Run: 2026-09-02-01M1GT8GCJRG89X5NWKAPD8YV2

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Duration:
7m 3s
Cost:
$0.003743
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
I opened the door for Eva's key and found six inches of Lucien Moreau filling the gap. The chain held. Rain still beaded on the shoulders of a charcoal coat, and one grey-gloved hand rested on the ivory head of his cane. Bergamot threaded through the curry smell that owned our landing. Ptolemy flowed out from under the sofa, crossed the hall, and wound himself around Lucien's ankle. Traitor. "Three deadbolts and a chain," he said. "I choose to feel flattered." "You've got five seconds to get off my landing." "Ptolemy outvotes you." "Ptolemy has no standards." "Neither did you, once." I put my weight into the door. The cane slid into the gap, gentle as a butler offering an arm. "Eva will invoice you for the frame." "Touch this door again and you'll leave the way I left your office. Through the window." "You've had practice with windows." Silk, with something under it. "Incidentally, you went to ground badly. A parcel addressed to Laila Vale, ordered on Eva's card. A Camden shop that sells salt by the kilo to exactly one paranoid. And Yu-Fei's delivery boy remembers a girl who used to leave my office at three in the morning, usually with my pen." "How much did he charge you for that memory?" "Nothing. People give that one away." A fat manila folder slid through the gap and landed face up on the mat. My photograph on top, eight years old, Cardiff haircut and all. Beneath it, one word underlined three times in red ink. Malphora. I unclipped the chain, because some conversations deserve the dignity of a doorway. He stepped past me, turned all three deadbolts, and hung his coat on the hook like a man who had done it a hundred times before. "Don't lock me in with you." "Force of habit. I lock the things I'm not prepared to lose." Eva's flat fought a running war against paper and lost on every front. Folios stacked along the counter, scrolls rubber-banded like cigars, a dead fern propping up a lexicon of dead alphabets. Chilli smoke seeped up through the floorboards from the curry house below, thick enough to chew. Lucien leaned his cane against the shelf, and I kept one eye on the ivory. "You remember what it carries." "I remember the sound it makes." An envelope landed on the counter beside the fern. Heavy cream card, my alias printed in tidy type, and beneath it a number with enough zeros to buy the whole of Brick Lane. "My colleague received that on Tuesday. Two hundred thousand for proof of death, half in advance. He declined. So did the next two names I rang. The fourth won't." "The fourth?" "Cheaper than me. And worse." "So you came to warn me. Sweet." I flicked the card back at him. "Before or after you sold them my address?" "I don't sell. I came because they will find you inside a week, and because three weeks ago you walked out of a conversation that isn't finished." "I finished it. You said goodnight to a name I'd never heard, and I found my own file in your desk. What was I meant to do, stay for tea?" "Ask me. You had a year of nights to ask me." "I asked. You said 'work'." The folder sat between us on the counter, my younger face grinning up at the ceiling. "Eight years, Lucien. You've known my name for eight years and you let me introduce myself with a false one." "You introduced yourself with a knife at my throat. It would have been rude to correct you." Ptolemy watched from the sofa now, ears flat, all his early goodwill gone. "Was I the job?" "The job was a name in Cardiff." He stripped off one glove, finger by finger, and something behind my ribs leaned closer. "Nobody paid me to remember how you take your coffee, or that you say Cardiff like an apology. Those I kept for free." "That's not an answer." "It's the only one I can afford." He crossed the room, unhurried, and stopped close enough to count the rain in his hair. Cold wool and bergamot. My back found the bookshelf, and my pulse made a liar out of every word I'd loaded. "You want the truth or you want me gone. The truth takes longer, and it costs more than either of us has." "Say it, then." "Malphora isn't a name." His hand came up, knuckles tracing the air beside my jaw without landing. "It's a door. Somebody in Avaros lost the key a long time ago, and the contract that produced your file was never a hunt. It was a search party." "And you kept the door to yourself." "I kept you." My left wrist lit up like a struck match. I grabbed it before the sound escaped me. His hand followed mine, turned it over with a care that had no business in a man like him, and we both looked down. The crescent had split along its curve. A hairline of black, wet and bright as oil. A bead swelled at the seam and dropped, hissing where it struck the boards, curling into a thin grey rope of smoke. Ptolemy screamed once and vanished under the sofa. "How long has it been bleeding?" "It hasn't. It's a childhood scar. It's nothing." "Nothing doesn't hiss." The amber in his left eye drowned, black spreading across it until both eyes matched. "It's a seal, and something has started picking at the wax." The bulb in the stairwell died. Then the one below it, floor by floor, the way lights die when a building is being swallowed. A smell crawled up through the gaps around the door, struck matches and old copper. "The chain," I said. "Will hold against men. This is not men." He drew his hand from the ivory head, and the cane came apart with a click, a blade sliding free, thin and dark and eager. He stepped between me and the door. "Back of the flat, Aurora. Barricade nothing. Silence is cheaper." "You knew this could happen. The scar, the name. You knew." "Eight years." The blade levelled at the door. "And you're only asking the important questions now." On the stairs, something started to climb.