Run: 2026-09-02-01M1H5CBRENTQ8EB9Z7ZSPVNF8

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Duration:
1m 4s
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$0.000455
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Z.AI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped before I caught it. Beer sloshed over my knuckles and pooled on the bar, running towards the till like it knew where it was going. "You still pour like a first-year student." The voice came from the far end of the bar, near the framed map of Cardiff Bay that Silas had never explained to me. A man sat there, alone, in a coat that cost more than my yearly rent. Salt-and-pepper temples. A watch I recognised because I'd helped him choose it, second-hand, from a market stall in Roath the summer we were twenty. "Marcus?" "Hello, Rory." Marcus Bellamy. Debate society. Cheap cider on the steps of the Students' Union. The boy who'd walked me home every night for a year and never once tried anything, because we were friends, and he'd said friendship was rarer than anything else on offer in this world. He looked like a man now. Sharpened. The softness around his jaw had gone the way of his old trainers and his second-hand watch, which was no longer second-hand. It was a Breitling. I didn't need to check to know. "Drink?" "Whatever you'd recommend. It's your bar, isn't it?" "It isn't my bar. I just work here." "That's what I meant." He smiled, and something about the smile was wrong, too practised, like a card trick performed for the thousandth time. "How long has it been?" "Six years. Seven." "Seven. God." He accepted the pint I pulled for him and turned it on the coaster, slow, aligning the logo with the bar's edge. "You look well. London agrees with you." "Liar. I look tired." "You always were direct." He drank. "That used to drive Evan mad, you know. After you left. He'd sit in the union and go on about it. Direct this, rude that." The cloth in my hand stopped moving. "You still see Evan?" "We work together now, actually. Same firm." "Law?" "Corporate. Mergers." He said it the way other people said chemotherapy. "I'm sure you found something better. You always said you'd never end up in an office." "I deliver food." "For a restaurant?" "Mostly." He laughed, a real one this time, and for a second he was twenty-one again, sprawled on my sofa eating beans from the tin because neither of us owned a saucepan. Then the laugh closed over, like water, and the sharp man was back. "Rory Carter. Delivery girl. Your father must be thrilled." "Nobody's told my father anything, and you're not going to either." "I wouldn't." He set the glass down. "I'm not here to blackmail you, if that's what this is. I saw the sign from the taxi. Green neon, a raven. I thought, that's a Rory sort of place." "Because it's dark and unfriendly?" "Because it's full of maps." He nodded at the wall behind me. Wales, Argentina, the Bosphorus, all of them old, all of them wrong in small deliberate ways, the way Silas liked them. "You used to steal atlases from the library. Third year. Do you remember? You said maps were better than photographs because they admitted they were lies." "I said that?" "Constantly." He turned the glass again. Quarter turn. "You've changed, by the way. Since we're doing this." "Doing what?" "This. The catching up. The pretending." He looked at his watch. "You used to fidget. Constantly. Pen, hair, the hem of your sleeve. Now you stand behind a bar like you were poured into it. Whatever happened to you between Cardiff and here, it wasn't nothing." "Nothing happened. I moved. I got a job. I got another job." "Evan says you disappeared off the face of the earth." "Evan can talk about me or to me. Pick one and tell him the other's not allowed." "Fierce." The smile again, that borrowed one. "I liked you fierce." Past tense. I heard it. So did he, judging by the way he looked into his pint like it might apologise for him. "Marcus. Why are you actually here?" The bar hummed around us. A couple of regulars argued about football in the corner booth. The door to the cellar thumped as Silas came up the stairs, then quieted, then came up slower. He'd taught me that sound. One thump is stairs. Two thumps is a man who wants to know who's at his bar. Silas emerged with a crate of tonic, took one look at Marcus's coat, and started restocking the fridge like a man settling in to listen. "I'm getting divorced," Marcus said. "Condolences." "She's taking the house and the flat in Lisbon and I don't much care. I sat in my office last Tuesday, forty-first floor, and I couldn't remember a single decision I'd made in six years that was mine. Not one. Every one had someone else's fingerprints on it." He turned the glass. Another quarter. "So I booked a taxi instead of the Gatwick express, and I followed a green sign, and here you are. Pouring pints in Soho. Alive. Which is more than I can say for most of the people I know." "That's not why you're here either." "Isn't it?" "You said Evan like it mattered. You said work like it hurt. Nobody comes to a stranger's bar to talk about divorce." Silas cracked a tonic bottle somewhere behind me. The hiss was very loud. "Alright." Marcus leaned in. The practised smile was gone, and underneath it his face was older and much more afraid. "Evan's firm is