Run: 2026-09-02-01M1GTWA9J7C9MVY7W9VAF61W4

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Duration:
13m 6s
Cost:
$0.006643
Provider:
Z.AI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Three deadbolts between us, and he knocked like he owned the door. Two knuckles, unhurried, a rhythm I would have known through concrete. Ptolemy lifted his head from the index cards he had colonised on the sofa, weighed the sound, and trotted to the threshold, tail up, surrendering to the enemy before I said a word. Traitor. I checked the peephole first. Cardiff habit. Keep it. Charcoal shoulders filled the fisheye, platinum hair slicked to the millimetre, one gloved hand resting on the ivory handle of his cane. Lucien Moreau, flawless from the collar down, except for his knuckles, which stood white around the ivory, carrying weight the cane couldn't account for. I opened the door to the chain's length. One amber eye found me through the gap. "Eva's in Glasgow." "I know. The congress." Warm gravel, with French underneath. "I also know you have ordered from the Golden Empress nine times in eleven nights. You only order when you cannot sleep." "You would know that." I kept my hand flat on the door. "Say whatever this is from the landing." "A woman telephoned Yu-Fei's this morning. She asked for Laila." The chain came off before I decided to take it off. He stepped past me into the flat, and the flat went small around him. Spice and old paper, Brick Lane breathing curry up through the floorboards, books bowing the shelves, scrolls stacked in wine crates, Eva's index cards shingling every wall. My blanket folded on the sofa, my charger in her socket, my delivery helmet on the counter. Eleven days of my life had made the place mine without asking. Lucien crossed the clutter without looking down, the way a man crosses a room he has mapped in the dark, and Ptolemy poured himself around his ankles, purring. "Traitor," I told the cat. "We've discussed this." Lucien went to the counter, filled the kettle, and opened the second cupboard for the honey without hunting for it. "Don't." "Honey, no milk." "Don't remember." He set the tin down and turned. In Eva's yellow lamp his eyes did what they always did, the amber one lit from somewhere behind itself, the black one taking whatever it was offered and keeping it. "Eleven days, Rory. You left in the middle of my sentence." "You were mid-transaction. I heard the figure." I folded my arms so my hands would have somewhere to be. "A photograph of Evan's front door, couriered to my workplace with your compliments. 'Stop looking over your shoulder.' I looked over my shoulder every morning for six weeks, Lucien, because I knew he had found me. You knew I knew. You let me flinch at white vans so you could arrive at the end of it feeling like a magician." "You slept." "Don't you dare make that a gift." "The photograph cost four thousand and a favour in Marseille. Cheap, for the outcome. You had stopped sleeping in September. You checked doorways like a woman counting exits, every mirror, every window. Three weeks ago, for the first time since I have known you, you slept an entire night." He drew off one glove, finger by finger. Control, even undressing his hands. "If the price of that was your good opinion, then it was underpriced." "The file, then." My voice came out flat as a receipt. "You had a file on me before we ever had a drink. My mother's maiden name. My schools. My scar, annotated 'childhood, unsubstantiated.'" I dragged my sleeve down over the wrist in question, and the scar sat warm under the wool, the way it always did when the past got named out loud. "Even Malphora. You went looking for Malphora." "Four languages." He laid the glove beside the honey with the care of a man setting down a card he couldn't lose. "I found it in none." "Keep it that way. And you knew what Evan used to call me. Three weeks ago, mid-argument, losing on the merits, you used it. One person has ever called me Laila, and I left a country to stop hearing it in his voice." "I commissioned a file because that is what I am. I buy information the way other men buy rounds. It is the only honesty I have ever practised." "I'm not information." "No." Something moved through the amber eye, slow, banked. "You are the one thing I have ever wanted to know for free." The kettle clicked off. Neither of us moved towards it. The flat was four metres of books, and it had never been smaller. My body ran its stupid, familiar arithmetic, one degree of lean towards him before my brain caught the ledger and tore the page out. "You should have asked me. One question. 'Do you want him handled?'" "You would have said no, and then taken the first train to Cardiff, and done the brave, stupid thing in a multi-storey car park. Alone." "At least it would have been mine." He held my gaze while the anger landed on him, and he took it, tailored like everything else he wore, a man accepting a debt he was glad to owe. "Then it was mine to be wrong about." "You never finished that sentence, by the way." "No." A pause. "I kept it." "Why tonight? You've had eleven days of me not answering. Why knock now?" He crossed to the window and stood with his back to me, watching the street. When he spoke, the broker had come back, all prices and no warmth. "Because contracts are paper, and paper changes hands. Evan held a claim on you. A ring, a promise, a signature, the details don't matter. I bought the claim and lodged the instrument with a broker in Marseille. The Carrow woman. Professional courtesy. On Tuesday she resold it. The buyer collected last night." The floor stayed level under my feet, which I counted as an achievement. "You turned me into paper, Lucien. Paper gets sold." "I turned a knife into paper so it could sit locked in a drawer. I did not imagine the drawer would sell me." A muscle moved in his jaw. The first crack I had seen in him since the door. "Who bought it?" "Unknown. The Carrow woman took the morning