Run: 2026-09-02-01M1GVBPNBXTP7PJ1SGK2BZEFS

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Duration:
8m 58s
Cost:
$0.004712
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The last deadbolt gave before my pride did. I hauled the door open, and there he stood in the landing's yellow light. Lucien Moreau, immaculate enough to be insulting at any hour, charcoal suit without a single crease, platinum hair slicked to the skull, ivory cane resting against the doorframe as though he'd taken root there. One of his eyes held the light, warm amber. The other swallowed it whole. "You've changed the locks." "Eva changed the locks. I mind the cat." "And yet you open the door at this hour without asking who knocks." "I looked through the spyhole. Burglars iron their shirts." A tabby bullet shot past my ankle, wound itself round his shoes and purred like a small engine. Traitor. Lucien bent, offered one knuckle, and Ptolemy ground his cheek against it as though starved of exactly this for six weeks. Join the club. "How did you even know I'd be here?" "Eva's cat sits in that window at six every evening, shouting at the street. It was not a difficult deduction." "May I come in, Miss Carter?" Miss Carter. Two words, and he'd rebuilt the entire six weeks between us, brick by brick. "The kitchen's through there. Mind the books. Mind the cat." I didn't say mind yourself. He stepped over the loose board by the coat hooks. Of course he did. Six weeks since I'd seen him and his feet still knew the geography of Eva's flat, the creaking board, the low beam over the sink, the hook where his scarf used to hang beside my coat. The flat smelled of cumin and old paper, the curry house below breathing its last hour up through the floorboards, pans clattering, a waitress laughing at somebody's joke. Eva's research colonised every surface, towers of books stacked in what she called a system and I called a landslide. She was in Oxford until Sunday, which was the only reason I'd agreed to mind the cat at all. I poured two whiskies before my hands remembered we weren't speaking. I kept both anyway. One went on the table between us like a fence. "To your health." He raised his glass. "Skip the chit-chat. Why are you here?" "Business." "We finished with business the night I read that folder." I kept my voice level. "A year of my life in it. My father's courtroom. My bus stop. The café where I read. The worst photograph was the dullest. Me, laughing at something out of frame, filed between receipts." "The folder was work." "Was the chess in the brief too?" "The brief was observation." A muscle moved in his jaw, the first honest thing he'd shown me. "No one ordered the chess." The words landed somewhere under my ribs and sat there, warm and unwelcome. I picked up my glass and drank to kill them. "Then say your piece and go." "Evan walked out of prison on Tuesday." The glass sweated in my hand. I set it down with care, because throwing it would feel wonderful and solve nothing. "Good behaviour?" "Money. Someone bought his appeal, his barristers, a flat in Stepney Green. Someone wants him loose and pointed at you." "Evan couldn't afford a traffic solicitor." "He can now. He's an investment." "And you've known since Tuesday." "Yes." "Four days." "I needed to be sure of the rest before I knocked on that door." "The rest?" He took papers from inside his coat. The paper was old, soft as cloth at the corners, and the script on it hurt to read, every letter a fishhook. He laid it on the table with the care people reserve for explosives, and said a word I felt in my teeth. "Malphora." Heat crawled up my wrist from the crescent scar, a struck-match sting I hadn't felt since I was seven. I kept my face still. He watched the wrist, not the face. He'd already seen. "How old were you when you got that?" "Seven. Came off my bike on a kerb in Cardiff. What's that word?" "Avarosi. A court dialect, dead as Latin. It was my father's before it was anyone's dead language." He turned the page towards me. A drawing sat beneath the script, small and precise. A crescent, closed like a bite mark. "Bicycles do not leave sigils, Rory." The scar pulsed once, a second heartbeat. I pressed my thumb over it until it quieted, the way it always quieted, and I hated that he watched me do it. "The contract that first brought me to you asked one question." His voice dropped to match the paper. "Whether the girl with the crescent still breathed. Every report I filed said the trail went cold in Cardiff. Every report was a lie." "Why lie?" "Because the client collects things, and I had already met the thing in question. Because I liked you, and liking you made my reports careless. Careless reports get people collected." "So you vanished." "So I vanished. He had begun checking my sources. Every visit, every game, every glass of whisky was a thread he could pull back to you. I cut them all. The safest place for you was far from me, in the dark." "I've done dark before." My thumb found the scar again. "I left a man for being managed. You could have asked what I wanted." "Would you have stayed?" "That's not the point." "It is the only point." Ptolemy hopped off the windowsill and left the room, tail low, and the silence he left behind was louder than the curry house below. The table was small. Lucien's hand hovered above my wrist, pale against the dark wood. "May I?" "You've never asked before." "I'm asking now." He turned my hand palm-up. His thumb crossed the crescent once, light as a breath, and heat pooled under it and spread up my arm. Cedar and smoke. I'd forgotten the cedar and smoke. I had not moved back, and neither had he. "Tell me it was a job." My voice did something embarrassing on the way out. "All of it. The chess, the river walks, the night you snored