tucking her hair behind her left ear repeating itself. “The air here is charged. There’s a rift in the wall behind this body, a portal. The market sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, information—anything if you have the right coin or the right token. But this isn’t a market transaction gone wrong. The bone token is missing from the victim, and the body was placed here to be found.” Quinn followed Eva’s gaze to the crack in the tile. It was narrow, almost invisible, but she could see a faint distortion in the air behind it, like heat rising but colder, older, wrong. She reached into her pocket—not for a weapon, but for the object she had found earlier, near the stairwell, half-buried in the dust. She held it up. A small brass compass. Its casing was etched with protective sigils, and the patina of verdigris clung to the edges like old moss. The needle did not point north. It trembled, vibrating with a faint, mechanical anxiety, pointing directly at the crack in the wall. “The Veil Compass,” Eva whispered. “Crafted by a Shade artisan. It points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal. The victim—he was a guide, or a vendor. He knew the market was here. But he didn’t die by accident.” Quinn turned the compass over in her gloved fingers. The sigils were protective, not offensive—designed to shield a bearer from the forces on the other side of a portal. The needle was not spinning randomly; it was fixed, almost furious, aimed at the rift. Someone had used this tool to navigate here, to find the market’s hidden entrance, and then had killed the very person who knew the way. But the evidence still didn’t add up. Quinn stood, walking a slow circle around the body. Her sharp jaw tightened as she examined the scene with the same discipline she had applied for eighteen years of decorated service, the same discipline that had not saved DS Morris three years ago, that had left her with a grief she carried like a second badge. She looked at the dust. She looked at the rail tracks. She looked at the way the victim’s suit was arrangednot torn by claws, not burned by alchemical fire, but stained with a liquid too thin for human blood. “He wasn’t killed by a monster,” Quinn said. Her voice was quiet, but it carried the weight of revelation. Eva looked at her, green eyes wide behind the round glasses. “What do you mean?” “The blade is human,” Quinn said. “The placement is precise. The blood has been removed, or never produced in the quantity it should have—this isn’t a failure of the murder, it’s a failure of the scene. The killer wanted this to look like a supernatural death, wanted the police to find a body in a haunted station, to assume the market claimed him. But the market is hidden. It requires a bone token. The killer brought one, entered, used this compass to navigate, and then staged this.” Eva tucked her hair behind her left ear, her freckled face pale. “You think the clique—” “I think the clique is using the Veil Market as a front,” Quinn interrupted, but her voice was not harsh. It was the voice of someone who had spent too long looking at shadows and finally recognized them as human. “They trade in information. They trade in banned substances. And they eliminate threats with a particular kind of cruelty—precision, not chaos. This was a message disguised as a monster.” Quinn crouched again. She touched the victim’s collar with a gloved hand. There was a small abrasion, barely visible, a burn or a scratch where a sigil might have pressed against the skin. Protective sigils. The killer had worn them, or held them, to shield themselves from the rift they were using to enter and exit. “The bone token is in his pocket,” Quinn said, confirming her deduction without looking inside—she could see the outline, the shape pressed against the wool. “He was trying to leave. Or he was trying to enter to warn someone. And they killed him to keep the secret.” Eva stepped closer, her worn leather satchel brushing against Quinn’s shoulder. She was trembling, but her green eyes were fierce. “If you go through that portal, you’ll need a token. You’ll need protection. The market moves—if you find the clique, they won’t be in the same place, but this station is here now, and the rift is open.” Quinn looked at the crack in the wall. The needle of the compass pointed unerringly into its heart. She thought of DS Morris, of the unexplained circumstances, of the supernatural origins she still did not fully understand. But she understood this. The evidence had not added up because it was never meant to. It was a lie told in blood and brass, and Quinn was done being lied to. She pocketed the compass. The verdigris was cool against her palm, and she felt the weight of it—not just metal, but intent, a tool crafted to find what was hidden. The market was a black market, yes, but it was also a doorway, and the clique had turned it into a weapon. “I need you to interpret what we find in there,” Quinn said. Her brown eyes met Eva’s green ones, unflinching. “Your archives, your knowledge of the sigils, the market’s rules. You’re the only reason I can enter that rift without being lost.” Eva’s nervous habit returned—tucking her hair behind her left ear, a quick, involuntary motion. Then she adjusted her round glasses and looked at the body, and she nodded, not with fear, but with the grim resolve of a researcher who had finally found the subject she was meant to study. “Then we go in,” Eva said. Quinn turned back to the body. She did not touch the blood—not out of revulsion, but because she had already seen enough. She saw the precision of the blade, the absence of footprints, the placement of the bone token, the compass that pointed not to a direction but to a secret. The crime scene was wrong because it was a doorway disguised as a grave, and Detective Harlow Quinn, with her sharp jaw and her worn leather watch and her eighteen years of service, intended to walk through the doorway and find out exactly whose hand had turned the key. Behind her, Eva muttered something about protective sigils and Shade artisans, about the market’s schedule and the token required, and Quinn only half-listened, because she was already measuring the distance to the rift, already calculating the risk, already seeing the pattern beneath the chaos—the same pattern that had taken DS Morris, the same pattern that now led her, unafraid, into the dark.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.524
