Run: 2026-09-02-01M1H5DM6J4R5FQTJR157GYEAX

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Duration:
1m 9s
Cost:
$0.000676
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock came again, and Rory knew before she opened it. Three taps, measured, polite as a knife laid on silk. She flipped the second deadbolt anyway, then the third, and pulled the door open a few inches. Ptolemy shot between her ankles and vanished into the hallway. "You've got to be joking." "Bonjour, Carter." Lucien Moreau filled the doorframe in charcoal wool, one hand resting on that ivory-handled cane, snow melting in his platinum hair. One amber eye, one black. Both fixed on her like she was the only lit window on the whole street. "It's midnight." "And yet your lamp is on. Curious, no? A woman hiding nothing sleeps with the lights off." She moved to close the door. His cane tip caught the frame, light as a bookmark. "Five minutes." "Eva isn't here." "I didn't come for Eva." The words hung there, and she hated how her pulse answered them before her brain could. She opened the door wider, because cold air was pouring in and because, damn him, she wanted to hear whatever lie he'd rehearsed on the stairs. "Sit there." She pointed at the kitchen chair. "Don't touch anything. Eva catalogues her scrolls by smell, I'm not joking." He stepped inside, dripping onto the doormat, and surveyed the flat with that slow sweep he probably thought was discreet. Books stacked in columns. Notes pinned over the radiator. Ptolemy already winding around his ankles like a traitor. "Your cat remembers me." "Cats have no standards." "True. He also likes the man from the kebab shop." Lucien lowered himself into the chair, folding the cane across his knees. Water slid off his shoulders and pooled on the lino. "You look well." "You look wet. Why are you here, Lucien?" "Ah. Straight to business." He reached into his coat and produced a cream envelope, sealed with red wax, and set it on the table between them. "I was asked to deliver this." "By whom?" "You know I don't give names for free." "Then leave it on the step with the milk bottles." He didn't move. Neither did the envelope. The radiator ticked and Eva's kettle clicked off in the corner, and Rory realised she'd made tea for no one, out of habit, out of nerves, hours ago. "That's not the whole of it," he said. "Never is." "Rory." Her name in his mouth, the French flattening it into something softer, and she wanted to throw the kettle at him. "There is a price on information about you. A standing offer. Anyone who can confirm your whereabouts earns a favour from the Rosier court." The flat went very small around her. She sat down across from him because her knees suggested it. "How long." "Three days." "Three days and you're just now telling me? You, the man who sells a rumour before the rumour's finished thinking?" "Yes." He met her stare without flinching. "Three days I spent deciding." "Deciding what?" "Whether to sell you." The honesty of it landed harder than any lie could have. She laughed, one sharp note, and Ptolemy bolted under the sofa. "God. You really are the most honest terrible person I know." "I am the most honest person you know. The terrible part is contextual." He turned the cane slowly in his hands, and she caught it, the tremor he'd never admit to. "I have sold worse people for less. I sold a bishop once, and he was not even a real bishop. But you." He stopped turning the cane. "You I did not sell. Do you understand what that cost me?" "Did you come here for a medal?" "I came here because you are sitting in a flat with one exit, above a curry house, with three deadbolts that would not stop a determined gnome, and someone will find you by Thursday." He leaned forward. Amber eye, black eye, both burning. "I came here because I could not sleep, so I thought, at least I will be awake and useless in the correct building." Silence. The envelope sat between them, wax glinting. "Who's after me?" "The Rosiers want a Malphora. That name means nothing to you, which is a problem I will fix, but the short version is that your mother's people owe a debt older than you, and debts in that family are collected in bloodlines." "My mother's a schoolteacher from Swansea." "Your mother," Lucien said gently, "is a schoolteacher from Swansea who changed her name, her hair, and her city every four years. Check." Rory thought of the crescent scar on her wrist, the childhood accident no one could quite explain. She thought of Evan finding her in Cardiff when no one knew she'd gone. Of London, and Eva, and how her mother had cried at the train station like Rory was being deployed. "You knew," she said. "When we... You knew something and you didn't tell me." "I knew pieces. I chose the pieces carefully." He rose, wet and rumpled and suddenly much closer, close enough that she could smell rain and sandalwood and something underneath, something like struck matches. "You want to be angry at me. Be angry. But be angry inside a car with tinted windows, because we are leaving in ten minutes." "We're not leaving anywhere." "Rory." "Don't say my name like that." "Like what?" "Like it costs you something." He held her gaze, and for once the fixer had no price ready. His hand came up, hovered near her jaw, didn't land. Ptolemy yowled from under the sofa. "Pack a bag," he said quietly. "Or don't, and I will buy you whatever you need in the morning, and I will enjoy the extravagance. But we are leaving." She should have said no. She reached past him, grabbed the envelope, and tore it open instead. Inside, a single line in elegant ink: *The girl with the crescent scar. Bring her whole.