handling something. Acquisition. Big, ugly, and none of it legal, and my name is on three of the documents because I signed without reading, which is what I do now, apparently. Sign. And the woman they're acquiring, the company, its founder, she's got children, Rory, and when it's done they'll have nothing, and I knew you in university when you were going to be a barrister and stop men like me, and I've got nowhere else that isn't owned by him." The cloth in my hands was dry. When had that happened. "You want me to read your documents." "I want the girl who stole atlases back. Just for a fortnight. Just long enough." The cellar door thumped once, then again. Slow this time. Deliberate. "Careful what you ask her for," Silas said, appearing at my shoulder with the crate still in his arms, hazel eyes flat as coins. "The last man who asked her for something forgot how to walk properly for a week." Marcus looked from him to me, and I watched seven years of London fall off his face, leaving just the boy on the union steps, holding out his hand for the atlas he already knew I'd stolen. "Rory," he said. "I need to show you something. And there's a black car parked outside that's been there since before I arrived."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.232
leniency0.464
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1139
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1139
totalAiIsms0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences54
matches(empty)
89.95% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences54
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences96
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen84
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1139
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount554
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.08
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
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Bay1
Silas6
Roath1
Bellamy1
Breitling1
Wales1
Argentina1
Bosphorus1
Quarter1
Past1
Marcus5
London1
persons
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1"Bellamy"
2"Marcus"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Bay"
2"Roath"
3"Wales"
4"Argentina"
5"London"
globalScore0.958
windowScore0.833
66.67% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences30
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a man now"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1139
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean20.71
std22.35
cv1.079
sampleLengths
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3623
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98.77% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences54
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs101
matches
0"was going"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences96
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount582
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.030927835051546393
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.012027491408934709
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences96
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
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mean11.86
std12.6
cv1.062
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3831
3913
409
4111
427
4330
445
4512
4621
4726
483
496
84.38% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.53125
totalSentences96
uniqueOpeners51
77.52% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences43
matches
0"Then the laugh closed over,"
ratio0.023
89.77% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences43
matches
0"He looked like a man"
1"It was a Breitling."
2"I didn't need to check"
3"He smiled, and something about"
4"He accepted the pint I"
5"He said it the way"
6"He laughed, a real one"
7"He set the glass down"
8"He nodded at the wall"
9"He turned the glass again"
10"He looked at his watch"
11"I heard it."
12"He'd taught me that sound."
13"He turned the glass"
ratio0.326
41.40% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount36
totalSentences43
matches
0"The glass slipped before I"
1"Beer sloshed over my knuckles"
2"The voice came from the"
3"A man sat there, alone,"
4"A watch I recognised because"
5"The boy who'd walked me"
6"He looked like a man"
7"The softness around his jaw"
8"It was a Breitling."
9"I didn't need to check"
10"He smiled, and something about"
11"He accepted the pint I"
12"The cloth in my hand"
13"He said it the way"
14"He laughed, a real one"
15"He set the glass down"
16"He nodded at the wall"
17"Wales, Argentina, the Bosphorus, all"
18"He turned the glass again"
19"He looked at his watch"
ratio0.837
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences43
matches(empty)
ratio0
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences16
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The softness around his jaw had gone the way of his old trainers and his second-hand watch, which was no longer second-hand."
1"Marcus looked from him to me, and I watched seven years of London fall off his face, leaving just the boy on the union steps, holding out his hand for the atlas…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.071
leniency0.143
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.6984%