Run: 2026-09-02-01M1HABA57CGRCG6WWH2VVZSVW

Run Details

Duration:
47.1s
Cost:
$0.000876
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The ruptured membrane of the Veil hung in the clearing like a curtain of shattered glass suspended in mid-air. Beyond the jagged tear, light bled through in hues that hurt the mind to track—bruised ambers, sickly golds, and a violet so deep it felt heavy. Aurora Carter stepped forward, mud squelching under her boots, and ducked beneath the shimmering distortion. Her palm burned. The Heartstone pendant, nestled against her sternum, pulsed with a feverish rhythm, its crimson depth flaring hot enough to scald her skin through the fabric of her shirt. The warmth spiked, syncing with a sudden drop in atmospheric pressure that popped her ears. She gasped, stumbling half a pace as gravity seemed to tilt sideways. "Nyxx," she croaked, voice raspy from the thick air. The Shade materialized instantly, detaching from the shadow of an oak trunk. Their humanoid silhouette rippled, edges fraying into wisps of smoke before coalescing into solid form. Faintly glowing violet pinpricks ignited where eyes should be, scanning the new surroundings. Nyx stretched, joints popping with sounds like dry twigs snapping, and inhaled deeply. The whisper of their voice slid over Aurora's nerves, cold and silken. "The air here tastes of iron and sugar," Nyx murmured, head tilting. "Rot sweetened by greed. Breathe shallow. The atmosphere tries to fill your lungs, then digest them." Aurora forced herself to take measured drags of the toxic-sweet draft. She wiped sweat from her forehead, sending a smear of grime across her cheek. Straight, shoulder-length black hair stuck to her neck. "Show me the way." They moved together as the rift collapsed behind them, sealing with a sound like a thunderclap muffled by velvet. The clearing gave way to a landscape that defied geometry. Massive arches of calcified bone rose hundreds of feet high, curving to create a vaulted ceiling that spanned the horizon. These ribs of some primordial leviathan supported a canopy of vegetation so dense it blocked the true sky, filtering the ambient light into a perpetual, oppressive twilight of warm amber. Vines thicker than tree trunks dangled from the bone-arches, heavy with fruit. But the produce writhed. Clusters of grapes, swelling to the size of human heads, shifted colors rapidly—from translucent ruby to opaque black—before bursting open to reveal rows of needle-thin fangs glistening with saliva. Some fruits pulsed with a heartbeat; others shrieked in high, thin pitches whenever the wind brushed their leaves. Isolde drifted ahead, her silver hair cascading over shoulders translucent as spider silk. The Half-Fae Seer walked barefoot, her steps utterly silent. No impressions marred the moss-carpeted ground beneath her feet. Her pale lavender eyes scanned the treeline, reflecting the amber gloom like cat-glass. "We stand in the belly of the appetite," Isolde said, her tone devoid of inflection, speaking in the cadence of falling stones. "The mouth widens. The teeth sharpen. Seek the vein that beats, or drink the drought." Aurora ignored the riddle, drawing the Fae-Forged Blade from her belt. The moonsilver dagger hissed as it cleared the leather sheath, frosting the immediate air with a layer of crystalline ice. The temperature plummeted, driving back the cloying heat radiating from the flora. Aurora gripped the cold handle, feeling the vibration of the blade humming against her palm. It sensed wards. It sensed danger. It sang to her with a lethal intent that made her knuckles ache. "Keep that angled," Nyx warned, shadow-tendrils lashing out from their legs to coil around a nearby branch. The Tendril dissolved into ash where it touched the wood. "That bark bleeds acid when cut. And something else listens for the ring of metal." Aurora lowered the tip, though she didn't sheathe the weapon. She studied the ground. Dirt veined with glittering gold dust formed a winding path between the monstrous trees. Following it led toward a sound—the wet slap of liquid and the distant, rhythmic clatter of porcelain on porcelain. They descended a slope covered in fungal mats that chimed like wind chimes under their weight. At the crest, a river carved through the valley floor. The water flowed sluggishly, thick and viscous, the color of port wine stained with oil. Foam bubbled on the surface, releasing steam that smelled of fermented honey and copper. Skulls hollowed out and caulked with resin bobbed on the current, manning themselves by oars driven by unseen forces. Inside the skull-ghouls, green flames flickered in the eye sockets. One vessel drifted close to the bank. A skeletal rower turned its cranium toward them. The jaw unhinged, stretching impossibly wide, exposing a throat lined with spiraling razor-teeth. It raised a clawed hand, fingers elongating into grasping hooks, and beckoned. The sound of manic laughter echoed from within the gullet, distorted and layered over itself. Aurora tightened her grip on the dagger. "Boats powered by hollows. Contracted labor. The lore was right about the soul-work." Nyx hovered over the river, form distorting as