Run: 2026-09-02-01M1H96NQWGA5E3QV7TS1Z45PW

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Duration:
7m 30s
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$0.106214
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Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The bone token had grown warm in Detective Harlow Quinn's palm by the time she reached the bottom of the stairs, as if it resented being used. Above her, Camden slept under a thin drizzle. Below, behind a door that had no business remaining locked after three police surveys, the Veil Market breathed in the belly of an abandoned Tube station. Lanterns hung from old conduit, their flames too blue, too still. The market had been here only a month; tomorrow, with the full moon, it would fold itself away and surface somewhere else, leaving behind only the smell of wet tile and bad decisions. Stalls lined the platform under peeling advertisements for seaside resorts no one visited anymore. Behind them, people sold enchanted pocket watches, jars of banned alchemical substances sealed in wax, and information folded into paper birds that tried to fly when no one looked. Harlow moved through them with military precision, shoulders square, brown eyes taking the measure of every shadow. At forty-one, five foot nine, with her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair and a jaw that could have been issued rather than inherited, she had learned that unusual crime scenes talked loudest when they had something to hide. Eighteen years with the Metropolitan Police had taught her how to listen. The strange ones tried to frighten you into stupidity. She had promised herself she would not be stupid again. Not since DS Morris had vanished from a case that smelled of candles and ozone, three years gone now under circumstances she still could not write into a report without the words turning traitor. She did not understand what had taken him. She understood murder. She intended to keep it that way. A knot of market-goers had gathered near the old ticket hall, keeping a respectful distance from the body sprawled beside a table of blackened bottles. Harlow did not need to ask for room. The crowd parted for the set of her jaw and the way she wore silence like authority. Eva Kowalski was already crouched inside the lantern light. Harlow stopped a breath short of irritation. Eva was the only civilian colleague she tolerated at scenes like this, because the British Museum's restricted archives had a habit of explaining things the Met preferred to pretend did not exist. Eva was also an occult researcher and Aurora's childhood friend, which meant she came attached to a clique Harlow had begun to suspect of everything from illicit trafficking to lying with uncommon elegance. She had moved to London two years before Aurora and carried an Oxford master's in Ancient History like a discreet weapon. Tonight her curly red hair had escaped her coat hood, her round glasses sat slightly crooked, and her worn leather satchel, full of books by its sagging shape, rested against the dead man's table as if she had been taking notes. "You're contaminating my crime scene, Ms. Kowalski," Harlow said. Eva did not look up. "It isn't your crime scene unless you can prove someone entered without a bone token." "I can prove he entered with one," Harlow said, "and that it's no longer on him." That made Eva glance up. Her green eyes widened behind the lenses, her freckled complexion tightening. She looked at the dead man's belt. The small leather loop there hung empty. Harlow crouched on the opposite side of the body. The man was middle-aged, soft-handed, dressed too well for the market. She recognized him from a surveillance photograph: Silas Pym, dealer in information, occasional supplier of substances that had no legal name. He had promised to give her a name tonight. Someone in Aurora's orbit, he had said. Someone who had been moving things through the Veil Market that even the vendors feared. Now Silas Pym lay on his left side, right arm extended toward the black mouth of a disused service arch. His fingers were curled around a small brass compass. Its casing wore a patina of verdigris, and its face was etched with protective sigils. The needle trembled, pointing toward the arch. "The vendors are calling it a rift breach," Eva said. Her voice dropped, as if the word itself might listen. "They heard a sound like silk tearing. Then a flash of violet light. When they looked again, he was down. The compass was still in his hand." Harlow did not touch it yet. "What is it?" "A Veil Compass. Crafted by a Shade artisan. The needle points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal." Eva nodded toward the arch. "Active ones, usually. If it opened, even for a second, the residue would still draw it." Harlow looked at the arch. Bricks there had been blackened long ago, but the dust before them lay undisturbed except for a faint ring, as clean as if something had been set down and lifted again. No scuff marks. No fallen grit. No body dragged toward it. She looked at Silas Pym's boots. The toes pointed away from the arch, back toward the stairs. His heels had made two shallow grooves in the dust, one crossing the other. Harlow had seen enough staged scenes to know what a man looked like when death caught him and what one looked like when death was helped along and then arranged. "If a rift threw him," Harlow said, "it threw him toward the exit and then changed its mind." Eva frowned. "Energy discharge can be erratic." "So can a liar." Harlow leaned closer. The dead man's coat was scorched over the heart in a starburst, the fabric crisped black. She smelled it and frowned. Under the