tide out of Marseille. In my trade, that is a confession." "So someone owns a debt with my name attached." "With Laila attached." He turned from the window. "Which is why I knocked." "Why did you really knock? Not the broker. Not the claim." "You know why." "Say it anyway." He crossed half the room. Close enough that answering him would have meant tilting my chin up, a decision I refused to make. Cedar and gun oil, the smell of every bad decision I had ever enjoyed. "Rory." My phone lit up on the counter. Unknown number. A photograph, no text. This window, shot from across the street, my own shoulder blurred in the glass. Minutes old. Ptolemy went flat under the sofa. Below us, the curry house extractors cut out, and Brick Lane went quiet enough to hear my pulse. Lucien moved fast for a man with a cane. The cane came apart in his hands with a click, a thin blade sliding free of the ivory. "Away from the glass." Under the door, the stairwell light died. Then the first deadbolt turned. Patient, metallic, one lock at a time. Three locks, and somebody on the other side had brought the patience for all of them. Lucien put himself between me and the door, blade low. "The fire escape zig-zags down the lightwell. When the third lock goes, you run, and you don't look back for me." "Nobody has keys to those locks. Nobody." "Then in a moment, we learn something." "And you?" He watched the door instead of answering, which was its own answer. "Eleven days ago," he said, "I was telling you that I would do it again. All of it. Worse." The second deadbolt turned. The third began.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.204
leniency0.407
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.27% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1339
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
81.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1339
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"flawless"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"flawless"
1"weight"
2"familiar"
3"warmth"
4"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences63
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences63
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences104
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen60
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1339
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount727
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.69
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
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French1
Brick2
Lane2
Eva2
Ptolemy3
Lucien5
Control1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Eva"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Lucien"
4"Control"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences45
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1339
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs66
mean20.29
std20.32
cv1.002
sampleLengths
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145
29
346
416
53
631
719
810
911
1098
118
1220
131
143
152
1637
1711
1879
192
207
2175
2271
2327
2443
2528
263
2722
2847
2912
3025
317
3230
338
348
356
3613
3728
3852
3913
409
4140
423
4318
449
4513
4611
473
483
4937
94.12% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences63
matches
0"was offered"
1"got named"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs121
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences104
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount727
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.017881705639614855
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences104
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences104
mean12.88
std11.91
cv0.925
sampleLengths
012
111
233
31
45
52
62
722
824
98
108
113
129
1322
1412
157
1610
1711
1814
1927
2017
2112
2228
235
243
2520
261
273
282
297
3030
3111
3219
3360
342
357
3657
375
3813
3911
4053
417
4222
435
4443
4528
463
479
4813
494
76.28% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4807692307692308
totalSentences104
uniqueOpeners50
59.52% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences56
matches
0"Then the first deadbolt turned."
ratio0.018
84.29% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences56
matches
0"I checked the peephole first."
1"I opened the door to"
2"I kept my hand flat"
3"He stepped past me into"
4"My blanket folded on the"
5"I told the cat"
6"He set the tin down"
7"I folded my arms so"
8"He drew off one glove,"
9"My voice came out flat"
10"I dragged my sleeve down"
11"He laid the glove beside"
12"My body ran its stupid,"
13"He held my gaze while"
14"He crossed to the window"
15"He turned from the window"
16"He crossed half the room."
17"My phone lit up on"
18"He watched the door instead"
ratio0.339
93.93% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount41
totalSentences56
matches
0"Ptolemy lifted his head from"
1"I checked the peephole first."
2"Charcoal shoulders filled the fisheye,"
3"Lucien Moreau, flawless from the"
4"I opened the door to"
5"I kept my hand flat"
6"The chain came off before"
7"He stepped past me into"
8"My blanket folded on the"
9"Lucien crossed the clutter without"
10"I told the cat"
11"Lucien went to the counter,"
12"He set the tin down"
13"I folded my arms so"
14"He drew off one glove,"
15"My voice came out flat"
16"I dragged my sleeve down"
17"He laid the glove beside"
18"Something moved through the amber"
19"The kettle clicked off."
ratio0.732
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Lucien crossed the clutter without looking down, the way a man crosses a room he has mapped in the dark, and Ptolemy poured himself around his ankles, purring."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"I dragged, and the scar sat warm under the wool, the way it always did when the past got named out loud"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.037
leniency0.074
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.1762%