Run: 2026-09-02-01M1H580DD1DBX458H7VAVPAEC

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Duration:
1m 11s
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$0.000709
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock came a third time before I reached the door, and whoever stood behind it didn't bother to hide their impatience. Three sharp raps, polished as a butler's. I already knew. Nobody knocked like that. I unlocked two deadbolts and kept the chain on. Lucien Moreau filled the gap in the doorway like a portrait that had grown tired of its frame. Charcoal suit, ivory cane, that ridiculous platinum hair slicked back as though the rain outside had agreed to a contract with it. One amber eye, one black, both fixed on me. "You've added a third lock," he said. "Chain's new too. Opened it just for the occasion." I kept the door at four inches. Enough for conversation. Not enough for him. "Go away, Luc." "You've lost weight." "You've lost your mind, coming here." Brick Lane clattered behind him, curry house grease and distant sitar music, and none of it mattered because he shifted his weight onto the cane and the movement pulled my eyes down to his hand. Bruised knuckles. Split at two points. Blood, recent, dried brown in the creases. Something in my chest did a thing I refused to name. "Who hit you?" "Does it matter?" "It matters if whoever did it is planning to finish the job on my doorstep." He smiled. The smile was the problem, always had been. It made a man selling you poison look like he was doing you a favour. "May I come in, Aurora?" My name. Not Laila, the alias I'd used the night we met. Not Carter, barked across a warehouse while I ran interference on a job gone sideways. My name, in that low Marseilles accent that rolled the r like it was reluctant to let go. I closed the door. Unhooked the chain. Opened it again, wider, and stepped back before I could think better of it. He crossed the threshold the way he crossed every room, as if the room should be grateful. His cane clicked once on the floorboards and then he went quiet, the way he always did, cataloguing. The books stacked in towers. The scrolls weighing down the shelves. Ptolemy, my tabby, emerged from behind the sofa, took one look at the intruder, and hissed himself back into exile under my bed. "Still charming," Lucien said. "He's a good judge of character." "Then he'll come round eventually." He lowered himself onto the sofa, unhurried, and rested the cane against the armrest. His hand wasn't trembling. That was worse. Lucien's hands never trembled, but they also never bled without reason. "You look well. Brick Lane suits you." "Cut the pleasantries. You came here at midnight with blood on your shirt cuffs, so say whatever it is you came to say." "The cuffs are old. The blood is new. There's a distinction." "Lucien." "Aurora." He leaned back, and for a moment the performance slipped, just a fracture, and I saw the thing underneath, the tiredness he carried like contraband. "There's a price on your name." The room went very still. The radiator ticked. Somewhere below, the curry house extractor fan rattled through its evening death rattle. "Whose name?" "Yours. Both of them, actually. Laila and Carter and whatever other aliases you're keeping warm these days." He drew a folded paper from his inside pocket and held it out. "Malphora. That one's new to me. Shall I assume it means something?" I didn't take the paper. I didn't move at all. Malphora. A word I hadn't spoken aloud in eleven years, a word my mother had stitched into a christening blanket and then burned, a word that belonged to a version of me I'd buried beneath two cities and a new accent. "Where did you hear that?" "A broker in Whitechapel sells contracts. Yours is on the board. The asking price went up twice today." He tilted his head. "Someone wants you badly enough to make other people rich." "Then they can want. I'm not for sale." "No. But you are for shooting, apparently. Which is why I'm here." He stood, and the cane came with him, and suddenly the flat felt very small. He stopped a pace away. Close enough that I could smell gunpowder and vetiver and, beneath it, copper. "Pack a bag. You're leaving tonight." "Wrong. I'm not going anywhere with you." "You'd rather stay and die in this charming little hovel? The deadbolts are lovely, by the way. Truly first-rate. They'll stop a burglar. They won't stop what's coming for you." "I don't need rescuing." "No." His voice softened, and that was the cruelest thing he could have done, because softness was the one weapon I'd never learned to block. "You never have. That was rather the point, wasn't it? I said I'd stay out of it. You said you'd stay out of mine. We've both lied beautifully." "Lucien." I planted my palm against his chest, meaning to push, and instead my fingers curled into his lapel. Traitors. "Six months. Six months of nothing. Not a call, not a note, not a bloody postcard. You don't get to walk in here and take over." "I walked in because the alternative is walking into a morgue and identifying you. I've done that before." Something crossed his face, quick and buried. "I didn't care for it." "That wasn't—" "No. It wasn't her. Wrong dark-haired woman, wrong city, wrong everything." His hand came up and covered mine where it gripped his lapel. Warm. Steady. Split knuckles against my wrist, right over the crescent scar I'd never told him about and he'd found anyway, once, with his mouth. "I'm not asking you to forgive me. I'm asking you to be alive long enough to keep hating me." "That's manipulation." "Obviously. I'm half demon, darling. Manipulation is a family trade." Despite everything, my mouth twitched. Ptolemy crept out from under the bed, sniffed the air, and slunk along the skirting toward the kitchen, which was his way of conceding the point. Even the cat had more sense than me. "One bag," I said. "One. And we take my bike." "Absolutely not. The bike stays." "The bike comes, or I stay." He studied me. Amber eye, black eye, both reading me the way he read ledgers, hunting for the line where negotiation ended and disaster began. Then he exhaled through his nose, the closest thing to defeat I'd ever won from him. "One bag. One helmet. The bike comes." He turned toward the door and paused, back to me, shoulders squared. "Rory." Lucien Moreau, who called everyone by their surname and no one by anything tender. "Yes?" "The lock on your window is broken. Has been since Tuesday." His knuckles whitened on the cane. "I'd be quick." Cold crawled up my spine. "How do you know that?" "Because I checked it. Tuesday." He turned his head, just enough. "And because the broken glass is why I'm bleeding."