Run: 2026-09-02-01M1GVZF5CX3XW8T3X14VP16EK

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Duration:
8m 31s
Cost:
$0.004992
Provider:
Z.AI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
I slid the last deadbolt and opened the door on its chain. Four inches of gap. Four inches was plenty to recognise the man I had spent thirteen weeks learning to hate. Lucien Moreau stood on Eva's doormat in a charcoal suit that had cost more than my monthly rent, right up until somebody opened his cheekbone and ruined the collar. Blood had dried in a dark line along his jaw. He leaned on the ivory cane as though it were the only honest thing left in his wardrobe. The amber eye found me. The black one did whatever the black one did. "Hello, chérie." "No." I shut the door and put my back to it. His voice came through the wood as if he stood at my shoulder instead of four feet down a stairwell. "I would not presume on your hospitality, but the matter is measured in hours, not days." "We're closed." "Evan remembers you." Cold walked up my spine one vertebra at a time. I gave it five seconds, a test of nerve, proof I could send him away twice. My hand was already on the chain. I opened the door wide, and he stayed on the mat. That was the tell. Lucien Moreau had never once waited for permission in his life, and now he stood at the threshold of a rented flat above a curry house, bleeding politely. "You're not coming in." "I cannot. Not without the word. It is a clause, not a courtesy." "Since when do demons wait on doormats?" "Since always, in houses kept against the dark. Eva's work, I suspect. The second circle on your sill is competent." He inclined his head a fraction, a bow to the chalk and its absent author. "She has improved." Eva was in Prague, arguing with three archivists about Sumerian debt tablets. I had a fortnight of cat-sitting and deadbolts ahead of me, and apparently a queue. I unhooked the chain. "In. Coat on the hook. You bleed on her research, I feed you your teeth." Inside, the flat was its usual avalanche. Towers of books bred across every surface, scrolls weighted with mugs, three indices of the supernatural open on the kitchen table with a pebble on each page. Lucien stepped over a stack of monographs without looking down, as though he had measured the room years ago. He set the cane against the arm of Eva's chair. Ptolemy flattened himself under the sofa, and even the cat had the sense not to hiss. "Your friend has been reading the naming-laws of the old houses," Lucien said. "She reads everything." "She is four pages from the truth and three shelves from trouble. Her books may need collecting." "Touch her library and you go out the window with the rest of you. First floor. I'll take my chances with the angle." He almost smiled. Almost. It cost him something around the eyes. I filled the kettle and took the letter opener off the table, held it low and loose, the way Eva had shown me, pointing at nothing in particular. "Sit. Talk. You have until the water boils." He sat on the edge of the chair like a man in a chapel. "Thirteen weeks," I said. "Ninety-one days, if you want it precise. I didn't count. Eva did the arithmetic and I memorised it against my will." "You preferred me gone. You said so at the time. In three languages. Only one of them was polite." The kettle ticked as it warmed. "You left mid-sentence." I kept my eyes on the kettle. "On the steps outside Silas'. You said my name like it cost you, then you leaned in, then nothing. Two days later I'm standing in your office holding your gloves, and there's a file on your desk with my face on it. My real name. Cardiff. Evan. Photographs I never knew existed. And one word across the top in your handwriting." "Malphora." "You don't get to say it." "It is not a price tag, Rory." "It's what brokers stamp on inventory." "You want the file. Very well. Listen." He folded his hands. "Entry the first: 'The mark stirs when she laughs. Cease being amusing.' Dated the Tuesday you stole two of my pens." "You kept a diary about me." "I kept a cage about you. In my father's country, nothing that wants goes unnamed, and nothing that is named goes free. My blood wanted you. The blood wrote. What is written owns, unless its owner builds the cage faster than the want can fly." His thumb travelled the length of the ivory handle. "So I built one. Paper. Dates. Rules. An accounting every night. Tedious work, keeping a wolf in a filing cabinet." "What does it mean? The word." "She who carries the fire." He said it the way other men confess. "It is not a translation one uses at dinner." I shoved my sleeve to the elbow and laid my wrist in the lamplight, scar up. Pale crescent, souvenir of a wall in Cardiff and an eight-year-old who believed she could fly. "Then explain this. It ached for a month after you took my arm outside Silas'. I thought I'd cracked the old break hauling delivery crates." He looked at my wrist the way a man looks at a debt. His hand came up, stopped a breath from my skin. The scar warmed anyway. "The wall made the door, chérie. I opened it." The kettle began to sing. Neither of us moved to it. "You could have told me." "Telling is not describing. In the old words, speech is a deed. To say a person's mark aloud, to her, is to finish the marking." He lowered his hand. "So I chose silence. I chose distance. Want starves, given air. Given weeks. Given the absence of laughter in one's office." "Did it starve?" "No." The word had no ornament on it. "It learnt to sing on its own." The kettle clicked off. In the walls, a pipe knocked once and settled. "Talk fast." "Three nights ago, an envoy of my father's house came up the Thames carrying a collector's writ, with your name in its mouth. Tonight I fed it a false trail through Southwark." He touched the ruin of his collar. "It declined to believe me. As for Evan, I bought his memory of you, and he was glad to sell it cheap. Someone has now paid him more to remember. Memory comes back like rot, from the edges inward." "You're telling me the man I ran from is remembering me in real time." "I am telling you that everything I bought for you is for sale again, and the buyer has already landed." I laughed. It came out wrong, jagged at both ends. "Then