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1834
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"lightly"
2"suddenly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
61.83% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1834
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"scanning"
count2
2
word"charged"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"trembled"
count1
5
word"mechanical"
count1
6
word"navigate"
count2
7
word"carried the weight"
count1
8
word"resolve"
count1
9
word"grave"
count1
10
word"calculating"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"scanning"
2"charged"
3"etched"
4"trembled"
5"mechanical"
6"navigate"
7"carried the weight"
8"resolve"
9"grave"
10"calculating"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences86
matches
0"t with fear"
59.80% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences86
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
2"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences96
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen82
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1812
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1419
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.69
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Quinn24
Morris4
Camden1
Kowalski1
British1
Museum1
Oxford1
Metropolitan1
Police2
Eva16
Detective1
Harlow2
Shade1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
2"Kowalski"
3"Museum"
4"Police"
5"Eva"
6"Harlow"
places
0"British"
1"Oxford"
globalScore0.654
windowScore0.5
75.37% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like a student who had wandered in"
1"seemed more pronounced in the pale light, that her green eyes were scanning not the body but the walls—specifically, a hairline crack in the old ceramic tiles behind the body, where the darkness seemed to shimmer with a faint, wrong color"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches10
per1kWords5.519
wordCount1812
matches
0"not by mud but by something thinner, something"
1"not suddenly, but with the controlled economy of a soldier"
2"not the body but the walls"
3"not for a weapon, but for the object she had found earlier, near the stairwell, ha"
4"not torn by claws, not burned by alchemical fire, but stained with a liquid too thin for human blood"
5"not burned by alchemical fire, but stained with a liquid too thin for human blood"
6"not just metal, but intent, a tool crafted to find what was hidden"
7"not with fear, but with the grim resolve of a researcher who had finally found"
8"not out of revulsion, but because she had already seen enough"
9"not to a direction but to a secret"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"knew that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean56.63
std34.12
cv0.603
sampleLengths
0109
162
2104
3126
47
5124
610
759
842
916
1089
1157
1249
1339
1469
157
1695
1719
1815
1987
2016
2169
2256
2347
2458
2569
2652
2742
2850
296
30100
3162
68.54% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences86
matches
0"been closed"
1"been drained"
2"were unbloodied"
3"was etched"
4"was fixed"
5"was arranged"
6"being lied"
7"was hidden"
8"was meant"
85.55% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs233
matches
0"were scanning"
1"was not spinning"
2"were using"
3"was already measuring"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences96
ratio0.156
matches
0"It was dead, always dead—she hadn’t wound it in three years, not since DS Morris, not since the case that had swallowed her whole and spat back only questions."
1"She moved with military precision, shoulders squared, eyes—brown, unblinking—scanning the scene before her."
2"The victim was male, late thirties, dressed in an expensive suit that was now ruined—dark, soaked, the wool blackened not by mud but by something thinner, something that had pooled in irregular lines across the tiles rather than soaking into them."
3"The throat was slit with surgical exactness, a single clean incision that spoke of a blade held by a steady hand—military precision, she thought, and the word made her throat tighten with memory."
4"His hands—folded over his chest in a gesture that looked almost peaceful—were unbloodied, which was impossible if he had clawed at a blade, if he had tried to hold the wound shut in those final seconds."
5"Eva stepped closer, and Quinn noticed the satchel’s worn strap had bitten into Eva’s shoulder, that her freckles seemed more pronounced in the pale light, that her green eyes were scanning not the body but the walls—specifically, a hairline crack in the old ceramic tiles behind the body, where the darkness seemed to shimmer with a faint, wrong color."
6"She reached into her pocket—not for a weapon, but for the object she had found earlier, near the stairwell, half-buried in the dust."
7"The sigils were protective, not offensive—designed to shield a bearer from the forces on the other side of a portal."