market's incense and damp wool there was something sharp and sweet, like burnt cinnamon. Emberweed. A banned alchemical substance, expensive, theatrical. It made a flash that could blind a man and leave pretty marks. It did not open rifts. It opened purses. She lifted Silas Pym's wrist gently. The skin was cool. The jaw had begun to set. "He's been dead longer than the flash," she said. Eva's fingers tightened on the strap of her satchel. "Rift cold can preserve tissue." "It can also give an alibi to anyone who needed one." Harlow released the wrist. "When did you arrive?" "Twenty minutes ago. I came for a manuscript he claimed to have found. Restricted archives." Eva hesitated. "He was going to sell it back to the Museum, or so he said." "You came alone?" "To a black market that moves every full moon and requires a bone token to enter?" Eva tucked a red curl behind her left ear, the nervous habit Harlow had catalogued months ago. "I came with a police escort." Harlow gave her a look. "A civilian consultant escort," Eva amended. "You signed the token loan." Harlow remembered the token in her pocket. Three favors and a promise not to arrest anyone before midnight. She had signed because Eva could read dead languages and because Harlow needed someone who could tell a genuine supernatural catastrophe from a stage trick. The trouble was that Eva had a talent for seeing catastrophe everywhere her friends might be accused of it. "Did he show you the manuscript?" Harlow asked. "No. He sent word to meet at the arch." Eva glanced at it. "I found him like this." Harlow stood. Her knees complained, but she did not let them. She circled the body, noting the table of bottles. Most stood upright. One had fallen and shattered, but the glass lay on top of Silas Pym's coat hem, not beneath it. The liquid had dried in a crusty bloom on the tiles, too far from the body to have come from the same fall. Someone had broken the bottle after the man went down, perhaps while pretending to search him. She bent again and examined his right hand. The compass sat in his grip with unnatural neatness. The fingers were curved around it, but the thumb lay across the casing instead of bracing the latch. A living man holding a tool in danger gripped it like a weapon. A dead man had his hand arranged around it like a display. "Hand me an evidence bag," Harlow said. Eva did not move. "You can't simply remove it. The needle may be anchoring local resonance." "The only thing anchoring here is a story." Harlow held out her hand. "Bag." Eva produced one from her satchel with the resigned air of a woman handing over a scalpel to a butcher. Harlow eased the compass from Silas Pym's fingers. The moment it cleared his palm, the needle swung hard away from the arch. Eva inhaled sharply. The compass pointed toward a low service doorway to the left of the stalls, half hidden by a hanging quilt stitched with teeth. "That's not the rift," Eva said. "You said it points to the nearest supernatural rift or portal." "Yes, but—" "Then there's one closer than the arch." Harlow crossed to the service doorway. The quilt lifted in a draft that should not have existed underground. Behind it, a corridor stretched into darkness, the walls sweating. Red clay clung to the threshold, fresh and smeared as if someone had dragged a heavy weight through it. The station floor here was gray dust and old ash. No red clay. She looked back at Silas Pym's boots. The soles carried a thin smear of the same red earth. "He didn't die in the ticket hall," Harlow said. "He was brought from that corridor." Eva had followed, though she kept a careful distance from the doorway. Her gaze dropped to the compass. The needle now pointed steadily down the corridor, not toward the arch. "There are old tunnels under Camden. Some are flooded. Some are walled off." "And some have convenient doors for people who don't want to be seen entering through bone-token checks." Harlow crouched by the threshold. Something glinted in the clay: a sliver of wax, dark blue, stamped with a tiny circle. She lifted it with a gloved fingertip. The stamp was not a coin. It was a seal, the kind used to close archival folders. On the curved edge, barely visible, were the letters B.M. Eva's face lost color. Harlow stood slowly. "British Museum." "It can't be." Eva's voice sharpened, then dropped as several vendors turned to look. "Restricted materials are sealed with lead, not wax." "This isn't lead." Harlow held the wax up. The blue had a faint inner shimmer. "And it isn't ordinary wax, is it?" Eva swallowed. "Sealing compound. For items that must not be opened without permission. It's kept in the archives." "Then someone from the archives was here." "Or someone stole from them." Eva tucked hair back again, harder this time, as if the curl had personally offended her. "Detective, if a sealed item was broken in the tunnels, the resonance could mimic a rift." "Could it kill a man?" Eva's silence was answer enough. Harlow looked down the corridor. The compass needle trembled, pointing into the dark with a steadiness that made her skin prickle. She thought of Morris, of the last message he had sent: a string of letters that made no sense until they made too much. She thought of the way his flat had smelled of burnt cinnamon and old rain. She had told herself then that there were doors in the world that should not be opened. Three years later, she no longer believed that. Doors were opened by people. People left fingerprints. She turned back to the scene. The vendors watched from the edges of lantern light, faces arranged in grief or curiosity or the particular blankness of those who had already decided what they would say when questioned. None