Run: 2026-09-02-01M1H59JETVTPCSC6AC8C5WVVQ

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44.0s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass arrived before she asked for it. "Macallan. Neat. You order it without the age because you think it makes you look humble." Silas set it down and nodded towards the booth in the corner. "Him. Twenty minutes. Bought two whiskeys, drunk neither. Watches the door like it owes him money." Rory followed his gaze. Grey tweed. Umbrella folded across the table like a soldier's rifle. A man built for lecture halls, not Soho bars. Then he turned his head, and six years collapsed into a single breath. "Dai Morgan." He stood too fast. The umbrella clattered to the floor and neither of them moved to pick it up. "Aurora Carter." He said her full name the way he used to announce exam results in the seminar room, formal and faintly cruel. "Christ. They told me you'd scarpered." "I did scarper. It's a London tradition." She slid into the booth. He sat opposite, and up close she saw what twenty minutes of watching had missed: the tremor in his left hand, the wedding band gone from the right but the pale stripe of it still there, like a scar that had learned to be polite. "You look the same." "Liar." "All right. You look tired in a way that suits you." He pulled the second whiskey towards himself and finally drank. "How's the law?" "I deliver noodles, Dai." The silence stretched between them. Behind the bar, a bottle clinked against another, and someone laughed at a joke that would be repeated until closing time. "Noodles," he repeated. "Right. Well. I'm a coroner now." "You always wanted to touch dead people. I remember you saying that at Tom's wedding and half the room leaving." "Half the room had taste." He smiled, and it was the old smile, crooked and self-deprecating, and then it fell away like a coat slipping off a hook. "I looked for you. After. Three years, off and on. Cardiff's not that big." "You never looked in London." "London's big." "That's not why." He turned the glass a quarter-turn on the sticky varnish of the table. "No. That's not why." The maps on the walls behind him had seen this conversation a hundred times, she thought. Two people circling a crater, describing the grass around it because the grass is easier. Above the bar, the green neon of the sign bled through the front window onto the street outside, staining the pavement the colour of old absinthe. "How's Carys?" she asked, because it was the question that would hurt him, and some part of her that hadn't changed at all still wanted to land the first blow. He flinched. Small, controlled, the flinch of a man who flinches for a living. "Died. Four years ago. Car, M4, nothing dramatic." He drank again. "You weren't at the funeral." "You didn't tell me." "You'd changed your number." "You had my father's chambers. You had Eva. You had every possible road to me, Dai, and you sat on your hands for four years and now you want to make it my fault." Her voice hadn't risen. That was the difference, she realised. The old Rory would have shouted. The new one kept the volume down and let the words do the cutting. "The wedding band's gone," he said quietly. "Congratulations on your observation. It's why you were hired." "When did she leave? Evan." The name landed harder than Carys had, and he knew it would. She felt her wrist where the crescent scar sat under her sleeve, the old souvenir of a bicycle chain and a summersault, and hated that her body answered before her mind could stop it. "Two years ago." "And you came here." "I live here. Flat above this bar. It's not a confession, it's a postcode." "Is it?" He leaned forward. Under the table, his knee bumped hers, and he didn't move away, and neither did she, which was its own confession. "Because I've been sitting here for twenty minutes doing what I do for a living, which is looking at bodies and asking what they died of. And you, Aurora, look like a woman who died of something and got better at it. You walk in a way that counts exits. You sit with your back to the wall but your eyes to the door. You wear a name I don't recognise on the deliveries, Laila, it said on your jacket. Two names. People with two names are usually running from one of them." "Eva gave me that." "Eva gave you an escape route. You chose the new name." A woman at the bar ordered another round. The barman, Silas, polished a glass that was already clean and listened with the professional patience of a man who had catalogued every excuse ever told in this room. "Why are you here, Dai? Really. Soho at nine on a Tuesday is a long way from a Welsh morgue." He reached into his breast pocket and laid a photograph on the table, face down, his hand flat on top of it. "Do you remember Prague? You used to talk about Prague. Your landlord, the one with the stories. Retired spy, you said, half laughing at yourself." Her stomach dropped through the floorboards and kept going. "Dai." "There's a body in my morgue. Cardiff. And before you say it, no, she's not someone you know, which is precisely the problem, because three separate men have tried to claim her and none of