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.208
leniency0.417
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1053
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1053
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"tracing"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"silk"
2"flicked"
3"pulse"
4"tracing"
5"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences46
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences46
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences83
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1053
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions13
wordCount557
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.54
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva2
Lucien3
Moreau1
Cardiff1
Brick1
Lane1
Ptolemy3
Cold1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Lucien"
2"Moreau"
3"Ptolemy"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences39
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1053
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean20.25
std18.04
cv0.891
sampleLengths
017
151
21
312
49
53
64
74
820
97
1016
1161
129
136
1437
1513
1626
176
1812
1963
205
216
2233
2329
242
255
2622
2727
2830
2911
3041
3117
3213
334
3445
354
3666
373
3846
397
403
4141
4246
436
448
4529
4639
474
4850
4911
97.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences46
matches
0"being swallowed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs85
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences83
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount559
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount8
adverbRatio0.014311270125223614
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0017889087656529517
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences83
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences83
mean12.69
std8.74
cv0.689
sampleLengths
017
13
222
310
416
51
67
75
89
93
104
114
127
1313
147
1516
1610
1751
189
196
2015
2111
2210
231
2413
2526
266
2712
2813
2919
3016
3115
325
336
349
3524
3629
372
385
3914
408
4127
4230
4311
4421
4520
4617
4713
484
4922
82.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5180722891566265
totalSentences83
uniqueOpeners43
79.37% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences42
matches
0"Then the one below it,"
ratio0.024
77.14% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences42
matches
0"I opened the door for"
1"I put my weight into"
2"My photograph on top, eight"
3"I unclipped the chain, because"
4"He stepped past me, turned"
5"I flicked the card back"
6"He stripped off one glove,"
7"He crossed the room, unhurried,"
8"My back found the bookshelf,"
9"His hand came up, knuckles"
10"My left wrist lit up"
11"I grabbed it before the"
12"His hand followed mine, turned"
13"He drew his hand from"
14"He stepped between me and"
ratio0.357
31.43% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount36
totalSentences42
matches
0"I opened the door for"
1"The chain held."
2"Bergamot threaded through the curry"
3"Ptolemy flowed out from under"
4"I put my weight into"
5"The cane slid into the"
6"Silk, with something under it"
7"A fat manila folder slid"
8"My photograph on top, eight"
9"I unclipped the chain, because"
10"He stepped past me, turned"
11"Eva's flat fought a running"
12"Folios stacked along the counter,"
13"Chilli smoke seeped up through"
14"Lucien leaned his cane against"
15"An envelope landed on the"
16"I flicked the card back"
17"The folder sat between us"
18"Ptolemy watched from the sofa"
19"He stripped off one glove,"
ratio0.857
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences42
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Bergamot threaded through the curry smell that owned our landing."
1"He stepped past me, turned all three deadbolts, and hung his coat on the hook like a man who had done it a hundred times before."
2"His hand followed mine, turned it over with a care that had no business in a man like him, and we both looked down."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"The folder sat, my younger face grinning up at the ceiling"
1"His hand came up, knuckles tracing the air beside my jaw without landing"
2"He drew, and the cane came apart with a click, a blade sliding free, thin and dark and eager"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.042
leniency0.083
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.0210%