of them had moved Silas Pym. None of them had broken the bottle. None of them had pressed the compass into his hand. The market was full of criminals, but this murder had been dressed by someone who knew how police thought and how occultists believed. "The arch was a distraction," Harlow said. "The flash, the compass, the story of a breach. They wanted everyone looking there while the real threshold stayed hidden." Eva looked at the service corridor. "And the compass gave it away." "Only because the killer underestimated it." Harlow closed her fingers around the brass casing. The protective sigils bit cold into her palm. "A Shade artisan made this. It doesn't point at the strongest story. It points at the nearest portal. The killer planted it on the body to sell the arch, but forgot that a dead man can't aim it." Eva's expression shifted, not with argument but with reluctant understanding. "The corridor." "The corridor," Harlow agreed. "Where there's red clay, archival wax, and no witnesses." She pulled out her phone. No signal. Of course. "I need this scene sealed," she said. "No one leaves the platform. If anyone objects, tell them Detective Quinn will be making arrests for obstruction, illegal sale of alchemical substances, and being generally inconvenient." "You can't seal the Veil Market," Eva said. "It moves at moonrise." "Then it can move without its murderers." Harlow looked at her. "You knew Silas Pym. You knew he had access to restricted items. You knew the sealing wax. That makes you useful, Ms. Kowalski, and it makes you close enough to be careful." Eva's chin lifted. "I didn't kill him." "No," Harlow said, because the scene had already told her that much. A killer would not have left the compass in the dead man's hand where it could point elsewhere. A killer would not have arrived with a satchel full of books and a habit of tucking hair when frightened. But Eva was hiding something smaller, and smaller lies were how larger ones entered a case. "Who else knew he was meeting you?" Harlow asked. Eva's eyes flicked toward the quilted doorway. "Aurora." The name landed between them like a coin dropped into still water. Harlow felt the old suspicion tighten, patient and familiar. She had no proof against Aurora or her friends, only the slow accumulation of coincidences that always seemed to gather around them. But coincidences were evidence that had not yet introduced themselves. Harlow looked once more at Silas Pym, at the empty loop where his bone token should have been. The token was missing. The archive wax was here. The compass pointed into the dark. Somewhere in that corridor, a door had been opened, or a portal had been forced, or both. Somewhere beyond it, someone was carrying a stolen name and perhaps a stolen threshold. She checked the worn leather watch on her left wrist. Midnight in twenty minutes. The full moon would come tomorrow, and the Veil Market would vanish, taking its vendors and its secrets to another abandoned place. But Harlow was done waiting for mysteries to move on. She stepped over the threshold of the service doorway, compass in one hand, torch in the other. The needle swung into the dark and held. Behind her, Eva said, "Detective." Harlow did not turn. "Stay with the body." "I was going to say the needle isn't pointing down the corridor anymore." Harlow stopped. She looked at the compass. The small brass face was level in her palm. The etched sigils caught the lantern light. The needle had shifted again, not toward the dark tunnel, not toward the arch, but back over her shoulder. Toward Eva's satchel. Eva's hand moved to the strap, then froze. Harlow listened to the market breathing around them, to the drip of water from the old tiles, to the quiet click of the compass as it found what it wanted. It had not done that before. Something in the bag had just woken. "Open it," Harlow said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags31
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva's voice sharpened then [then]"
dialogueSentences69
tagDensity0.449
leniency0.899
rawRatio0.032
effectiveRatio0.029
92.36% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2619
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"gently"
2"sharply"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
75.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2619
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"etched"
count2
2
word"trembled"
count2
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"shattered"
count1
5
word"resonance"
count2
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"flicked"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"etched"
2"trembled"
3"silk"
4"shattered"
5"resonance"
6"weight"
7"flicked"
8"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences191
matches
0"d in grief"
97.98% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences191
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"tended to"
2"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences229
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2619
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions120
wordCount2009
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity2.09
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow42
Quinn1
Camden1
Veil3
Market3
Tube1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Morris2
Kowalski1
British1
Museum1
Met1
Aurora4
London1
Oxford1
Ancient1
History1
Eva34
Silas9
Pym9
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Camden"
3"Market"
4"Police"
5"Morris"
6"Kowalski"
7"Museum"
8"Met"
9"Aurora"
10"History"
11"Eva"
12"Pym"
places
0"Detective"
1"Veil"
2"London"
3"Ancient"
4"Silas"
globalScore0.455
