Run: 2026-09-02-01M1GSMHE11K7J3XAC3QYGJBT1

Run Details

Duration:
4m 11s
Cost:
$0.035754
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Frost had come down hard in the night, and Richmond Park glittered under a dying sky like something dipped in sugar. Rory walked with her hands jammed in her jacket pockets, the Heartstone pendant a small cold weight against her sternum, and watched the woman ahead of her leave no footprints. Isolde crossed the rimed bracken without a sound. Her bare feet settled on ground frozen stiff as porcelain, and the frost stayed whole beneath them, unbroken, as though the world declined to admit she was there. Rory's own tracks ran out behind her in a line of dark ovals, each one rimmed with white. She tried not to find that worse than the cold. "Does she always do that?" she asked, low. "She has never done anything else," Nyx said. Beside her, the Shade moved like a hole cut out of the dusk, six feet of living dark with two points of violet light where eyes should be. Their voice arrived the way wind finds the gap under a door. "You will get used to the small wrongnesses. It is the large ones that should concern you." "Comforting." A stag stood watch fifty yards off, breath steaming, antlers hung with cold. It watched them pass with the flat courtesy of a creature that had decided they were not its problem. But when Isolde turned off the path and walked toward a stand of oaks, the deer did not follow. All through the park, Rory realized, the herds had drawn an invisible line, and nothing with four legs and warm blood would cross it. There was nothing on her map at the place where Isolde stopped. She knew, because she'd checked that morning — Richmond Park was sixty minutes by tube from her flat above Silas's bar, and she'd done her homework like the pre-law dropout she was. A small wood. A dip in the land. Deer grass. Then Isolde stepped between two oaks, and the oaks were not oaks. Standing stones rose where the trees had been, taller than Nyx, pale as bone and grained like timber — stone that had been wood once, or wood that had given up and become stone, bark furring their bases and rings of growth still visible in their flanks, worn smooth as candle wax. Notches ran up one pillar in a ladder of short strokes. Not letters. Older than letters. Rory's thumb found the crescent scar on her left wrist and rubbed it, an old habit for a new problem. "The boundary," Isolde said. Her silver hair hung to her waist and did not stir in the wind, because there wasn't any. "Mark the stones, and mind your hours. The Grove keeps no clocks. It spends them for you." "Meaning what, exactly?" "Meaning you will leave when you leave, and the world outside will have kept a different promise." Nyx flowed between the pillars first, thinning as they went, like smoke pulled under a door. Rory heard their whisper drift back, meant for no one: "The last door I walked through, I was still a man." Then it was her turn. She put out her hand, and her fingers met nothing — and then met everything, a pressure like walking into deep water, a soft pop in her ears, a taste of apples and cold honey on her tongue. For exactly one stride the air ahead of her hung like a skin of oil and light, a shimmer she could see the way you see your own heartbeat, from the inside. Then she was through, and it was gone, and spring closed over her head. Warmth. Actual warmth, thick and sweet as a held breath, after a London winter that had been chewing on her bones since November. Rory stood ankle-deep in wildflowers — red campion, cowslips, things she had no names for, petals the colors of stained glass — all of them blooming their heads off in what was, by any sane calendar, the middle of December. Overhead the sky held no sun and yet was lit anyway, a pearlescent rose-violet like the inside of a shell, and low in it a slow constellation drifted, unhurried, like bees too full to fly straight. Birdsong came from everywhere and nowhere. No birds. Just the song, looping and looping, and once — she would have sworn it — the phrase almost resolved into words before sliding apart again. "Okay," Rory said quietly. "Okay." "The shadows here are not mine." Nyx had gone strange beside her, their edges uncertain, starved-looking. The light in the Grove came from everywhere at once, and their dark had nowhere to live. "Even the dark here is only borrowed. It is being lent to me, and the lender is watching the loan." "Then stay close and stay solid." She said it briskly, because brisk was all she had. At her hip, the moonsilver dagger Isolde had given her lay cold through its sheath — cold in all this warmth, cold like a held grudge — glowing a faint, stubborn silver, as if it missed the moon and refused to pretend otherwise. They followed Isolde deeper. The ground gave softly underfoot, moss and thyme crushed to perfume. A stream ran along the hollow in a wide, unhurried spiral, and it took Rory a hundred yards to accept what her eyes kept insisting: it was flowing gently uphill, and enjoying it. The flowers turned to watch them pass. Not all at once, and not much — a few degrees, stems creaking like old wood, faces swiveling to follow her the way sunflowers follow the sun. She told herself it was the wind. There was no wind. She stopped, and after a moment, the nearest blooms turned politely away, and she understood with a cold, clean certainty that she had just been assessed. "Isolde. The flowers are looking at me." "Everything here is looking at you. That is the price of being interesting." The Seer didn't slow. "Would you prefer they look away? That is a different price." They came at last to the heart of the Grove, a pool of water so still it seemed embarrassed by the idea of ripples, ringed by more of the oak-born stones. Isolde turned, and her pale lavender eyes settled on Rory's collarbone, where the silver chain disappeared. "Now. The reason you were permitted. Show me what you carry." Rory drew the pendant out over her head. The crimson stone sat in her palm, thumbnail-sized, its faint inner glow like a coal asleep