Run: 2026-09-02-01M1GQPQYKN2RGETNSYE2TD5RS

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Duration:
9m 16s
Cost:
$0.004465
Provider:
Z.AI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain bought me four inches of open door, and Lucien Moreau filled every one of them. Charcoal suit, ivory-handled cane, a dark stain eating down his shirt cuff. His smile arrived half a second before the rest of his face agreed to it. "No." I pushed the door. The cane tip caught the gap, patient as a tax demand. "Rory." "Wrong flat. The curry house downstairs does a lovely vindaloo." "I know where I'm wanted." The cane stayed where it was. "Also, I am ruining Eva's doormat, and Eva strikes me as a woman who counts her doormats." There they were, the magic words. I unhooked the chain, because Eva would invoice me for the mat. With interest. He came in sideways, which was how I knew it was bad before I saw the blood. Lucien Moreau doesn't do sideways. He does entrances, tailored, the cane as punctuation. Tonight he listed like a ship taking water and shut the door with his shoulder, and for a moment he stood with his forehead against the wood, breathing through his teeth. Eva's flat holds chaos the way a dam holds water. Books in towers on every surface, scrolls pinned over the radiator, research notes in her cramped hand curling off the fridge door. Three deadbolts on the door, her rule, and I'd thrown every one tonight. Ptolemy, the tabby, lay draped across a closed grimoire like a sultan who'd bought the place outright. The smell of the curry house downstairs seeps up through the floorboards and settles into everything, so the whole flat tastes of cumin when you breathe. I'd been sleeping on her sofa for a fortnight, ever since she left for the Cambridge archives and I needed a roof that wasn't above Silas' bar. "Ptolemy." Lucien clicked his tongue. One green eye opened, assessed, and the cat poured himself off the books to wind around the cane. Traitor. Ptolemy liked two people in this world, and I was starting to resent the split. "Sofa. Sit down before you fall down." "There's the warmth I remember." "The sofa, Luc." He sat, graceless for once, and let me peel the jacket off one shoulder, which was its own confession. Underneath, his shirt clung dark from hip to ribs. The smell reached me before the fabric did. Copper and struck matches, wrong in a way my brain filed under nope. "Knife?" I asked. "Iron." "You let someone hit you with iron?" "Hit implies surprise." Sweat shone at his temple. "It was a negotiation. We discussed terms. Then the terms acquired a knife." "Who?" "A new player. No name on the card. Excellent taste in knives." I fetched Eva's kit from the bathroom: curved needles, fishing line, surgical spirit she'd liberated from a vet, salt for the thresholds. I poured two fingers of the good whisky from the back of the cupboard, the bottle she pretends is for cooking, and set the kettle going, because my hands wanted a job that wasn't shaking. He'd shed the shirt by the time I got back. For a man leaking from the ribs, he managed it with dignity. The wound sat low on his side, two inches of parted skin with the edges gone grey, like frostbitten fruit. "Hold still." I cleaned it. He took the spirit without a sound, which told me more about his night than his answers would. When the needle went in the first time, he breathed a word in French, low, and Ptolemy looked up as if he understood. "You're better at this than you used to be." "You're the one bleeding on the sofa." "That too." Second stitch. Third. This close, I could count the flecks in his amber eye, and the other one, the black one, watched me the way deep water watches. He smelled of matches and expensive wool, and under that, warm skin, and I hated that my hands knew the difference. "You're staring, ma chère." "You're leaking." "Both true." I reached for the line. His hand closed over my wrist, light as a coin laid on a counter, his thumb settling into the crescent scar on the left one. The needle stopped an inch from his skin. "Still the same scar," he said. "Still none of your business." "You never did tell me what gave it to you." "And you never did tell me why a girl from Cardiff is a line in your ledger." I kept my voice level. "We all have our little mysteries." There it was, three months of it, sitting on the sofa between us like a third guest. His thumb moved over the scar once, twice, and then he let go and offered me his arm to work with. "Carter, A. Retainer." Stitch. "Dated the week I ran from Cardiff." Stitch. "Before we'd ever met. Want to check my maths, Luc?" "No." "Try." He watched the needle instead of me. "You delivered my dinner. Forty minutes late from the Golden Empress, and you argued with me about the tip." "I remember." "You spilled tom yum on a ledger that costs more than your deposit. I decided to sue. Then the soup dried, and I decided not to." "The retainer predates the soup. It predates London." I tied off harder than the knot needed. "You knew my name before I knew yours. The flat above the bar. Eva. All of it." The next question lined itself up behind my teeth, the real one, and I had no intention of handing it to him. "Say why you came. Then go." For a moment he did nothing but breathe. Then: "Tonight a man came to my office." "And?" "He used a name for you. Not Rory. Not Aurora." Behind me the kettle reached its boil and clicked off. I didn't turn around. "Malphora," he said. The lamp filament dipped to orange. Ptolemy's head came up off the grimoire in one slow, wrong motion, and the cat went under the book fort without a sound. "Nobody knows that name." My voice came out flat. "Nobody living." "Somebody wants to. He offered me a number with too many zeroes for the answer, and when I declined, he renegotiated." Lucien touched the grey edge of the wound, light, clinical. "He knew the old names, Rory. He knew yours." Cardiff rose up unasked. A rain-soaked platform, a rucksack with a broken zip, Eva's voice down the phone saying come now, come tonight. I'd been