Run: 2026-09-02-01M1H5FKRR1QJVT6BATGRE0Y0H

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48.7s
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$0.000427
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Three knocks. Measured, deliberate, spaced like a metronome. I froze with Ptolemy's dinner tin halfway to the floor. Nobody knocked like that. Eva's clients hammered. Her exes shuffled. The postman didn't come up three flights of creaking stairs for a takeaway menu. "I know you're in there, Rory." The voice came through the door smooth as poured cream, with that accent that turned every vowel into a small seduction. "The cat has been screaming at the window for four minutes. He wants you to know that too." My stomach dropped through the floorboards, through the curry house below, all the way to Brick Lane itself. Lucien. I set the tin down, wiped my palms on my jeans, and opened the door. Because apparently I'd learned nothing. He stood in the narrow hallway filling it entirely, which was a trick, since he was barely taller than me. Charcoal suit, ivory cane, that platinum hair slicked back like he'd stepped out of a Marseille tailor's mirror rather than the East End at half nine at night. One amber eye, one black, both fixed on me with an expression I couldn't read, which was the problem with Lucien Moreau. Six months ago I could read him like a menu. Now he was written in Sanskrit. "You look terrible," I said. "You look awake. A vast improvement on the last time I saw you." He leaned on the cane. "May I come in, or shall we conduct our business in a stairwell that smells of cumin and despair?" "Our business." "Yes." He said nothing else. Just waited. Ptolemy wound around his ankle, the traitor, purring like a small engine. Lucien despised cats. He crouched anyway and let the tabby press his head against an immaculate knee, leaving a grey smear on charcoal wool. "You hated that cat." "I hated what he represented." He straightened. "I'm making an effort." "Six months, Lucien." I stepped back to let him in, and immediately regretted the geography of Eva's flat. One room that did everything. Books stacked on every surface, scrolls spilling off the sofa, research notes taped to the window like frost. The only two chairs were three feet apart, and everything in this city suddenly felt three feet wide. He crossed the room like he owned it, which was his way, and paused at the corkboard above Eva's desk. Photographs, red string, newspaper clippings. Six months of Eva and me chasing something ugly through London's underbelly. "I see you've been busy." "Some of us don't get to retire." "Retire." He turned. For one heartbeat, the smoothness cracked, and underneath was something rawer. "Is that what you think I did?" "You vanished." I kept my voice level, kept my arms crossed, kept my heart on the other side of the room. "One night you were teaching me how to bind a wraith in your bar cellar, and the next morning Silas tells me you've gone. No note. No forwarding address. Just my wages in an envelope with a card that said, and I quote, 'It was a pleasure.' A pleasure, Lucien. Like I was a dinner reservation." "The card said more than that." "The card was two words." "And you kept it." His eyes dropped to the corkboard, to the corner of pale cardstock pinned beneath a photograph of a warehouse fire. Amber eye, black eye, both knowing. "For six months. Pinned up like a saint's relic." Heat crawled up my neck. I yanked the card down and shoved it in my pocket, which was worse, which admitted everything. "You interrupted my evening," I said. "Whatever you're selling, I'm not buying." "I'm not selling." He set the cane against the desk and lowered himself into the chair by the window, unhurried, folding his hands. "I'm warning. And then, if you'll permit it, apologising." "You?" "Marseille bred me with many talents. Humility was not one of them, but I'm told it can be acquired late in life." "Like a venereal disease." A smile tugged at his mouth. I hated that my chest loosened at the sight of it. I hated more that I'd spent six months rehearsing this conversation and every rehearsal had ended the same way, with him gone and me shouting at an empty chair. "The people you've been tracking," he said, nodding at the corkboard, "the ones who burned the warehouse on Cable Street with three of Yu-Fei's runners inside. They know your name now, Rory. Not Laila. Not the alias. Your name. They know where you sleep." The room tilted a degree. I gripped the back of the spare chair. "How." "How is less important than what I intend to do about it." "Eva's not back till midnight. We should wait. We should, God, we should call someone." "You'll call no one. If the Wardens learn your involvement, you'll be relocated to a safehouse in Inverness and I'll be filing your obituary by spring." He rose, crossed the three feet between us, and stopped close enough that I caught vetiver and something warmer underneath, woodsmoke, maybe. "I'm going to stand in front of you. That's the arrangement now. I'm sorry it took a death threat to arrange it." "You could have warned me without the theatrics." "Yes." The word was quiet. Honest. "But then I'd have had no excuse to see you, and I'm a coward about exactly one thing, ma chère, and it has platinum hair and lives above a bar in Soho." My crossed arms felt like a child's fort. "Six months, Lucien. You don't get to waltz in with your cane and your French and your apologies." "No." He didn't step back. "I get to waltz in with a blade in my cane and stay until you're safe. The apologies will come after, when you're willing to hear them. I can wait. I'm told patience is a virtue. I've never checked whether I possess it." Downstairs, the curry house door slammed. Footsteps on the landing, two sets, heavy, unhurried. Lucien's hand closed around the cane. The ivory handle came away with a soft click, and four inches of steel caught the lamplight. "Get behind me," he said. "And Rory, whatever happens, don't open that door."