Run: 2026-09-02-01M1GR4EFMXE67BFBNTNP9MC9Z

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Duration:
6m 18s
Cost:
$0.052788
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Forty quid tip. Cash. Pressed into Rory's hand before she'd even read the address. Three years of riding for the Golden Empress had taught her the arithmetic of generosity. Big tips meant five-storey walk-ups, meant guard dogs, meant a bloke behind a door who'd already had too much. Money was how people paid you to walk into something stupid. "Richmond Park. Eleven o'clock." Yu-Fei snapped the thermal bag shut and slid it across the counter. "Marek took one look at that ticket and walked out mid-shift." "What's on the ticket?" "Order for one. Wonton soup, spring rolls, sweet and sour. Deliver to the Grove, past the stones. Follow the flowers." "Follow the flowers." "Rich people." Yu-Fei wiped her hands on her apron and didn't meet her eyes. "Forty tip, Rory. You need the rent. I need a driver." The chain on the Petersham gate measured her ambitions nicely. She went over it, thermal bag first, and dropped into frost that took her boots with a sound like bitten apple. The park lay dark and open, grass silvered over, the glow of the city pinned behind black trees. No traffic hum. No plane dragging its noise across the sky. Richmond Park sat inside London like a held breath, and Rory stood in the middle of it with a bag of soup and a quarter mile of shadow on every side. The pendant had come three weeks ago. Jiffy bag through the door, her name printed in block capitals, no sender, no note. A silver chain and a deep crimson stone the size of a thumbnail. Eva had called it ghoulish and gorgeous in the same breath, so Rory wore it out of stubbornness more than anything. It had hung warm against her sternum since she'd crossed the wall. Warmer now. She zipped her jacket to the chin and told herself it was body heat. She found the flowers a hundred metres in. A seam of white blooms stitched through the frost, petals open wide as June, running off between the oaks in a line too straight for nature. The ticket said follow the flowers. So she did, because forty quid was forty quid, and because the alternative was standing alone in a dark park until her torch found something by itself. Her boots kept good time on the frost. Crunch, crunch, crunch. Then the frost answered. A half-beat behind hers, soft, a step taken in her step's shadow. She stopped. The answering crunch stopped. Then it took one more step. Just one. Small. Unhurried. Off to her left. Rory's thumb found the crescent scar on her left wrist and rubbed it, an old habit from an old life. Evan had taught her exactly what it felt like to be watched, that specific pressure between the shoulder blades, and this carried that weight and more. This had depth. The watching came from everywhere and nowhere, and it had all night. Count your exits, Carter. Gate behind you, leg it each side, that's the exit. "Delivery," she called, and her voice came out smaller than she'd ordered it. "Golden Empress. Somebody order soup?" The dark said nothing. Somewhere to her right, hidden in black leaves, a bird began to sing. Four notes, sweet and liquid, rising. A nightingale. In November. At half ten at night. She fished out her phone for the map. 02:13, said the screen. She'd left the gate fifteen minutes ago at ten to eleven. The battery sat at four per cent, though it had read over half when she'd chained her bike to the railings. The song stopped mid-note. Not a fade. A snip, like thread cut with scissors. A smell reached her then. Honey, and something under the honey. Sweet rot, like fruit gone over in the bottom of a warm bin. Her stomach turned and turned again, slower, as if deciding. The trail bent round a clump of gorse and she came face to face with the stag. It stood in the flowers, and the flowers stood too. No stem bent, no bloom crushed, as if the animal weighed nothing at all. A big one, a proper Richmond royal, antlers like bare thorn trees. Its breath should have steamed in the cold. It didn't. Its eye caught her torch and gave it back flat and silver, and it turned its head to keep her in view as she passed, slow, smooth, while its body never moved at all. "Evening," Rory said. Politeness cost nothing, and silence bought less. Twice on that walk she caught pale shapes at the rim of her torchlight. Tall, narrow, still as fence posts, standing back among the trunks. Both times the beam swung round and found bark and shadow and nothing. Both times the flowers at that spot lay pressed flat in rough circles, the way grass lies under snow that's held a body. The soup sloshed in time with her stride, a soft weight shifting behind her shoulders. She stopped once to check the map, and the soup went on moving. Once more. Twice. Gentle as a cradle, long after her boots had gone quiet. The pendant had begun to pulse by then. A slow beat of warmth, then cool, then warmth, patient as a second heart, its glow bleeding through her shirt like a cigarette under cloth. She matched it to her steps and couldn't. She matched it to her breath and couldn't. It kept time with something else walking. Something with a longer stride and an easier gait, somewhere ahead of her now, in the dark she was walking toward. The oaks ended without warning, like a curtain drawn back. One stride, trees. The next, open ground and the stones. They stood in a rough ring, taller than her, pale grey in the torch, and up close they were not stone at all, or not only stone. Trunks, petrified. She could see the grain of old bark turned to granite, oak leaves carved into them deep and loving, lichen lying green as verdigris. Oaks that had put down roots and been asked to stand still forever. Beyond the ring the air moved warm against her face. June-warm, thick with honey. Flowers ran through the gap between two of the stones and glowed there, faint and wrong, little pale lamps with their faces open. Past them, light lay pooled flat and bright across the ground, and it owed nothing to the sky. She looked up and checked twice. There was no moon tonight. Her phone read 22:52. Two minutes after she'd climbed the gate. The sensible move was back. Rory turned to make it and found the trail closed. Behind her, the white flowers had knitted shut across the path like a wound pulling itself together, bloom locked into bloom, no seam, no gap, no way through but through. She stepped between the stones. The cold let go of her like a hand opening. Warm air folded round her, sweet