under ash. And the wildflowers nearest her hand leaned away — all of them, a full-body flinch in slow motion, stems bowing back as if from an open oven door. "Never gets old," Rory muttered. "Do not touch it to the water." Isolde circled the stone without reaching for it, once around, twice, the way you'd walk a strange dog. "It comes from a country with an amber sky, where the tables are never cleared and the guests never leave. A gift from such a place is not a gift, child. It is a place laid at table." "Dymas," Nyx breathed, and the name came out of them like a smell. "The hungry country. I have smelled its kitchens on the far side of the dark." "I want to know who gave it to me." "Ask instead who is meant to sit," Isolde said, "and why the host chose to feed you first." "Gluttony does not steal, then," Rory said slowly, thinking it through the way she thought through locked buildings and wrong addresses. "It invites." Isolde almost smiled. "It invites and invites and invites, and the door it holds open only swings one way." That was when the stone warmed. It came up through Rory's palm like a coal cupped in a hand — slow, then certain, a heat with a rhythm to it, a pulse. She went absolutely still. "It's warm. It's never warm. You told me—" she turned to Nyx "—it warms near portals." Nyx's violet eyes flared. They pivoted toward the northern rim of the Grove, and Rory saw their edges sharpen into something urgent. "There. North and low. A scratch of light where light should not be. The Veil is frayed at that edge, frayed like a hem a dog has worried." And the birdsong stopped. All of it, everywhere, at once, like a needle lifted off a record. For a long moment nobody moved. The pool held the sky in its mouth and did not swallow. Rory became aware of her own heartbeat, of the pendant's pulse answering it, or setting it, she couldn't tell which, and for the first time since the standing stones she was properly afraid. "Tell me plainly," she said. "As plainly as you can." "I cannot lie to you, so hear what I can say." Isolde's voice had gone very quiet. "In three days the sun dies its shortest death, and on that longest night the Boundary wears thin as wet paper. Something on the far side has been tasting the grain. The stone is warm because the door is beginning to remember it is a door." "Then we close it." "Then you go home." The Seer turned away, toward the darkening rim of her impossible garden, and her last words drifted back like something thrown over a shoulder. "Go now, while the light still likes you. The Grove is generous with wonders and mean with hours, Aurora Carter, and you have a table of your own to refuse." The crossing out was a slap of cold and noise — traffic somewhere, the frost-hard ground, true dark under real stars. The stag was gone. Rory's phone buzzed back to life in her pocket with a bar of signal and the time in white digits: 7:23. Nearly three hours gone in what had felt like one. Four missed messages from Yu-Fei. Her shift had started forty minutes ago. She stood between the ordinary oaks with her breath steaming and her heart going hard, and the Heartstone lay against her sternum, still warm, still counting — a slow, patient, gluttonous pulse, like something on the far side of a thinning wall, tapping its fingers, waiting to be fed.
created_at"2026-09-02T10:11:35.499Z" 9/2/2026, 10:11:35 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
37.84% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Rory said quietly [quietly]"
1"Rory said slowly [slowly]"
2"The Seer turned away [away]"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.459
leniency0.919
rawRatio0.176
effectiveRatio0.162
88.18% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1692
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"gently"
2"slowly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
64.54% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1692
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"porcelain"
count1
2
word"comforting"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count3
5
word"resolved"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count3
7
word"absolutely"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"porcelain"
2"comforting"
3"whisper"
4"warmth"
5"resolved"
6"pulse"
7"absolutely"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences86
matches
0"seemed embarrassed"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences86
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences106
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1705
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount1298
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.23
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
Heartstone2
Nyx7
Shade1
Isolde12
Rory16
Silas1
London1
November1
December1
Grove3
Seer2
Yu-Fei1
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Shade"
2"Isolde"
3"Rory"
4"Silas"
5"Seer"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Yu-Fei"
globalScore0.884
windowScore0.667
69.35% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"seemed embarrassed by the idea of ripples, ringed by more of the oak-born stones"
1"felt like one"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1705
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences106
matches
0"checked that morning "
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs46
mean37.07
std25.98
cv0.701
sampleLengths
051
164
28
365
41
575
654
712
888
939
103
1117
1237
1375
1414
1599
1633
175
1853
1959
2048
217
2264
237
2428
2547
2611
2754
285
2963
3028
319
3218
3323
3419
356
3646
3750
3817
3951
4010
4163
424
4358
4468
4549
88.94% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences86
matches
0"was gone"
1"was lit"
2"been assessed"
3"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs209
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences106
ratio0.113
matches
0"She knew, because she'd checked that morning — Richmond Park was sixty minutes by tube from her flat above Silas's bar, and she'd done her homework like the pre-law dropout she was."