in Latin on my notes. Tell me, and I'll hate you cleanly." "The chess was never a job, Aurora." There it was. My name in that Marseille mouth, soft at the edges. Six weeks of hating him, and the hate sat down like a dog told to wait. "Who is he? The client." "A collector." "Of what?" He looked at my wrist. Ptolemy stopped mid-prowl in the doorway. He sat bolt upright, pupils blown to black plates, fixed on the front door. Below us the curry house went silent mid-clatter, a radio switched off at the wall. Then footsteps on the stairs. Slow. Even. Each one placed like a man who owns the building and is in no hurry to prove it. Lucien moved. One heartbeat he stood at the table, the next he stood between me and the door, and the cane came apart in his hands with a hiss, a blade thin as a promise sliding free of the ivory. His free hand found the lamp switch, and the flat dropped into a red amber glow from the street outside. "Behind me." "I can count, Lucien." "Then count fast." Three ways out of Eva's flat: the kitchen window, the fire escape over the curry house, and no third. I'd counted them the week I moved in. Old habits. A gift from a man called Evan. The footsteps reached the landing and stopped. The floorboard by the door, the one that always groaned, held its silence. Whatever stood out there was lighter than a man, or more careful than one. "He isn't even quiet," I whispered. "No." The amber eye found mine in the dark. "He is announcing himself." Across the flat, smooth as a key finding its teeth, the first deadbolt turned.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.136
leniency0.271
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1316
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
81.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1316
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"footsteps"
count2
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"silence"
2"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences75
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences75
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences126
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1316
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount831
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.48
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Ptolemy"
discoveredNames
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Ptolemy3
Carter1
Eva3
Oxford1
Sunday1
Marseille1
Evan1
Lucien4
One3
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Carter"
3"Eva"
4"Evan"
5"Lucien"
6"One"
places
0"Oxford"
1"Marseille"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1316
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences126
matches
0"hated that he"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs74
mean17.78
std19.19
cv1.079
sampleLengths
08
162
24
38
413
59
643
78
820
96
1016
1110
125
1350
1492
153
164
177
181
1949
204
217
2222
2323
246
257
2621
272
2820
296
306
315
321
332
3414
352
3651
371
3834
398
4013
4145
4230
4342
442
4530
463
4742
4824
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences75
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs136
matches
0"weren't speaking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences126
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount835
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.027544910179640718
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0023952095808383233
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences126
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences126
mean10.44
std8.65
cv0.828
sampleLengths
08
114
234
39
45
54
68
713
89
918
101
1121
123
138
1420
156
162
1714
1810
195
2010
214
2236
2328
2420
2519
2611
274
2810
293
304
317
321
3315
3434
354
367
3717
385
3913
4010
416
427
436
4415
452
4620
476
486
495
72.49% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.46825396825396826
totalSentences126
uniqueOpeners59
98.04% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences68
matches
0"Of course he did."
1"Then footsteps on the stairs."
ratio0.029
49.41% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences68
matches
0"I hauled the door open,"
1"I didn't say mind yourself."
2"He stepped over the loose"
3"She was in Oxford until"
4"I poured two whiskies before"
5"I kept both anyway."
6"He raised his glass."
7"I kept my voice level"
8"I picked up my glass"
9"I set it down with"
10"He took papers from inside"
11"He laid it on the"
12"I kept my face still."
13"He watched the wrist, not"
14"He'd already seen."
15"He turned the page towards"
16"I pressed my thumb over"
17"His voice dropped to match"
18"My thumb found the scar"
19"He turned my hand palm-up."
ratio0.426
55.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount55
totalSentences68
matches
0"The last deadbolt gave before"
1"I hauled the door open,"
2"Lucien Moreau, immaculate enough to"
3"The other swallowed it whole."
4"A tabby bullet shot past"
5"Lucien bent, offered one knuckle,"
6"I didn't say mind yourself."
7"He stepped over the loose"
8"The flat smelled of cumin"
9"Eva's research colonised every surface,"
10"She was in Oxford until"
11"I poured two whiskies before"
12"I kept both anyway."
13"He raised his glass."
14"I kept my voice level"
15"A muscle moved in his"
16"The words landed somewhere under"
17"I picked up my glass"
18"The glass sweated in my"
19"I set it down with"
ratio0.809
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Lucien Moreau, immaculate enough to be insulting at any hour, charcoal suit without a single crease, platinum hair slicked to the skull, ivory cane resting agai…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.017
leniency0.034
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.034
91.8843%