Run: 2026-09-02-01M1GT6XWAKSQ0PM7GSVW5B4HK

Run Details

Duration:
6m 39s
Cost:
$0.003424
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Triple fare. Midnight handover. No house number, no name, just the old oaks, Richmond Park, on a slip in Yu-Fei Cheung's cramped handwriting. Yu-Fei doesn't pay triple for dumplings. She doesn't send drivers past Zone 2 after ten, and in three years she has never once failed to meet my eye. Tonight she counted out my notes like they were hot from the fryer and kept her gaze on the till. "Leave the bag at the stones. Don't wait for a signature." "Whose order is it?" "The caller asked for you special. The girl with the red stone." The drawer slammed shut. "I don't want to know what that means, and neither should you." Nobody calls me Aurora. It's Laila on the delivery app, Rory to everyone who matters. One person alive uses my full name, she does it in Welsh, and she lives in Cardiff. The note was taped under the lid of the top box. I found it at the lights on Sheen Road. Eva's slanted hand, the looping f's, the ink smudge where her pen always rested. The old oaks. You remember the way. Come alone. Burn this. Eva hadn't answered her phone in a fortnight. Her flatmate said she'd gone away. People don't go away mid-lease, not Eva, who alphabetised her spice rack and rang her mum every Sunday. There was one more thing, and I'd told no one, because it sounded mad even inside my own skull. The pendant at my throat, two years hanging dull as bottle glass, had woken up. Warm outside Waterloo. Hot by Richmond gate. It sat against my sternum like a swallowed coal and burned hotter with every step toward the trees. The pendant warms near doors. Hel's doors. I'd had that from people who'd know, and Richmond Park is a long way from Hel. Either the rules had changed, or there was a basement under the basement. I went over the locked gate anyway. The A316 hummed at my back. I gave it three strides and it shut off like a radio with the plug pulled. Not faded. Shut off. Frost creaked under my trainers. My breath hung in front of my face and refused to drift. Then footsteps: mine, and then not quite mine, half a beat late, setting down where I had set down. I stopped. The extra ones stopped too, one heartbeat behind. "Right," I said. "Obviously." My voice came out flat and close, like talking into a pillow. The torch crossed bracken, a bench, the pale slices of birch trunks. Nobody. The bag knocked against my hip and I kept walking, and at a fallen beech my feet turned left on their own, sure as commuters. I'd never walked this corner of the park in my life. You remember the way, the note said. I didn't. Something in my legs did. Then the oaks arrived, and they didn't bother with a transition. One stride there was winter, scrub grass, frost. The next, the ground went soft and black and sweet with leaf mould, the air smelled of honey and cut stems, and the frost was gone. Wildflowers to my knees. Campion, vetch, daffodils with their heads up. In December. Nodding. There was no wind. The stones stood in a broken ring, seven of them, grey, taller than my father, with oaks grown up through their joints, roots gripping rock like fists. Someone had spent an ancient kind of patience making sure nobody wandered in here by accident. The gap due south hung open between the two fattest slabs, and the pendant aimed itself at it, the way a compass aims, if a compass wanted things from you. My watch said 00:12. It had said 00:12 at the car park. The second hand ticked forward, tocked back, tick-tock, tick-tock, patient as a metronome, going nowhere at all. I put my wrist away in my pocket. Ahead and deep, a phone rang. Tinny, muffled, wrong, a ringtone playing from underwater. It was my ringtone. I pulled my mobile out. Dark screen, no service, no call. The ringing ahead stopped mid-note, between one breath and the next, and left a silence with weight to it. Humming started somewhere off to my left. Slow. Knowing. Suo Gân. My mother's lullaby, the one she sang over my fevers when I was small. My skin pulled tight across my shoulders. Nobody in this park had ever heard that song. Something stood between two trunks on my right, tall and pale as birch. The torch beam reached for it and slid off, the way light slides off oil. When I looked square at the place there was bracken, only bracken. In the corner of my eye, it stayed. "Who's there?" "Who's there?" My own voice, from behind me and below, half a second late. "I've got pepper spray." "You've got pepper spray." A pause, the exact length of a smile. "No, you don't." I pressed the can through my pocket. It hissed, full pressure, and nothing came out at all. The bag slid off my shoulder into the flowers. I let it lie. "Rory?" Deep in the trees, small and cracked the way Eva's voice went when she cried. "Rory, I can't find the gate." Rule one, the one I'd made on the walk in, was never follow a voice that knows your name. Eva's voice knew it. My legs put their opinion forward and I pinned them at the last stone, palm flat on the rock. Frost-cold. Then not. The stone warmed under my hand like something waking. "Eva says come in," the voice said, gentle, still hers. "Eva says you brought the stone." Then it slid, mid-sentence, into my voice. "Eva says." I backed out through the south gap with my eyes on the trees. Count paces, find the frost line, follow the road out. Simple. Somewhere in the dark my own voice laughed once, politely, like a caller on a radio phone-in. Twenty paces. Forty. A blackbird opened the dawn chorus, full-throated, certain, and every bird in the black joined in, a whole morning of birdsong at ten past midnight. My watch said 00:12. Sixty. The frost line never came. The grass stayed soft and black and the flowers stayed open, and on the next stride I came through the south gap again, entering, not leaving, the ring of stones smaller ahead of me in the dark. I want that on record: smaller. Sixty paces out had put me twelve paces in, the way a room shrinks when the walls have been listening. In the centre, on a flat slab that hadn't been there before, sat the thermal bag. Six boxes, lids folded back, neat as a submitted invoice. The cardboard had gone grey and soft, the way paper goes after years of damp. I'd been carrying that bag thirty minutes. The thing on the slab had been waiting a great deal longer for its dinner. Every flower in the clearing had turned to face me. Thousands of small heads, tilted at my chest, at the pendant, the way sunflowers track a sun. I wasn't any kind of sun. Between me and the south gap stood the figure. Tall. Then my height. It wore my coat, the parka with the torn left cuff I'd mended with yellow thread, and the mending was there, the same crooked stitches. It raised one hand, and a small crescent scar caught the torchlight on the left wrist. My scar. My exact scar. The pendant went from hot to molten. I clapped my palm over it through my jumper and the heat bit through wool and skin, and underneath the burn it pulsed, glad, like a dog hearing its lead. "You came alone," it said, with my mouth, in the voice I keep for customers and landlords and everyone I've decided not to trust. "How thoughtful." The south gap began to grind shut behind me, stone on stone. The slice of orange streetlight in it thinned to a wire, then a thread, then nothing at all. Across the clearing, wearing my coat and my scar and my smile, the thing that had ordered dinner waited to be thanked.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1364
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
85.34% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1364
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"footsteps"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"silence"
2"weight"
3"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences129
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences141
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1364
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount1284
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.39
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Richmond3
Park2
Yu-Fei2
Cheung1
Zone1
Aurora1
Laila1
Rory1
Welsh1
Cardiff1
Sheen1
Road1
Eva5
Sunday1
Waterloo1
Hel2
December1
Gân1
persons
0"Yu-Fei"
1"Cheung"
2"Laila"
3"Rory"
4"Eva"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Welsh"
3"Cardiff"
4"Sheen"
5"Road"
6"Waterloo"
7"Hel"
8"December"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences85
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite mine, half a beat late, setting down where I had set down"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1364
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences141
matches
0"heard that song"
1"carrying that bag"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean31.72
std20.6
cv0.65
sampleLengths
023
148
211
34
428
532
634
711
832
959
1043
1126
1236
1310
144
1575
1663
1773
1837
1948
2041
2148
222
2314
244
2515
2630
271
2821
2954
3016
317
322
3341
3432
3569
3663
3733
3859
3937
4026
4130
4222
97.10% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences129
matches
0"was taped"
1"was gone"
2"was bracken"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs198
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences141
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1294
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.019319938176197836
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0015455950540958269
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences141
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences141
mean9.67
std7.45
cv0.77
sampleLengths
02
12
219
36
422
520
611
74
816
912
104
1111
1217
1311
149
1514
163
174
182
192
208
216
2218
2319
2415
253
264
2718
285
292
3016
3113
327
336
3416
352
362
375
3812
3919
402
418
423
431
4412
4512
461
4725
4811
497
69.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.44680851063829785
totalSentences141
uniqueOpeners63
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences105
matches
0"Then footsteps: mine, and then"
1"Then the oaks arrived, and"
2"Then it slid, mid-sentence, into"
3"Somewhere in the dark my"
4"Then my height."
ratio0.048
86.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences105
matches
0"She doesn't send drivers past"
1"It's Laila on the delivery"
2"I found it at the"
3"You remember the way."
4"Her flatmate said she'd gone"
5"It sat against my sternum"
6"I'd had that from people"
7"I went over the locked"
8"I gave it three strides"
9"My breath hung in front"
10"My voice came out flat"
11"I'd never walked this corner"
12"You remember the way, the"
13"My watch said 00:12."
14"It had said 00:12 at"
15"I put my wrist away"
16"It was my ringtone."
17"I pulled my mobile out."
18"My mother's lullaby, the one"
19"My skin pulled tight across"
ratio0.333
88.57% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount78
totalSentences105
matches
0"Yu-Fei doesn't pay triple for"
1"She doesn't send drivers past"
2"Tonight she counted out my"
3"The drawer slammed shut"
4"Nobody calls me Aurora."
5"It's Laila on the delivery"
6"The note was taped under"
7"I found it at the"
8"Eva's slanted hand, the looping"
9"The old oaks."
10"You remember the way."
11"Eva hadn't answered her phone"
12"Her flatmate said she'd gone"
13"People don't go away mid-lease,"
14"The pendant at my throat,"
15"It sat against my sternum"
16"The pendant warms near doors."
17"I'd had that from people"
18"I went over the locked"
19"The A316 hummed at my"
ratio0.743
47.62% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences105
matches
0"Either the rules had changed,"
ratio0.01
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"People don't go away mid-lease, not Eva, who alphabetised her spice rack and rang her mum every Sunday."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.8267%