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He leaned back [back]"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.321
leniency0.642
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.038
82.62% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1151
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"suddenly"
2"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
82.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1151
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"trembled"
count1
2
word"absolutely"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"trembled"
2"absolutely"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences70
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences106
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1151
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount722
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.55
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
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Enough1
Lane1
Bruised1
Laila1
Carter1
Marseilles1
Traitors1
Warm1
Lucien4
Cold1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Laila"
2"Carter"
3"Lucien"
4"Cold"
places
0"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences41
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1151
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences106
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean22.57
std18.98
cv0.841
sampleLengths
036
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249
37
426
53
654
711
83
93
1015
1130
1245
1321
1469
154
166
1744
1823
1911
201
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2221
232
2442
2551
265
2732
288
2951
307
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324
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3446
3530
362
3767
382
3910
4039
4110
425
436
4441
4520
4614
471
4820
4910
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs130
matches
0"was doing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences106
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount722
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.038781163434903045
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0013850415512465374
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences106
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences106
mean10.86
std9.07
cv0.835
sampleLengths
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518
622
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114
123
133
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152
164
177
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238
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255
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2710
2815
2918
304
313
3214
3317
3418
355
366
3723
384
396
4019
414
423
4311
447
4523
4611
471
4826
496
84.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.5471698113207547
totalSentences106
uniqueOpeners58
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences60
matches
0"Somewhere below, the curry house"
1"Even the cat had more"
2"Then he exhaled through his"
ratio0.05
60.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences60
matches
0"I already knew."
1"I unlocked two deadbolts and"
2"I kept the door at"
3"It made a man selling"
4"My name, in that low"
5"I closed the door."
6"He crossed the threshold the"
7"His cane clicked once on"
8"He lowered himself onto the"
9"His hand wasn't trembling."
10"He leaned back, and for"
11"He drew a folded paper"
12"I didn't take the paper."
13"I didn't move at all."
14"He tilted his head"
15"He stood, and the cane"
16"He stopped a pace away."
17"His voice softened, and that"
18"I planted my palm against"
19"His hand came up and"
ratio0.4
85.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount45
totalSentences60
matches
0"The knock came a third"
1"I already knew."
2"Nobody knocked like that."
3"I unlocked two deadbolts and"
4"Lucien Moreau filled the gap"
5"Charcoal suit, ivory cane, that"
6"I kept the door at"
7"Brick Lane clattered behind him,"
8"Blood, recent, dried brown in"
9"Something in my chest did"
10"The smile was the problem,"
11"It made a man selling"
12"My name, in that low"
13"I closed the door."
14"He crossed the threshold the"
15"His cane clicked once on"
16"The books stacked in towers."
17"The scrolls weighing down the"
18"Ptolemy, my tabby, emerged from"
19"He lowered himself onto the"
ratio0.75
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences60
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"My name, in that low Marseilles accent that rolled the r like it was reluctant to let go."
1"A word I hadn't spoken aloud in eleven years, a word my mother had stitched into a christening blanket and then burned, a word that belonged to a version of me …"
2"Lucien Moreau, who called everyone by their surname and no one by anything tender."
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He stood, and the cane came with him, and suddenly the flat felt very small"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.057
leniency0.113
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.0414%