Run: 2026-09-02-01M1H5D04SNAAR4T3KC5BW8AYH

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Duration:
1m 13s
Cost:
$0.000446
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Z.AI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass shattered before the man reached the bar. Rory had it by the neck of the bottle before her brain caught up, jagged edges biting her palm, and she stood there breathing hard while a lanky bloke in a grey hoodie backed towards the door with his hands raised. "Easy, love. I was just reaching for my lighter." "Lighter's in your left pocket. You went right." He left. No one in the Nest looked up except the man at the far end of the bar, the one hunched over a half-pint of bitter like he'd been sitting there all night and intended to sit there until the world ended. Rory set the broken glass behind the till and wiped her palm with a bar towel. A thin red line crossed it, shallow, hardly worth the name. She'd bandage it later, when the bleeding stopped or didn't. "Nice reflexes." The man had come closer now. Closer, and closer still, and then his face caught the light above the optics and her stomach dropped somewhere near the beer cellar. Marcus Ellery. Sheffield accent still thick as ever, eyebrows still the same unruly hedgerows. Fifteen kilos heavier, sure, hair going grey at the temples, but the same stupid grin he'd worn through three years of lectures and one catastrophic night in her second-year flat. "Rory Carter," he said. "Nobody calls me that." "Rory, then." He spread his hands, presenting himself like a museum exhibit. "In the flesh. Larger than in the flesh, technically." She should have laughed. That was the old script, the old rhythm, her deadpan and his grin, two students trading punches over cheap cider. But her hand had gone cold and the towel in it had gone red and something in her chest had turned over like a car refusing to start. "What are you doing here, Marcus?" "Drink. It's a bar, I'm told that's legal." "In Soho? You live in Manchester." "Had a meeting." He glanced at the red towel. "You're bleeding." "I noticed." "Any chance of a plaster with the service?" Silas passed behind her to reach the optics, silent on his bad knee the way he could be when he wanted. His hazel eyes moved from Marcus to her and back, weighing something. Then he collected an empty glass and vanished into the back without a word. He'd heard everything. He always heard everything. Rory poured a whisky she hadn't been asked for and slid it across to Marcus with a plaster balanced on the rim. "So. The meeting." "Insurance. Boring. The travel's better than the job." He downed half of it in one go, then made a face at the quality. "Rough night?" "Rough hour. Rough decade, if you want the full picture." "Three years, isn't it? Since Eva's wedding." Four. Eva's wedding had been four years ago, that golden June Saturday in Cardiff when Marcus had caught the bouquet Rory had thrown and they'd all laughed and she'd left before the cake because Evan had texted and Evan's texts had been commands by then. She didn't correct him. Correcting him meant talking about it. "Something like that." "You disappeared, after. Off everything. WhatsApp, Facebook, even LinkedIn, and let's be honest, nobody uses LinkedIn anyway, so that's saying something." Silas's towel, she thought. She kept polishing the same clean spot on the bar. "I was busy." "Busy." He turned his glass in a slow circle. "We looked for you. Eva hired a private investigator. Did you know that? A proper one, cost her eight hundred quid. He found out you worked somewhere in London, then the trail went cold. Poof. Like you'd been rubbed out with an eraser." "Maybe I wanted to be rubbed out." "From Evan?" The name landed like a dropped pint glass. Rory's hand stopped moving. Above the optics, a shelf of whisky bottles stood in their neat rows, amber and still, and somewhere in the back room Silas had gone quiet in the way he went quiet when he was listening with his whole body. "You know that name?" "Eva told me. At the wedding, actually. She was worried. You'd gone quiet and then you left early and Eva said, he'll be wanting to know where she is, that one, he watches her like a queue-watcher at a bus stop." Marcus's grin had gone. Something older and sadder sat in its place, a face she'd never seen on him. "I asked her why you didn't just leave. She said she didn't know. I said, it's because nobody told her she could, that's why. That's how it works, innit. You get told so many times what you're not allowed to do that you stop hearing anything else." "Marcus." "Then three months later I'm in A&E with my appendix trying to exit through my stomach wall, and I ring you because I always ring you, muscle memory, and the number's dead. Dead, Rory. Like you'd died. I actually googled your death, first thing out of surgery, drip still in my arm. Couldn't tell you what was funnier, the appendix or googling your obituary." He laughed. It didn't reach anywhere near his eyes. The red towel sat in a small dark puddle now. Rory balled it up. Her crescent scar caught the light as she flexed her fingers, that old white smile of skin from a night at fourteen she'd never told anyone about, and she thought how strange it was that the body keeps its receipts. "I couldn't call anyone," she said. "Every number I had, he had too. Eva's