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences128
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like when death caught him and wha"
1"looked like when death was helped along a"
85.45% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.145
wordCount2619
matches
0"not with argument but with reluctant understanding"
1"not toward the dark tunnel, not toward the arch, but back over her shoulder"
2"not toward the arch, but back over her shoulder"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences229
matches
0"was that Eva"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs86
mean30.45
std28.87
cv0.948
sampleLengths
061
187
2137
350
49
5134
69
720
816
930
1072
1151
1247
139
1439
1547
166
1755
1818
197
2072
2116
229
2314
2419
2531
263
2739
285
2911
3062
318
3218
3381
3460
357
3616
3714
3842
393
4023
416
4211
432
447
4560
4618
4715
4843
4972
88.73% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences191
matches
0"been issued"
1"were curled"
2"was etched"
3"been blackened"
4"was helped"
5"were curved"
6"were opened"
7"been dressed"
8"been opened"
9"been forced"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs354
matches
0"was hiding"
1"was carrying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences229
ratio0.004
matches
0"The market had been here only a month; tomorrow, with the full moon, it would fold itself away and surface somewhere else, leaving behind only the smell of wet tile and bad decisions."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2015
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount64
adverbRatio0.03176178660049628
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.007444168734491315
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences229
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences229
mean11.44
std8.17
cv0.714
sampleLengths
027
18
226
311
433
514
629
717
837
912
109
1110
1234
138
143
157
1625
178
1817
199
207
2132
2233
2321
2441
259
265
2715
2816
295
3011
317
327
339
3411
3521
369
377
3815
3920
409
4115
427
4310
4410
4527
466
473
4823
4916
41.05% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats26
diversityRatio0.314410480349345
totalSentences229
uniqueOpeners72
39.92% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences167
matches
0"Somewhere in that corridor, a"
1"Somewhere beyond it, someone was"
ratio0.012
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences167
matches
0"She had promised herself she"
1"She did not understand what"
2"She understood murder."
3"She intended to keep it"
4"She had moved to London"
5"Her green eyes widened behind"
6"She looked at the dead"
7"She recognized him from a"
8"He had promised to give"
9"His fingers were curled around"
10"Its casing wore a patina"
11"Her voice dropped, as if"
12"She looked at Silas Pym's"
13"His heels had made two"
14"She smelled it and frowned."
15"It made a flash that"
16"It did not open rifts."
17"It opened purses."
18"She lifted Silas Pym's wrist"
19"She had signed because Eva"
ratio0.222
37.84% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount141
totalSentences167
matches
0"The bone token had grown"
1"Lanterns hung from old conduit,"
2"The market had been here"
3"Stalls lined the platform under"
4"Harlow moved through them with"
5"The strange ones tried to"
6"She had promised herself she"
7"She did not understand what"
8"She understood murder."
9"She intended to keep it"
10"A knot of market-goers had"
11"Harlow did not need to"
12"The crowd parted for the"
13"Eva Kowalski was already crouched"
14"Harlow stopped a breath short"
15"Eva was the only civilian"
16"Eva was also an occult"
17"She had moved to London"
18"Tonight her curly red hair"
19"Eva did not look up."
ratio0.844
29.94% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences167
matches
0"Now Silas Pym lay on"
ratio0.006
48.87% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences76
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Below, behind a door that had no business remaining locked after three police surveys, the Veil Market breathed in the belly of an abandoned Tube station."
1"Behind them, people sold enchanted pocket watches, jars of banned alchemical substances sealed in wax, and information folded into paper birds that tried to fly…"
2"At forty-one, five foot nine, with her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair and a jaw that could have been issued rather than inherited, she had learned that un…"
3"Eva was also an occult researcher and Aurora's childhood friend, which meant she came attached to a clique Harlow had begun to suspect of everything from illici…"
4"Tonight her curly red hair had escaped her coat hood, her round glasses sat slightly crooked, and her worn leather satchel, full of books by its sagging shape, …"
5"She recognized him from a surveillance photograph: Silas Pym, dealer in information, occasional supplier of substances that had no legal name."
6"Bricks there had been blackened long ago, but the dust before them lay undisturbed except for a faint ring, as clean as if something had been set down and lifte…"
7"She had signed because Eva could read dead languages and because Harlow needed someone who could tell a genuine supernatural catastrophe from a stage trick."
8"Red clay clung to the threshold, fresh and smeared as if someone had dragged a heavy weight through it."
9"The compass needle trembled, pointing into the dark with a steadiness that made her skin prickle."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags31
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Harlow agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences69
tagDensity0.246
leniency0.493
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.029
85.1333%