and heavy, honey and turned earth and, beneath it, faint and ridiculous, ginger and hot oil, the smell of her own bag. Flowers covered the clearing as far as the light reached. White. Violet. A deep red that matched the stone at her throat. They glowed from inside, all of them, like paper lanterns the size of a coin. And in the middle of the clearing, a slab of granite lay on the ground like a table. At the table, something sat. Its back was to her. Seated on nothing she could name, a shape in the warm dark, narrow and tall and wrong in the way a portrait's eyes are wrong. Still. Patient. The flowers around it leaned in, every bloom tilted toward the granite like a congregation. From inside the thermal bag came three soft knocks. Knuckles on a door. Polite. Every nerve she owned said run, and every nerve she owned also noted that the path behind her had closed like a mouth. Rory wet her lips and did the job instead. Name on the ticket, that was all she needed. Get a signature. Go. She dug the receipt from her jacket and unfolded it under the torch. Wonton soup, 1. Spring rolls, 1. Sweet and sour pork, 1. And beneath the order, in the notes field, in a neat round hand: Collect on delivery. One Aurora Carter. The thing at the table rose. It unfolded upward, joint after joint, taller than the stones, and every flower in the grove turned its glowing face toward her, all at once, the way a field turns to the sun. "You're late."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity0.364
leniency0.727
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1432
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.07% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1432
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count2
highlights
0"measured"
1"weight"
2"stomach"
3"silence"
4"pulse"
5"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences134
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences134
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences141
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1432
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount1368
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.51
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory7
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei2
Petersham1
Park1
London1
June2
Carter2
November1
Richmond2
Politeness1
Collect1
Aurora1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Empress"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"June"
4"Carter"
5"Aurora"
places
0"Park"
1"London"
2"November"
3"Richmond"
globalScore1
windowScore1
91.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences86
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like to be watched, that specific"
1"as if deciding"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.698
wordCount1432
matches
0"no way through but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences141
matches
0"carried that weight"
1"noted that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean29.22
std22.33
cv0.764
sampleLengths
014
145
227
34
420
53
625
749
842
956
1028
118
1259
1311
1416
156
1614
1761
1814
1918
2023
219
2244
2314
2434
2517
2680
2710
2861
2942
3077
3120
3266
3366
3411
3545
365
3775
3818
395
4047
4114
4245
4313
4411
4513
466
4739
482
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences134
matches
0"held"
1"been asked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs204
matches
0"was standing"
1"was walking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences141
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1375
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.030545454545454546
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.002181818181818182
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences141
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences141
mean10.16
std7.84
cv0.772
sampleLengths
03
11
210
315
419
511
616
711
84
920
103
1114
1211
1310
1421
1518
163
178
1831
197
2015
2113
2221
2312
242
2514
268
2726
286
2927
308
313
324
3312
342
354
366
372
381
391
404
4120
4226
433
4412
454
4610
4713
485
494
91.49% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.574468085106383
totalSentences141
uniqueOpeners81
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences115
matches
0"Then the frost answered."
1"Then it took one more"
2"Somewhere to her right, hidden"
3"Twice on that walk she"
ratio0.035
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences115
matches
0"She went over it, thermal"
1"It had hung warm against"
2"She zipped her jacket to"
3"She found the flowers a"
4"Her boots kept good time"
5"she called, and her voice"
6"She fished out her phone"
7"She'd left the gate fifteen"
8"Her stomach turned and turned"
9"It stood in the flowers,"
10"Its breath should have steamed"
11"Its eye caught her torch"
12"She stopped once to check"
13"She matched it to her"
14"She matched it to her"
15"It kept time with something"
16"They stood in a rough"
17"She could see the grain"
18"She looked up and checked"
19"Her phone read 22:52."
ratio0.217
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences115
matches
0"Money was how people paid"
1"Yu-Fei snapped the thermal bag"
2"Yu-Fei wiped her hands on"
3"The chain on the Petersham"
4"She went over it, thermal"
5"The park lay dark and"
6"Richmond Park sat inside London"
7"The pendant had come three"
8"A silver chain and a"
9"Eva had called it ghoulish"
10"It had hung warm against"
11"She zipped her jacket to"
12"She found the flowers a"
13"A seam of white blooms"
14"The ticket said follow the"
15"Her boots kept good time"
16"Crunch, crunch, crunch."
17"A half-beat behind hers, soft,"
18"The answering crunch stopped."
19"Rory's thumb found the crescent"
ratio0.635
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences115
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences60
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Big tips meant five-storey walk-ups, meant guard dogs, meant a bloke behind a door who'd already had too much."
1"She went over it, thermal bag first, and dropped into frost that took her boots with a sound like bitten apple."
2"Both times the flowers at that spot lay pressed flat in rough circles, the way grass lies under snow that's held a body."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
59.09% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Yu-Fei snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity0.273
leniency0.545
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.182
93.8169%