the ambient magic pressed against them. "Not just labor," the Shade whispered, voice tight with ancient recognition. "Feasting. The Prince cooks his workers even as he employs them. Consumption without end." Nyx extended a shadow-hand toward the water. A tentacle of dark liquor erupted from the surface, snapping upward like a whip. Nyx solidified instantly, parrying the strike with a forearm. Black ichor sizzled upon contact, eating through the shadow-form to reveal a glimpse of scorched, scarred flesh beneath before the darkness knit itself back together. Nyx hissed, retracting the limb. "The boundary is thin here. Dymas presses against the mortal plane. The Veil weakens further inland." Isolde stepped to the water's edge, ignoring the snapping tendrils. "Truth bites harder than lies," she recited, addressing Aurora while tracing a pattern in the air with a slender finger. "The cup overflows. The table sets. Who sits alone when the host arrives?" "You're looking for the ruler?" Aurora asked, advancing toward the riverbank. The Heartstone pulsed violently now, burning hot enough to blister. She shielded it with her hand. "It's guiding us. Reacting to proximity." "To what?" Nyx asked, hovering lower, their violet eyes narrowing. "To the source." Aurora kicked aside a pile of glistening seeds embedded in the mud. Beneath lay tiles of polished obsidian etched with runes that shifted when viewed from different angles. She knelt, brushing mud away. The glyphs resolved into maps, star charts, and dates that predated known history. In the center of a tile lay a symbol: a crown intersected by a fork, surrounded by writhing serpent motifs. "This isn't wild terrain. The architecture underneath. The runes. Someone built this. Or shaped it. It's a construct." The ground tremored. Dust sifted from the bone-arches above. The chiming fungi fell silent. The clattering from the river ceased. Even the shrieking fruits muted their cries. From the jungle ahead came a sound that froze blood in Aurora's veins. Wet, grinding, relentless chewing. It grew louder, vibrating through the soles of her boots, resonating in her teeth. The amber light intensified, flashing strobe-like through the canopy. Shadows lengthened and detached from objects, slithering independently across the ground. "Movement," Nyx rasped, voice dropping to a subsonic growl that rattled Aurora's ribs. "Something rises. The Feast approaches." Aurora spun, daggers leveled. Isolde stood motionless, arms crossed, her expression impassive behind the veil of silver lashes. The Seer's gaze remained fixed on the disturbance ahead. "Do not look at the face that feeds," Isolde intoned softly. "It eats sight before it eats body." A section of the bone-archway groaned and splintered. Debris crashed down. Through the gap, a shape loomed. Limbs too long, joints bending backward, draped in tatters of velvet that fused with mottled purple flesh. The entity carried a tray laden with steaming platters that bubbled and screamed. Its torso rotated independently from its hips, studded with vertical stacks of eyes that blinked out of sync. The Heartstone flared, blinding white light erupting from the crimson gem. The beam struck the creature, illuminating a sigil branded onto its forehead—a spiral of knives. The heat on Aurora's chest became agony, but the pull was undeniable. The artifact wasn't just reacting anymore; it was targeting. Aurora backed up, heel catching on a root that twitched beneath her boot. She yanked her leg free, raising the Fae blade high. The cold metal sang, reacting to the creature's presence. "Run or fight?" she shouted over the rising roar of chewing. Nyx shifted form, melting into a pool of ink that spread toward the creature, then snapped back to solid stance, blades of condensed darkness forming in their hands. "The shade cannot pierce armor forged in gluttony." Isolde took one step forward, bare foot resting on the obsidian rune. "The Seer walks the thread between full and empty. Come then, master of the void. Taste the silver." The creature paused, all its stacked eyes swiveling toward the group. A low rumble emanated from its throat, sounding like a landslide. It dropped the screaming tray. Bones cracked as its posture shifted, limbs extending, jaws dilating to reveal a cavernous maw filled with grinding molars. Aurora's heart hammered against the burning pendant. The runes on the ground beneath Isolde flared with golden light, binding the Seer's position. The creature lunged, not at them, but at the light, its claws tearing toward the ground. Aurora lunged forward, placing herself between the charge and Isolde, the Fae blade held steady, frost spreading across her jeans where the cold seeped through. The creature's claws impacted the blade's aura, sparks showering like fireworks. The force drove Aurora's boots back, carving furrows in the gold-veined soil. The scent of ozone and rot overwhelmed everything. "Hold the line!" Aurora gritted out, muscles trembling under the strain. "Nyxx, flank! Isolde, now!" Nyx vanished into the shadow of the creature's own limb, reappearing on its back. Isolde spoke a single word that cracked the air like a whip. The ground opened.