running from Evan, running light. And a stranger at Paddington had known which taxi rank to avoid. The skin across my shoulders pulled tight. "You refused him. For free." "I don't work for free." Flat. Recited. "Then void the ledger for me, Luc. Explain the maths." He reached for the whisky and drank, set the glass down with the care of a man handling evidence. "You already checked it twice." "Say it anyway." "Say what?" "The part you never say." He stood instead. Too fast, the grey climbing back into his lips, and my palm landed on his chest to keep him down. Under my hand his heart ticked, quick and unbusinesslike. "Stay down. You're stitched, not fixed." He covered my hand with his. Warm. Careful. "The retainer bought me the right to be in the room," he said. "Everything after the soup, I chose." One second. Two. I stayed one second too long, and we both knew it. "Go home, Lucien." Full name. The distance in it. His mouth curved, small and real. "In a minute." He straightened, one button at a time, rebuilding himself out of charcoal and posture. "First, the warning. Names like that get spoken twice, Rory. Once to buy. Once to hunt." Under the book fort, Ptolemy began to growl. A tabby of his refinement did not growl. My skin learned it before my head did. The lamp dipped. The spyhole in the door went black, a coin of nothing where the landing used to be. Then three knocks, spaced like punctuation. Polite. Precise. The same knock I'd heard on the other side of that chain an hour ago. Lucien was on his feet with no grey in his lips at all, his thumb finding the collar of the cane. The blade whispered free, thin as a letter opener and a great deal less friendly. "I knocked like that," he said. "I know." The first deadbolt turned. Brass grinding brass, unhurried, like fingers working a lock they owned. "Behind me, Rory." The second deadbolt turned. The third.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.238
leniency0.476
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1418
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
96.47% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1418
totalAiIsms1
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences100
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences146
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1418
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"When the needle went in the first time, he breathed a word in French, low, and Ptolemy looked up as if he understood."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount1014
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.49
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien5
Moreau2
Eva4
Cambridge1
One2
Sweat1
French1
Ptolemy5
Stitch2
Cardiff1
Evan1
Paddington1
Recited1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Sweat"
4"Ptolemy"
5"Evan"
places
0"Cambridge"
1"French"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1418
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences146
matches
0"hated that my"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs85
mean16.68
std18.79
cv1.126
sampleLengths
017
127
25
311
41
510
65
76
817
920
1061
11115
125
1334
147
155
163
1749
183
191
207
2121
221
2312
2457
2542
262
2744
289
297
302
3149
324
332
342
3538
366
375
3810
3928
4038
4122
421
431
4426
452
4626
4761
489
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs169
matches
0"was starting"
1"wasn't shaking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences146
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount520
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.03461538461538462
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences146
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences146
mean9.71
std7.96
cv0.819
sampleLengths
017
112
215
35
411
51
610
75
86
917
106
1112
122
1317
145
158
1631
1710
1822
1913
2017
2126
2227
235
2418
251
2615
277
285
293
3019
319
328
3313
343
351
367
378
3813
391
4012
4122
4235
4310
4412
4520
462
473
4818
4923
70.32% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4589041095890411
totalSentences146
uniqueOpeners67
85.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences78
matches
0"Too fast, the grey climbing"
1"Then three knocks, spaced like"
ratio0.026
71.28% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences78
matches
0"His smile arrived half a"
1"I pushed the door"
2"I unhooked the chain, because"
3"He came in sideways, which"
4"He does entrances, tailored, the"
5"I'd been sleeping on her"
6"He sat, graceless for once,"
7"I fetched Eva's kit from"
8"I poured two fingers of"
9"He'd shed the shirt by"
10"I cleaned it."
11"He took the spirit without"
12"He smelled of matches and"
13"I reached for the line."
14"His hand closed over my"
15"I kept my voice level"
16"His thumb moved over the"
17"He watched the needle instead"
18"I tied off harder than"
19"I didn't turn around."
ratio0.372
56.15% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences78
matches
0"The chain bought me four"
1"Charcoal suit, ivory-handled cane, a"
2"His smile arrived half a"
3"I pushed the door"
4"The cane tip caught the"
5"The cane stayed where it"
6"I unhooked the chain, because"
7"He came in sideways, which"
8"Lucien Moreau doesn't do sideways."
9"He does entrances, tailored, the"
10"Tonight he listed like a"
11"Eva's flat holds chaos the"
12"Ptolemy, the tabby, lay draped"
13"The smell of the curry"
14"I'd been sleeping on her"
15"Lucien clicked his tongue"
16"Ptolemy liked two people in"
17"He sat, graceless for once,"
18"The smell reached me before"
19"Copper and struck matches, wrong"
ratio0.808
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences40
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"He sat, graceless for once, and let me peel the jacket off one shoulder, which was its own confession."
1"He took the spirit without a sound, which told me more about his night than his answers would."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.079
leniency0.159
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.6567%