run. Running is your whole trick, Moreau. Ninety-one days of it. You're built for the sport." "Distance slows a song. It no longer drowns it." He rose, and the room shrank to the width of his shoulders. "There is one way to silence a mark outright. It must be answered." "Meaning what? Spell it out. You love clauses." "Meaning it must be answered, not starved. Freely, by the one it names, in the old words, before a witness worth the title. After that, it sleeps. But the answering binds, chérie. Proximity is the lock. You would be mine, in the manner of my father's kind, which is to say entirely, and I would be yours, which ought to frighten you considerably more." "Terms." My voice held. I made it hold. "Everything with you has terms. What do you get?" "The honour of your continued breathing." "Try again." "You." He came no closer. The cane turned once in his grip, ivory taking the lamplight. "All of it. Every hour of the ninety-one days spent pretending otherwise. I am the buyer and the price, Rory. That is the whole ledger, and you may audit it line by line." My wrist went hot. Not aching. Hot, a coal laid under the skin, and I had time to think that this was new before the music below stopped mid-phrase, tablas and all, like a hand pressed over a mouth. The curry house never went quiet. Not at ten, not at two, not ever. Ptolemy screamed from under the sofa, a sound I had never heard a cat make and never wanted to hear again. Lucien moved. I never saw him cross the room. One moment he stood an arm's length away, the next he was flat against the wall beside the window, cane levelled, thumb resting on a catch in the ivory I had never noticed. "Stay off the glass." Three soft knocks sounded at the window. First floor. Brick Lane lay eleven feet below, and there were no footsteps at all on the stairs. "Don't answer it," he said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.237
leniency0.475
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.62% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1479
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
83.10% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1479
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"measured"
count2
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"silence"
2"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences69
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences69
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences114
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen64
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1479
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount713
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.7
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Moreau2
Eva4
Prague1
Sumerian1
Cardiff1
Lane1
Lucien5
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Eva"
2"Lucien"
places
0"Prague"
1"Cardiff"
2"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
96.81% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"ead of me, and apparently a queue"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.676
wordCount1479
matches
0"not presume on your hospitality, but the matter is measured in hours, not days"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences114
matches
0"think that this"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean23.11
std21.32
cv0.923
sampleLengths
032
171
22
31
430
516
62
73
833
943
104
1113
127
1338
1427
1519
1679
1713
183
1917
2023
2111
2236
2314
2425
2519
266
2771
281
296
307
316
3232
336
3474
356
3622
3757
3827
399
4011
415
4250
433
4415
4513
462
4778
4814
4920
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs119
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences114
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount717
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.030683403068340307
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.00697350069735007
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences114
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences114
mean12.97
std11.76
cv0.906
sampleLengths
012
14
216
329
410
518
65
79
82
91
1010
1120
1216
132
143
1510
1616
177
1811
194
2028
214
2213
237
2435
253
2612
2715
284
2915
307
3127
3219
3310
3416
3513
363
3717
3823
393
401
417
4228
438
4414
454
4621
4719
486
4910
71.64% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.4824561403508772
totalSentences114
uniqueOpeners55
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
16.72% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences61
matches
0"I slid the last deadbolt"
1"He leaned on the ivory"
2"I shut the door and"
3"His voice came through the"
4"I gave it five seconds,"
5"My hand was already on"
6"I opened the door wide,"
7"He inclined his head a"
8"I had a fortnight of"
9"I unhooked the chain."
10"He set the cane against"
11"He almost smiled."
12"It cost him something around"
13"I filled the kettle and"
14"He sat on the edge"
15"I kept my eyes on"
16"He folded his hands"
17"His thumb travelled the length"
18"He said it the way"
19"I shoved my sleeve to"
ratio0.508
41.97% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences61
matches
0"I slid the last deadbolt"
1"Lucien Moreau stood on Eva's"
2"Blood had dried in a"
3"He leaned on the ivory"
4"The amber eye found me."
5"The black one did whatever"
6"I shut the door and"
7"His voice came through the"
8"I gave it five seconds,"
9"My hand was already on"
10"I opened the door wide,"
11"That was the tell."
12"Lucien Moreau had never once"
13"He inclined his head a"
14"Eva was in Prague, arguing"
15"I had a fortnight of"
16"I unhooked the chain."
17"Towers of books bred across"
18"Lucien stepped over a stack"
19"He set the cane against"
ratio0.836
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
91.84% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Lucien Moreau stood on Eva's doormat in a charcoal suit that had cost more than my monthly rent, right up until somebody opened his cheekbone and ruined the col…"
1"Pale crescent, souvenir of a wall in Cardiff and an eight-year-old who believed she could fly."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.068
leniency0.136
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.6229%