* The wax seal was still warm. "Lucien." "I see it." "This was sealed when you left whoever sent it?" "Yes." "Then how is it warm?" His hand went to the cane. The ivory handle turned a quarter-inch, and a thin blade slid free with a sound like a held breath. "Get behind me," he said. "Now."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Lucien said gently [gently]"
1"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.254
leniency0.508
rawRatio0.133
effectiveRatio0.068
71.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1040
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count1
5
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"really"
2"slowly"
3"gently"
4"carefully"
5"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1040
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"determined"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"silk"
2"pulse"
3"determined"
4"silence"
5"glinting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences53
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences53
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences97
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords9
totalWords1040
ratio0.009
matches
0"The girl with the crescent scar. Bring her whole."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount557
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.72
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory4
Moreau1
One1
Water1
Eva2
French1
Ptolemy4
Amber1
Evan1
Cardiff1
London1
Lucien3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Moreau"
2"One"
3"Water"
4"Eva"
5"Ptolemy"
6"Amber"
7"Evan"
8"Lucien"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
84.21% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences38
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like struck matches"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1040
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs62
mean16.77
std17.09
cv1.019
sampleLengths
021
127
25
343
42
517
616
72
83
95
1042
1120
1238
134
144
1535
168
1732
182
198
2010
2135
228
232
2446
2518
262
272
2820
2912
302
314
3222
3311
3470
357
3666
378
383
3942
406
4123
4250
4314
4458
454
461
476
482
495
98.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences53
matches
0"being deployed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs104
matches
0"was pouring"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences97
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount559
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.03220035778175313
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.01073345259391771
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences97
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences97
mean10.72
std8.9
cv0.83
sampleLengths
011
110
217
310
45
523
65
715
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917
106
1110
122
133
145
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1626
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1812
1920
204
215
229
234
244
2522
2610
273
288
2926
306
312
328
3310
343
354
3628
378
382
3922
4024
417
4211
432
442
4520
467
475
482
494
85.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.5463917525773195
totalSentences97
uniqueOpeners53
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
32.24% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences49
matches
0"She flipped the second deadbolt"
1"She moved to close the"
2"His cane tip caught the"
3"She opened the door wider,"
4"She pointed at the kitchen"
5"He stepped inside, dripping onto"
6"He reached into his coat"
7"He didn't move."
8"Her name in his mouth,"
9"She sat down across from"
10"He met her stare without"
11"She laughed, one sharp note,"
12"He turned the cane slowly"
13"He stopped turning the cane"
14"He leaned forward"
15"She thought of Evan finding"
16"He rose, wet and rumpled"
17"He held her gaze, and"
18"His hand came up, hovered"
19"he said quietly"
ratio0.469
11.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount44
totalSentences49
matches
0"The knock came again, and"
1"She flipped the second deadbolt"
2"Ptolemy shot between her ankles"
3"Lucien Moreau filled the doorframe"
4"Both fixed on her like"
5"She moved to close the"
6"His cane tip caught the"
7"The words hung there, and"
8"She opened the door wider,"
9"She pointed at the kitchen"
10"He stepped inside, dripping onto"
11"Books stacked in columns."
12"Notes pinned over the radiator."
13"Ptolemy already winding around his"
14"Lucien lowered himself into the"
15"Water slid off his shoulders"
16"He reached into his coat"
17"He didn't move."
18"Neither did the envelope."
19"The radiator ticked and Eva's"
ratio0.898
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.085
leniency0.169
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.1446%