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"I stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.357
leniency0.714
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.048
95.16% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1034
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
85.49% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1034
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"stomach"
2"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences57
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences83
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1034
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount577
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.69
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Ptolemy2
Brick1
Lane1
Marseille1
East1
End1
Lucien4
Moreau1
Sanskrit1
Eva4
One2
London1
Amber1
Honest1
Downstairs1
persons
0"Ptolemy"
1"Lucien"
2"Moreau"
3"Eva"
4"Amber"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"Marseille"
3"East"
4"End"
5"Sanskrit"
6"One"
7"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
78.57% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences35
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a child's fort"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.967
wordCount1034
matches
0"not one of them, but I'm told it can be acquired late in life"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences83
matches
0"hated that my"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean24.05
std21.18
cv0.881
sampleLengths
08
134
245
318
41
520
686
75
837
92
107
1136
124
1311
1459
1537
165
177
1821
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206
215
2239
2322
2412
2532
261
2722
284
2946
3044
3113
321
3312
3415
3570
368
3738
3826
3948
4014
4123
4213
99.11% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"was written"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs97
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences83
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount577
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.038128249566724434
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.01386481802426343
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences83
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences83
mean12.46
std11.01
cv0.884
sampleLengths
02
16
210
34
43
53
614
727
818
918
101
1115
125
1320
1428
1522
1610
176
185
1918
2019
212
225
232
2412
253
2621
274
287
294
3018
315
3218
3318
3420
355
3612
375
387
393
4011
417
4221
4356
446
455
4624
476
489
495
73.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4939759036144578
totalSentences83
uniqueOpeners41
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences48
matches(empty)
ratio0
45.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences48
matches
0"I froze with Ptolemy's dinner"
1"Her exes shuffled."
2"My stomach dropped through the"
3"I set the tin down,"
4"He stood in the narrow"
5"He leaned on the cane"
6"He said nothing else"
7"He crouched anyway and let"
8"I stepped back to let"
9"He crossed the room like"
10"I kept my voice level,"
11"His eyes dropped to the"
12"I yanked the card down"
13"He set the cane against"
14"I hated that my chest"
15"I hated more that I'd"
16"he said, nodding at the"
17"I gripped the back of"
18"He rose, crossed the three"
19"My crossed arms felt like"
ratio0.438
53.75% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount39
totalSentences48
matches
0"I froze with Ptolemy's dinner"
1"Nobody knocked like that."
2"Eva's clients hammered."
3"Her exes shuffled."
4"The postman didn't come up"
5"The voice came through the"
6"My stomach dropped through the"
7"I set the tin down,"
8"He stood in the narrow"
9"Charcoal suit, ivory cane, that"
10"He leaned on the cane"
11"He said nothing else"
12"Ptolemy wound around his ankle,"
13"Lucien despised cats."
14"He crouched anyway and let"
15"I stepped back to let"
16"Books stacked on every surface,"
17"The only two chairs were"
18"He crossed the room like"
19"I kept my voice level,"
ratio0.813
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences48
matches
0"Because apparently I'd learned nothing."
1"Now he was written in"
ratio0.042
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences19
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"He crossed the room like he owned it, which was his way, and paused at the corkboard above Eva's desk."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.119
leniency0.238
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.0327%