8"The needle was not spinning randomly; it was fixed, almost furious, aimed at the rift."
9"She looked at the way the victim’s suit was arranged—not torn by claws, not burned by alchemical fire, but stained with a liquid too thin for human blood."
10"“The bone token is in his pocket,” Quinn said, confirming her deduction without looking inside—she could see the outline, the shape pressed against the wool."
11"The verdigris was cool against her palm, and she felt the weight of it—not just metal, but intent, a tool crafted to find what was hidden."
12"Eva’s nervous habit returned—tucking her hair behind her left ear, a quick, involuntary motion."
13"She did not touch the blood—not out of revulsion, but because she had already seen enough."
14"Behind her, Eva muttered something about protective sigils and Shade artisans, about the market’s schedule and the token required, and Quinn only half-listened, because she was already measuring the distance to the rift, already calculating the risk, already seeing the pattern beneath the chaos—the same pattern that had taken DS Morris, the same pattern that now led her, unafraid, into the dark."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1441
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.03469812630117974
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.012491325468424705
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences96
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences96
mean18.88
std15.09
cv0.799
sampleLengths
024
126
229
317
413
512
624
726
819
941
1011
1133
125
132
1444
156
1610
176
1836
195
2012
217
2212
2330
2438
2515
2629
275
285
2959
3042
3112
324
3329
3460
3510
3624
3723
384
394
4019
416
4216
435
4434
459
4620
4715
4825
497
42.36% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.3229166666666667
totalSentences96
uniqueOpeners31
42.74% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"Then she adjusted her round"
ratio0.013
76.41% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences78
matches
0"It was dead, always dead—she"
1"She was forty-one now, her"
2"She moved with military precision,"
3"It was beneath Camden, in"
4"She found the body near"
5"His hands—folded over his chest"
6"She was twenty-six, freckled, her"
7"She looked like a student"
8"Her voice was flat, precise."
9"It was narrow, almost invisible,"
10"She reached into her pocket—not"
11"She held it up."
12"Its casing was etched with"
13"It trembled, vibrating with a"
14"Her sharp jaw tightened as"
15"She looked at the dust."
16"She looked at the rail"
17"She looked at the way"
18"Her voice was quiet, but"
19"It was the voice of"
ratio0.359
17.69% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences78
matches
0"The platform smelled of rust"
1"Harlow Quinn stepped onto the"
2"It was dead, always dead—she"
3"She was forty-one now, her"
4"She moved with military precision,"
5"The crime scene was not"
6"It was beneath Camden, in"
7"Police tape crisscrossed the stairwell"
8"She found the body near"
9"The victim was male, late"
10"Quinn crouched, her knees aching,"
11"The throat was slit with"
12"The wound was deep enough"
13"Quinn’s eyes tracked the rail"
14"The victim’s polished shoes were"
15"His hands—folded over his chest"
16"a voice said"
17"Quinn straightened, not suddenly, but"
18"Eva Kowalski stood near the"
19"She was twenty-six, freckled, her"
ratio0.885
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
5.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The platform smelled of rust and old electricity, the kind of damp, mineral scent that clung to abandoned Tube stations like a second skin."
1"It was dead, always dead—she hadn’t wound it in three years, not since DS Morris, not since the case that had swallowed her whole and spat back only questions."
2"It was beneath Camden, in a disused station that had been closed since the seventies, a hollow cathedral of rusted rails and blackened posters."
3"The victim was male, late thirties, dressed in an expensive suit that was now ruined—dark, soaked, the wool blackened not by mud but by something thinner, somet…"
4"Quinn crouched, her knees aching, her fingers hovering over the collarbone."
5"The throat was slit with surgical exactness, a single clean incision that spoke of a blade held by a steady hand—military precision, she thought, and the word m…"
6"The wound was deep enough to have sprayed, to have drowned the surrounding dust, yet the concrete was only lightly dampened, the droplets neat and small, as if …"
7"His hands—folded over his chest in a gesture that looked almost peaceful—were unbloodied, which was impossible if he had clawed at a blade, if he had tried to h…"
8"Her sharp jaw tightened as she examined the scene with the same discipline she had applied for eighteen years of decorated service, the same discipline that had…"
9"Behind her, Eva muttered something about protective sigils and Shade artisans, about the market’s schedule and the token required, and Quinn only half-listened,…"
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Eva said, her voice low,"
1"Quinn interrupted, but her voice was not harsh"
59.09% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
1"Quinn interrupted (interrupt)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.524
leniency1
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.182
68.8448%