created_at"2026-09-02T15:03:38.927Z" 9/2/2026, 3:03:38 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
57.14% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Aurora kicked aside [aside]"
1"Isolde intoned softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.143
93.92% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1644
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
11.80% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1644
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count3
2
word"warmth"
count1
3
word"scanning"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"velvet"
count2
7
word"oppressive"
count1
8
word"glistening"
count2
9
word"cascading"
count1
10
word"silk"
count1
11
word"scanned"
count1
12
word"gloom"
count1
13
word"crystalline"
count1
14
word"rhythmic"
count1
15
word"porcelain"
count2
16
word"weight"
count1
17
word"flickered"
count1
18
word"echoed"
count1
19
word"tracing"
count1
20
word"etched"
count1
21
word"resolved"
count1
22
word"loomed"
count1
23
word"maw"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"pulsed"
2"warmth"
3"scanning"
4"whisper"
5"measured"
6"velvet"
7"oppressive"
8"glistening"
9"cascading"
10"silk"
11"scanned"
12"gloom"
13"crystalline"
14"rhythmic"
15"porcelain"
16"weight"
17"flickered"
18"echoed"
19"tracing"
20"etched"
21"resolved"
22"loomed"
23"maw"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences119
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences119
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1639
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1414
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.34
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Veil1
Carter1
Heartstone3
Shade2
Aurora19
Half-Fae1
Seer3
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Tendril1
Nyx11
Fae4
Isolde9
persons
0"Veil"
1"Carter"
2"Heartstone"
3"Shade"
4"Aurora"
5"Seer"
6"Blade"
7"Tendril"
8"Nyx"
9"Isolde"
places(empty)
globalScore0.828
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences103
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.61
wordCount1639
matches
0"not at them, but at the light, its claws tearing toward the ground"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs38
mean43.13
std22.74
cv0.527
sampleLengths
060
158
29
365
428
537
679
763
844
937
1077
1142
1247
1384
1455
1520
1694
1721
1843
1933
2010
2187
2227
2351
2418
2527
2618
2765
2847
2943
3036
3130
3246
3363
3431
3515
3626
373
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences119
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs276
matches
0"was targeting"
1"wasn't just reacting"
13.96% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences133
ratio0.045
matches
0"Beyond the jagged tear, light bled through in hues that hurt the mind to track—bruised ambers, sickly golds, and a violet so deep it felt heavy."
1"Clusters of grapes, swelling to the size of human heads, shifted colors rapidly—from translucent ruby to opaque black—before bursting open to reveal rows of needle-thin fangs glistening with saliva."
2"Some fruits pulsed with a heartbeat; others shrieked in high, thin pitches whenever the wind brushed their leaves."
3"Following it led toward a sound—the wet slap of liquid and the distant, rhythmic clatter of porcelain on porcelain."
4"The beam struck the creature, illuminating a sigil branded onto its forehead—a spiral of knives."
5"The artifact wasn't just reacting anymore; it was targeting."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1436
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.022284122562674095
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.009052924791086351
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean12.32
std5.73
cv0.465
sampleLengths
019
126
215
33
428
515
612
79
812
915
1013
1113
1212
1312
1416
1511
1614
178
184
1919
2010
2120
2230
2312
244
2529
2618
2713
289
299
3013
3122
3215
3311
3420
3512
3615
373
383
3913
4017
4110
4215
4310
444
4514
4619
4716
4810
4915
62.16% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.43609022556390975
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners58
56.02% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences119
matches
0"Faintly glowing violet pinpricks ignited"
1"Even the shrieking fruits muted"
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences119
matches
0"Her palm burned."
1"She gasped, stumbling half a"
2"she croaked, voice raspy from"
3"Their humanoid silhouette rippled, edges"
4"She wiped sweat from her"
5"They moved together as the"
6"Her pale lavender eyes scanned"
7"It sensed wards."
8"It sensed danger."
9"It sang to her with"
10"She studied the ground."
11"They descended a slope covered"
12"It raised a clawed hand,"
13"she recited, addressing Aurora while"
14"She shielded it with her"
15"She knelt, brushing mud away."
16"It grew louder, vibrating through"
17"Its torso rotated independently from"
18"She yanked her leg free,"
19"she shouted over the rising"
ratio0.176
31.43% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount102
totalSentences119
matches
0"The ruptured membrane of the"
1"Aurora Carter stepped forward, mud"
2"Her palm burned."
3"The Heartstone pendant, nestled against"
4"The warmth spiked, syncing with"
5"She gasped, stumbling half a"
6"she croaked, voice raspy from"
7"The Shade materialized instantly, detaching"
8"Their humanoid silhouette rippled, edges"
9"Nyx stretched, joints popping with"
10"The whisper of their voice"
11"Nyx murmured, head tilting"
12"Aurora forced herself to take"
13"She wiped sweat from her"
14"They moved together as the"
15"The clearing gave way to"
16"These ribs of some primordial"
17"Vines thicker than tree trunks"
18"Clusters of grapes, swelling to"
19"Some fruits pulsed with a"
ratio0.857
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences119
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences74
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Beyond the jagged tear, light bled through in hues that hurt the mind to track—bruised ambers, sickly golds, and a violet so deep it felt heavy."
1"The warmth spiked, syncing with a sudden drop in atmospheric pressure that popped her ears."
2"They descended a slope covered in fungal mats that chimed like wind chimes under their weight."
3"Beneath lay tiles of polished obsidian etched with runes that shifted when viewed from different angles."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she croaked, voice raspy from the thick air"
1"the Shade whispered, voice tight with ancient recognition"
2"Nyx rasped, voice dropping to a subsonic growl that rattled Aurora's ribs"
3"Aurora gritted, muscles trembling under the strain"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"she croaked (croak)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"Nyx warned (warn)"
3"the Shade whispered (whisper)"
4"she shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0.625
effectiveRatio0.357
76.4366%