phone, my mum's, your number, Marcus. All of it. He went through my phone while I slept. So I killed the whole lot. Every line. Everyone." "And now?" "Now I have a phone I paid cash for, and it has four numbers in it, and Silas knows how to find me if it ever matters." She nodded at the shelves, the maps on the walls, the black-and-white photographs of men with their faces half turned away. "You're sitting in the safest room in London, Marcus. But you weren't supposed to find it." "Fate. Or just a bloke wanting a pint after a boring meeting." He turned his glass again, stopped it. "You okay? The real answer. Not the one you give to customers." The question hung there, small and enormous. Rory looked at him, at the hedgerow eyebrows and the grey temples and the ring of sweat under his pint, and for one dangerous second she was twenty-two again, sitting on a flat roof in Cardiff, telling him everything and him just listening, never fixing, just listening, and how she'd gone home that night feeling like a person for the first time in months. She reached under the bar. Pulled up two clean glasses and the good bottle, the one Silas kept for guests who mattered. "I'll tell you," she said, "but not standing up. That's a sitting-down story." "That bad?" "Worse." She poured. "And you're going to want both hands free."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1169
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1169
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count2
highlights
0"shattered"
1"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences51
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences51
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
94.93% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences81
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen65
ratio0.012
matches
0"\"You disappeared, after. Off everything. WhatsApp, Facebook, even LinkedIn, and let's be honest, nobody uses LinkedIn anyway, so that's saying something.\""
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1169
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount702
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Marcus"
discoveredNames
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Closer1
Ellery1
Silas4
Marcus5
Four1
June1
Saturday1
Cardiff2
Rory7
Evan2
persons
0"Ellery"
1"Silas"
2"Marcus"
3"Rory"
4"Evan"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences34
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1169
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences81
matches
0"was that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean24.87
std23.92
cv0.962
sampleLengths
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537
631
744
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1021
1152
126
138
146
1511
162
178
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4413
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98.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences51
matches
0"been asked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs113
matches
0"was listening"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences81
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount707
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.028288543140028287
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002828854314002829
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences81
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
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mean14.43
std14.95
cv1.036
sampleLengths
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3014
313
324
3322
343
3523
362
3710
387
391
4044
414
426
433
4421
454
4610
473
489
4943
94.24% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5802469135802469
totalSentences81
uniqueOpeners47
77.52% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences43
matches
0"Then he collected an empty"
ratio0.023
71.16% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences43
matches
0"She'd bandage it later, when"
1"He spread his hands, presenting"
2"She should have laughed."
3"He glanced at the red"
4"His hazel eyes moved from"
5"He'd heard everything."
6"He always heard everything."
7"He downed half of it"
8"She didn't correct him."
9"She kept polishing the same"
10"He turned his glass in"
11"It didn't reach anywhere near"
12"Her crescent scar caught the"
13"She nodded at the shelves,"
14"He turned his glass again,"
15"She reached under the bar."
ratio0.372
53.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount35
totalSentences43
matches
0"The glass shattered before the"
1"Rory had it by the"
2"Rory set the broken glass"
3"A thin red line crossed"
4"She'd bandage it later, when"
5"The man had come closer"
6"Sheffield accent still thick as"
7"He spread his hands, presenting"
8"She should have laughed."
9"That was the old script,"
10"He glanced at the red"
11"Silas passed behind her to"
12"His hazel eyes moved from"
13"He'd heard everything."
14"He always heard everything."
15"Rory poured a whisky she"
16"He downed half of it"
17"Eva's wedding had been four"
18"She didn't correct him."
19"Silas's towel, she thought."
ratio0.814
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences43
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.071
leniency0.143
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.8810%