them cried, and grief is the one thing I can't fake-check." His voice stayed level, coroner's cadence, but his hand on the photograph pressed whiter. "One of the claimants had your old address. The flat on Richards Street. Before Evan. Before London." "This is nothing to do with me." "You're right. Probably. Almost certainly." He flipped the photograph over. The face in it was young, maybe nineteen, dark hair, bright blue eyes, and the small crescent of a scar at her left wrist. Rory didn't touch it. She couldn't. Across the room, Silas set down the glass he'd been polishing and limped towards the bookshelf at the back, and the green neon hummed, and Dai Morgan watched her the way he watched all his dead, waiting to be told what killed them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He drank again [again]"
1"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.279
leniency0.558
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.093
90.43% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1045
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"precisely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
90.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1045
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences44
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences44
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences75
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen93
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1045
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions10
wordCount586
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.51
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Rory3
Soho1
Carys1
Silas3
Dai1
Morgan1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Carys"
2"Silas"
3"Dai"
4"Morgan"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences30
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1045
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences75
matches
0"hated that her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean22.23
std22.49
cv1.012
sampleLengths
08
144
224
313
42
519
629
757
84
91
1024
114
1226
139
1420
1542
165
172
183
1917
2057
2130
2230
234
244
2534
2630
277
289
295
3046
313
324
3314
34119
354
3611
3737
3820
3922
4025
4110
4277
437
4410
4524
4649
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences44
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs109
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences75
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount588
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.027210884353741496
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.00510204081632653
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences75
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences75
mean13.93
std14.7
cv1.055
sampleLengths
08
128
216
34
42
59
69
713
82
94
1015
1123
126
1312
1445
154
161
1721
183
194
205
2121
223
236
2420
2528
2614
275
282
293
3013
314
3216
3315
3426
3530
362
3712
3811
395
404
414
4234
434
446
456
4614
477
489
495
87.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.5733333333333334
totalSentences75
uniqueOpeners43
83.33% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences40
matches
0"Then he turned his head,"
ratio0.025
50.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences40
matches
0"He stood too fast."
1"He said her full name"
2"She slid into the booth"
3"He sat opposite, and up"
4"He pulled the second whiskey"
5"He smiled, and it was"
6"He turned the glass a"
7"she asked, because it was"
8"He drank again"
9"Her voice hadn't risen."
10"he said quietly"
11"She felt her wrist where"
12"He leaned forward"
13"He reached into his breast"
14"Her stomach dropped through the"
15"His voice stayed level, coroner's"
16"He flipped the photograph over"
ratio0.425
47.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount33
totalSentences40
matches
0"The glass arrived before she"
1"Silas set it down and"
2"Rory followed his gaze."
3"Umbrella folded across the table"
4"A man built for lecture"
5"He stood too fast."
6"The umbrella clattered to the"
7"He said her full name"
8"She slid into the booth"
9"He sat opposite, and up"
10"He pulled the second whiskey"
11"The silence stretched between them."
12"He smiled, and it was"
13"He turned the glass a"
14"The maps on the walls"
15"she asked, because it was"
16"He drank again"
17"Her voice hadn't risen."
18"That was the difference, she"
19"The old Rory would have"
ratio0.825
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences40
matches(empty)
ratio0
58.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences17
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"He sat opposite, and up close she saw what twenty minutes of watching had missed: the tremor in his left hand, the wedding band gone from the right but the pale…"
1"The barman, Silas, polished a glass that was already clean and listened with the professional patience of a man who had catalogued every excuse ever told in thi…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.093
leniency0.186
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.047
90.2691%