1"Standing stones rose where the trees had been, taller than Nyx, pale as bone and grained like timber — stone that had been wood once, or wood that had given up and become stone, bark furring their bases and rings of growth still visible in their flanks, worn smooth as candle wax."
2"She put out her hand, and her fingers met nothing — and then met everything, a pressure like walking into deep water, a soft pop in her ears, a taste of apples and cold honey on her tongue."
3"Rory stood ankle-deep in wildflowers — red campion, cowslips, things she had no names for, petals the colors of stained glass — all of them blooming their heads off in what was, by any sane calendar, the middle of December."
4"Just the song, looping and looping, and once — she would have sworn it — the phrase almost resolved into words before sliding apart again."
5"At her hip, the moonsilver dagger Isolde had given her lay cold through its sheath — cold in all this warmth, cold like a held grudge — glowing a faint, stubborn silver, as if it missed the moon and refused to pretend otherwise."
6"Not all at once, and not much — a few degrees, stems creaking like old wood, faces swiveling to follow her the way sunflowers follow the sun."
7"And the wildflowers nearest her hand leaned away — all of them, a full-body flinch in slow motion, stems bowing back as if from an open oven door."
8"It came up through Rory's palm like a coal cupped in a hand — slow, then certain, a heat with a rhythm to it, a pulse."
9"\"It's warm. It's never warm. You told me—\" she turned to Nyx \"—it warms near portals.\""
10"The crossing out was a slap of cold and noise — traffic somewhere, the frost-hard ground, true dark under real stars."
11"She stood between the ordinary oaks with her breath steaming and her heart going hard, and the Heartstone lay against her sternum, still warm, still counting — a slow, patient, gluttonous pulse, like something on the far side of a thinning wall, tapping its fingers, waiting to be fed."
99.82% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1169
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.04020530367835757
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.00855431993156544
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences106
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences106
mean16.08
std11.7
cv0.728
sampleLengths
021
130
28
328
418
510
68
78
828
912
1017
111
1213
1319
1419
1524
1612
1732
183
195
202
2112
2252
2311
242
253
2620
274
2818
2917
303
3117
3216
3321
345
3538
3632
3714
381
3922
4040
4136
426
432
4425
454
461
4716
4817
4920
77.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences106
uniqueOpeners53
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences77
matches
0"Then Isolde stepped between two"
1"Then it was her turn."
2"Then she was through, and"
3"Just the song, looping and"
4"Nearly three hours gone in"
ratio0.065
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences77
matches
0"Her bare feet settled on"
1"She tried not to find"
2"she asked, low"
3"Their voice arrived the way"
4"It watched them pass with"
5"She knew, because she'd checked"
6"Her silver hair hung to"
7"She put out her hand,"
8"She said it briskly, because"
9"They followed Isolde deeper."
10"She told herself it was"
11"She stopped, and after a"
12"They came at last to"
13"It came up through Rory's"
14"She went absolutely still."
15"she turned to Nyx \"—it"
16"They pivoted toward the northern"
17"Her shift had started forty"
18"She stood between the ordinary"
ratio0.247
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences77
matches
0"Frost had come down hard"
1"Rory walked with her hands"
2"Isolde crossed the rimed bracken"
3"Her bare feet settled on"
4"Rory's own tracks ran out"
5"She tried not to find"
6"she asked, low"
7"Their voice arrived the way"
8"A stag stood watch fifty"
9"It watched them pass with"
10"She knew, because she'd checked"
11"A small wood."
12"A dip in the land."
13"Rory's thumb found the crescent"
14"Her silver hair hung to"
15"Nyx flowed between the pillars"
16"Rory heard their whisper drift"
17"She put out her hand,"
18"Rory stood ankle-deep in wildflowers"
19"Birdsong came from everywhere and"
ratio0.701
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
31.75% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences45
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Her bare feet settled on ground frozen stiff as porcelain, and the frost stayed whole beneath them, unbroken, as though the world declined to admit she was ther…"
1"It watched them pass with the flat courtesy of a creature that had decided they were not its problem."
2"Standing stones rose where the trees had been, taller than Nyx, pale as bone and grained like timber — stone that had been wood once, or wood that had given up …"
3"At her hip, the moonsilver dagger Isolde had given her lay cold through its sheath — cold in all this warmth, cold like a held grudge — glowing a faint, stubbor…"
4"And the wildflowers nearest her hand leaned away — all of them, a full-body flinch in slow motion, stems bowing back as if from an open oven door."
5"Rory became aware of her own heartbeat, of the pendant's pulse answering it, or setting it, she couldn't tell which, and for the first time since the standing s…"
6"She stood between the ordinary oaks with her breath steaming and her heart going hard, and the Heartstone lay against her sternum, still warm, still counting — …"
36.76% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she asked, low"
1"Nyx had, their edges uncertain, starved-looking"
2"Nyx breathed, and the name came out of them like a smell"
95.95% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Rory muttered (mutter)"
1"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.27
leniency0.541
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.108
81.9157%